KragonTsal

Oh, yeah one more thing. Kayla and Tara spent an awful lot of time in 'discussion' the day befoe. Most girl friends would not offer him the three way out of the goodness of thier hearts but a lot would if more than 'talk' had been part of that discussion.
AND to the person saying a yes vote means teen aged boy. I am male but almost fifty. I would say jack would go through with it in the state he is in mearly because he is confused and has one other compelling factor. Did you know most people who see death get turned on. This is not 'Sick' it is a natural reaction to death. We have an instinct to make new life in the face of death so please do not say anything about the suicide being a reason not to do it. It would in the real world push him into doing it more often then provide him an excuse for not.

So I got two things to say:
#1: I want to give a shout out to jennatalia for pointing out a mistake I made
Max took a deep breathe to collect himself before continuing, "We'll ride the spiders in and hit the complex just before daybreak, the flyers and stealth drones will proceed us by five minutes: Amy and Nadi, you'll position yourselves here as over-watch; Alice and Amy will be here and make their way to the garage to steal the snow cats
Did you by any chance mean Becca and Nadi take the over watch position?
She(?) is correct and I have fixed it in my saved copy and I'll edit the posted copy when I get a chance. I really appreciate when people point out things like this, it's hard for authors to catch these kind of mistakes because we know what we wanted to write and that's what we see when we give the chapter a quick read over. So I really do appreciate the help, and don't worry about my feelings, I'm married so you can't hurt me
#2 I got a PM about a plot twist I used, specifically having May and Rick get together. I did that because I think I'm gonna have May be more of a mother to Max and sort of step back from being another lover. The author of the PM then finished the note by saying they didn't know why they had bothered because I never listen to those sort of comments any way. Well that's not true, there have been many plot twist that either came about because of reader comments or were abandoned. Remember when the tied Becca up and every one got together, I had initially planned a free for all but when I hinted at it the response was so universally negative I made it a bet between Amy and Emma and it never became a true orgy. And when hungry ins was upset because I hinted the mothers would both get with rick; well my plan was for Rick to have his own Haden, sort of an older version of Max. But Hindu was right I had large and max's relationship too set at that point for her to jump ship. I had May do it for a specific reason, mainly I think she is going to be more of a mother to him and not just another girl in his bed which is sorta what has happened. So don't hesitate to point out it twists you do t like because if I'm on the fence about something I let the readers comments decide which way I'll go. Now don't get too crazy, it is a sci fi story and I'm keeping Alice as is, I happen to think a lesbian robot is just too cool. So I'd like to thank everyone for there comment, because even when you don't like what I've done with the story it does help me plan out or even abandon of lines. I really think a lot of the comments that some people would say are negative have actually helped make the story as fun as it is.

Thanks for the last note. I was worried that you might be getting teed off at some of our comments. Overall I love your stories, there are just some twists that I do not like. By the way it should be very interesting to see how Marge and May react when Max and Emma announce they are expecting. Can't wait. It's not so much the sex but the heart felt love that I like. A little sex between the different partners is nice once in a while, on a side note I really like the love that seems to still be there between Max, Amy and Alice. Please keep them close to Max and Emma as they were the original group. Again thanks for the good work.