Hey, I just posted my first story on here, and would like some constructive criticism on it. If you like Nintendo Characters and yuri and/or futa action, then please give this story a read and tell me what you think. Any opinions are welcomed and apprreciated.
Title: Roslalina's Seduction
Author: ADM
Rating: Adult+
Summary:Seeing a light spilling into the dark moon-lit hallway, Rosalina spys on Peach in her bed room at the Smash Bros. Mansion she is staying at. What will happen next?
Feedback: Would like as much as you're willing to give.
URL:http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600086771
If this seems like you're kind of story, please take a read and tell me how I did.