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LOL yes of course! Hmmm I'm stumped and my brain is mushy (it's 1 am here, Pacific Northwest time). Yeah I think it's pretty good, if you like stories about musicians.

@Fire_Demon: Finnish? Have you read Windrider Shiva's Finnish metal story, "Proof, Passion, Power"? Haha you read my mind. In the next chapter, Fico makes dinner for Joaco, who can't cook . I've always wanted to date a guy who can cook. I tend to text differently depending on the recipient. I shorten it as much as possible if I think they can understand it. If it's like my parents, or something, it's all correct spelling and grammar. I'm just a lazy texter. I'm not sure if you caught it, but when Fico texted his mom earlier in the story, he didn't use a lot of textese.

@Lisa: My whole family are very strict Roman Catholics, and although none are homosexual (at least none are out) I know that if they did come out to our parents, they would be in effect excommunicated. My parents are too soft-hearted to throw their kids out, but I know for a fact that many Catholic parents aren't so kind. Either that, or they make their child's life such a living hell that they are forced to flee. It's pretty sad, I know. I hope that some Catholic parents today aren't as hardline as Rosalia. Yeah I hope you picked up on the "I tend to be a jealous lover" clue. I've had some extra time lately and motivation to write, which is why the past two chapters have been published relatively fast. I might be slower in future but this is your Memorial Day gift. Thanks and I hope your weekend is fantastico!

@Fire_Demon: Thanks. I don't like stories without chapter names - it bugs me. That is, unless the author is super awesome amazing. I don't think Fico will cheat on Joaco, but we'll see . Fico is so hot headed, he makes decisions without a clear head. At this point, he's steaming angry at his mother, and can't think beyond that feeling of betrayal, which is why he misses Joaco so much. Joaco at this point is turning into a father-figure. Yeah I'm going to take a wee break before starting in on The Troubadour chapter, but I think it'll be fun!

@kellankyle: Thanks for the review, I appreciate the honesty. I'm sorry you think the texts and Spanish are distracting. The problem is, even if I were to change my writing style in the way you suggest, I have already set a precedent for that style and other readers have come to expect it. Some other readers have said they liked the addition of Spanish and the use of texts and tweets, and I think it's just different for each person. I personally can easily read the texts, and they seem fairly obvious to me, but that's because I tend to text that way. I would like to text with proper grammar, etc but I get impatient. Maybe it's different with you and your friends/family, but we do flip back and forth into Spanish, especially when we just can't remember the word in English!. There are also some things that sound better in Spanish, or have a meaning that isn't easily translated. I will continue to write the same way, so I suggest that if you don't like reading the story, maybe move onto a different one that you feel more comfortable with. That said, thank you so much for the concrit, and I wish you happy reading!

@Tahylor: I didn't really plan on this turn of events - my brain hijacked my fingers and typed it out for me. There's a little explanation above re: his mom's motivations. Fico's going to wear some pajamas to bed lol.

@Fire_Demon: Sadly, it's actually a pretty common phenomenon for parents to kick out their gay teens. He's really lucky he had somewhere to go.

@Tes: You're welcome and thank you for writing a review. I'm kind of a review junkie. I know, his mom seems pretty cold-hearted but in her mind, she is doing what's best for him. A lot of Catholics think that homosexuality is a choice, and therefore something that can be overcome with prayer and/or willpower. She thinks that given enough "tough love", Fico will see the error of his ways and "repent". Obviously, she's pretty misguided and living in an alternate reality...

@Tahylor: Wow yet another review! I feel like dancing and eating lots of chocolate all at once. Yeah I'm not sure what's going to happen b/w Luke & Joaco. I'm just on the first page of Ch7 now and I've moved the weekend shindig to a different location, they still may or may not go to Rage. Sexplosion - good word! You may be feeling off about Joaco b/c he took Fico home in a shady car. I think Joaco may have some secrets he hasn't shared with his friend!

@Fire_Demon: I'm so glad you liked the chapter, I was thinking it was kind of lackluster. I mean, there wasn't a lot of action in it. I tried to flesh out Luke's character, and wasn't sure I was successful or not. I know, Fico is kind of an idiot, isn't he? He's really stuck on the idea that Luke is straight, and can't see past that.

@ds: Wow here I was feeling sorry for myself that I wasn't getting reviews for this chapter, and then like four fall in my lap all at once! Thanks for the compliment, I'm glad that some people enjoy the story. I'll keep trying my best to make it worth your while.

@Lisa: Good to know! I'll try to fix it, maybe just cut the jock strap bit out entirely. Update: I took out the bit, no mention of j straps at all. Thanks so much!

@Lisa: It's Dios mio - Spanish does it backwards. Yeah Fico is so effing clueless. He's totally convinced that Luke is straight, and naive enough to believe Luke's word, so he doesn't understand the signals Luke is sending. I'm so happy you like the story, it's really hard to produce, and I get down comparing myself to other, better writers here. If you have some concrit too that'd be wonderful to hear. Last.fm, Spotify, and YouTube are great sources to hear the music for free.

@Lisa: I've been biting my nails hoping you'd post a review again. Thanks! Yeah, I'm not exactly proficient at SMS/textese, so it did take me like a day or two to piece it all together. I had to read it over and over again to make sure it made sense. FYI, sometimes I use transl8it.com for help with that. It actually takes me quite a while to write the whole thing, because I go through it several times to make sure I don't reuse adjectives and phrases. I honestly don't know how some AFF writers churn out a chapter every few days, and still manage to create a great story.

@Jade: For some reason I feel like the build up is too fast, but glad to hear you think it's slow.

@Fire_Demon: Haha that's an interesting idea. I'll think about it.

@Fire_Demon: I'm glad you like the use of texts and tweets, I wasn't sure if people would think it's stupid or juvenile. I'm not sure about the formatting of the texts, but I haven't read that many stories that involve them so I wasn't sure how to format it. I don't think Joaco will say "Fico-poo" or the like, but he is fond of nicknames, isn't he? I was even going to have Fico comment on that, but I think I forgot about it. I like to think of Fico as really hot, but he thinks he's more on the average side. I won't say anything about Luke's sexual orientation here because you'll find out later . Quique isn't gay, but he does like to talk about sex a lot and tease Fico. I'm working on the next chapter right now, I have about 2 pages, and I try to publish at least 5 in each chapter. I'll try to get this one out faster than last time.

@Misakixusagi: I'm sorry it's frustrating for you! If you have a Mac, use Command F to find the word here on this page in the dictionaries section. I'm glad you like Fico, he's probably my fave MC that I've written so far.

@lividfire: Thanks for the compliment! I was aiming for funny but I was afraid it would just be really lame. I just learned how to drive stick and it's so much more fun. It's makes you feel a lot more confident on the road - and I wanted Luke to be a cool drink of water that can take command of any situation with ease. Please tell me if the jokes become lame!

@Jade: I know, neither did I. I was going to make this chapter pretty long, but I broke down and thought of you poor readers who need regular updates. I took a while this time because I was away from home for a week visiting my sister and then I got sick .

Yeah Aysha I've been a lot more careful with continuity in the chapter I'm currently working on since I read your advice post.