Mamacita Posted June 12, 2009 Report Posted June 12, 2009 GLITCHES - Buffy / femslash /root - page 31 Roof of the world (ID 22818) In reviews: • by V, 2004-04-02 (ID 178014): prefer fluff ‘fir’first kiss’ • ditto : cool thoug hop hope you In story: Ch 1 • for some reason there is a MAJOR gap, over a foot long, between the prelims and the start of the story. very off-putting—i thought it was an un-story at first because i kept scrolling and nothing was there. think au did this herself as there is a ton of space in other places too, but this first gap is ridiculous • of the jerkingwd, wd, there • door out ts hts hinge; Dolls & leather (ID 22005) In reviews: • by gEmInI, 2004-03-15 (ID 160858): and heated writtieceiece! liked In story: Ch 1 • Getting kille a f a fight, • the odd womwearwearing a big • reacting te die dismay • is more likely.t; Love on the hellmouth (ID 20866) —Menu 1 is not really a chapter. au put all the ANs in the first menu “chapter”. combine with real chapter 1? and might i just say...OMG...this au doesn’t use para breaks!!!! Menu 2 • cost them thlivelives!” • it’s not corpl. Il. It can’t • then e’se’s the thing • what’s cominEverEveryone • can sleepe, Me, Molly • Anya thng tng the • You loo” Bu” But she • this prely?ely?” “You • don’t thinkingking on • get into t but but for Menu 3 • sun g dow down? • arrived bacme pme preparations • running inte roe room at Menu 4 • Giles, wthatthat thing • Potentials leveneven more • Kennedy and Dawand and their Menu 7 • it wasn’teasyeasy to hide. • They sfounfound that Menu 9 • When shees hes home • own rooWillWillow moves • of your stre. Th. The well • sure if n ben beat Menu 10—oh joy, she has finally figured out how to break paragraphs • W the the Potentials • take this relatiip tip to the Menu 11 • head. slamslams into the Menu 17 • It’s B. Sh. She always Menu 19 • what you are g to to do Building up the tension (ID 20009) Ch 1 • uffyuffy.’ Willow’s • Willow ed aed as Buffy More than flesh and blood (ID 19919) • moistesligslightly but she The circle (ID 19395) In reviews: • by Morningstar Devereaux, 2004-03-21 (ID 166866): allegations of plagiarism in para 2 of review, spurring a heated review from goolecap. not sure if this can be considered a flame (and i can’t stand goolecap so am sympathetic with the flamer) but it’s darn close to one. In story: Menu 1 • “Sttilltill” Dawn took • found her breastsoletolet bit • Violet’ngerngers began • offered ha lia little • Dawn smi ima imagining • was somng ing in her • wanted me ell,ell, at least • person, twe cwe can • precioomenoments we So many tears: cry no more (ID 19363) Ch 1 • ‘Just pusay.’ay.’ She glares . . . in her m. G. Grabbing • wait a littleger,ger, and I Birthday licks (ID 18783) Ch 1 • her pinky fing I p I paid on • keep until r...kir...kinda busy (think this is a glitch but not sure) • for the oion,ion, on her My lover’s voice (ID 18799) Ch 1 • shoulder. ere ere is no way • of a sudI haI have this Visions dancing in her head (ID 18796) Ch 1 • care if iant ant some Resolution (ID 16307) Ch 1 • slightly cond. [para] d. • Faith’s cro Fin Finishing • The petitautyauty carefully • ffy ffy giggled Driving home for Christmas (ID 15755) Ch 1 • Buffy ed ted the Quote
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