Call of Duty: Modern Warfare Slash

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Author: Lisbet Adair
Title: The Dance
Summary: Soap MacTavish is struggling with getting his life back together after the end of Modern Warfare, and the reappearance of a familar face offers him the opportunity to lose himself for a while.

Feedback: Feedback and constructive criticism much appreciated.
Fandom: Call of Duty: Modern Warfare
Pairing: John "Soap" MacTavish x Simon "Ghost" Riley
Warnings: M/M, Oral, Anal
URL: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600088767

I've been writing various fics for this fandom for a while, and it's been really hard to get much constructive feedback on the adult pieces as it's such a niche fandom. This piece is a bit of a change of style for me as usually I do third-person narrative, but after reading some military erotica, I decided to switch to first person as that seems to be favoured in the published work of this genre. I'd be really grateful to hear if people think that this works or not, or in fact if they have any advice for improving this, or any of the other pieces I've published on this website.

Many thanks for reading!

Lis