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  1. What I'm looking for in a beta:

    I've been lagging behind on updating my stories because I really don't know where they're going. The reviews I've gotten haven't helped much either. I'm looking for someone that offers more than just a simple spell check. I need (crave) constructive criticism in the form of a beta. If my story is lacking in certain areas, then by all means tell me. I can take it like a man! :samurai: Anyone that specializes in : grammar, diction, style, characterization, cannon, original character development, flow, etc is greatly appreciated.

    Fandom:

    Inuyasha

    Type of Story:

    This story tends to be kind of dark at times, and full of angst; or at least it's what I'm going for. To me, it feels as if there is not enough character development prior to the sex scenes. It's really hard for me to explain unless you give it a quick read first. I have an idea where I want the story to go, I just need a little help getting there.

    Title: Liar

    Codes: Abuse, Angst, BDSM, D/s, Exhib, H/C, Humil, Language, Mpreg, Tort, Violence, Yaoi

    Rating: Adult, +++++

    Pairings: Sesshoumaru x Koga, Inuyasha x Miroku, other yaoi pairings

    Summary: Kouga plays a dangerous game and is caught within Sesshoumaru's powerful clutches. Sesshoumaru, claims to live without love while deep inside living a lie of his own.

    Feedback: Very much appreciated! Greatly Wanted!

    Chapters: 3

    URL: http://inu.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600090627

  2. 日本語 の板もあるの?

    Is there also a Japanese language board?

    Yo! I [Nekomimi Jasmine] reside in Japan. How is everyone? Let's chat here and enjoy ourselves.

    ーーー

    I'm only a beginner in this language so the translation is kind of rough..

    今一は。。。 これは言い換えるもあるか? 米国に住んでいます。 元気です。 あなたも? 

    すみません、日本語が少しだけ知ります。 勉強すべきね。 

    ’did i do okay?’ は 日本語で何と言いますか? だって [やってん] は意味ですか? 分かりません。

  3. This story is a Work In Progress. Please take the time to review my story as I'd like to know how it's going so far and if people like it or not. Constructive criticism is welcome! :D

    Title: Liar

    Author: Happy bun bun

    Rating: Adult, +++++

    Pairings: Sesshoumaru x Koga, Inuyasha x Miroku, other yaoi pairings

    Summary: Kouga plays a dangerous game and is caught within Sesshoumaru's powerful clutches. Sesshoumaru, claims to live without love while deep inside living a lie of his own. Yaoi, Mpreg.

    Feedback: Very much appreciated! Greatly Wanted!

    Chapters: 3

    URL: http://inu.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600090627

  4. (oh, if you can't read the song title above, in romanji, it's kou ta ki mi. daiyumi69, if you didn't know, most computers in North America aren't programmed to display kanji. Admittedly, the only song of hers I've heard was ハナイフラッシュ F, or hanaii furasshu F.)

    Reverse by 斎賀みつき (Saiga Mitsuki)

    ^Oh I know, that's why I also wrote out Koda Kumi. I had no clue sice I'm in Texas. Can't you just enable it under your language settings on your computer?

    Song: UNITE! (huge ur chin mix) remixed by HUGE

    Artist: Ayumi Hamasaki

  5. It's a fun site for anyone who likes to play online games that are CUTE! It may seem a little kiddy, but check the site out and see for yourself. There are tons of other adults who play online. I'm on it almost everyday sending my pet through school, feeding it, and training it. It's similar to neopets except... it's not. If anyone enjoys online flash games and loves pets then go to the site and join. Don't forget to put daiyumi69 as a refferal and I'll give you a gift! wink.gif

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