Saint_Wanker_Kris

Edward_or_Ford 2015-05-08 id # 3000070498 Thought I'd return the favor for your great review of my story. :-) A very imaginative plot you're doing here, a clever way of getting the characters into a sexual situation that makes sense within the confines of the characters of the show, and the universe that they reside in. I respect the creativity, and that you are able to compose this in a language that you are not native in. Your prose is really quite good. And, yet, like you with mine, I too will probably not complete your story. You couldn't stomach the angst (which has barely started, BTW) of my story, and that's perfectly fair. For me, the ages of the characters (Millie's in particular) is my squick. I really can't enjoy reading it when I picture them, even when "transformed" as in your plotline. But nonetheless, my personal taste takes nothing away from what is a well-told story. I hope you continue it to its conclusion, I'm sure it will be great. (Five-plus rating added) Edward_or_Ford Good lord man, you didn't needed to do that! But the thought and the effort is appreciated, thank you for your attempt, even when it's obvious that what I'm writing isn't up to your tastes. (I of all people, understand that I'm writing on a quite squeaky theme). Originally, I was planning on lifting their ages, but it didn't fit. And it made the characters look like they hasn't grown up at all. Especially the pre-teens who would then be obviously teens, but I felt that it was quite a lot of work for an story that was supposed to be only ten chapters long. So I kept the original ages... In fact, many of the sexual scenes have many instances of my own experiences at that age, (used to be a nightmare as a child... a quite precocious and quite cheeky kid, if my parents are to be believed). Don't have a sister, but had lots of cousins, and adults tended to leave us alone for quite too much, and before they knew it, we were doing things that we weren't supposed to do. Right now. Also got caught a lot, which was a painful experience too... I certainly don't mind that you don't like it, I tolerate the use of such young characters on cartoons, as they're cartoons and no one is actually damaged in the process... But I downright fight against it on real life. In fact, I'm quite old fashioned when my niece is involved... which I'm also quite aware makes me an hypocrite, as I'm not willing to let her do what I did... I just simply can't. I'm probably willing to give your story another chance, but for that to happen you need to end it first. I'm sadly, living on a country were Angst is a day to day thing, were you can't simply walk on the streets without fearing being assaulted or killed. So... I usually try to evade Angst nowadays, as I can't stand it... and how close and true you had matched their feelings and downfall has unblocked my own heartaches at that age with my cousins, as I was utterly in love with some of them during my teenage days. So yeah, I want to do the cheap thing and read the ending to know what's going to happen, how is going to end to make the angst at least tolerable. Still, thank you very much for your honesty. And it was good that you stopped reading, as Millie and Phoebe would later make more reappearances, I could have done it without them, as there are quite a great deal of teenagers such as Fiona and the others girls of the series, but well... I felt it dumb to not include them based on the plot I was using. Still... thank you very much for your honesty.