WarrenTheConey

I don't know... I think Deadman 'really fell off' as they say... I'm kidding of course; Just remember you aren't beholden to anyone when it comes to your own life. Hope you feel better later.

I personally avoid looking at ‘collections of stories’ if I'm in a lazy mood, which is my usual state of being; I really don't want to sift through a half dozen stories, just to find only one that I like. I also avoid certain tags unless I'm feeling adventurous, which seldom happens. Because of this I like to keep my stories as separate as possible, because it's something that I would appreciate as a reader. I go so far as to avoid multi-chapter fanfics if I can, saving chapters for fanfics that simply can't be told in one sitting. I do have fanfics that are sequels, but I make sure they work entirely independent of the other. That way if my reader decides they don't want to see something described or tagged in a previous fanfic, they can just skip it. I hope I don't aggravate people by saying this, but 'story collections' in my opinion, defeat the purpose of tags and descriptions entirely. A single tag for one fanfic, could be seen as a tag for every fanfic in the collection, and you would have to read each story just to find out if that's true. Likewise if I was to read a description to get an idea of the content of the fanfics, it would be a broad description that tells me little about any of the stories in that collection. I could look in the chapters, hoping to find more information about the stories within, but it's easier just to avoid the one collection among all the other new posts. I'm sure I sound picky about it, but that's how I do things, and I thought you might like hearing from someone who as both a reader and a writer, usually avoids 'story collections'.

When I make a completely original character, I ask myself, what do I absolutely want from this character? Then I write down a short list of thing what I want from that character. --- A girl who is comfortable with her sexuality. --- She has some exposure to sexual concepts. --- She has no first hand experience with sexual activities. Then for each one of those things, I make a list of all the thing things I can think of, that could be associated with them. +++ A girl who is comfortable with her sexuality. --- She could be an irresponsible girl, only interested in having fun. --- She could be a very responsible girl, who believes that if she practices safe sex, then she shouldn't worry about what society thinks. --- She could be open about her sexuality to others. --- She could prefer to keep her sexual experiences to herself. --- She could dress provocatively. --- She could dress modestly. --- She could have one partner who she is very active with. --- She could start with one partner then leave that partner for another in a short amount of time. --- She could have multiple partners, who she meets at different times. +++ She has some exposure to sexual concepts. --- She could have overheard her friends talking about their sexual experiences. --- She could be in a position to spy on a couple and their intimate time together. --- She could be interested in shows or books that often show suggestive things. --- She could have access to some form of pornography. --- She could take an interest in masturbation as entertainment or stress relief. +++ She has no first hand experience with sexual activities. --- She could have seen someone naked in person, but nothing else. --- She could have handled a person's body at some point for some reason, but nothing beyond touching. --- She has had absolutely no sexual experience at all. --- She had a partner before, but they only held hands, kissed and cuddled. Now we can remove what we don't want, keep what we like and build on our character further, by thinking about what we can infer about the character, from the things we decided to keep. I also do this when I'm trying to make a story. It's a simple thing that I do, but I hope it can help you.

If you're asking for my opinion, It looks like a good idea. If you're having trouble describing your character, I could suggest a writing exercise I like to do, if you'd like.

I agree with most of what you said. But I wanted to point out that my use of the word 'membrane' is correct, since the word membrane refers to something that could be considered a lining. And I also want to point out that I said 'break' since it's delicate flesh, I did not say 'penetrate'. I was just saying there are girls with hymens, to let people know the 'trope' could still be deployed, but to be accurate to life, it should be done so in a much more subtle manner.

I've gotten into the habit of listening to lofi while I work on my writing. I find that it helps me concentrate when I'm stressed. These are my favorite channels for lofi: Lofi Girl https://www.youtube.com/@LofiGirl The Jazz Hop Cafe https://www.youtube.com/@jazzhopcafe

Actually, hymens are a real thing, people just exaggerate about them. The reason most girls don't notice them is because that membrane will widen and thin out as the girl develops physically. By their mid-teens most girls are physically ready for sex and wouldn't feel much beyond the slightest prick or itch during their first time having sex. If you want to include a hymen breaking, the girl depicted is gonna need to be a young one, in her early teens or preteens. As for your question, in order to be comfortable with anything, a person needs exposure to the thing, whatever it is. This does not mean that the person has to engage with this thing directly; In fact indirect exposure to things often creates a romanticized look on them. Your girl could be thinking about how her friends sometimes talk about their sexual experiences and she could form an opinion of what she thinks she would like, or how she would feel, or what she would do, as a result. Then she could try exploring her own body in a comfortable space at her own leisure. If you don't want to take time to show those experiences, then you can have her think back to these as experiences that have already happened to her. The most important thing however, is that she needs to be comfortable with the person she is going to be sexual with. If she doesn't trust that person, she won't be comfortable doing anything with whoever she's with. You're going to need to show that trust in some way, if you want it to be believable. (Yes, I know this essentially reiterated Bronx's example, but I felt maybe you'd like to have another perspective, even if it isn't much different.)

Whatever it is, it's really gnawing at my obsessive side. >.> It seems that the problem only happens to things that are edited. But whatever is added in the very first instance, seems to work properly. Anyone who wants to have a clean description or tags, be sure to make the first post count.

Thank you very much for the fast reply, and of course for the passionate work you do as a moderator. 😇 This is the new summary, to replace the old one: The Wild Thornberrys (1998) - After trying to taking advantage of her brother, Eliza discovers they have a shared interest. [This story takes place in an alternate universe, where Eliza never had powers, never met Darwin, never found Donnie and has a brother, instead of a sister.] And these are the new story codes to add: Solo COMPLETE

I just posted a new chapter to one of my stories, but I can’t change the story's tags or description. I can interact with everything else successfully, except the "EDIT STORY INFO" option. Every time I try to update the description and tags, I end up at an empty page with the URL below. https://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/ucpa.php?task=sedit

The way I title anything I write, is with some type of reference to the story or some part of it's content. I like to give the reader as many hints as I can, about what my story will entail. I personally believe, that a title which is in some way faithful to the story’s content, will garner you at least, some good grace with a reader, even if, for whatever reason, they choose to avoid reading that story. However, I don't see any reason why an accurate title, can't also include a bit of humor. Maybe you should try 'playing around with' the two potential titles, just to see if it's possible to add whatever you feel is missing from them. But if you absolutely can't bear to change them, take a look at both and then pick the one that 'feels' best to you in that moment; As they say, the first response is usually the correct one.

The other night I was working on one of my many, (probably too many), short stories. I decided to move a folder that held the scene I was working on, and then attempted to save the document the scene was in. The document acted strangely and then I realized I had just moved the file itself, I double checked the file and found the thirteen hundred word scene I had just finished, had not been saved. Luckily, I keep scenes, completely separate, while I write, so I only lost one scene. Of course, being the surly, impatient person, I am, I decided to end my writing session for the evening. But this made think, it has to happen to other writers now and then, right? So tell me, what's the highest word count you've ever lost, when your work wasn't saved? The highest word count I've ever lost, was one thousand eight hundred words. I'm sure that's not much for the more prolific among you, but it's a lot for a featherweight like me.

Desiderius Price "I’ve learned to never say never when it comes to writing, usually because saying “never would” becomes an inducement to do just that." That's the absolute truth. It's because of that, I try to turn things I dislike, into challenges that broaden my imagination and world view. I also agree that writing about real people, is something that I would probably refrain from. However, with the rise of characters that are fictitious representations of real people, both directly and indirectly, there are even some shows, that I would rather avoid writing about, just because they toe, a palpably, unpopular grey line. For instance, I actually enjoyed the cartoon, The Prince, (I hate myself for admitting that), and I wanted to write a fan-fic to resolve it's cliffhanger ending. But I never wrote one, because I feel, that grey area, is essentially the same as writing about real people. And I'm not alone in the sentiment, that writing about characters who act as fictitious representations of real people, is essentially the same, as writing about those real people. I know that most people agree with me, since the decision to make prince George the main character of that show, was so overwhelmingly controversial, that the show's run, was ended, before the episodes were even aired.

Not knowing the characters makes it hard to know how they would react to a 'slight' of any kind. That being said, any mention of a broken promise during a 'make up', would probably turn into an argument or fight. So that should be avoided at all costs. Your best bet, at least I think, would be to show one fully engaged and committed to their love making, and to have the other show the slightest sign that they are not equally engaged. It would have to be something that can easily played off as nothing, like rolling her eyes at a sweet little declaration of love, or maybe letting out a noticeable sigh when she's asked to do something physical.

I agree that writers should be encouraged, but how best to do that, seems to be a point on which Desiderius Price and I will have to, 'agree to disagree'. 🥺❤️‍🩹 🤓 However, I'm sure we can also agree, that I am inevitably right, Desiderius Price is objectively wrong, and that someone with administrative authority should immediately lock the replies, so that I can have the last word, on my unquestionably insightful post. 😂

My goal of course, is to give anyone who is thinking of giving a review a simple base to start from. I would go so far as to say, my own review can be further broken down to a very simple core. --- Did you enjoy the story? What was one very notable aspect of the story, that made the work enjoyable to you? Why in your opinion, did that aspect, make the story more enjoyable? OR Did you dislike the story? What was one very notable aspect of the story, that made it difficult to enjoy? Why in your opinion, did that aspect, make the story difficult to enjoy? How would you, personally, change that aspect, to make the story more enjoyable? --- The above could apply to anything, characters, grammar, spelling, plot, etc. I also want to encourage people to leave ANY type of thoughts or reviews, whether they are 'positive' or 'negative'. As long as a thought or review is given, with logic and objectivity tempering that opinion, then that 'criticism' will always be 'constructive'. 'Constructive criticism', will always be a benefit to both readers and writers. Readers will have an idea of what to expect before reading, and writers will be advised on aspects of their writing, that may benefit from some level of improvement. I really hope people will see this post and feel encouraged to leave a short thought or review on the next story they read.

I have a sneaking suspicion, that people aren't leaving reviews, because they don't know what they should say in them. It's something that I asked myself about, when I wanted to leave a review on a story I enjoyed. I didn't want to just say 'good job', and I also wanted to avoid saying 'this is bad' or 'good', without being as objective as I could be. So, I sat down and thought about what things a reader and writer of fan-fiction, might want to know or should know, about a fan-fic. With this in mind, I wrote down a list of things that I may or may not put in a review, depending on whether or not I think it should be said. This is the list that I now use, when writing a review. --- Was this story good or bad overall? Could you recommend the story? Give at least a vague reason or example as to why, it was good or bad for you. Do the characters have, for the most part, 'clear' and 'reasonable' motivations that drive them to do what they are doing? If motives are in doubt, can you offer improvements to the motives of their characters? Is the story too, out of place, to be believable in the 'cannon' of that 'universe'? If it does feel out of place, can you offer an improvement, so the story doesn't feel out of line with the 'cannon' of that 'universe'? How is the wording and spelling? Is it difficult or easy to read through? If it is difficult to read through, can you offer a suggestion as to how the writer can improve on those? Does the story's title, description and tags, give the reader a clear idea of what the story may be about, without, spoiling the story? Can you offer advice on how to make these more clear, without, spoiling the story? What else, if anything, do you want the readers and/or the writer to know, about this story? --- These are of course, things that I felt would be important in a review, for both a reader and writer. I think this would be a good template for those who are looking to give an 'objective' review, but don't know where to start. Of course I'm always eager to hear other's thoughts and perspectives on the matter, and on the template I now use.

I posted my story with the proper tags, and a short description of what changes where made to the canon universe. I think I'll keep doing that from this point forward. Thanks for the advice everyone.

As an obsessive perfectionist, I find that I'm constantly over thinking things and constantly marring my work, by focusing on things that don't need the extra attention. In a few days, I'm sure I'll have the free time to finish and post a new story in the archive. I looked at the story codes and started thinking, (obsessing needlessly), about two tags in particular. GB - the gender bender tag, and OC - the original character tag. This really made me wonder, wouldn't a gender bender character, also count as an original character? I'm interested in hearing anyone's thoughts on what makes an 'original character', in the face of such a change. How much can that character change, before that character is considered, a different character?

I Literally made an account, specifically to reply to this post, so I hope you see this. I would say if you’re attempting to play with your reader’s minds, then it would be best to keep the mystery a surprise for the end. I would also suggest, leaving a few very small hints of things that seem out of place, but not drawing any real attention to them, hiding the ground work for the real story, in plain sight. If you do it like that, you can wrap up the first chapter as a fun, false start, for the mystery at hand.