Kimba147 Posted August 4, 2009 Report Share Posted August 4, 2009 (edited) I am looking for a beta that is good with descriptions and helping to flesh out my story details a bit...also, I am really bad at catching unnessicary details/sentences that don't flow well, so that would be helpful too.This is my first shot at a smutty fan-fic, and I feel I could use some help conveying emotion...I am horrible with hot sex scenes for example, but I really want to include them in this story.It already has chapters up for editing. The basic story goes: Ed is a gang member, in the up-and-coming State Alchemist gang. He stays in the gang to make money and have protection for his younge brother, Al. He goes to a rich, conservative school, and sticks out because he is different. Roy is the Student Council president with hopes of turning the school around, from a quiet upper-class high school into a powerful contender at the forefront of education. Unfortunately, poor Roy finds himself oogling the most infamous goth ever-Ed. Al is struggling with Ed's gang affiliation because he feels there is a rift growing between him and his brother because of it. EDIT: Beta has been found! These are the main things that we notice right off the bat. There will probably be various pairings and twists for the plots sake later on. Edited August 14, 2009 by Kimba147 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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