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Could let Amy and Alice help, show her how they 'interogate' people In the virtual world

Hi there, I'm rewriting one of my older stories, all original content. I would be very excited if you were take a look and leave a review, telling me what you think. It's fully OC, with two main love interests for the main male protagonist. It does jump a bit between past and present, but I've tried to keep it clear and without confusion. This is the first in at least two fully written (although still needed to be revised and edited) stories that I am putting up. The second one is direct sequel and will be added after I am done with this one. This book primarily deals mostly with vampires and humans, but there are other species at least mentioned as of yet. Lots of angst, lemon goodness, and plot twists and turns. I am also a very big fan of cliff hangers. Author: Lady Xandra Title: Desire Never Dies Summary: Torn between the past and present, between monster and man, an ancient vampire must fight against not only the evil inside of him, but a rising evil that threatens the only hope he has left of salvation Feedback: Very much appreciated! Pairing: All OC Fandom: Original Warnings: Angst,M/F,OC,Violence,MC,OC,H/C,Oral,MiCD,WIP, Fingering,HJ with more tags added as the story progresses Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107368

I going with Mike has no choice because they have his parents. Even though magus said he doesn't like them, they are still his parents. I believe his parent were in Europe. Just have to wait and see.

you all are forgetting how twisted Magus can be, Mike could have found the phone in some ones stuff that he cares about. Remember how many times Magus's cliffhangers implied one thing and then when the next chapter came out he totally went another direction and really screwed with our minds. this would be really confusing but you could always change Mia's name to Max. (10 points for anyone who gets that reference). great chapter, I was in tears when albert and chives (hope I got the names right) where scared and decided to merge. or It could be the blasted cold I got. either I deal with the runny nose and eyes or I take meds I walk around like a zombie for a couple of days. can't wait for the next one to see what Max's response is.

besides he doesn't really like his parents...hmmm, come to think of it, we really don't know much aout his family....now I wonder why that is?

Having Mike doing it to protect his parents won't fly as he knows what Max will do for family/friends so he could have some how communicated to Max that his parents are held by the low lives and then kept out of the loop on rescuing them. It would have been great if he came in with his gun and said sorry Max and either 1) Pointed at Max only to be shot by Lea & Rick, 2) Tat tackles him and introduces him to her interrogation techniques, Russian Cold War style or 3) He eats the gun and becomes Pete #2.

Halfway done! Nice, long, relaxing weekend to write so hopefully I'll make some serious headway. The first part of this chapter took a little longer because (well, okay the exam, but ASIDE from that...) it dealt with some really personal feelings that I experienced when I lost my friend and bringing them up...wasn't easy. Second half should be easier, though, so I'm writing like a madman.