[Language issues]

I'm not sure if this is the right place for this, but here goes... I'm writing a character in one of my stories that has a thick Cajun accent, but I have no idea how to write a convincing sounding one. She doesn't have a lot of lines, but I want to make it look right, like someone from southern Louisiana really could say them.

These are the lines:

"Welcome to Louisiana, Mr. Shore," she said in a thick Cajun accent. "Did you have a good trip?"

“Looks like we're 'ere, monsieur,” she said, opening the door. “I know we have a hard day ahead of us, but maybe you’d like to have a little fun before you rest up, chare?”

Could anyone help with that? Thanks.

[Has anyone else had this happen to them?]

Thanks for the good advice. I'm really going to take it to heart. In fact I've started another story. I havn't had much of a chance to read other stories on the site, but you can count on a review when I have a chance.

[Has anyone else had this happen to them?]

I'll admit that I'm relatively new to writing and at 28 I shouldn't really care, but I find it difficult to motivate myself due to one thing. People seem to be reading my stories but nobody gives me any feedback. There are a lot of people who have 20, 40, even 90 reviews, mostly saying "Great work". As of now I have maybe 5 reviews on one story and none on my other 2, of those one says "good job". I'll admit, as an author it hurts to feel that someone who obviously doesn't even reread their own story to check if it's legible is getting more good job reviews when all I want is for people to enjoy my work, or to at least tell me honestly why they didn't. It's very discouraging to see and compare my story,

The Plan

Megan has started noticing her stepbrother is becoming a man and decides she wants him all for herself. When she tells her friends afterwards, they want in... Please review. Chapter 1=Voy;2=M/F;3=M/F/F;4=Inc, M/F/F/F/F;5=Inc, M/F/F;6=F/F

Author [Dream Weaver] -:- Rated [Adult+] -:- Chapters [6] -:- Published [2008-07-30] -:- Updated [2008-08-04 00:27:37] -:- Edited [2008-08-04] -:- Hits [685] -:- Reviews [5] -:- Average / Total Vote [+++++ / 5]

To that of another author

The Beauty and the Tragedy

River Conway is seventeen years old and has never had a boyfriend. Staying the summer at his house, she asks Danny Aldridge to teach her about relationships and sex. The arrangement starts simple enough until love enters the picture. M/F

Author [templeton21] -:- Rated [Adult+] -:- Chapters [3] -:- Published [2008-07-31] -:- Updated [2008-08-07 21:33:47] -:- Edited [2008-08-07] -:- Hits [1361] -:- Reviews [45] -:- Average / Total Vote [+++++ / 16]

Can someone please tell me what, other than focusing on others work, I'm doing wrong? I really want to understand.

[Silver Linings]

I've just posted the first chapter of my new story, Silver Linings. Don't worry, I'm still going to finish The Plan, but I wanted something to play primarily with your heart. I really hope you guys like it. Please review.

Title: Silver Linings

Author: Dream Weaver

Summary: Ani's life was going smoothly until her boyfriend cheated on her. Now it's all starting to fall apart. Where will she turn for comfort?

URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600097951

Thanks,

-Simon

[The Plan]

The Plan has a new chapter up. Only one more left after this one, but I figure I'll wait at least a fer days before posting it to see the public response. Also I've put up my second story, a One Shot called My Best Friend. While my Wife helped me edit The Plan, My Best Friend was the first one to be edited by myself, so please review and tell me what you think. Thanks for the time it took to read this.

Title: The Plan

Author: Dream Weaver

Summary: Megan has started noticing her stepbrother is becoming a man and decides she wants him all for herself. When she tells her friends afterwards, they want in... Please review. Chapter 1=Voy;2=M/F;3=M/F/F;4=Inc, M/F/F/F/F;5=Inc, M/F/F;6=F/F

Fandom: N/A

URL or Site link: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600097880

Title: My Best Friend

Author: Dream Weaver (me)

Summary: Emily's best friend finds one of her father's videos one night and asks Emily for a favour... SoloF, F/F

Fandom: N/A

URL or Site link: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600097926

Oh, and by the way, thanks for the warning, Beth, and congratulations on the weightloss. I've been there before and I know it's not easy.

[The Plan]

I'm relatively new to the site and have finally written my first story, The Plan. I've noticed that people are reading it, but no one wants to review what I have. I've got two chapters left to finish, but it's kind of discouraging not to hear what people think. So, please tell me: What do you think? I look forward to all responses and will take any criticism seriously. Thank you all in advance.

[So, what do you people think?]

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind for future stories.

[So, what do you people think?]

I'm relatively new to the site and have finally written my first story, The Plan. I've noticed that people are reading it, but no one wants to review what I have. I've got two chapters left to write, but it's kind of discouraging not to hear what people think. So, please tell me: What do you think? I look foreward to all responses and will take any criticism seriously.