reves_damour

The most important questions for a sexual story are going to revolve around his sex life. Do girls (or guys or beats or robots or whatever he's after) just fall for him on mere sight, or is he considered to be a rather average or even ugly person. Does he know how to go after partners better than a seasoned prostitute, or can he barely manage the social negotiations to playing a game of tag (the latter being much more typical for an average 4 year old, no less one who's had little social contact). The character, like most, does have potential, but you're going to have to flesh him out a little more, especially in the personality / social intelligence aspects. If he's not going to be a bumbling pre-kindergartener (and a pretty funny looking one having a 16-yo body) on the social IQ scale, that should be explained too. Personally, I would drop the accelerated aging part and just make him a 16-yo person unless you plan to make his accelerated growth a central part of the story.

It's hard to find a good balance. It's abusable both ways, as bad reviewers can leave malicious or nasty reviews and bad authors can remove reviews inappropriately. Personally, I think the author should come first, since they've invested a lot into it and reviews are mainly a tool to communicate with the author, and just secondarily with the public. The best way to let the public know if you liked or didn't like a story is to vote it up or down. Ratings are anonymous, not deletable, and visible in the listings.

I'm more interested in how accurately the words describe the situation than in what words are used. A description of a '15-inch penis' can be perfectly okay in a story about dinosaur sex, it's really stretching it if they're human adults, and it just isn't imaginable when they're minors (and yes, I have seen stories of the last category). People really should learn basic anatomy. A six inch penis is pretty decently sized for an adult, especially considering the size of what it needs to fit into. The aforementioned 'fuzzy clam' meaning vagina is pretty good example of bad use of non-concrete language. The author was probably combining the tightness of a clam and the pubic hair, but it came off to me and the previous poster as a clam (the bivalve) with hair on/in it. A good description or descriptive word either has only one reasonable way of being interpreted, or is a double entendre. Units of measure can be very good in that they can be far more precise than descriptives (though I would stay away from dick measurements - it's way overused). The problem is that preciseness puts an additional burden on the author. Exaggeration with units is usually not okay (unless _so_ farfetched as to be obvious, eg., "I'm so hungry I could eat an elephant."). On the other hand, a good measurement can be very useful. "They hiked 15 kilometres" or "they hiked until midday" will give the reader a better idea of how much effort was involved than "they hiked a long time" or "they hiked and were tired." Just be careful that the numbers you choose make sense and that they convey what you want to mean. If a character in your story is described as being 8ft6in, then you're going to need to be very careful in what sex acts they partake in. Some of them might be very awkward, especially if the woman is 4ft3in (half the height and 1/8th the weight assuming equal proportions). Likewise, that guy with the 21-inch dick (probably the longest length I've ever seen in an actual story) is going to have some serious fainting issues trying to supply enough blood to fill it (the volume is comparable to the blood in an average body), and I sure hope that the woman has a vagina extending well into her chest cavity (or the guy a very accomodating large intestine).