SpartanAlchemist
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I would like to see more detail in the story not about getting to the sex but during it felt like it was over very fast.
Also please make the women in your story physically unique a lot of stories make a lot of women feel the same
other then that this story has a lot of potential and hope you update soon.
Yeah as previously stated when entering into a new genere Im super-critical of myself so I set a date to post in whatever condition its in. Ill most likely go back and rewrite ch1-3 a few months after finishing this story. And I did plan to change the womens figures. I went through about 10 or 15 different bodyslide presets for the bodyslide mod for skyrim looking for what I think would look best for each kunonichi. Hinata was DMRA Enhanced if it matters.
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It would be cool if Naruto was in this story aswell, he wouldn't have to play a big role or anything, but just mention that he exists and is Kushina's son and Natsumi's twin brother.
I did want to throw Naruto in there, and in fact had him as Hokage instead of Natsumi(though not married to HInata), but when I decided to make Natsumi Hokage he would have just felt shoe-horned in for pretty much whatever reason he would show up. So no Naruto showing up in this one.
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Well, the only problem with the new story is that it could do with a bit more build up, and description, but other than that. It's fine. Will next chapter focus on someone different? Possibly a flashback to his arriving in the village?
Either way, feel free to bounce ideas off of me.
Next chapter I had planned as Jokuros entry into Konoha and why he's there featuring Kushina as his partner, despite me ending the chapter with Natsumi showing up at the end. And I did want to put more description into the chapter but I'm so hyper-critical of myself when entering a new genera that I'll just sit and rewrite things for months trying to get it 'perfect'. So I'll set a date up to post and put it up in whatever condition its in.
And thanks for the offer, I'll most likely take you up on that.
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Hmm, am I right in guessing that the Rd-haired anbu is Kushina?
Yeah. I'm not really going for subtle on this one. Maybe my next fix. I'm just feeling stuff out and see what I can do atm.
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Yuuya26 & SolarWolf - Pretty sure I got that. Natsumi is married to Kiba and Hinata to Shino. I changed quite a few things in the story literally hours before posting and missed a few fixes. Sorry bout that.
AFFModerator - Fixed it. Sorry bout that.
JoJo - Yeah I have pretty much all the chapters planned out just not typed. If I get enough feedback for certain characters I'll most likely add them. Natsumi will be the focus of the next chapter, mostly.
Shiroma - Pretty sure you meant 'fic' but thanks. I hadn't planned to but if I get another 2 or 3 people asking I got no problem adding that. Or not. I've already got ideas floating around in my head for that so I might just do it anyways now.
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Hey there, spartan, just create a "Review Reply" thread in the correct subforum (Naurto> het-slash-whatever's appropriate) and there you can discuss the story as much as you want. Guests can post there without needing to sign in. And you're free to put a link to that thread in your story, so people can find it easily.
WillowDarkling, Forum Moderator.
Im gonna be honest with you Willow, I forgot about that on this site.
Ok I have a review post up here where Im going to reply to those who have issues or ideas to better my writing.
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This will be where I reply to reviews and discuss with folks who want to how to improve my 'storytelling'. I wont reply to every review but Ill try and hit at lease a 50% ratio for it.
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Ok I have the first chapter up here on AFF right here check it out and let me know what you think in the story comments since I want to avoid breaking TOS and jacking this post.
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Ive got something that Im almost finished with. Its more along the lines of a MILF Kushina vs Perverted student then one of Borutos friends. It should be done by next week or sooner. It'll be my first attempt at smut rather then an action fic so Im hoping its ot too bad. Ill post a link when I get it up.
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Kay gimme a couple weeks to get it out.
No rush. Id rather you take a while and get something good then you rush something out and it being meh.
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Hmmm, might be able to give it a try. Was already working on a RA2 Tanya story.
Im gonna be honest with ya, I completely forgot about this one but still, please be sure to post a link to your work when its done.
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So I finally finished chapter one and have started the second, and final, chapter. It'll most likely take me another month or so and as I said previously I'll be posting the whole thing at one time.
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Ok, so I've decided to finally give writing porn a try rather then just throwing out requests. Its going to be a combo of the School years(voldemort) scenario and the Malfoy Affair here with both Hope and Lily being seduced by Malfoy. It will most likely be a 3-shot at best and while most likely not a masterpiece Ill certainly give it my best shot. It'll probably take me a month or so to get it posted as I want to just get it all posted at the same time so be patient. I'll keep it posted as to how its coming along so please don't ask every 2 days how its coming as that annoys the hell out of me and I'm never then one on the receiving end of that question.
Also, I really have no knowledge of what a lot of the abbreviations for stuff are so if someone could point me in the right direction that would be appreciated.
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Thanks for trying. Enjoy your weekend if at all possible.
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I missed an r in interrogation. does that matter?
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I only remember the name of the story. Not the author. but i do have the old link, which I really shoulda posted now that I think about it.
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So no one knows where this story went/is?
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In it jiraiya gets caught by anko and kurenai peeping on them in the hotspring and, because hentai, they end up having sex. Anko is all for it while kurenai is reluctant because shes with asuma.
If somekne could help me out that would be appreciated.
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I was looking for it earlier this week and cant seem to find it. Does anyone know if it was taken down or if the author moved it somewhere?
Just in case its asked, it starts off with Fem Shep interrogating Elias Kelam in ME2 and quickly leads to sex, there was a second chapter but Im kinda fuzzy on what happened in it.
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I will post a link when it done he made a story with teddy have sex with Ginny and lily
So his next story will be the tonks x dudley one? Dont get me wrong I like parts of BtP, really only about the first half, I was just lookin forward to the TxD.
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I know someone that writing a Dudley have sex with tonks harry wife I Will post a link when he finished with it
Sweet. I cant wait to see that. Let them know they have at least one person looking forward to that.
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Well I definitely want to take this challenge, though I had a different idea for how to go about it. Don't worry though, it includes all of your requirements: hung draco, stacked Hope, sub Hope, lots-of-cum draco, dirty talk, public sex, rough sex, Hope cheating on boyfriend/husband.
Just...I'm not completely following any of your ideas on here. XD
Basically, the idea is that Fem! Harry is married to Ron Weasley. Unfortunately, Ron isn't exactly packing heat, nor does he seem to know how to use what he's got. So Fem Harry (Hope) is quite frustrated. Then a Magical conference is being called and England has to send their Ambassador, Draco Malfoy there to represent them, of course who would be a better bodyguard than THE Hope Potter? So sexually frustrated Hope, who has never experienced an orgasm (by Ron anyway, seeing as Toys don't count...and boy has she used those toys) is tempted by her old schoolyard rival. Of course, Draco uses her obvious frustration against her and well I'm sure you can guess where it goes from here.
I just want to run this idea by you and see if you would be interested in accepting it as an answer to your challenge, since I've already started working it on it as I type this. XD Just let me know!
That sounds awesome red. I look forward to you posting uour story.
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has some start write this yet
Not that ive been made aware of.
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will ginny be harry wife
I generally leave relationship pairings up top the author(unless they request specifics) since I know not everyone likes the same ones that I do.
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Ok so my muse has gone and left me for another writer...hopefully not for a hipster writing poetry, so I cant quite roll out ch2. I’m gonna work on some of the other stories and hope that gets things moving again.