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Responses and comments on Ordinary Magic

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So here is where I will post long replies to reviews and discuss anything else about this story that people want to. Feel free to red-pen me, discuss, disagree etc, just please remember to make it about the story and not me personally, since you likely don't know me.

Aleta: I am sorry that you didn't like this story, but I thank you for pointing out that the ages of the characters involved were not clear.

Rogue Mudblood Thank you so much for all the detailed information you've given me. I don't believe that line about no bad sex either, but it seemed like the kind of dismissive and somewhat selfish thing Jareth would say just to get his way. Oh yes he has things to learn yet as well. Of course he could make anything look like anything, but I'm really trying to show how rattled he is about the situation as well, and also his genuine desire to not freak Toby out even worse.

Toby grew up in a high school class with only one other openly gay boy. Its mentioned later. While his family is supportive, there is still, for him, a feeling of oddness. Some of it is probably not actually be the gay part, but the whole situation; its just easier to focus on the "simpler" part of the weirdness and the unknown. I drew from my sex ed class here, they cover m/f sex pretty thoroughly, but there wasn't much mention of anything else, so I thought that perhaps it would be strange to him.

LOL yeah I tried to hint at the most likely way for Toby to have seen anything at all about BDSM, since at 18 its unlikely he'd have looked it all up, besides it gives us something to snicker about in regards to Sarah.

The gem has a limitation in that it has to be present when the actual spell is cast and the dream spell is ongoing, having actually been put into place many weeks before, but that isn't clarified until a little later.

On the length, I'll be sure to break it into smaller pieces now that you mention it. I'm afraid I'm one of those irritating folks who read ludicrous amounts at a time without noticing.

As to Toby's traumatic dreams, well you can bet your favorite toy it will affect their relationship in the future. When the admitedly powerful first haze of lust and shock wear off, things will get a little less easy for GK.

I too have only seen the movie, until I found the fandom on this site and ffn, I really had no idea there was anything else. As far as I know the themes of abuse and sadness aren't terribly prevalent, they just seemed to fit this particular story.

And I love the nonchalant line about killing those responsible too. It just seemed to me like Jareth would be a great deal darker and more deadly when he isn't dealing with a fifteen year old girl he's half in love with, so I took the hints at the darkness from the movie and expanded them.

Lastly, thank you for the grammatical links. Its vs. It's has always been a bogey of mine, even though I know better I just can't seem to catch them all. Worse yet, I am entirely unsure of what a direct address comma is. I'll take a look, and I know it will be a nice read because its Pittwitch.

Again thanks so much for the lovely compliments and info!

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