Naruko Uzumaki: Konoha's #1 Slut! Discussion Forum

[CuriousWriter]

Hello all! This is CuriousWriter and this is a feedback forum for anyone with ideas or comments to my story. The link is below.

http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106089

Please let me know your thoughts and I would love to share ideas on how I can improve this story.

[CuriousWriter]

Right now I’m considering the pacing of the story.

The Academy years are the most interesting bc a lot of things can happen in a school environment.

[Guest Guest]

Looking forward to seeing what she does when she starts enjoying the sex for its sake.

[Guest Storylover]

Liking the story so far though I do hope you update soon.

[CuriousWriter]

Next chapter is going to be called The Working Class~

[CuriousWriter]

Hm, stuck between the transition between Naruko’s reflection on what happened to her running into a sempai on “the clock”.

Anyone wish to toss in an idea?

Edited February 9, 2017 by CuriousWriter

[BitterNTR]

I’d like to see a rich classmate either pay her for sex or be seduced into paying for sex. Either way should be satisfying.

[Guest CuriousWriter]

  On 2/9/2017 at 5:45 AM, BitterNTR said:

I’d like to see a rich classmate either pay her for sex or be seduced into paying for sex. Either way should be satisfying.

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That's very do able. Plus we done w the latter it shows HER growth in her role.

now just curious how to take her virginity. I got a build up it should really help reflect what her views of this job should be for the coming years. Mainly rough hate sex. 

Oh! Maybe on her b day 

[BitterNTR]

I’d also be interested to see a scene between her and Mizuki. I don’t know how you’d make that play out, whether or not he’d hatefuck her and show his true colours or not, but I'd say it would be a good read.

[Guest CuruiosWriter]

  On 2/9/2017 at 5:55 AM, BitterNTR said:

I’d also be interested to see a scene between her and Mizuki. I don’t know how you’d make that play out, whether or not he’d hatefuck her and show his true colours or not, but I'd say it would be a good read.

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I think I can do that. Maybe before the scroll or maybe a detection...now that's a scenario to play out. As for the hate fuck I think by then naru is just used to that

[BitterNTR]

  On 2/9/2017 at 5:58 AM, Guest CuruiosWriter said:

I think I can do that. Maybe before the scroll or maybe a detection...now that's a scenario to play out. As for the hate fuck I think by then naru is just used to that

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While she might be used to being hatefucked, Mizuki is still trying to pretend to be a nice teacher and not a traitor. So he can’t exactly hatefuck her unless he’s willing to express why he’s doing it.

Also, I think the hatefuck should expand beyond that of ‘because you’re the Kyuubi’ as it’ll get boring after a while. I think a good way to keep it interesting is to have her vandalise property or cause trouble for the citizens.

[Guest C.W.]

  On 2/9/2017 at 6:02 AM, BitterNTR said:

While she might be used to being hatefucked, Mizuki is still trying to pretend to be a nice teacher and not a traitor. So he can’t exactly hatefuck her unless he’s willing to express why he’s doing it.

Also, I think the hatefuck should expand beyond that of ‘because you’re the Kyuubi’ as it’ll get boring after a while. I think a good way to keep it interesting is to have her vandalise property or cause trouble for the citizens.

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Ah to keep things fresh n mean spirited. Nice.

im also considering a genjutsu scene. She's trapped in one n her body defenseless. Leads to some interesting notions. Like say for any one or a way to resolve mizuki 

[Guest goshujin-sama]

Honestly, I'm kinda hoping her first time is more noncon than consensual, because I'm a dark motherfucker.

[CuriousWriter]

I could figure that, one of her first jobs that goes over her head.

[CuriousWriter]

Just realized once she gets the shadow clone jutsu and combo that with henge, she’d have a budding enterprise.

[BitterNTR]

Here’s another idea. Before Hiruzen dies, I’d be interested in a scene where he finally gets tempted by Naruko and ‘collects his debt’ (e.g: Free home, monthly allowance, etc) from her.

[CuriousWriter]

  On 2/9/2017 at 5:00 PM, BitterNTR said:

Here’s another idea. Before Hiruzen dies, I’d be interested in a scene where he finally gets tempted by Naruko and ‘collects his debt’ (e.g: Free home, monthly allowance, etc) from her.

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Now that would be poetic in a way. maybe drag Jiraiya in to it. oh, n him training, so many opportunities.

hm, she’s a hooker, so she’s going to run into some weird kinks every so often. gotta think on that.

[Guest goshujin-sama]

You know, with the profession she is in, she might get pregnant. Before or after the academy. It wouldn't be impossible for her to get pregnant before the academy.

[CuriousWriter]

That depends when Naru starts ovulating (idk when, probably 9 n work to her first period. Yes, I do research on this). n im a bit scares on the idea of preg since u kno what that means for a jinchuriki.

[Guest goshujin-sama]

Yeah I know what happens. But weren't Naruto's and kushinas seals fundamentally different despite doing pretty much the same thing. And isn't the fox connected to Naruto in such a way that it wouldn't be able to get out

[CuriousWriter]

Yes, but the seal can still weaken during a pregnancy. i think that was a rule set.

[Guest goshujin-sama]

Or you could take creative liberties write in that the fox won't get out.

[CuriousWriter]

still unsure I want that to happen. Its a coin flip right now.

[Guest goshujin-sama]

I mean this is fan fiction. Not canon. Plus I have read a few fics where a female Naruto is impregnated before the academy or during it.

[CuriousWriter]

Yeah, but bringing a kid in seems like a chore to the purpose to the story.