Mamacita Posted August 23, 2009 Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 this is so horribly awful (27 pages of wordord on ONE PAGE of story index!) that i'm breaking it up into 4 posts. sorry! it's the worst page i've seen yet, by far. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 Shadows across the heart 34607 IN STORY Ch 1 • His sre ore offer • Xander 't s't said • loe looked downwards • at bre breathy sigh • beiisapisappointed • midsmidst • recklesslwn twn the • inhabitanf Suf Sunnydale • arrogantsuresure • for proten, bn, believing • Sunnydale home [para] T [para] They were • itced ced the • on edgeedge • smack dabthe the boy's • He wd itd it taped • gazed up at h He He • look of on on his • the on ton to talk • on insiinside? • glancedthe the • cigs werill ill sitting • givihe she statue a narrow l "W "What • shook hiad, ad, an • strangnvernversation • NOW.PaciPacing • to puemonemon as • of tampiampire • blonto nto the • ane lie lil'bit • there lre leaving • not t to to the • Surreptisly sly • He hadt ent enough • was prettye the that • exacexactly • the car.riverive." • of Suf Sunnydale • and seven,"en," • challengingly.s has hands • Willl gll go after her too. DaTaraTara • asn asn as he • persondingding him • he NiblNiblet • whatever s, bs, big sis • awaiting garbagy any and • upward, hies nes narrowed • Which wappospposed to • eganegan • the Mark f, th, then • gaze on . T. This • probed nd hnd his • Hinneinned Ch 2 • caresses. [para] An [para] Angel vaguely • jumped ith ith a • can can wait • the guan rin ring • in confusis hes he • wigawayaway • thartmartment • moaned sily, ly, • vampireoul oul back • Nevering ing his • waitinr yor your • Nhey hey • blast er aer • Af lif life • out of tir, ir, he • about or tor three • were ed ted towards • gi him him a • After adjug hig his • evardearder Ch 3 • her he bri brisk • the can can never • recognizing the w "W "What's • How, sh, should • distract arom rom his • before ly ely easing • himher.her. • thoughtfuurniurning • Nof tof them • prtivetively • endeender • laid Clai a h a human [laid Claim to a human] • smooth of of her • climbedo tho the • closeprespression • walkeowlyowly • Very l. H. Hurt • whatwhat a good idea • whied aed a sly • already shreg hig his • hell out im. im. All Ch 4 • protect hrienriend • rememberihe bhe bad • just los," s," she • disdai to to answer • the afted ted limb • cursedselfself • gentleposspossible • d, Xd, Xander • gently.pingping • Angel rep dis distantly • after vam vampire • to his dit fat face • and yourond ond in • not youryour name • But whe's e's • and a cotiontion • distancf cof course • the erectioat wat was • jusder der his skin • rape his.his. He • his ue aue and • still coing ing the • to his ry try throbbing • began layera sea series • At lustlusty • themplesplessly • kind tpickpicked • doubtconfconfusion • fierce tendtender • st sst slushing • fiercelyouriouring • mightily to t off off the • carnal rewa And And this • lightenflicflickered • with a stighightening • up dow down • Oooolow.low..." • wi lou loud • Angel psed sed • gave hime toe to • honquonquering • triumphbellbellow • ctwittwitched • that it wim tim that • to prt hit his Ch 5 • not to fightt tot to feel • Xanwondwondered • spof Aof Angel's • turn of headhead. • teeth escahim him with eacurt.urt • reflected ow how his • slowly sghteghten • but tietlietly • as he sgledgled • she c see see how • of thrld.rld • the suffe cau caused dir direct • as tas the • brothers and sis. s. • of millionsworsworshippers • and gro, fi, finally • goddess oem aem all • to tonstonstant • r shr she • lonforefore • cusiousion that • backed by ttrentrength • so orceorce • man nstanstantly • whyld hld he be • It was 's q's quick • did ly aly and • but truttruth • Aven ven if • wrong with ow."ow." • being ridius aus and • when toy'sou's knees • Understag whg what • what hhe bhe boy • wMUSTMUST • the su bac back Ch 6 • in thte lte 1800's ª howgerogerous • before contng. ng. • unsur he he • raihis his brows • softithoithout • for relea Wit With • to maks bus burly • it was.en ien it was • on defng tng the • path to gro group • exacthe ohe order • Tearfully she ed, ed, • your in to to kill • fascination.LexiLexi • 2usanusand years • Shplaiplained • the simple rep [para] G [para] Gunn nodded • wher had had been • in asthmenhment • shsh ysh • moreakreakier • thrge rge black • you ouslously • seen the ringring • in roo room • Shadow Qu" sh" she • S, go, good-natured • and you eed fed from • that befd thd this • hisprisprised • ouldould see the • tlurklurked • herself. her her son • inasuaasual display • at the jd gad gaping • jutting seamle fro from • Xander ed ied in • llowllowing, he • Distedlyedly • broughe wae wanker • he flattehis his • glared venomo at at a • as he gazedn inn into • Bloasheashes away • on hhoulhoulder • r sor souls • Wesley anike ike caught • seemed torse rse over • her cenanenance • the air red aed and Ch 7 • insuffer exp expression • doubmagemage • his hotel room room • hterhter. • mention thct tct that • turned on withwith a • Irrita, st, stupid • to singis eis eyes • undpikepike's • Y, th, that's • this wasd ind in a • of dan danger looming • Allr ofr of the • He turto tto the • that werewere • topptopped his • the Defenderthe the sole • a freshrt wrt was • was btlebtle • as das doing • Angel aconfconfconfusion • was an ageng. ng. Ch 8 • at clo closed • somewhere upstai A h A horrible • rng hng his • sigh.e tee tensed • the [para] "W [para] "Wasn't • hplieplied • bldustduster • n vin visibly • feeling sho A At first • as a e soe so perhaps • Fredl tal take • out the h and and • eyested ted up • very abo about • tormtorming the • steppeto tto the • andfounfound • like startlerds.rds. • anst ist • raiseows.ows • the way way link • younk Snk Spike • rallrally couldn't • carrying the otjo{.boy. • dec decided to • Xande [para] Sc [para] Scooping • when he rnedrned • a lof jof joy • knsincsince • had a sl fro frown • me,der der has • back to to the • prefer gng tng the • stahearhearing • el lel looked • ovis cis cereal King of sorrow 19265 —this really is Buffy/Xander with Angel/Xander as a secondary. I’d move it to het. B/X are engaged; A/X only takes place briefly in A’s imagination. Ch 1 • despeatteattempts • feeling lhe whe was • and ing ing down • the he he just • have ot cot canal • retd ved very • laughiejoiejoinder • Dflopflopped • was sittinforefore him • Uthanthank • aid aid quietly • somet whe when • drew y bey behind • pg ang angrily • tried.t tht the • away.ngelngel, • to the scand and it • sacrifg myg my • I assuthatthat she • don’t,gel gel said Ch 2 • m tig tightened • what hs sms smelling • Theyked ked for • then upss, hs, he • tried to t pot pots • itveryverything • cries oe pae parents • stretchedin, in • yownstwnstairs Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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