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GLITCHES - Buffy / femslash /root - page 31

Roof of the world (ID 22818)

In reviews:

• by V, 2004-04-02 (ID 178014): prefer fluff ‘fir’first kiss’

• ditto : cool thoug hop hope you

In story:

Ch 1

• for some reason there is a MAJOR gap, over a foot long, between the prelims and the start of the story. very off-putting—i thought it was an un-story at first because i kept scrolling and nothing was there. think au did this herself as there is a ton of space in other places too, but this first gap is ridiculous

• of the jerkingwd, wd, there

• door out ts hts hinge;

Dolls & leather (ID 22005)

In reviews:

• by gEmInI, 2004-03-15 (ID 160858): and heated writtieceiece! liked

In story:

Ch 1

• Getting kille a f a fight,

• the odd womwearwearing a big

• reacting te die dismay

• is more likely.t;

Love on the hellmouth (ID 20866)

—Menu 1 is not really a chapter. au put all the ANs in the first menu “chapter”. combine with real chapter 1? and might i just say...OMG...this au doesn’t use para breaks!!!!

Menu 2

• cost them thlivelives!”

• it’s not corpl. Il. It can’t

• then e’se’s the thing

• what’s cominEverEveryone

• can sleepe, Me, Molly

• Anya thng tng the

• You loo” Bu” But she

• this prely?ely?” “You

• don’t thinkingking on

• get into t but but for

Menu 3

• sun g dow down?

• arrived bacme pme preparations

• running inte roe room at

Menu 4

• Giles, wthatthat thing

• Potentials leveneven more

• Kennedy and Dawand and their

Menu 7

• it wasn’teasyeasy to hide.

• They sfounfound that

Menu 9

• When shees hes home

• own rooWillWillow moves

• of your stre. Th. The well

• sure if n ben beat

Menu 10—oh joy, she has finally figured out how to break paragraphs

• W the the Potentials

• take this relatiip tip to the

Menu 11

• head. slamslams into the

Menu 17

• It’s B. Sh. She always

Menu 19

• what you are g to to do

Building up the tension (ID 20009)

Ch 1

• uffyuffy.’ Willow’s

• Willow ed aed as Buffy

More than flesh and blood (ID 19919)

• moistesligslightly but she

The circle (ID 19395)

In reviews:

• by Morningstar Devereaux, 2004-03-21 (ID 166866): allegations of plagiarism in para 2 of review, spurring a heated review from goolecap. not sure if this can be considered a flame (and i can’t stand goolecap so am sympathetic with the flamer) but it’s darn close to one.

In story:

Menu 1

• “Sttilltill” Dawn took

• found her breastsoletolet bit

• Violet’ngerngers began

• offered ha lia little

• Dawn smi ima imagining

• was somng ing in her

• wanted me ell,ell, at least

• person, twe cwe can

• precioomenoments we

So many tears: cry no more (ID 19363)

Ch 1

• ‘Just pusay.’ay.’ She glares . . . in her m. G. Grabbing

• wait a littleger,ger, and I

Birthday licks (ID 18783)

Ch 1

• her pinky fing I p I paid on

• keep until r...kir...kinda busy (think this is a glitch but not sure)

• for the oion,ion, on her

My lover’s voice (ID 18799)

Ch 1

• shoulder. ere ere is no way

• of a sudI haI have this

Visions dancing in her head (ID 18796)

Ch 1

• care if iant ant some

Resolution (ID 16307)

Ch 1

• slightly cond. [para] d.

• Faith’s cro Fin Finishing

• The petitautyauty carefully

• ffy ffy giggled

Driving home for Christmas (ID 15755)

Ch 1

• Buffy ed ted the