Shehanitan

Hiya guys. I've been inactive for years but I've recently been invigorated and has been writing my first Star Wars fanfiction. I have evolved my writting since I last posted a chapter on AFF and I do spellcheck and I re-read my chapters and try and fix errors that I notice. However I've alos recently gotten trouble with both writing and reading as I throw about letters and I don't always notice it. NEEDED What I need help with is a second pair of eyes that could pick out these errors as well as word use, grammars and just those weird kind of sentences thta happens when you're not a native english speaker. If you like FF8 slash fics you might ahve read my eraly works. Otherwise please check it out to get an Idea what I mean when I say I write explicit slash stories: http://members.adult-fanfiction.org/profile.php?no=1296764479 FANDOM This story is set in the Star Wars world and I've only seen the movies and read one or two series + some reserach into a few aspects but I'm really not as canonwise as some. The story starts somewhere between episode 1 and 2 and probably more during episode 2 timeline. I think it is required that you've seen the movie "Star Wars Episode 1" to truly enjoy and understand the aspects of the fanfiction. WHAT IT'LL BE This will be a highly explicit, lemony slash story with the main pairing being Obi-Wan Kenobi and Darth Maul. It will be a long story but I'm trying to keep the chapters to around 8-10 pages in "Word" font size 12 (about 3250 words) Seeing eth pairing thsi might be concidered in teh gray area of non-con in places. There will also be battling violence and language. If this seems interesting please shout your interest. I will give you chapter 1 and 4 of the story. chapter 1 I've spell checked and re-read and fixed as best as I could. Chapter 4 will be untouched This is to show you what you'll be working with and I'll want to know how you work. I would love it if you just colored or put a * at the places there's an error. I love to learn and if you coudl point out the errors so I can see and learn we will slowly get less errors. Thank you for reading this request and I hope someone will be interested /Shehanitan