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This will be the forum where I thank all the wonderful people of AFF for reviewing my mediocre attempts at writing slash. I'll try and break it down by chapter, but I'm not entirely sure I'll have the brain capacity for it. Either way I will give thanks. Peace out, peeps!

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Katniss Everdeen: I've reviewed alongside you before and I am highly privileged that you've reviewed my story. Thank you so much! Darryl and Riley are two men who are not nice, but as one of my favorite lines from The Mummy goes: "Nasty little men like you always get their comeuppance." Thank you for your encouragement for more!

dazedandconfused: First of all, I've always wanted to say how much I love your name. Whether or not you've intentionally meant to take it from the movie, it's always conjured pleasant memories because I t-totally love that movie!!! Secondly, you're another one I've reviewed alongside before and I am once again highly privileged that you've taken the time to r&r. This is my first story that I've ever let anyone read and coincidentally it's also the most personal. Thank you for seeing Darryl and Riley's actions for what they are: abuse. It comes in so many different insidious avenues that so many are desensitized to it. As for your curiosity: not all forgiveness needs to come from an outside source. Sometimes the hardest journey a person takes it the road to forgive themselves. Yes the time will jump and I promise to try and make sure that it's clear what time period you are reading. Thank you for your support as I weave my tale!

yuurimaoh: I am currently reading your story about Cyrus and Revelin and I absolutely adore your writing so I thank you for your review and please know that I am so flattered beyond belief. Like I said for dazedandconfused: not all forgiveness is needed from someone else. Shame and guilt, while two distinct burdens, both require a forgiveness to your own soul in order to be released (thank you to my therapist for that gem! :) I appreciate your support and your desire to see these two characters and the road they will travel together.

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Katniss Everdeen: Ask and ye shall receive! I think Chapter 3 will answer some questions for you. The present will make a debut later on. Thank you for your review!!

yuurimaoh: I'm happy to fill your literary hunger! The kiss I loved because it was so bittersweet. I am anxious to bring the two together as well, but patience young grasshopper :ph34r: all shall be revealed in due time. Until then I sincerely hope I don't lose your interest. Thank you for your review!

makosira: The night is always darkest before the dawn, but yes you will see how Nathan will always be a "guiding light" for Dylan. But who gets lost and how may surprise you. I loved your review (yes it made sense :think: i think...jk) Thank you for coming back and giving it!

m_kren2: Thank you for the lovin! I promise to keep it coming.

dazedandconfused: You crack me up! :rofl: I highly recommend the movie. It's a slice of 90's heaven! And no worries on your modus operandi; My boss is always making fun of me because I'm so ADD. (SOMETHING SHINY!) Thank you so much for giving me some of your precious lunch time! I am eagerly awaiting their reunion as well. These guys though... they'll be the death of me! There's still more back story to come because there are things that must be revealed, wounds uncovered before the healing can begin. I can't wait to hear back from you and see what you think of the next installment. Peace, love, and chicken grease!

dantae: Many thanks friend! I value your review and will see you in Control!

Lisa: LOL I prefer to think of it as Killing You Softly, Lauren Hill-style. As I mentioned above: The night is darkest before the dawn and to quote the ever eloquent River Tam in Serenity "Things are going to get much, much worse." But no worries, All will be answered soon. I love that you love what you're reading. It gives me great pleasure! Please review again and let me know what you think.

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yuurimaoh: I appreciate you taking the time, but never again review without logging in!! (lol totally jk... or am I?? :shifty: ) If you've ever woken up after a crazy night and realized you just smoked your way through a pack of menthols (after not smoking for like EVER) it's pretty close to the truth. I will say I have way too much fun writing for Kyle and Nathan because I'm just pretty much projecting what the dialogue is for me and my big brothers. I'm happy that it'll keep you entertained! No meeting just yet, but I promise it's coming.

m_kren2: Thank you for you review and the continued loving!

Katniss Everdeen: (THIS GIRL IS ON FIRE!! lol sorry I just always get the urge to sing that song every time I see your name) Aww hugs are always welcomed and appreciated :D Annabelle has been kicked to the curb (that was just so much fun to write) but keep an eye out for Ven as he will make an appearance later on. No diseases though. I love how quick your mind works because once again I say: Ask and ye shall receive! This story will have def have a happy ending, but happiness like all good things takes a lot of work. We aren't there yet, but we're getting there. Thanks for your input and I can't wait to hear what you think!

dazedandconfused: The time line from the beginning in chapter one to present day is 12 years. In present day Dylan is 22 and Nathan is 28. Your questions about the communication and connection between the two will be explained in a later chapter. I like to think that both Nathan and Dylan are smart in their own ways. Nathan has had some life experience and he is highly intelligent, but Dylan's had a rough life and had to learn the hard way about a lot of things. I hope they both make each other proud. LOL I love morning rituals! I have a bad habit of checking my stuff too when I'm waking up and it usually entails me still dressing as I'm walking out the door. Thank god I live kinda surrounded by the woods so the only people I scar are my landlord and his family :flash: Take your time and eat. That's more important than me (plus I ain't goin no where!) But thanks for your dedication. I am to please! As far as the name is concerned: Yes there is a movie called True Grit. The original is done with the great John Wayne and the redux is done with the awesome Jeff Bridges. While I am a fan, it's not necessarily where my name came from. Grit is actually an acronym for where I'm from. It stand for Girl Raised In Texas. As I was born and bred there, I like to refer to myself as a TRUgrit :D

Lisa: LOL I remember hearing something about Miss Hill but that's a funny coincidence! Your questions regarding their communication and such will be explained in future chapters. I hope you'll understand the reasoning behind it all. The town where Nathan works is actually Elmwood Creek, his work is called Bison Valley and the area where Dylan is at in present time is the general area of the Hudson Valley in NY, although if you look closely I will give out some specific landmarks. I hope you like this next chappie!

TO EVERYONE: Please tell me if I'm going to slow for you or I get too wordy. All criticism, nice or not, if rooted in the truth is constructive. Many thanks to my awesome reviewers! You guys are too cool for school!

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Katniss Everdeen: Dun-dun-dun!!! Yes Ven is the long lost brother. And the fact that he slept with Nathan is going to be one of MANY awkward moments as we barrel closer and closer to the reunions. I'm so freaking excited about it, but I'm not sure how often I'm going to be able to update. The wait time might be a little longer, at least with this week since I'm a) working EVERY SINGLE DAY for the next 10 days and b) I also have to find time to move! Busy, busy, busy! Plus I have extra fun make-shifty midweek things planned. :shifty: You'll find out who is older and who is younger later on. I don't want to spoil that bombshell just yet. I will also reply "no comment" on whether or not Darryl dies. Sometimes I don't even know!! LOL People are def jonesing for Nathan and Dylan to meet again and I promise I won't disappoint. Just not yet.... Thank you, girl on fire, for your review!

DAC: I love your reactions! Yes Riley is a Grade-A Douchebag. All things Ven, Dylan, and Nathan will be answered soon young grasshopper. Wait time may be a little longer this next week (refer to my not to Katniss Everdeen....THIS GIRL IS ON FIRE!!!!....) Thank you again for your reviews.

reader1962: I fixed I promise! Thank you for reading!!

yuurimaoh: Yeah... coming home def sucks if the way you left was less than amicable. Which is why I refuse to go back. Me n Texas broke up for a reason!! All things Ven, Dylan, and Nathan will be answered soon. Stick with me I promise (or at the very least I hope) it'll be worth it. Thank you for taking your time to read and review!

Lisa: You rockin chick you can never be a dork! Allow me to say just one thing about the Ven revelation: yes, he really is Dylan's brother, well, half-brother. They are brothas from another motha! Everything else will be answered soon :shifty: Thank you for sending the love out! I try not to include too much country because I don't want to turn people off. But I was practically steeped in country. Among other things. But if you want another really good song to go along with the last chapter check out Solitary Thinkin by LeeAnne Womack. She's got an awesome voice and it's just so country.

In case you guys missed it: I'm working solid for the next 10 days, moving in the next 6, and have make-shifty midweek fun planned as well. If I don't update this week please stick with me and I swear I'll update asap. I love y'all for reading and sticking with these two! Oh and side note: I have had the whole "hey you have a sibling you didn't know about" happen to me when I was 17 (on the edge of 17!! God bless you stevie!) and it was such a surreal experience. So please don't think I just pulled this from left field. A LOT of this story is personal experience. I hope y'all truly understand when I say thank you from the bottom of my heart for reading and enjoying!!

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Hey guys!! I am taking an unsanctioned email break (kinda one of the perks of being in charge... but if you try and quote me I'll deny it like hell!) and in between the travel and move I'm going to need one bourbon, one scotch, and one beer!! Anycrap: I was starting to feel bad at keeping y'all waiting. This draws us closer to the big reunion!!

DAC: Dude that sounds excruciating!! I hate traffic!! They started construction on the state highway that I take like directly into my job and now I have to take some back woods way going like 35 mph and it kills me! But just sitting there... Dear God, just kill me now. But if I was in the 'rents car at least it'd be bearable bc they've got it fully equipped for the grandkids so I would at least get to watch Chicken Little and Shrek as many times as I want. Glad that you're alive!

Yes Brian is a total tool. I hate to say it, but with people like him it's so easy for him to buy his way out of situations. Especially if you're having to work as a waiter or waitress... Most times it's not cause you want to, it's cause you need to. Or at least that was the case when I worked for Brian Green... Fortunately, I shut him down before it went to the level Dylan experienced it, but looking back it very well could have. And you'd be surprised how things like fear and resentment can poison a parent's love and drive them to do unspeakable things.

Lisa: I work in management and I'm currently stealing a long "lunch" break. Shhh... Don't tell anyone! Thanks for wanting to keep up with these wonderful figments of my imagination. Brian Green is not a shout of to the hot Brian Austin Green (as if!) LOL No, there is a real life Brian Green I worked for once who was a complete tool and though (like I mentioned to DAC) he never got that far with me, he could have. I basically described him to a T. He's the only, completely true to life character I have in here. Really, you can't make up pieces of shit like him. I do believe there is a special ring in hell reserved for men like him and Darryl. Somewhere deep deep down in the bowels so all the higher levels can piss on them like they like to piss on others in life.

Katniss Everdeen: LOL!!! First of all: I love your idea!! Smack him down like the hand of God, Girl on Fire! Second: "Workin 9 to 5, what a way to make a living, workin 9 to 5, it's all takin and no givin, It's enough to drive you crazy if you let it!!" Need I say more?? Third: I am in no way in the league of 2rainsong2 and I am beyond flattered that you'd even mix the two of us up. It's like being nominated with Meryl!

yuurimaoh: I agree. My folks did the same thing. I hate being suspicious of people all the time and they're always complaining that I don't "let them in", but it's like, "Really? YOU are gonna act like you don't know why I am the way that I am?? REALLY??" But... what are you gonna do??

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I'm back(ish)! Lol WOW! I am so unbelievably exhausted it's not even funny. To make matters worse (or better, depending on how you look at it) my make shifty fun time got postponed to the night before last night, ended up staying out ALL night, and went to work for an 11 hour work day!! I know, I know I did this to myself... and I'm not gonna lie: It's been a long time since I've had that much fun just hanging out with friends and just enjoying being young, single, and having some cash to burn. I swear I think I drove and walked all over the entire state! IN THE RAIN!! LOL it was a blast, but I am too damn old to do 36 hours with no sleep... And I paid for it. I came home to my new place (which I love!) and slept for 14 hours.

So to my loyal reviewers I can conclusively (and yes exclusively) say that the reunion betwixt Nathan and Dylan will be going down to China Town (hey I was there last night!) in the very next chapter!! I hope it lives up to your expectations. But get ready b/c from there stuff is just gonna keep on rollin' in the deep!

yuurimaoh: Oh it's on and Dylan is going for the ride of his life!

Katniss Everdeen: Thank you! I'm pretty proud of how Dylan handled the sitch w/ Riley too. I actually had it planned differently, but he had def opinions on how it would go down. But his resolve will be tested farther than it is right now. We'll see how it turns out. Darryl is a different person, but maybe not necessarily repentant. He and Riley will get their coming to Jesus meeting though. No doubts about that. Ven... well I'll just let him explain when he shows up. You won't be disappointed though.

m_kren2: thanks for the encouragement!

Anon: :thumbsup:

Lisa: We are reaching close to the point where all the story lines will join up and form one messed up knot. I am so glad u enjoyed this chapter! Dylan def had some strong opinions on how he and Riley's first meeting was gonna go. I can't wait for the next chapter because when the others meet up for the first time... It's gonna be something! I will say this I've been looking for a new place since February so hallelujah!!

wolfluv: I heart Chris Titus! I'm glad though D didn't quite have it as bad as what he went through, but it's horrific and educational in it's own right. Tune into next chappie: Let the epicness begin!

DAC: I will say this Ven hasn't told me yet about his mom. He's a wily one, but God help me I love the guy! At some point after waking up, Darryl was informed Dylan was coming. That's why when Dylan showed up in the room he wasn't surprised. It's coming together!!

Thank you to all my reviewers! You guys freaking rock like no one's business!

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wolfluv: You're wait is over my friend. I hope you enjoy and stay tuned to whether or not Darryl gets a thumbs up or down...

Katniss Everdeen: THIS GIRL IS ON FIRE!!! LOL I had to listen to that song after I read your review. I love it! The whole communication thing is going to be addressed. It all will because let's face there is so much unresolved stuff between these two they won't be able to move forward without doing so.

Side note: In the state of Texas, you can file a lawsuit for sexual misconduct with a minor until the minor reaches the age of 26. Dylan is currently 22. Just something to think about...

In a he said-she said case like this the authorities have a fine line to walk. When the parent of the child involved openly calls the child a liar, even if Dylan had been there, the cops would've sided with Brian. It sucks but that happens all the time.

I hope you enjoy this chapter!!

yuurimaoh: NO GNAWING ON THE COMPUTERS! It gives you cavities! Plus without it how else will we get new updates?? Oh the horror! THE HORROR!! Please, you wait is over.

DAC: So the "prominent figure" was Brian Green (the bastard). And the whole will he give blood or won't he issue will be resolved in a very satisfying manner. Judgement day is at hand!! Darryl has two sons. He is not a virgin. Dylan's virginity... Well just read chapter 9 and I believe your questions will be answered....

LISA!! Back away from the edge!! (of your seat, but still you could skin a knee or something!) lol Trust me friend those questions are floating around Dylan's head too and there will have to be a reckoning on both sides of this fence. And thanks for the heads up about the typo.. I hate that I let that slip, but it'll have to wait til later... or never. Who know's? Stay tuned love!!

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Lisa: Lol I literally got chills when I was writing Nathan's reaction to Riley slapping Dylan. It was phenomenal. Impulsive, rash, but phenomenal nonetheless. It's funny that the reunion between the two was like the second thing I wrote for this story. (The first was the first chapter.) They were the one's who decided it'd happen the way it did. It's their world. I'm just living in it. But I'm glad it made reading the story worth the wait for you. And THANK YOU for letting me know about the whole Ryder/Nick fiasco. I won't lie. I pulled that scene from another story I'd been kicking around. I can neither confirm nor deny the rumors of a moresome.... Just read the new chapter and you might see what I'm talking about. Can you imagine the possibilities??? MWAHAHAHAHA!!

wolfluv: "You're stunned silence is veeery reassuring." (Monsters, Inc.)

KE: FIVE WOW'S?! (Fist pumping) Thank you soooo much!! Things are going to get very twisted and with Darryl's life hanging out there in the balance you can bet Riley's going to hang this over their heads. Messy, messy indeed. Speaking of Ven.... Read the last part of Lisa's response. Can you say complicated?

DAC: I was picking up what you were putting down. No worries there! Ven will start to enter the mix very soon. It's about to get hairy!

Thank you guys again for your continued reviews! They always make me smile and I cannot tell you how much they inspire me!

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wolfluv: DAMN indeed. Lol no need to wait for the movie. Stick around for the story and I'll be sure to let y'all know what happens. I'm half tempted to just lock them all up in a padded room and be done with em' all! I'm glad you enjoyed Ven and Harrison. I wasn't planning on them, but they just seemed to fit. Of course, more smut to follow for them.

DAC: LOL I totally loved Dallas!!! (hello, from Texas myself! It was like mandatory watching!) If it ever comes down to it and they're asking who killed J.R. it was me!!! Because I have so had it up to here with all their insanity! :dualpistols: I do love Ven and Harrison. I can't wait for you guys to find out what happened that night. At this point only Harrison and Ven know, but it's gonna be so awesome when everyone finds out. I am so 'cited!!

KE: This latest chapter in on-going saga of "who can outdo the other in pulling the craziest bullshit" has definitely been causing some sleepless nights but only really because I'm plotting ways to cage them and sell them on the Black Market. :angel: Harrison is def gonna be sexy beyond belief, but he and Ven right now are the only ones who know what happened that night. So stay tuned for those two because they are VIP's.

miles: I was wanting the whole fucked up childhood thing to tie Ven and Dylan together. If that's one thing that a lot of us share is that. As evidenced by my family's insanity (these things are nothing new, just a lot happening at once, usually they can dole it out a little at a time), you just deal with it as it comes.

yuurimaoh: You fucking crack me up!!! I'm glad you got a brief respite before your storm burst. I do hope all is going well or that you are at least surviving!! Seriously did the world just decide to go mad in August?? Trouble do be brewing and it's gonna take a strong will for everyone to get through, but I can tell you now it won't be unscathed. Hope you enjoy the new chapter!

JUST AS A SIDE NOTE: Was anyone else annoyed by my over usage of the word relentless(ly) in the smut chapters?? You guys gotta tell me these things because I feel like I sounded like a total tool. Trust me. I'm not gonna get offended so just let me know!

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yuurimaoh: Lol me too! Well, I don't like them when I'm all in em, but afterwards it always provides a humorous chuckle.

Lisa: Very correct assessment of Ven. He's just as much a victim of his father as Dylan is and you'll see that more when the next reunion that I'm building up to. Actually there are two more reunions: Darryl, Ven, and Dylan and Dylan, Ven, and Nathan. I didn't want people to hate him and I think you'll love him after everyone finds out what happened THAT night. I am addicted to Scrubs and am currently rewatching the series on Netflix. Yeah, Darryl may want to mend fences, but old habits die hard and he never was a father to begin with.

wolfluv: I hope you don't hate me for this next chapter! But don't worry the story isn't over yet and I will give Darryl a chance to redeem himself. How he does is up to him...

reader1962: :) right back at ya! And at the end of chapter ten there was a time jump from the beginning of Ven's shift when Harrison comes in to the end of the shift when he leaves the restaurant with Harrison. I cut out the in between when Harrison explains what happens. I know I'm evil like that. I don't want to share that JUST yet. :devil:

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Girl On Fire aka Katniss Everdeen: Howdy again! I'm gonna give a little bit background on Darryl & Riley soon and then be done with showing them any attention by scheduling their down fall. Cryptic enough for ya??

DAC: Thanks for the sympathy! I def plan on Nathan helping out but I'm excited to see Dylan's transformation as the real victor. His spoils are gonna include a sexy Nathan.

miles: You insightful devil you... Here's an update for ya & I hope that the way the story develops shows that that's the direction I'm heading. Let me know what you think & thanks for the review!

Lisa: MM & I have been battling RL dragons & she set up a hella awesome update. I passed along your greetings and she's back! I'm excited about the surgery as well. Still haven't decided if Darryl lives or dies....

Pummpie: Thank you for the review!! Here's an update for you!! Enjoy... I hope. :)

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Heya TRU! I just thought I'd check out this page before I started on your long-awaited update! :)

I did see MM's update and I think I did a happy jig. lol I mentioned to her that I had asked you to find out about her story, so thank you for passing along my message. :)

Ok, now on to YOUR hella awesome update!!!!

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Heya TRU! I just thought I'd check out this page before I started on your long-awaited update! :)

I did see MM's update and I think I did a happy jig. lol I mentioned to her that I had asked you to find out about her story, so thank you for passing along my message. :)

Ok, now on to YOUR hella awesome update!!!!

So, idiot that I am, I forgot to sign in! lol So this is Lisa, and thanks again for number one: updating, and number two: passing along my message. =)

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