mastershakeme

Idk I never thought of Rambo as a sex object... I think I may re-watch one of those movies now lol. That was a nice little deal for whoever it was meant for...ok! I'm being weird!

I was just in a conversation on including hints for the reader... So I immediately read a story of the mystery/horror genre! Idk, seems like some writers get frustrated with us lowly readers for not noticing hints such as yours. I just love to be surprised thou, and this was another incident... I ENJOYED not being beaten over the head, I took it as I saw it... And got scared of the zombie friends crawling from the water! Lol! *Sigh* I hope I'm not leaving too many reviews..... Sorry

Hey! I'm the author... You may have found it elsewhere but it's back on AFF. Sorry about that! Lol http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108633

:'( thanks...... Lol appreciated. Now I'm all emotional!

Absolutely... I'm really picky about what I read. I tend to pick long stories that have damaged characters, I like to see rememption... So I'm not going to get what I'm looking for in PWP... I think I definitely have a good cast of damaged characters, I strive to get some strong sexual tension started, I can DO THAT. What I'm not sure I can do is live up to the expectations my UST put forth.

Don't say that! We're all feeling like failures here! You ain't alone!

I'm embarrassed! I think your a walking Australian fantasy now! Be still my heart!

Yeah, you can’t pick and choose your readers. Some will be scholars (i’m sure :-P) and others will be a little less perceptive… Like me for instance! I watch a movie with family and I’m completely confused as to what’s happening and I’m on the edge of my seat… and then the person beside me ruins everything for me because they’re sitting over there pondering over the clues and they already solved the whole plot. It's ok, I know you put the effort into the clues, but forcing people to look for them won’t help. at least i don't think so, but it’s just my opinion. Some people like to go back and read again even! Because they missed the clues the first time! Haha! Idk

I already know how you feel about my sex scenes I’m on here looking for help, kay! But I give you props for writing about things you find unpleasant. There are scenes I want to skip, but I think there can be something gained for writing topics out of your comfort zone. I had a 14 year get gangbanged once. OK! I don’t remember if it was any good. OMG I’M NOT GOING TO LOOK! hahaaaa

That’s extremely interesting… your POV… I was just thinking recently that I need some serious help with my sex scenes… and HOW EMBARRASSING! I’m a female who sleeps with males! Why and how do I think I can write M/M no problem? Well, the only reason I thought I could is because I’ve seen other females in the past BLOW me away with their M/M sex scenes (at least I think they were female ) I’m interested in males, i like their parts, but weirdly enough, if I’m just looking to get off, I head to asstr.org and read either M/F or F/F. But romance? idk, i think it’s cuter to watch a M/M couple try to figure it out. I too want to get my readers off, and honestly, I don’t think I am. They like the characters, they mention them. The plot? Its keeping them interested. But no mentions to the sex! Lol! THAT’S BECAUSE IT SUUUUCKS!

Beautiful… What’s great about your advice is that it's so true and RELATABLE. Me and my neighbor IRL are bitter enemies because we run into each other in the parking lot all the time. She is my villain and I am hers! Maybe this is the writer in me, but I’ve always been curious about this neighbor of mine. Because you're right, she’s a protagonist in her own weird ass story. Shit, I know my story is pretty crazy lol. On another note, do you think it's ok to have a stereotypical antagonist? I’m not looking for an excuse, I’m just wondering since you asked about the purpose of the character, if how you can construct your bad guys depending on usage. I suppose you can, and I’m answering my own damned question! There can be more than one bad guy, it can just be the dick waiter who spills coffee on the main character, or you could be talking about the guy who’s plotting to rule the universe! Ok, well, thanks for that little tidbit of advise. I think that’ll be easy to store in my back pocket and take it along with me I like simple and sweet. easy to repeat!

I hate to say it, but I have yet to add complexity to my antagonists! Since my stories are so main character driven, it’s them who have the deep personalities and complexity (sometimes to the point where they become the a little hard to sympathize with) Pretty much everyone else is… a stereotype. Fudge, look I’m admitting to it! Enough is enough! No more of this!

That’s a great point! I really had to go back and do some explaining… why is this guy acting like this… I just thought it would be obvious but nope. I wasn’t communicating effectively with the reader. Interesting… deus ex to get into trouble that’s hilar!!!

@Tcr My problem is plotting things out… I don’t like to plot too far ahead because honestly it runs the fun for me. I’m SUPER nervous of using deus ex and guess what! You just taught me something new! I didn’t know what that meant until today! I just thought it was labeled CHEATING! lol I’m sorry, I’m going to go now

This whole topic is hysterical! I keep thinking I’m writing these amazing sex scenes and then I go back and I’m like ‘I actually think that would hurt!!! That wouldn’t even feel good!’ Omg! Half the time I feel naughty writing all this balls-to-the-wall sex, but it sorta kinda gets me in character and even though I’m blushing at first I usually end up throwing dirty words around like no-ones business. I’m going to try using some of these helpful words next time lol!!!

I wish i would have talked to you about this in more depth… I solely blamed myself and ran off site crying, deleting everything in my wake! I’m just playing it off like it’s cool, but it wasn’t lol!!! it’s only cuz you and @Tcr and @sweetmamajama held my hand and rubbed my back and told me it was going to be ok that I’m back trying again!!! We can’t let people affect us this negatively (or at least I shouldn’t, jesus) Anyways, as always, it’s good to know I’m not alone.

I checked one of your stories out, I won’t say which one because I’m embarrassed lol. I don’t read M/F but… you write a good sex scene sir! I’m not new to AFF, but I also have never been a large contributor… I’m glad i saw this topic because that’s why I’m here on the forums... A few months back I too posted a story which I felt was one of my best works. The old ones had maybe 100 comments each, I was so sure I wouldn’t have an issue and I’d get some feedback, but 2 comments…. lol. It really scared me and made me doubt myself. I did a lot of editing and I’m back to post again, but since that happened to me, I’m seeing how much of an affect I can have on my fellow writers. We can always offer each other encouragement. We can show each other support. We can really make someone’s day by leaving them a simple message. I feel VERY socially awkward, but I’m here to give support. Because like all humans, I need a little support too :-P I’m going back to leave you a comment, Melrick Nice to meet you!