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  1. Marked Effect Character List The following are all the unique characters out of the story Marked Effect until the current chapter. This will be kept up to date as chapters progress. The last update to this page was on the 25th March 2013. Key Asari characters are in blue Human Characters are in red Krogan characters are in brown Salarian characters are in green Turian characters are in purple (No idea why) ----------- Adastra Senpheus - 361 years old at the time of earth contact. Birthday on the 29th January. Green eyes. Turquoise blue markings. Amistathya Vasenthi - Young marked Asari 216 years old (Birthday 17th March). Grey eyes, sky blue markings. Aymi-sta-theia is the pronunciation which literally means five petalled flower with a stem that is nearly bright. Aphrina - Waitress, Impheris restaurant. Heavy red markings around her eyes, deep blue skin. ~375 Asanya - Helper to Nyxia/Nyphana, marketing manager. Aumarva - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Adastra. Cahana - C-Sec officer tied to Emala Dastana - Receptionist, Whefon Hotel Citadel. Ebaea - Bioamp testing participant. Friend of Pheinova Emala - Kriana's daughter. Age 219 at earth contact, blue eyes and slightly bluer skin than her mother. Emaytha Vasenthi - Amistathya's mother Enavana Sayus - Owner of Sayus Design, Serrice Thessia. Age 581. Enisa - Purple Asari, delivery individual, invited to pre look around at Sentix on the 5th of May. Evanthia - Servant, nocturnal wishes. Fosanta - 577 years old at earth contact. Brown eyes, deep blue markings. 23rd July birthday. Gemayha - server, eternity bar. Hayea - Armali verifier, Illium. ~550 Holana - Consort receptionist. Hymara - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Sam. Imphaya - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Adastra. Inphia - Enavana's bondmate. White markings and works on the Citadel. Iona - Galactic Acceptance, support specialist. Isphara - Armali verifier, Illium ~350 Kafin Yahola - Salarian pilot in class three lightweight ship racing. Kalawa - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Fosanta. Kaphira Phianus - Matriarch. Used to teach advanced flight control at Serrice University before getting into a technical role in ship racing. Works for the Cyone Astro-Engineering team. Kate (Katherine) - 28 years old, blue eyes, red shoulder length hair, ~5'5" high. 17th August birthday. Kriana - Captain, ASL Enlighten Age 696 at earth contact. Grey blue skin with brown eyes. Doctor Lamisa - Illium Doctor. Lasala - Matriarch. Asari contingent representative for ship racing and also head of the Cyone Astro-Engineering team. Lianta - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Sam. Liphanya - Lead project manager, Sentix Spaceworks. Maritha - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Adastra. Nakrin - C-Sec officer tied to Shiala Nyxia/Nyphana - Emaytha's new bondmate after Amistathya's father dies. Pureblood. 674 Years old. Olissa - Owner, Sentix Spaceworks. Omepha - Sentix Spaceworks receptionist. Parvon - C-Sec officer tied to Shiala Pheinova - Head of biotics Armali council, Thessia Roskan - C-Sec officer tied to Kriana Samalya - Armali Plasma Propulsion Engineer Sam (Samuel Barnes) - 27 years old, dark brown hair, brown eyes. ~5'11 high. Sarik - Yalon ship group engineer. Saymera - head of Galactic Acceptance, receptionist Selayla - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Fosanta. Seliha - 492 years old brown eyes, purple markings. 2nd June birthday. Sephaila - Head testing engineer, armali propulsion. Silana - Armali propulsion engineer, Sentix Spaceworks. Dark green markings on slightly green blue skin. Age 453 Solpha - Aphrina's bondmate ~392, light blue skin, light green markings. Tall ~6'0". Swathana - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Kate. Tahomi - Co-pilot for the ASL Enlighten Talima - Consort Acolyte. Talmira - C-Sec officer tied to Kriana Tarus Oheen - Main gate security individual, ship racing. Doctor Thalmara - Doctor, Tayseri Ward Citadel Tharik Narithus - Head of the council on competitive ship racing. Thea - Armali Plasma Propulsion Engineer Themara - Waitress Impheris restaurant, blue skin, blue eyes, deep blue markings. Toren - C-Sec officer tied to Emala Usarta - Armali Council representative on Illium. Whesiva - Armali Council Employee. Biotics Facility Thessia. Yasmari - Asari commando contracted to provide security to Kate. Yia - Head bioamp development engineer Armali Illium. ------------ I will keep this topic up to date and edit the contents of this post to keep it current. Please bookmark to keep it handy.
  2. Yet another review to comment upon relating this time to Chapter 55 - Expanding Expectation The first point about Ebaea stems from me trying to be so pro and not looking at my file with everyone's name in. I will go back and fix that shortly. The box is always a good way to make Adastra a little childlike again and is something I am trying to keep with her personality, I will try to get Kate and Fosanta with Sam and Ami but constructs make that difficult at the moment. Watch this space is about the best that I can say.
  3. A review that is not a review because of me being slow. Apologies about that. I do have a small plan to go through and polish up all the earlier chapters again once (if) I complete this as there are some rough edges still. It seems no matter how many times you read through you always miss something (or is that just me?). If you would have waited another few hours then you would have had a new chapter to read (wasn't deliberate, honest.) I have got a steam friend request from a .Burst but whether that is from you or some other random individual is still open for debate as the nickname is not the same as you stated. (Fortunately as that one was rather lolworthy ). If that is you do say hi.
  4. The last reply before the new year goes to the following review which was for Chapter 54 - Answers. The chapter was a little short and there was extra scope to increase its size but I wanted to remove the focus away from Sam and the others a little. The next two, potentially three chapters should be longer to make up for the shorter ones. The next one particularly is (I hope) one worth waiting for as it provides some answers to a loose end or two. I think Seliha is not an easy individual to get to know. I always assumed that while she was at Armali Council, Thessia that she was pleasant towards individuals at work but never really interacted with others outside of work and kept herself to herself generally. You may have assumed differently about what happened as I have not been specific about that time at the moment. Seliha's story will continue to unravel itself and I hope that she can be seen as at least a tolerable but not entirely trustworthy individual. I am starting to wonder if you have a keylogger on my laptop when you come up with your suggestions All I can say is that neither will be with who you expect and it may be a while before it happens. Have a happy new year and again, thank you for the reviews.
  5. I have a touch of housekeeping to catch up with it seems. Thank Christmas taking up all the time. So the first review I believe covers chapters 51 and 52. I do not think there is much I can say to this review. Watch this space as most of the ideas that you have had are ones that are forthcoming. I am trying to get the coming weekend (in the story) written and I have still to write the interaction between Kate and Fosanta as well as a few other points. Little ideas do help to inspire the plot. The following was a review posted after Chapter 53. I quite like this review as it has ideas and helpful suggestions within. It is sort of the review equivalent of a present, just without the wrapping paper and copious amounts of sticky tape I have yet to fully decide on Seliha and what she is eventually going to do and that indecisiveness is becoming an issue. It will potentially be (hopefully) mostly resolved in the next chapter so keep your eyes peeled. Lianta and Hymara are the most developed out of necessity more than anything else. This is mostly down to the fact that they live directly with Amistathya, Sam and Silana. I believe they will get some story time to themselves in... chapter 56 I think. This should give them a little extra depth. I do feel you have a point in that they do need some development and I will do so in upcoming chapters so thank you for pointing it out. It is occasionally hard to see the wood for the trees when ideas for the main characters come first almost at a cost to others as you blindly try to get your idea down in words. I cannot remember Kate ever being a temporary owner or more dominant individual for any length of time yet. I may however be wrong as it feels like several years since I wrote the earlier chapters but I am fairly sure of that. Kate will however get her first chance in chapter 56 (on the upcoming Saturday in the story) but quite how it will play out with regards to the others I do not know yet. If you meant Fosanta then she does get a couple of opportunities with others in the future (as well as Kate) but who they may be, I am not going to say. I may attempt to make chapter 58 cover the entire following week as one single lengthy chapter, as I have nothing major planned for it. I have heard that you at least appreciate the longer chapters and I feel it would help speed the story along a little. I appreciate your time and effort to give solid reviews as you did not need to do so. They however have been helpful to me, especially since they help create some ideas that are occasionally difficult to find in the alcohol and food induced festive fog.
  6. I have a couple of reviews to provide answers to but they can be rounded into one reply. The first was for Chapter 48 - Weekend beginnings. Olissa is not the worst individual in this story by quite a long stretch but she is out for herself. She is not as pleasant as Usarta from Armali Illium but then again Olissa grew that company herself and is not just someone who has been elected to run a division of a larger whole. The next review was from Chapter 50 - Marking Boundaries Longer chapters are good but they take hours to edit and longer to write which unfortunately means they only occur every so often. I am also sure Google could help you find out about bonfire night/Guy Fawkes night if you wished to find out. I was trying to find a way to cement Kate and Fosanta together into a cohesive unit and bringing some of Fosanta's past into the mix. This point is why I am going to have to make the next chapter the last before Christmas as this needs serious work. I do promise you will not see what is to happen in the Christmas episode coming and it will be worth the wait. I may also have covered your next paragraph in that chapter as well but I am not spoiling anything. Seliha has been a little loose the last few chapters but at the end of this chapter (after having the little exhibition in Eternity) she seems happier to be back to how you first saw her. The signs of the differing sides is she uses names, generally apologises much more often and is generally a little warmer in her recessive personality. Her dominant tends to be a little brash, she only uses Adastra's name and is usually a little quieter. This gets cleared up in chapter 53/54 and beyond once and for all so keep your eyes out for that one but I will try and make them a little more distinct in the future to make it clearer to the reader. What you say about Adastra is true and I know she has got neglected as extra characters have appeared. She will make stronger appearances in the next few chapters and your review has given me a couple of extra ideas on how to get them to interact a little more going forward. I greatly thank you for such lengthy reviews as they are immeasurably helpful to me in both making a much more complete story and helping me ensure it is better to read.
  7. A reply to the review for Chapter 45 - Group Meet Awkward situations and Sam is like a magnet and iron. To answer your other points. Yes they will meet up with Kriana, Emala and Shiala again on Thessia. I am not going to have the little blue children as some fictional entity, that you can be sure of. What I am not sure of is if you will see them in this story, or in a follow up one which follows times after the event until a suitable future point. I do not expect a review after every chapter from you HenshinDaisuke and I entirely understand it is sometimes better to read several chapters at once. It is to be honest how I intend the story to be read, not as one chapter a week. Do take all the time you feel you need to let a chunk of chapters accumulate and I hope you enjoy reading the new chapters when you get back.
  8. Review for chapter 44 - Moving. You will need to wait a few chapters to really see Amistathya but it should be worth the wait. These next few chapters are mostly the conclusion to the sub-plot that started several chapters back. I do appreciate the reviews as they really do allow me to work out what could be improved or where I need to concentrate the story a little more.
  9. A bumper number of reviews to reply to as I have been caught slacking. I do enjoy having that e-mail of a new review appear in my inbox, especially on particularly depressing days when the weather is rubbish (which is most of them). I will answer each of them in the order that I received them starting with the oldest first. I actually agree with them taking the limelight and I did find myself slipping into this trap. I will certainly try to better balance most chapters from this point forward but it is occasionally tough to do so with varying plots. Silana does take some time to grow into her position from her first appearance in chapter 43 so expecting miracles over the next chapter or two is not going to happen unfortunately. Keep reading and you should see something positive. I just had to laugh when I first read the review at how a story with a plot seems like such an alien concept. Your pleas will not go unheard and I appreciate the minute for the review.
  10. The following is a review from Chapter 41 - Unexpected I honestly thank you for some of these questions as I had not thought about other changes Sam may have made (or Ami have made) to his mind. I suppose I have hinted at a sort of visual clue to Sam's state of mind by how his mind is expressed. It was however, until you pointed it out, extremely unintentional but I hope you do not mind me taking that idea on-board and running with it for future chapters. Hymara and Lianta will become much closer to the action due to them intending to live with Sam and Amistathya. Seliha is an odd character out on her own for the moment. I have deliberately not given everyone the full explanation yet to give the reader an idea how the others in the house see her. I hope she comes across a strange and contrasting character eventually and not evil in her intent but I understand that you may not like those kind of individuals. A quick point about the updates. I really wish I could get these chapters out there faster but I must try and maintain writing about ten chapters ahead as sometimes a tweak is needed in an earlier chapter to make something work. This would be impossible to do if it was already out there and I never plan what happens in each chapter unless it is written specifically into a previous one. Given this and the fact I can usually get 2-4,000 words a day done means it takes typically three to five days to write one chapter and a further one to edit and refine it before posting. I apologise if that is slow but I would rather take my time and enjoy writing than think of it as a job that must be done. Apologies again for the late response to the review.
  11. The following is a review of Chapter 40 - Unexpected News Unfortunately there is little to be said here other than thanks for the review and keep reading as your questions will eventually be answered one way or another.
  12. Chapter 39 of this story was posted yesterday evening and chapter 40 will be added on the 4th of August. A thank you to everyone who has read this up to now as it seems to be going down well from what I can see.
  13. The following is a review for Chapter 39 - The Day After. I have up until now made the progress mostly day to day as there has been enough activity to keep it interesting, but there will be an occasional chapter coming up which includes multiple days. I am going to have to begin skipping midweek days or writing all five days into a round-up chapter (I am unsure which at the moment) as I have a lot of time to fill and work can get fairly boring . This stories end is essentially going to finish at the event in May and that will become a more prominent feature in the next few chapters but getting there is going to take time. My idea however is as soon as I have written everything I will post chapters up as quickly as I can edit them to get this story complete before moving on to a sequel if this is popular enough. I thank you again for supplying your thoughts and I hope you enjoy next weeks chapter as much as the previous few.
  14. The following is a review for chapter 38 - Testing. I will take Fostoria as a name and add it in as another character as I am always short of names. I am still in two minds about which direction to take the next chapter as I wrote it rather generically about five months ago. I hope it will be an interesting read either way when everyone sees it next week. I cannot say much about Ami other than, I think she is my favourite character, she wasn't in the story originally and if it was not for her I doubt this story would have made it to this site. I appreciate the time you have taken to write a review of this story.
  15. Since there is no decent way to answer reviews I will do so for my story Marked Effect here. I will post a quote of each review before answering so that it is easy enough for viewers of this topic to follow. Or you can read the story here :- http://games.adultfa...hp?no=600087559 Props to you for HenshinDaisuke for reading through ~201,034 words in such a short space of time. It is nice to hear what I have written has managed to at least be good enough to read all the way through. The fun is just beginning to bubble to the surface at the moment so patience is certainly key here. I would say that Sam is getting on with things because he has no choice but to do so. I do think he gets quite a bit of help from others, so it is not like he is trying to fend for himself and he could always quickly look up things on his Omni-tool if it is needed. This issue does rear its head a little over the next few chapters but it is a valid point and I would, if I had the time, go back again and add in those doubts. I appreciate you pointing it out. I can only say there will be those three in an interaction in the future but I cannot say any more without spoiling anything. This story will be be getting some more Turian and Salarian characters but they will not be main ones. Making extra characters is a pain when I think I already have ~80 to remember but the intention originally was to focus on the Asari. I have ideas for a follow on to this story which would very much involve Turians and Salarians to a much greater degree but whether I get around to writing it is not definite. Apologies if that is not what you wished to hear but this has already taken several months and will likely take several more before it is complete. Also you got the names of the species correct but I believe I have misspelled Illium somewhere in the story. How I managed that I do not know but you are certainly not alone. I appreciate the constructive review and if you (or anyone else reading this) have any ideas or suggestions then since it is a work in progress I will at least take them into consideration.
  16. Why can I not remember to update this topic. Everything up to chapter 37 was posted on the 14th of July and this version is now to be updated once per week each Saturday. Chapter 38 will be added on the 21st. We all love something to do on a weekend. Reviews are greatly appreciated.
  17. Chapter 22 was missing from Wednesdays update. I know I should not over promise. Chapters 22, 23 and 24 have just been added with 23 and 24 having sizeable updates just for wonderful individuals here. I am hoping to post at least 25 and 26 next Wednesday (4th June) but I am hoping I may get up to chapter 27 posted. I am not promising that this time though I hope people are enjoying the story so far.
  18. Chapters 12 to 15 are now added for your reading enjoyment. Chapters 16 to 22 will be posted on Wednesday 27th June.
  19. Rhov, I am one of the FFN refugees but I am trying to keep a low profile for the moment. Reducing impact and all that.... I have put a topic in the Promote a Story section of the forums for my story which people could subscribe to. When I post a notification of a new chapter in the future this could (with the right settings in a users notification preferences) cause them to get an e-mail informing them of new content. It was the only way I could find at the moment unless I am missing something obvious. Hoped that helped.
  20. Author: unrealuniverse Title: Marked Effect (AFF Edition) Summary: A group of Asari with a rare condition only seek acceptance from others. This has not always been the case in the past, but can the future be brighter for these and other such individuals, after an unexpected meeting? Feedback: Why on earth would people not want feedback. It is always highly appreciated. Reviews and their replies from myself can be found at the following link. http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/35940-unrealuniverses-review-reply-thread/ Fandom: Games/Mass Effect Pairing: N/A as characters are original to this story. Warnings: 3Plus, Abuse (Minor), D/s (Mostly from the story containing "Indentured Servants"), Exhib (Minor), Fingering, HJ (Minor), MC (Par for the course with Asari), OCs, Oral, Slave, Toys, WIP, Xeno This listing may not be fully complete or may have minor inaccuracies as the story itself is still incomplete. M/F and two F/F pairings are followed by the story eventually. URL: http://games.adultfa...hp?no=600087559 Description: The main focus of this story is on character interaction in regards to external problems they face from the choices that they make (Or are made for them). It is not a short read and is most suited to individuals who have a concentration span long enough to read lengthy chapters. Apologies for being vague but ruining the plot with a few spoilers is not the best idea Chapters 1 to 11 have been posted which covers the entire beginning of the story. More chapters will be added quickly as I have only to re-read and slightly edit the next 22 chapters before they get posted. I will keep this thread updated with news on new chapters as and when they go up. I make no apologies for using British English throughout. I hope it is readable by everyone and the common language divide does not get in the way. Hope you all enjoy reading.
  21. o/ to everyone here. I am unrealuniverse and I am remarkably new to Fanfiction to be honest given I have only been reading it for about 2 years. I am a little bit of a contradiction in that I did not do particularly well in English at school and my creativity is not one of my strongest points. A vibrant imagination and effort have however lead me to begin writing my first Fanfiction in the Mass Effect universe. I have currently got 9 chapters posted here with chapters well over 50 already written. I did intend to write this for myself but I thought that other individuals may appreciate the plot and even like the story. I therefore posted it on FanFiction.net before realising my dark streak was going to make it a more adult story after writing chapter 20 onwards. I have therefore began to move Marked Effect here in its original uncut version and I hope AFF.net becomes a happy home for the story. I will have a good dig around what there is in the archives and post reviews where I can. Hope to see you all around.
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