Ronin's Stories (reviews, questions, suggestions, etc)

[Guest Ronin]

Hey, there!

This is the place for you to pose any feedback you want about a story I've written, suggest a collab, request a particular story or a new chapter to an existing one, and the like.

One thing I have in mind right now is about my newest story, Shura's Futa Adventures, which is about Shura from Soul Caliber 4 who is able to grow a penis (she doesn't always have one) travelling a multitude of dimensions and having sex with just about everybody she meets. (I refrained from making a bad "comes across" comment there).

I initially asked for suggestions of more "partners" for Shura (chapter one features Naruto, although mostly using his female form, Naruko), and that got my story hidden because it counts as a poll (my bad), so I made this thread.

Let me know what you think, be it a suggestion, a constructive piece of criticism, or anything that's on your mind!

[Guest Guest]

Can she humiliate taki?

[Guest Ronin]

Well, that's already been done, but I think I can put my own spin on it. Look for that later this weekend, and thanks for taking the time to make a request!

[Guest Guest]

Hot stuff. I thoroughly enjoyed it even though I am more a fan of full blown cock and balls futa girls, I can't beg and choose. I know Taki and Ivy have already been subject to a dong girl Shura story but really, it's not like that ever gets old. I don't know what the suggested pairings were so I'll suggest randomly from my favourite titles. So on top of them two I would also like to see Sophitia done over and any of the following: Sonya Blade, Kitana and/or Mileena of the Mortal Kombat fame, Wonder Woman and/or Power Girl (DC Comics), Storm, Rogue and Jubilee (Marvel), Jill Valentine or Sheva Alomnar (Resident Evil), Juliet Starling (Lolipop Chainsaw), Bayonetta (Bayonetta), Lara Croft (the over sexualized one), Raging Raven (MetalGear Solid 4), Samus Aran (Metroid), any of the Dead or Alive girls, Cammy (Street Fighter), Songo for the irony (Inuyasha) and Tifa Lockhart (FF7). Any of those girls would please me and preferably a combination here or there. Please and thank you.

[Guest Ronin]

Ok, so I know it took a while, but second chapter is up! Please review if you like it. I went with one of the recent requests and this chapter guest stars Cammy from Street Fighter. Of all the other requests, they all seem really good and I'm familiar with almost all the characters-except Juliet from Lolipop Chainsaw, which I've never played.

Regardless, I've got a few more ideas, including a threesome with Link and Princess Zelda that would see a little futa on male action, which I'm a huge fan of. And then something with an older Taki getting railed in front of Natsu.

One thing I'm trying to do is make possible branching off points, as though Shura's entry into the character's lives makes them change for the lustful. I might do a small story or series with Naruto experimenting with more sex as Naruko as well in boy form, starting with Kakashi. Likewise, either a flashback or current story with Cammy and the four Heavenly Kings of Shadaloo, or Akuma. Hope everyone enjoys!

[Guest Guest]

Great writing, worth the wait. The Link and Zelda plan looks interesting and the Taki in front of Natsu sounds hot. Looking forward to both. Would it be at all possible for Shura or the daemon inside her to corrupt/convert, if only temporarily, other women into futa dong girls? Like as a temporary side effect of constant exposure or evil energy residue from a particularly hard shagging or daemon seed being left in too long? I feel like additional dick girls could liven up future moresomes. Just a thought, keep up the good work and do that voodoo that you do so well.

[Guest Ronin]

That is actually an idea I had in mind. I was thinking of keeping the Natsu/Taki scene just Shura and Taki, alluding to past relationships the two have had. Basically, Taki will humiliate herself by begging Shura to take her and not the younger Natsu, with Shura taunting Taki for getting older while Shura remains supernaturally young looking. I was going to then have the scene end with Natsu developing her own futa dong (possibly with balls, because variety is the spice of life) and alluding to future Natsu/Taki stuff.

But I could always incorporate that directly into the scene itself. In addition to Link&Zelda (which will probably be chapter 3), and then Taki&Natsu, Chapter 5 might involve Shiki from TWEWY (those hips) but I thought that might bother some people since she's kinda young (15). I could always age her up, although I'm planning on using her body from the game (people who have played it will know what I'm talking about) so that would require some sort of plot device.

Any other, specific girls you (or anyone else) would want to see as a transformed futa? I could see something with Mileena and Shura double teaming Kitana.

[Guest llopey and]

The Minor 1 and 2 tags cover under aged characters besides, advancing the age of a character without altering their appearance does not circumvent the underage rule and kind of defeats the purpose of advancing the age. Legalities aside I really don't think anyone reading a futa Shura fic is going to draw the line at teen sex.

Mileena definitely, I think the best angle of approach for that would be even Shura being off put by how sex crazed Mileena is even before the daemon spawned dong spikes her already hyperactive sex drive. On the note of hyperdrive, any chance of intergalactic sex on top of inter dimensional? Off the top of my head Bastila Shaan, Aayla Sacura and Shaak Ti (among many others) are sexy as heck. If not whatever.

I can also see Tira in futa considering her bipolar nature. For some reason futa trans seems to match evil aligned characters easier, I dunno- maybe evil is just sexier or what the feminazis say about the penis being inherently a tool of oppression and domination is true. It's just doesn't seem to work as well with good characters. For that reason Ivy should not get one (at least for a while) since she's supposed to be celibate. Although righteous, honourable and/or small cute characters like Ashrah, Storm, Wonder Woman, Rebecca Chambers or Jubilee should for the irony. These are stray thoughts not recommendations or suggestions. You do you and I eagerly await the results.

[Guest Churn]

That is actually an idea I had in mind. I was thinking of keeping the Natsu/Taki scene just Shura and Taki, alluding to past relationships the two have had. Basically, Taki will humiliate herself by begging Shura to take her and not the younger Natsu, with Shura taunting Taki for getting older while Shura remains supernaturally young looking. I was going to then have the scene end with Natsu developing her own futa dong (possibly with balls, because variety is the spice of life) and alluding to future Natsu/Taki stuff.

But I could always incorporate that directly into the scene itself. In addition to Link&Zelda (which will probably be chapter 3), and then Taki&Natsu, Chapter 5 might involve Shiki from TWEWY (those hips) but I thought that might bother some people since she's kinda young (15). I could always age her up, although I'm planning on using her body from the game (people who have played it will know what I'm talking about) so that would require some sort of plot device.

Any other, specific girls you (or anyone else) would want to see as a transformed futa? I could see something with Mileena and Shura double teaming Kitana.

As long the males don't have super-small dicks (shit's so done), I think some futa-on-male would be awesome.

Have her fuck Samus Aran (no need for combat); she could just sneek onto Samus's ship, hide, than surprise buttsex her while she's in her ship's shower (let's just assume it has one).

I wouldn't mind seeing Shura assert her dominance over Sheeva, either.

[Guest Ronin]

Ah, Sheeva. I've thought of that, since Sheeva is the subject of another futa story I wrote here, but I can't really see Shura domming Sheeva. They could maybe have a back-and-forth sexual struggle for dominance, maybe.

I was actually considering doing a Sheeva/Kintaro/Goro story to show Sheeva's not always the HBIC, but I'm focusing more on this story right now. I'm working on Chapter 3 (Link/Shura/Zelda, where Link both fucks and gets fucked by Shura) now, and having a hard time with the beginning-I don't want to repeat myself with the whole Shura shows up and insta-seduces someone.

I was actually planning her chancing upon Zelda and Link rutting in the Hyrule throne room, and joining in. Link's fondness for dick comes up, and they go from there. I'll try to get it finished tonight or tomorrow, and hopefully people will respond well.

[Churn]

Ah, Sheeva. I've thought of that, since Sheeva is the subject of another futa story I wrote here, but I can't really see Shura domming Sheeva. They could maybe have a back-and-forth sexual struggle for dominance, maybe.

I was actually considering doing a Sheeva/Kintaro/Goro story to show Sheeva's not always the HBIC, but I'm focusing more on this story right now. I'm working on Chapter 3 (Link/Shura/Zelda, where Link both fucks and gets fucked by Shura) now, and having a hard time with the beginning-I don't want to repeat myself with the whole Shura shows up and insta-seduces someone.

I was actually planning her chancing upon Zelda and Link rutting in the Hyrule throne room, and joining in. Link's fondness for dick comes up, and they go from there. I'll try to get it finished tonight or tomorrow, and hopefully people will respond well.

You need to continue that story with futa Sheeva, shit was sexy! XD

Would love to see a Sheeva/Kintaro/Goro thing from you. Will it be in the same universe as your previous Sheeva story?

On the topic of the beginning I just got one piece of advice; when in doubt "in media res". If you aren't happy with the end result you can still salvage it by pasting on a beginning that "fades" into the climax; without the need to retool the entire damn beast. If that makes any sense.

[Guest Ronin]

Ok, so Chapter 3 is up. This one took me the most time and effort (the other two I did in a single sitting, this one took about three days stopping and starting), and is by far the longest. I think it may be my favorite-Futa/male is something I've always enjoyed reading and seeing, and getting to write it I wanted to do it right.

I hope you guys like-this is way dirtier than the other two, I think, I hope it doesn't displease anyone. Please review either here or on the story's review page itself. Up next is Natsu/Shura/Taki (I thought of a little twist, besides making Natsu a futa as well, that I think kicks things up a notch) and then Shiki/Shura. The main crux of that one will be Shiki wanting Shura to punish "her" body, which of course isn't her body at all-it'll take place during the game at some point, before Shiki starts to get some self-esteem.

After that, I'm thinking Shura/Sheva (RE4). And then, a few chapters down the road (this is the first story I've gotten past chapter 1, and here I am plotting way down the line), Shura/futa-Sheva/Excella. Because, come on, there needs to be more Excella porn. With Wesker probably watching somewhere, completely unsympathetic to Excella's plight and very turned on.

[Guest Naruhina123]

Hey Man its really good story...

Just one challenge fic if you like it...

as just Sasuke compliment Kushina hair and Kushina confess it..

but he thought different about her compliment he sex with her

[Guest Ronin]

What Naruhina is talking about is my latest, non-Games story (I think its still kosher to talk about it here), which is response to a Naruto Challenge/Request on this forum, called Sasuke the Conqueror.

Its about Sasuke going around having rough sex with the various women of the Naruto-verse. If that sounds a little similar to a more contained version of my Shura story, you're spot on. Still, I hope if its not unique, its at least entertaining.

http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105716

That's Chapter 1, and I think I might get to Chapter 2 of that before I move further on the Shura story. But that's coming too.

[Guest Guest]

Just read your latest story. I have to say that it was pretty good, I'd definitely like to read more. I really enjoyed how you had Kushina slowly succumb to the pleasure, it's always fun reading something like that. I have some questions, though. What are you planning for the next chapter? What girls besides Kushina are you planning on appearing? Will there be threesomes or maybe even foursomes?

[Guest Ronin]

Next chapter will be Sakura/Sasuke, then with Kushina joining in. That's all I know for sure.

I also have idea for Sasuke/Tsunade/Mei and Hinata/Kushina/Sasuke. At some point.

Edited February 13, 2015 by Ronin

[Guest Mr. F]

I've been enjoying your Naruto story, but I noticed that it seems to have a bad rating. I think it's very suspicious that it has so many low ratings when most of the reviews are positive, I've seen this before in other Sasuke/Harem stories, I think someone spams low ratings to get all Sasuke-centric stories bad ratings. Just letting you know so it doesn't bother you.

Anyway, I have to say that you're a pretty good writer. Surprisingly fast, too. What can we expect for the next chapter?

[Guest Ronin]

First off, intentional or not, your name reminds me of Arrested Devolpmemt.

Secondly, I get what you're saying. As a challenge fic, Sasuke wasn't initially part of it, but he fit the mold for the character, a young student ninja arrogant and cocky. I think it works.

I wanted to focus on chapter 4 of my Shura story (which actually crosses over with Naruto in chapter 1) but that doens't seem to be in as high demand-polarizing or not, Sasuke the Conquer got thousands of hits in less than a week. Not abandoning it, for you futa lovers out there, but it's now priority 2.

Anyway due some unexpected snowfall today, chapter 3 will come faster. I don't know whose in it, other than Sasuke and another woman, so it'll take a bit of time. Chapter 2 was easier cause it was a direct contiuation of chapter 1, most others will be standalone. Still, say, 3-4 days?

[Guest Mr. F]

Yeah, the name is a reference to Arrested Development. It's one of my favorite series.

As you said, even with some low ratings, your Sasuke story seems to have turned out quite popular. It's been just a couple of days and it's already around 6,000 hits. I'll look up your Shura story later, I followed the Soul Calibur series for years until V came out. I just didn't like the idea of a time skip that big.

I'll wait patiently for you to write the next chapter on "Sasuke the Conqueror", I'll enjoy it no matter which woman(or women if you decide to go for more than one) you choose.

[Guest Guest]

for your sasuke story are you just gonna have all the husbands oblivious or have sasuke sharingan them into willing cuckold servants, or maybe have a few just naturaly submissive to sasuke like maybe minato, jiraiya, kiba, and naruto when not in his sexy jutsu form. I think kiba would submit to and alpha male, and minato would probably follow his wife and son into slavery, and jiraiya would recognize sasuke's superior pervert skills.

[Guest Ronin]

I can't say for sure, but Naruto will definitely will find out. He's a special case, cause of how his chapter will turn out with Naruko and all. But soon, I'm gonna try to get back to the Shura story, which I want to get out by, oh, next Tuesday or so. Since I have 4 and 5 at least slightly planned out (Futa Natsu&Taki, then Shiki) it shouldn't take too long. Still plenty of great ideas and suggestions-maybe after something a little crazy like Kairu/Sora/Riku/Shura bi foursome.

[Guest Guest]

i think minato should find out then sharingan him into sasukes butler, just to satisfiy the netorare crowd.

[Guest Guest]

so are you still having trouble writing the next chapter .

not meaning to rush you just checking on how your doing.

[Guest Ronin]

While Chapter 6 for my Naruto story is still a ways off, I did just post a Harry Potter story featuring some rough, cheating, humiliation action between Teddy Lupin and his godparents, if anyone wants to check it out.

[Guest Guest]

what are you working on next.

Naruto chapter 6

Harry Potter chapter 2

or something new.