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LOL, are you kidding? I am the QUEEN of rambling. I don't mind it
Jason Issacs is another Heartthrob of mine from way back. Even before he did the Patriot in 2000 (my god, has it been ten years already?), hence the reason I've written a couple of Tavington Fan Fictions LOL and the Hook one. British Actors always appeal to me for some reason. Especially the ones who are typed as Villains. Paul Bettany wasn't a favorite of mine until he played Bill in "Fire Wall". Talk about a scary S.O.B!!
It does get hard sometimes though writing about people who are English or live in England. I'm a southern California girl myself, and it's hard to write using their phrases and slang properly to keep the accent intact.
~Marian~ AKA The Blackadder
Haha! Phew, once I get started on movies and the like, its hard to shut me up easily
I love Jason Isaacs, such a frigging good actor. Dragonheart is a bad guy comical part, but funny as when he loses his pants during the "dragon attack", funniest scene ever! Haha.
Yeah, it shockingly has been, dang even I can't believe its been ten years!
Ah Hook, he did that part well.
Love him as Lucius Malfoy though, just the air about him makes ya go, S.O.B to the core.
I have never seen Fire Wall- adds that to list of movies to hire this weekend haha!
Paul's best role is in Legion! God that movie is awesome in so many ways, especially with the take on the angels.
I'm Australian...
Haha! Its way hard to write in English or live in England cause we're like polar opposites to each other where I live. I know nothing or phrases or English slang so don't feel so bad
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Do you think that Characters played by actors who are basically type cast are easier to write about because there are other places you can pull from to help develop your characters story?
Yes.
Hands down.
Haha.
When typecast its easier to just imagine that one side of the actor; especially the villain typecasts. Like Mark Strong or Jason Isaacs, even Dominic West (300, Centurion, etc) to an extent because all we ever see is their nasty side and its what obviously appeals, if you're writing a fanfic about the character they're playing, to you.
It also, I think, goes hand in hand with how well they do their job as a villain. I don't think Tim Curry would've sold being a baddie in Three Musketeers if it weren't for how damn convincing he is when acting.
I so hope that made sense, sorry if it didn't, movies and I = tongue-tied long rambles. Haha!
DJ
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JayDee: Lol! Too right they could field their own soccer team.
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Shadow Knight:
They're my best OCs I've written into a fandom before. I do? Yes! Haha. Don't need to watch the movie haha, this takes place months before the movie occurs I'm glad you enjoyed the scene, it came to me when I read what cornucopia meant. Yeah I'm not, I generally write over 1,000 words, I normally dislike anything under but... This is a good way to practice getting into writing such short things
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Just wanted to reply to these cause you all took the time to leave 'em so I can definitely take the time to reply ^.^
pittwitch: Thank you
Apollo: I never know when its just enough but not too much and I didn't want to cut it off because of the 1,000 word limit, I just managed to keep it under it, haha! Glad ya liked it.
Fairy Slayer: Well I'm glad that came across right.
I actually read that part and went does it need to be or doesn't it but I guess I forget to change it, haha, blame that on an 11pm post with little sleep the previous night.
I'll fix up that spelling mistake too.
Sophia is from the year 1887 Romania with little to no clue as to what most things in the year 467 are or represent so it was funny as for me cause she can be the total clueless at points but not seem dumb for it
kisakimiko: Haha, these are just my OCs in the King Arthur fandom. 11 babies and Bors still hasn't married Vanora... running joke in the movie that I couldn't resist bringing up when it came to talk of babies.
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Pen Name: djackgirl
Story link: Horn of Fertility
Type of fic: FlashFic
Rating: Adult +
Fandom: Movies > G-L > King Arthur
Pairing: Sophia/Agravaine
Warnings: ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, Rom, H/J, M/F, OC
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Haha, I love Iron Man, Robert Downey Jr. did such a good job as him. Number two wasn't so great but I liked it cause Mickey Rourke was Whiplash ^.^ I'll definitely check out the fic when you put it up.
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Here are a few:
Honey
Babe
Darlin'
Sexy
Cupcake
Honeybunch
Doll
Pookie
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NOTE: I do not own any of the music, videos and or things shown in the AMVs, I have merely edited them for fun and no profit is being made out of these, I just like being creative.
For The Silver Lining:
Whispers In The Dark (Lancelot/Sophia)
Love the Fall (Agravaine/Sophia)
For other King Arthur fiction:
For Wrestling fiction:
I'm always working on some videos. At the moment doing a request for a friend, making a ton of Lord of the Rings ones, and am always happy to take requests
Hope you enjoy.
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Fairy you aren't long winded at all, its betas like you that are what aspiring writers need.
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She lied about her age being 36 as that's her Transformers character's age and she is crazy. She even had a ED page filled with her lies and thefts of other people's photos and other stuff. Go here to see the stuff that is spoken about her: Mrs. Optimus Prime's ED Page.
And there are other people on DeviantART who has encountered her craziness.
TRMOP as everyone calls her, her stories are rank beyond belief. No beta reader in their right mind would really help her as she would rather just copy and paste someone else's story into her story and claim it as hers.
Beth
She is psychotic even more so than ones I've seen before... damn creepy.
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Her profile says 36? Bahaha and she doesn't sound mature at all by her profile. I get the impression of- crazy lady, crazy lady behind a keyboard. See MimiFern (may as well name her) actually posted the first chapter, sent it to me, deleted the story, then reposted, then deleted and then reposted again after I'd finally gotten to beta it but she didn't actually take in anything into account only asked to use lines I'd used in the beta version to show her where to go from wrong to right.
I saw the review, good on ya for doing it on the public review board which they actually can't delete without reporting them for a good reason.
It also points to the fact that I was LUCKY in the authors who chose to work with me. I was upfront and honest with what I could do and was willing to do as a beta reader, they returned the favor in telling me what they needed from a beta in the first place.I had all of the above save for the last part as she didn't actually tell me what she needed from me and even when I asked it was, "just don't get too technical"... All I did was tell her she needed depth in her characters that just because Stephanie has written them one way does not mean you don't explore them and when its an AU reality story, that strongly applies.
I would give example of a page to the person I'm betaing for and tell them what I will be expecting from them as I will want to see the edits after I did the first edit as most people end up adding more to the chapter and I edit that before sending it back to them. Most of the time, I get it at least three times before it is posted online.I beta read the chapters once and never got them sent back to see how she had improved them.
This here is an excerpt of how I tried to help her capture things right:
First hers:
I can’t believe I was so careless as to actually fall into the trap of that revolting pig of a man.
I had been raised better and warned all my life to never converse with strangers let alone walk around in the dark with them. And what do I do the first time I am alone? Find one to kidnap me!
I was so incredibly incensed and angered at my stupidity and ignorance that before I knew it I was stomping my way to the immense wooden door, and pounding upon it with all I had.
After about 7 minutes of this I realized nobody was coming to my rescue and I figured I should evaluate the door for weakness.
And here is my view on where to go right:
(Try and capture a panic. Make a few short but strong, panic mood sentences and try to capture the imagery and atmosphere. Remember 1st person requires a lot of detail because it is coming from the character directly. You want a reader drawn in and made to feel like they are there. And remember the time period you're writing in don't make them act like modern day people would to such things.)
This was not happening.
This couldn't be happening.
It just couldn't!
{Sense the urgency and panic by just three little lines}
But no matter what I did I still knew that I was locked in a strange mans rooms, with no chance of escape.
I felt ridiculous that I had so easily believed and fallen into such a now blatant trap. He had been smooth and calm. Approaching me just like a gentleman would. No man out that late at night would ever be of a gentlemanly nature.
My father raised me better than this. How many times had I heard him tell me not to talk to strangers?
I didn't even realize that I wasn't safe with this man. I was lost, and just needed a way home.
I didn't even get to explain most of what I was trying to teach her in the comparison chapter because she told me not to get overly detailed... She did need the help, no?
I don't know I think that here, Wrestling fandom and the King Arthur fandom is the best place to be, no more Twilight tweenies for sure.
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Thank you, now I can post it up was a little worried that putting a disclaimer up on the chapter wouldn't be right.
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Actually being asked to trial run with an author isn't what would insult but more so they want to "test" us as though they don't take what we have put up seriously, even just a small piece of their work or chapter, actually- I seriously think that is a great idea- that way the beta sees what they will have to work with and the author sees how the beta is going to be. But to say that it was someone else's idea to test out the beta would worry me about how mature the author themselves are.
Its like going for a job almost, you want to sound like you actually are mature and can handle the beta taking your story and showing you where to improve- the beta doesn't need to waste time on an author who doesn't care what they have to say- that is what irked me about her more than anything.
That was a very good example actually of a good experience beta-ing and that the author actually took the advice and did try to improve the story- it shows a sense of not only commitment to the story but also to wanting to improve his skill of writing, he can learn not to write so much but reduced it down and still have it make sense.
*Must go and look at PerfectImagination* Haha, I seriously am learning more and more each day.
@Shadowknight I actually agree with you there, as I said above it shows he wanted to improve but I got the bad luck of the draw in having a new writer who didn't want to improve but, as my friend said, use me as a ghostwriter by her definition.
Haha, I am the last person in the world to want praise, for basically anything, I look at my work and still cringe to high heaven at how bad it is compared to how good it could be. I'm way better than I use to be, the girl was the same as I was in the beginning and I recognized that which is probably why I was so fine with beta reading for her at first as I knew the heat I took at the time was immense for the fandoms I was in but hey I've grown, one of my betas and I are going through my Lord of the Rings story now -all current ten chapters- and working over it to make it now I have two more years experience under my belt.
I guess the FFnet Twilight tweenies only see more reason to swoon over an over the top love story between Edward and Bella. Haha. Sorry I can be a little blunt at times with my disliking but its honest truth not one reviewer had pointed out that her grammar needed more work and more time, there was no character development (even after I spent three hours writing out what she could do to draw the reader into the characters) it was just bam this, this and this happens all so quickly and under 1,500 words and people love it. I don't get it... If they love a basic 900 word chapter with little well depth and review so much junk how come the actual time taken, thought out stories are ignored most of the time?
DJ
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If I am posting a wrestling fanfic do I name all the superstars seen as there is quite a lot throughout the fic and they would all fit on the disclaimer?
I wanted to ask before posting it up.
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Test for beta readers? What the... Yes I would be pissed to. I'm glad that this has brought people into sharing bad experiences with some painful authors.
She sounded like she wasn't very mature.
See this is the problem, the author thinks that when we critic harshly we are being mean or unfair, I don't understand it- they want help but then they just ignore it all.
It doesn't like the story would be much good if she went and did that.
I am not gonna beta for a while I decided, or at least until I have more time and the author is worthwhile betaing for.
DJ
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I love my three betas (two for Lord of the Rings and one for my King Arthur newbies coming), they are wonderful and I was trying to be how they are when talking to me, they keep in touch and ask me this and that so they know where I'm going with something.
She didn't answer my questions when I did that
I've reported her.
Had to because she replied to my message and said she would take it down but instead she left it up and just removed the underlining and put it all in bold text.
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Haha! Well I'm glad they did help, even if only in little sporadic moments, they are helpful remedies at times.
Yeah I get distracted by movies all the time, if you have a tv show that you like say like Simpsons or Family Guy, Merlin or True Blood try them. I once listened to an entire season of Family Guy while writing, I got distracted but not as much as when I put a movie on
I'm glad the second one worked, it really does help me when I'm in a pickle, even if non-fiction stuff.
DJ
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Not harsh at all, I'm grateful to hear the truth from people, I'm not nearly as experienced as most of the people on here nor am I as old or wise so it does some good to hear wisdom.
I'm not beating myself up over it anymore now that I've cut loose.
Thank you so much, believe me I couldn't have posted this anywhere else and gotten such advice, that's a fact. I am grateful for the help all too, it hasn't soured me but it has definitely opened my eyes. -
Haha, I still felt like it.
Yeah next time I'm not going to just be nice and helpful, I wanna see what they can do before agreeing to help.
I was strict with editing at first and then she didn't like it so I toned it down and did a comparison chapter as I call it, I do it to my own all the time, I write a chapter and then write it again and see what works better, what doesn't, etc, so the comparison chapter was to point out where she needed to work on, like her detailing, I can not stand having to edit just lines of dialogue with little thought and imagery behind them which was originally what I told her she had to work on more than anything and I wanted to show her. I guess I am partly to blame for writing out the chapter, I can admit that openly, but I was trying to help its in my nature. I've always been like it.
People taking advantage of kindness, no wonder why this world is so messed up these days. I just cannot believe that someone would do something like that and not think that the beta is going to check up on how she went with "editing" her version.
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Thanks guys, you honestly have no idea how good it is to know that it wasn't just me assuming things and over reacting. I am going to most definitely beta for others here more so than there I think, if anyone will have me haha.
@Apollo I'm glad of that, I honestly have never heard of someone just using an entire written chapter by the beta as the actual post, I was more shocked that she hadn't bothered to work on it and send me another draft and try and get her into the swing of things so I'm not going through an entire chapter each time and rewriting it because of how cringing it was, I was trying to explain to her that things need to be drawn out but she asked me not to go technical so I complied.
It was a comparing chapter; she reads that one, sees how it could be done and then edits her own to meet that standard or higher. I said it was fine when she asked if she could use a few parts from the first chapter into the final post but not a whole chapter. Guess they take that as free reign to use as much as they want.
Oh well no more rambling on it, today I'm more than likely cutting loose from her gonna tell her to go and find another beta who is highly familiar with the fandom.
And I'm gonna brush up on my beta skills and what I will and will not do now after this experience. Eye opener but I guess its cause I'm too nice *kicks self, be meaner woman*
Thanks so much for not making me feel like the ultimate whiner and pain guys cause I seriously felt like it.
DJ
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I quite literally stand corrected...
I ask this one question is it right for an author to go "don't go over technical with the editing" or too in depth basically to a beta when the person actually does need the over technical stuff in order to help them improve so they have detail, solid characters and a good story.
I ask another question when the beta yields to the authors request and just writes out how the chapter SHOULD look in a rough way is it right for the author to just take the rough edit that the beta has done and just post it AND on top of that not even credit the fact that the chapter posted is actual the edit the beta has done?!
I don't know whether to wait and see if she does it again with the next chapter and take credit for the chapter posted actually being mine or to send her one now asking her why she didn't use my rough edit in order to take a step towards improving the version she originally wrote.
This is ridiculous, first person I help and this is what happens, great way for me to not want to beta more in the future which I wanted to start doing.
DJ
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You're most welcome ^.^
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Its all been sorted out now, thanks gang, this really helped me out, I left pretty much a message that explained that its a tandom operation.
Much appreciated DJ
A Beautiful Lie
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Hey all, well chapters 1 and 2 are up, I'd love some feedback in regards to how it is structure and the flow, etc, etc and whether it is an enjoyable read. It is multi-chaptered and a Scabior-centric story.
Title: A Beautiful Lie
Author: djackgirl
Rating: Adult++
Summary: Lies never turn out well in the end and for Genevieve, lying was her way to survive in the beginning but it could end up her death sentence if she is found out.
Feedback: Greatly welcomed and appreciated, I am new to writing Harry Potter fanfiction.
Fandom: Harry Potter.
URL: http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600094229
Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to read this and go to story
It means a lot to me.
Regards djackgirl