brohne

Thought this would be a better place to reply to your wonderful comments. ^^ Lisa, I know it seems a bit odd for Kenta to call Ryuu a weirdo, but it's been his nickname of choice for quite some time. In fact he calls him a 'freaking weirdo' in the first or second chapter of Savior I believe.

After an immensely long hiatus, I am pleased to announce that both Falling Down and Savior will be getting updated by the end of the month. Apologizing for the long wait just seems trite, so I'll just so I am sorry and hope that you enjoy the new chapters. I know I've dearly missed Suke and Ruka and Ryuu and Kenta. Kenta tries to pop up randomly in other works too. -__- Silly boy. Anyway, on the the writing! Oh and for anyone who lives in the midwest. I'm scheduled to be at several conventions this spring and summer hosting a panel on writing fanfiction. If you'd like details just PM me. ^^

With all the good advice above I would like to add that it is vital that the sex be true to the motives of the character. How the character responds during the act should tell the reader that much more about them. Take for example a boy finally getting to be with the girl of his dreams, would he describe the first time in clinical by the book fashion? Probably not, if he did there better be a damn good reason behind it, a deeper character motive. Similarly lack of reaction is very telling as well. As stated, not all sex is good and some sex is just downright bad. You do not have to have had sex to understand some of the feelings and emotions involved. There is excitement, fear, longing, frustration, pain, anger all of it can happen during sex and showing these can go much more toward moving your story, and your character forward than any well described sex act.

I have found that starting at the end of the chapter and reading it backward while double checking the format catches a lot (not all) errors. But yes, for some unknown reason once it is 'published' I catch all kinds of stuff.

Entanglement has wrapped up and its on to The Promise and the Threat next. There are still a lot of unanswered questions that the next book will answer

Chapter 14 is up and chapter 15 should be up later tonight. Thanks for reading

Title: Entaglement Author: brohne Rating: M+ Summary: For one pain is his life either given or taken, for the other the pursuit of pleasure consumes him. When pain meets pleasure which will win? Feedback: Appreciated Fandom: really? URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100171 Thirteen chapters in and we might, just might see some major action happening between Daisuike and Ruka. We are rather interested to hear everyone's thought's on not only the pairing, but the plot. Yes, it has a plot. ^__^