TimeofAngels

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I was including them as the last two places.

How do you know that?

He has said that he isn’t adding anyone else

Yes, But very few English schools have the girls play football. Girls Football is commonly an extracurricular activity so its highly unlikely any of the British girls would have played it. I’m not bad at Football because I had to play it every week for five years at school. I don’t know what its like in the U.S but considering how successful they’ve been I would imagine its more common to be compulsory among young girls

Really liked that Ariana wasn’t turned on by her degradation at all. In too many instances female characters body’s react even when they don’t want them too. I found the Time Jumps quite jarring especially as some of the scenes were prior to events that occurred in the previous chapter. Its fine when your showing what one set of characters did and then showing what other characters were doing whilst the first set was doing stuff. The problem for me is when you break causality since Cara’s and Emma’s interaction in chp 33 happened before bella’s punishment in chp 32 and the interaction between Cara and Emma in chp 33 affected the way Cara behaved in chp 32. I think I understand why this is the case as you want to give the reader a big scene in each chapter. I really like how Bella was fucked especially since it showed her loss of the masculinity that she had gained when she had the feel-doe and reminded us that she is still part of Alex’s harem. Although I really like it when girls, with a dick, fuck other girls. I’m surprised that you find big tits and arse unattractive. I assumed that since I have no preference when it comes to physical appearance, assuming youth and good health, that all men were the same and that the most significant factors were the way someone behave and what they were like as a person. I always found Amelia Pond unappealing she is the only Doctor Who companion that I dislike. Partly this is due to my dislike at Steven Moffats style as Head writer and that when I first watch Season 5 and 6 I was disinterested and confused by the whole Silence thing. One reason for this was Moffat’s habit of breaking causality. One reason why I find her unappealing is that i was 14/15 when I first saw her on DW and at that age I wasn’t attracted to adults and since then I’ve learn’t about her character and I would be very annoyed with the way she behaves if I was Rory. Those shows with Jenna Coleman were all BBC stuff So in mid 19th Century England there were two schools, Eton and Rugby, who both played Football but they both played with different rules. So they and some other schools got together to decide the rules of the game. They eventually made two versions of the game known as Association football, where using your hands is prohibited, and Rugby football, named after the school that played it, where you can use your hands. These commonly referred to as Soccer and Rugby since Soccer is English posh slang for Association. These games spread all over the world thanks to the British Empire. At the same time Soccer Football become popular with the lower class in England who called it Football. In the U.S Rugby Football became popular after they changed all the rules so they called it American Rugby Football which later became known as American Football. In the U.K and the most of the world Association Football became known as Football and Rugby Football became Rugby. The U.S is pretty good at women’s football finishing in the top 3 at all seven world cups two of which they hosted while these girls were growing up so maybe the Americans won’t be terrible. The British girls will probably be terrible since the FA banned women’s football in England in 1921 because it was more popular than men’s Football and they didn’t want women to take the spectators and ticket sales from the men. They got away with it since women had just won the right to vote. They only unbanned it in 1971 and it still isn’t popular with girls in schools in the U.K. But I really like the idea of the girls competing at some sort of game perhaps a card game perhaps they could gamble stuff. FIFA tournaments are Football Tournaments organised by FIFA. So you really couldn’t have a FIFA tournament. Unless Alex bribed FIFA officials to hold a tournament in secret which knowing FIFA might work so I guess you could do it I’m hoping that Ariana never gets an orgasm even when Alex is much more gentle and loving with her. As it would show that no matter what she will never be able to completely trust and relax with him. Also a lot of women don’t reach an orgasm during sex. As for the vote I strongly dislike scene 3. I don’t really see why Alex would reward his guards with his slaves when they already have slaves of their own. It makes sense when he’s punishing the girls. But I think its in Alex’s self interest to limit the contact between the girls and the guards as much as possible so that the guards and girls don’t develop any emotional attachment to each other which may create complications. I really like scene 4 since I’m a massive fan of oral and rim and I would ideally like Ariana, Taylor and scene 4. But it looks like scene 5 is going to win and I would quite like to see Dove Cameron in scene 4. Also I think it would be cool to see Bella try to make up with the master. I will vote for Dove Cameron Bella Thorne Scene 4

Clara is my favourite character in Doctor Who. Most people either love her or hate her which is a good sign of an amazing character. I also really liked Rosie in Dancing on the Edge and I found Lindsay appealing in Waterloo Road. In addition I’ve found Jenna herself reasonably attractive on various interviews. As for Alexina Graham I neither like nor dislike her. If anyone wrote about her and gave her a character I’d probably find her attractive because she’s young and healthy and most importantly i have a good impression of her personality. Its the same reason I find Chloe, Bella, Taylor, Margot and Cara attractive because of how you’ve written them and their young and healthy. I don’t find Felicity appealing at all despite the fact that you have made her a character. The problem with Felicity is the character you’ve given her is contradictory to The Unicorn from Doctor Who whom I found slightly appealing. I only read BDH because it had Emma Watson in. If I was writing it I would have chosen different celebrity's none of whom are over 27 at whatever time its set.

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New Chapter. I’m so happy

The only good bits in 50 shades are the sex scenes. Everything else is just boring filler. The guy is hot rich and a sadist. The girl is innocent at first then loses her innocence and discovers she enjoys being submissive. The books are just guy stalks girl then guy and girl have sex girl is scared and runs from guy. Repeat but every time they have sex introduce new kink. Alex is already a more interesting and better developed character than the guy from 50 shades. And unlike 50 shades BDH actually has subplots and creates conflict between the characters. Although on reflection 50 shades has a much more plausible time-frame and is alot more socially acceptable since the girl is a willing participant. I don’t really remember the language used except that the girl talks about her inner goddess alot. But I don’t think it was as explicit or vulgar as yours. I really like that BDH isn’t repetitive because it goes in all sorts of unexpected directions and every time it does it adds to the story. My favourite Brit is well myself. So Excluding myself, friends, family and acquaintances its Stephen Langton. If I also Exclude dead people its Russell Brand and If I limit it to Sexual appeal it would be Jenna Coleman

A few points This is the best piece of erotic literature I’ve ever read. Far better than 50 shades. Emma being give a phone and the “excellent cell reception remark” felt like an obvious trap to me. The first thing I thought of was that Alex was monitoring the phone and could switch it off at any moment. But then again I thought that because it what I would do in Alex’s position. I find it a bit implausible that Emma didn’t think of this. But her circumstances need to be considered. I would of had Alex arrange an opportunity for Emma to acquire a phone without her knowing it came from him to better ensure that she didn’t work out that Alex was testing her. But that is more difficult to arrange and there’s no guarantee that Emma would notice such an opportunity such as being left in Alex’s room because he had to leave suddenly to deal with some sort of crisis. Emma may or may not find the phone Alex has in his room while Alex is dealing with this FAKE crisis he set up. However I liked how Alex came across as being in love with Emma and appearing to show his complete trust in her when in reality that wasn’t the case. Which wouldn’t have been the case had Alex put in some effort to make it seem like he hadn’t given Emma a phone. Really liked “Bella’s Revenge” especially since i wasn’t expecting it. I felt like this chapter needed a section of Ariana and Dove just to continue the build up of anticipation and suspense. The anticipation died down a little for me. It Probably cold have been paced a little bit better so that we had a section of them in every chapter leading up to Alex’s induction of them into the harem.\ If the vote is still ongoing then i vote for Kendall Jenner and Karen Gillan. Kendall because she’s young and I’d like to read about her far more than any of the others. Karen because she’s a redhead, the harem has too many blondes and because i don’t remember who the other redheads were. I think Bella’s punishment should be pretty severe and be the worst so far imo raping another member of the harem is the worst thing anyone has done (out of the girls) I hope Alex treats Ariana worse that Dove because she resisted. Why is Emma Watson everyone’s favourite Brit? She’s not mine.