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I think I've kind of fallen victim to this (not to toot my own horn). I swear I think the biggest problem is that there's no yaoi in mine. I have a regular reviewer over on FF.net and I've had a couple of other reviews, but I've had something like three or four who just trolled and wanted to tell me how sick I am because I wrote about cousins (Neji/Hinata). Ugh. I'd sure love to understand why that is. I'd like to think that maybe it's because it is good and they can't find anything to complain about? But somehow, I doubt that's the case...

Just FYI, I've completed this, now.

I have a notebook of ideas I keep so that when inspiration like that strike, I can get the things down that are important. If I tried to write more than one story at a time, I think I'd completely lose the thread of the first. In fact, when I did "Hot Springs," I almost didn't get back to "Protector." I'm positive that the ideas I started in "Hot Springs" influenced the direction of my plot in Protector. It would be very easy to move from story to story, never really finishing one. So, I write down notes and set it aside and go back to the one I'm working on.

Not guilty. And one of the few things I *haven't* done... Ever broken someone's nose? (He so totally deserved it!)

^ has a wonderfully twisted sense of humor.

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Hello! I'm Serani, female and old enough to know better than to say. I'm a mom of 3, one of which is a teenage daughter. I'm a network admin who loves to read and write. I recently (well, last six months or so) got into Naruto and InuYasha and a few other anime series. My writing is almost exclusively Het with a bit of yuri thrown in (cause, well, that's me. My husband tells me he thinks he's a VERY lucky man. I"ll take his word for it). I'm also a gamer (though I haven't had a lot of time to play much lately). MMO, for the most part (WoW, EQ2, LOTRO, CoH), but I also like some offline gaming. I absolutely can NOT do FPS, I get motion sick. When I'm not doing all of that, I sew, crochet and make jewelry. Somewhere in there I remember to water my garden and occasionaly cook dinner for my family. Um...that's...about it.

Some of the above annoy the hell out of me: Over-powerful characters, complete lack of research (in anything - I mean, come ON, we have the internet, for crying out loud), bad spelling, bad grammar (how many grammar tutorials/websites are out there?), entire conversations in another language (with no translation), songfic where half the fic is simply the lyrics, and starting a story and not finishing it, and disappearing. All of those annoy me to no end. However, some things I'd love to address myself: Sex involving a minor - first off, the word "minor" is very subjective. Minor according to whom? The US? Canada? Where in the US? Age of consent for sex is different from one state to the next. I was 15 when I had sex the first time, with a man I was very much in love with. I was also mature enough to handle it. That was 21 years ago. Minor in, oh, feudal Japan? In that case "minor" would be...oh.... 10. They married at 13. (And sometimes that was considered old). And a month before a birthday? Is that ONE month REALLY going to make that much difference in their maturity? Being able to handle sex isn't about the number. It's about the maturity. Please. Happy Endings - Now, I have no problem with happy endings. In fact, I rarely read stuff if it's GOING to end badly, and I know that, though if I know it, then I'm less likely to have a problem with it. No, life isn't always happy. But that's why I read. I don't read for reality. If I want reality, I can turn on CNN. If I want reality, I'm not going to read about a completely different world full of ninja who use Chakra to do things that are otherwise impossible. I'm not going to read about a demon who has a good heart, dog ears and loves a human who isn't going to be born for another 500 years. Having a problem with a happy ending just because its happy pisses me off to no end. Killing a character or making them break up and be unhappy for no other reason than happy endings don't exist is just ridiculous. That kind of writing can cause me to not read anything of that authors work ever again. Oh and on verb tenses, Ezriee, you are right on the mark. Present tense also annoys me to no end. It is extremely difficult to write well in present tense. So, honestly, it's best to avoid it altogether. I can understand why someone might want to - the idea of trying to help them experience something first hand, but if the rest of the story is written well, the reader will feel like they're firmly involved, anyway.

1) this thread is great! I'm always afraid of my sex scenes getting stale. 2) I absolutely adore that link. THANK YOU. That said, I've tried to live by this quote by Stephen King: "Any word you have to hunt for in a thesaurus is the wrong word. There are no exceptions to this rule." So, I'll just read through a lot of erotica, the erotic thesaurus and try to remember as much as I can. My contributions: Sex - never underestimate the use of this word. I often think people shy away from its use because that's what they're writing about. However, as a body part in reference to genitalia, it can be very useful without making it sound...corny (i.e. rod, I mean, come ON people!). The other thing I like to remember is that just because it's the technical term for something (i.e., clitoris or labia), doesn't mean it should be avoided. Lastly, one of the things I've learned recently in writing erotica is the use of some words that, previously, always felt rather verboten for me. Dick and cunt are two words that jump out at me. Depending on the mood of the writing, those can both be very useful. So, in summary: Clitoris Cunt Dick Labia Sex (to replace either form of genitalia) (Wow, I swear even now, that still makes me squirm sometimes to use it, at least, outside of the specific situation...)

Title: Protector Author: Serani (me) Rating: Adult+ There is LEMON and plenty of it. Some of it can be rather graphic (though not as bad as my Hot Springs fic). Yuri, but I refuse to write Yaoi. There is violence and some minor language. THIS IS NOT YET COMPLETE! (Though I'm getting there...soon, I hope, I have a ton of other stuff I want to write, too.) Summary: Neji’s always been there for Hinata. His ‘duty’ has always been to protect her…what if she didn’t need protecting anymore? Why was he still there? And why didn’t she want him to go? Fandom: Naruto Pairings: Neji/Hina (obviously), Lee/Ten, Minor Naru/Saku, Ino/Cho, Shika/Tema I absolutely adore feedback! This is my first fanfiction and I would really like to know where I can improve. URL or Site link: Protector Thank you VERY VERY much!! -Serani