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Haha well I think you got off lucky with only an ungrateful teenager and a 3 hour ride :D !We had a 5 day holiday here,so my aunt thought it'd be a brilliant idea to go up north where the grass is green and the sea is blue etcetera etcetera!:) I'm not really all that fond of there since it's really humid which makes my hair go all fuzzy and annoying and there's always the chance of seeing dead see creatures scattered about the beach...The only consolation were the hot lifeguards...Anyway,I had to tag along 'cause my dad was on-call and my mom had to drive alone.The roads there,although really beautiful,are dangerous and there's almost always some sorta car crash (because people are idiots who think it's okay if you suddenly stopped in the middle of the highway...).It was an effing 10 hours ride and I was paranoidly checking to make sure everyone were wearing their seatbelts (my mom has a tendency to leave it unbuckled) and all the doors were locked,the whole time!:I

Still brewing I see!Wait-did you say betrayal?Sad ending?Wha?????Then no 'and they lived happily ever after's????

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Haha well I think you got off lucky with only an ungrateful teenager and a 3 hour ride :D !We had a 5 day holiday here,so my aunt thought it'd be a brilliant idea to go up north where the grass is green and the sea is blue etcetera etcetera! :) I'm not really all that fond of there since it's really humid which makes my hair go all fuzzy and annoying and there's always the chance of seeing dead see creatures scattered about the beach...The only consolation were the hot lifeguards...Anyway,I had to tag along 'cause my dad was on-call and my mom had to drive alone.The roads there,although really beautiful,are dangerous and there's almost always some sorta car crash (because people are idiots who think it's okay if you suddenly stopped in the middle of the highway...).It was an effing 10 hours ride and I was paranoidly checking to make sure everyone were wearing their seatbelts (my mom has a tendency to leave it unbuckled) and all the doors were locked,the whole time!:I

Still brewing I see!Wait-did you say betrayal?Sad ending?Wha?????Then no 'and they lived happily ever after's????

lol NOOO betrayal, then sappy happiness :P I gots to have mein mean nature stuffed in there somewherez.

10 effing hours???? 10 hrs????? For crying out loud, that defeats the purpose of a vacation. Well, I guess my life is not so very bad. Except for the fact that I had to get up today at 6am to water that nasty lawn. I HATE watering the lawn. I wish I had automatic sprinklers...

I hate long car rides if I'm not the one driving. It takes 4 hours to get to a beach here - over the river and through the woods, so to speak. Except you have to get over a mountain pass of 4000 feet. It's a nice drive, some lovely waterfalls. It's bad during forest fire season (August). Then you can't see anything on the "dry side", that is, my side. The only other near-ish water is Crater Lake, an old glacier, which you can't actually step inside of as its down a steep grade, and is so deep I think there's dinosaurs down there. Other than that, a electricity dam - made artificial lake made from the confluence of 3 rivers. It's pretty, lots of palisade lava cliffs. It's awesome if you have a boat. My friend has a sailboat that she took me on last summer, it was so much fun. That's only like...45 or 30 min away.

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kellankyle (Email Hidden) 2013-06-08 id # 3000207891 I really enjoyed Chapter 9...especially the reference to Neko (that damn dog) LOL.

Thank you for your update! I really like your honesty (it's not always easy). Keep up the great work. I can relate. :)

@kellankyle: OMFG I'm so happy you're still reading. I was such an ass. It always happens when I'm manic, I make a decision w/o thinking it out clearly, then really regret it later. Case in point: changing my college major because the dean said I was "too emotional". What a bitch.

Anyways...

I can't say I'm sorry enough. But I appreciate that you still are either brave or nice enough to keep reading this silly story. And I'm glad you liked this chapter, I think it sucked. Like, really sucked balls. Which is why I'm trying to be more careful with this next chapter.

I know, right? That stupid, stupid dog. At some point, I had to stop reading a section of Neko (I'm such a hypocrite) b/c it was too hardcore. I picked up at the romantic bit later when he's saved. :blush: Same thing with Bloodraven. I skipped the torture scene (really, PL Nunn, did you have to use birds to pick @ his body?? And then I was pissed that the MC had sex w/ another dude. Like, wtf? But he was a little out of his gourd so I can forgive him.)

To hear you say I do "great work" is nice...but I don't believe you. I think all my stories suck. They're just not...perfect enough. Like, they could alway be better. ARGH. I guess it's like Fico with his level of attractiveness. We're very similar in many ways. The family thing, the being raised Catholic thing, the episode where your parents don't talk to you 'cuz you violated their sociosexual mores, the school bit (although I took calc and physics in college). Actually, I've also had guys say I was pretty/cute and totally refused to believe them. And I dated a guy who basically convinced me to date him even though I wasn't that into him. That ended horribly - I gave up and told him he was crap in bed (the honest to god truth!!) and that offended his sense of masculinity. Whatever. Dude, you can take you pathetic c**k and use it on some other unsuspecting girl who is charmed by your exotic accent and large amount of $$$. I've been told to write what you know, and baby do I know about heartbreak, useless bfs, and dubious consent.

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Wait, make that two dudes that convinced me to date them. One from Bahrain, another from India. They both thought I was cute because a) I'm American, b) the girls where they live have darker skin, and their culture values light skin in terms of beauty, and c) I dance well. Also, I have this inner desire to "please" a man, to cook him things and "take care" of him. I'm trying to work on that. I haven't dated in several years b/c of my tendency to be a doormat. I guess that's in Fico's character too. Latinos value lighter skin as a mark of beauty. Case in point: all the chicks on Telemundo. If you look closely, the ones with the hot dude, the MCs, look European/Spanish. The maids look like indios, that is, darker skin.

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Well that's a relief to hear...I don't care (much-as I tend to cry and get emotional over the stupidest things in stories,things that I don't give two f**ks about in real life!:D) about what happens to characters in the plot process as long as the story has a happy ending!

Well...actually,the 10 hours ride was because we took the longer,yet safer,road.We basically went around the mountain that separates our side from that side.This one goes through meadows and stuff while the usual road goes through the mountain and its forests.(It's really amazing how much a mountain can change two near places,right?There're only scattered pine trees this side of the mountain but there's a tunel that once you pass it,you go:"Eldorado...."!There are super green jungles all around you and there's a huge climatic change...)If you take the mountain road and the traffic was light (which is really unlikely...),it'll take about 2-3 hours to get there;after all it's only about 190-200 kms away from where we live.(according to daddy!)

Wow I love mysterious,deep lakes!Thou never been to one...:(.They are like undetected jungles.All sorts of mysterious and maybe magical creatures can live there and you'd never know

Oh god!yessss!Tomorrow is the last day of exams!For one freaking month I've been doing this!(As I write this I'm slowly dying...)Then I'll be able to send your story to my reader and truly enjoy it to full capacity!

The Last Exam is English!So tell me honestly,from a scale of 1 to 10,1 being horrible and 10 being phenomenally awful bordering on unreadable,where my grammar scores?

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Well that's a relief to hear...I don't care (much-as I tend to cry and get emotional over the stupidest things in stories,things that I don't give two f**ks about in real life! :D) about what happens to characters in the plot process as long as the story has a happy ending!

Well...actually,the 10 hours ride was because we took the longer,yet safer,road.We basically went around the mountain that separates our side from that side.This one goes through meadows and stuff while the usual road goes through the mountain and its forests.(It's really amazing how much a mountain can change two near places,right?There're only scattered pine trees this side of the mountain but there's a tunel that once you pass it,you go:"Eldorado...."!There are super green jungles all around you and there's a huge climatic change...)If you take the mountain road and the traffic was light (which is really unlikely...),it'll take about 2-3 hours to get there;after all it's only about 190-200 kms away from where we live.(according to daddy!)

Wow I love mysterious,deep lakes!Thou never been to one... :(.They are like undetected jungles.All sorts of mysterious and maybe magical creatures can live there and you'd never know

Oh god!yessss!Tomorrow is the last day of exams!For one freaking month I've been doing this!(As I write this I'm slowly dying...)Then I'll be able to send your story to my reader and truly enjoy it to full capacity!

The Last Exam is English!So tell me honestly,from a scale of 1 to 10,1 being horrible and 10 being phenomenally awful bordering on unreadable,where my grammar scores?

Yeah, I have to drive west over the Cascades, which extend from British Columbia down to Mexico. So no can do the whole avoid the mountain thing! The roads are very nice though, lots of passing lanes when driving up the steep grades, so as to avoid the nasty slow semis. The fun part is going down the hill, taking the sharp corners fast B-) even though its so dangerous :D.

Crater Lake is so beautiful, it's a national park. It's actually quite cold in summer, there's still snow because the elevation is so high. They've put some fish in there for ppl to catch but I've always thought there are those prehistoric sharks or something down in the depths. I'm not sure how deep it is - I should google it. But I'm too lazy. :D

I think your grammar is pretty amazing seeing how its probably not your first language. The only things I see are the occasional use of words we might not (in America) use commonly. I think you're most likely using a literal translation of a word, or a way of speaking in Farsi that doesn't translate well into English. For instance, my cousin always says I only left a "muela" for her in the ice cream pint. That translates literally to a "tooth", but what she means is that its only enough for a little bite, or a few bites. I wouldn't worry about the grammar at all!

Let's see...if I can find a mistake in your last post it would be: the use of "hours" instead of "hour"; the spelling of "tunel" which should be "tunnel"; the use of "climactic" instead of "climate"; and maybe some semi-colon usage that would best be left as two sentences. But your use of "its" vs "it's" is good; lots of native English speakers are horrible at that! Let's see....also, we would probably say "undiscovered" vs "undetected" because discovery implies geography/terrain/foreign land, while detection implies a mystery/crime/problem to be solved. See, I was thinking maybe in Farsi you'd say something closer to "undetected" rather than "undiscovered". If you're grading me, you'll see in regular chat-ese I hardly ever bother to really use "it's" correctly. I just can't be bothered to type the contraction. Wow, I'm so lazy! :)

I do prefer a happy ending as well, but life so rarely gives us one. In "Crave" I left it as a happy ending, but readers can probably detect that the MC will probably relapse later and lose his one true love (which is what happened in my life).

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Actually what I said about the mountains is not quite correct, the range is broken up by the Columbia river, which is followed by I-84. I could take the northern route that goes through Wasco and west along I-84, then down I-5 to see my sister in Eugene. But that would take like for f**king ever. Sometimes i take the I-84 route in winter when Mt Bachelor and Mt Hood are covered in 12 inches of snow with ice underneath.

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Misakixusagi 2013-06-09 id # 3000207914 I love reading this story, characters r cool n plots amazing, i always have to take a break after the chapter though,cause the non english parts always make the chapter harder to read lol

But it defo won't stop me,cause i love it hehe i feel kinda sad for fico and luke

@Misakixusagi: Argh it sucks that readers have a hard time with the Spanish. I keep trying to explain the words in context but I'm not always successful! JD Salinger said something like, write the story that you want to read. And since I speak "Spanglish", and have experienced racism/bigotry (which is featured later in the story), I've always wanted to read a story like this. But I know not everyone shares the same sentiment. Awww don't feel sad for those guys, they're freaky-deaky hot and their parents can afford to send them to private school! :) Plus they are extra well endowed, like in the 1% range of average dick size. [For the male readers: the average dick size is 5" hard in length. So don't feel bad compared to the MCs!]

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Lisa 2013-06-09 id # 3000207920 Omg, that Wisconsin cheese comment had me laughing so hard I fell off my chair! lol

Luke's pretty intuitive if he could tell that Fico lied to Joaco about loving him. And Luke's just being a good friend, telling him that it's too soon to love someone and telling him that he shouldn't be afraid to see what else is out there.

This was a really good chapter Magic! I love Lala and her reading gay porn comment! lol So she must be on this site somewhere... ;)

@Lisa: You know I was thinking about that cheese bit and I thought, God, no one's going to laugh at that. So it feels pretty damn good hearing you say that's funny! I have trouble accepting compliments about lots of things (well, most everything!) but I do love to hear when something I say/write is funny! It makes me feel all warm and gooey inside, like, "at least I did one thing right today!"

I know, I want to give Luke a besito for being such a stand up guy. Lala...wouldn't it be funny if I referred to AFF? But that might be un-kosher. I don't want to break the rules!

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Tahylor 2013-06-10 id # 3000207947 Meow! Joaco seemed like he was getting a little feisty there lol. Loved the "who has the biggest dick" contest between the boys and of course they all know their sizes to the decimal point haha. Fico is such a cock whore and I really want him to get his hands (and mouth!) on Luke :-) I can't help but cringe though when I think how Fico's lie could totally blow up in his face. It would be great if he would heed Luke's advice but it doesn't seem like he will :-( hopefully no one gets too hurt...until next chapter

@Tahylor: I keep almost spelling your username wrong and it bugs me! I've typed it out so many times but I still have to double check it!

Guys are SO sensitive and competitive over their dick size. It's funny to me but a serious thing for them. Fico will defo be getting some Luke action at some point in this story so don't you worry :).

Yeah I'm not sure how I'm going to go forward with the love lie. We'll see how the next chapter pans out. I keep thinking about different resolutions to the night, and all of them involve a little betrayal. Well, maybe a lot of betrayal in the characters' minds, emotionally speaking. I'm just not sure how far to push the betrayal envelope.

I'm really excited about this next chapter. At this point I just have notes but I hope to flesh it out over this week and maybe get it out sometime on the weekend. I found some really good music on the Hype Machine to accompany the cheating bits.

There will be some violence involved, but nothing really bad will happen so don't worry. I don't want this story to turn into a violence/torture emo-fest. I'd like to keep it lighthearted.

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Maggie 2013-06-11 id # 3000207979 Oh wow! I've just read your entire story in one afternoon and I have to say I'm really impressed. There are rarely stories on AFF that I like from the first chapter, but this one sounds really promising.

As I have so much to say about it and I'm afraid that I'll forget half of it, I'll just tell you what my favourite things are. First of all, I love the slang, as there are so few stories which use it and make it sound so natural. Of course I don't get half of it, but even the things I don't understand sound really cool. The whole spirit of it seems to fit my image of L.A. I also like that it's not the tipical high school drama, jock-outsider type of thing. It's very mixed and unexpected and gives you the impression that just because the main character is a teenager, not everything is blown out of proportion to make the plot more interesting.

Now on to the chracters and relationships. I like Fico, he's not really a stereotypical skaterboy. And I've always been a sucker for a little misunderstanding and a lot of jealously. But seriously, how hard can it be to pick up the signs, Fico? Maybe he just put it in his head that Luke has to be straight and unattainable and now he can't even read the simplest of signals. But it's also kind of Luke's fault too, for not speaking up and stating that he really dislikes Joaco. Both of them are just so silly and frightened, it's actually a bit hilarious. Maybe Luke is bi and just didn't see it as necessary to tell anyone. Or he's one of those people who fall in love without regards to the gender. Pansexual is the word, I think. Because seriously, everything we've seen so far just indicates that he can't be a 100% straight with no attraction to Fico. Just poor Fico doesn't see it, even when everyone around him does. I'm just sad that we still haven't seen much of Luke's background or personality. I'm still waiting for the big gesture that'll seal the deal and make me give him my blessing to be with Fico. Don't get me wrong, I'm rooting for Luke/Fico, but I've seen more of Joaco that makes me realize he's not a douchebag, but a real nice guy, than I've seen of Luke. I mean, yeah, he cares about his little brother and obviously cares about Fico, but I want more. Be brave, Golden Boy! Your cock is already a huge plus (no pun intended), just keep up the good work and I'm sure everything will work out.

And I'm not a huge fan if Fico saying that he loves Joaco when he really doesn't. I know that he didn't want to make him upset, but say the three big words should be something more meaningful. I'm sure now he'll feel really guilty everytime Joaco says it to him and expects him to say it back. But that's your grave, Fico. See how you'll get out of it. On a lighter note, I really love his crew. They seem to genuinely care about him like a brother and they are hilarious. Makes me kind of want to be a skater and have a crew of my own.

So, yes, I love this story so far and can't wait to read more of it. How many chapter do you think will there be in total? I'm hoping that Luke and Fico will come together soon, but by the looks of it, it still could take some time. I'm hoping for a happy ending for everyone, though. I'm mushy like that.

Have a nice day! ;-)

@Maggie: Wow I'm never had such a long review! Thanks! Let's see if I can address things in an orderly manner :)...

Impressed? You're going to give me an enormous head if you keep that up! lol Thank you for the lovely compliment. I know there are lots of much better stories out there, at least more popular ones, so that's sweet of you to say. :blush:

I think sometimes I go overboard on the slang, but like you said, it's fun to use. As far as the Spanish bits, when I speak with my bilingual relatives, we chatter back and forth with stuff like "look at the stupid menso" etc, and some words I can't even remember what the English word is. I have a reader here, kellankyle, who is Cuban-American and she doesn't do that. I guess each family is different. But I absolutely love using any kind of slang, and I love cussing in every language, so that's why these characters do that :D. I'm such a bad girl.

I've read a few high school gay fics and was less than impressed, they were pretty stereotypical as far as jocks vs preppies, etc. In reality, every person is unique. So I've tried to create characters that break those molds. I'm waiting for a reader who is a skater to come here and say, wow this story sucks! But until then, I'll try to keep up the spirit of what I think the skater world is: freedom, a sense of community, thrill-seeking, creative, rebellious, etc. Also, I was a teenager, and I remember "falling in love at first sight" but feeling like that person doesn't give two shits about you, when in reality they just don't know you like them and would probably return your affection if you made a move.

L.A.: I've only been there once, and I really didn't like it. That's because I'm an Oregonian, and by definition we don't like Californians, who come up here with their big money and buy all the nice homes with a view in historic areas. LOL. And there is SO MUCH F***N smog there, it's like a cloud hangs over the city constantly. The hot dust, the sense of dirt everywhere on the street, the green-moldy "river", are all anethema to the forest and free flowing river loving Oregonian. Also, that Hollywood walk of fame is just a sidewalk. Like, really unimpressive and covered in the everpresent dust. BUT it also has a real sense of energy that cities always do, and is quite pretty at night. And there are a TON of skateparks there, including a professional one owned by Nike. There are skaters here in OR, but on the west side it's so wet that you have to be pretty brave to skate in the fall/spring/winter rain-fest.

I heart Fico. He's so "misundastood" and is into the whole Romeo and Juliet "we can never be together" romantic crap. I think he likes the cross on his love-star, because he's actually too afraid to go out there and just say, "hey, we should hook up". He's blaming the difference in sexual orientations when it's really just his strong fear of being rejected and abandoned the way his mother did.

I know, I need to concentrate on Luke. There will be at least 30 chapters in this story, so his time will surely come. I really like Luke, not because of his physical attractiveness, but because he's just a really nice guy, very cheerful and charismatic. I have quite of bit in notes on Luke's family and backstory, which will be featured later on...

Have you noticed that Fico makes split-second decisions without thought to consequences? Yeah. That's the big problem with him. He didn't anticipate the fallout to his promise to never cheat on Joaco, to make the risky move to move in with him, and now this lie about loving him. He's gotten himself into a bind that can only end in heartbreak. Which is sad but good for a juicy plot.

I like his friends too. In some teenage stories I've read, the friends are hardly ever mentioned. In reality, in high school you depend on your friends for everything. That's the time in your life when you develop these life-lasting friendships that carry you through your golden years (hopefully). But most especially, they help buffer the terrible three ring circus that is high school: pimples, body hair, horrible teachers, being so "misundastood", parents that are such a drag, etc. I think oftentimes that you can tell what kind of person is by their friends, and the way they treat their friends.

I'm pretty sure there will be a happy ending. I'm mushy too. :)

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ds 2013-06-11 id # 3000207992 Your story is getting really juicy, I'm glad things are moving along with Fico and Luke. It's so obvious that Luke gets jealous when Fico talks about his boyfriend and I can't wait until Fico tells Luke he likes them. Luke is so cute. Can't wait for your next chapter!

@ds: :D Yes, the juice doth overfloweth doesn't it? I get a kick out of making the sexual tension b/w Luke and Fico simmer more each time.

I'm not sure about this next chapter. I'm not sure if Luke will kiss Fico or not...and if Fico will kiss him back. We'll see!

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So I got a new wireless keyboard today, as I tend to do most of my writing on my laptop, not my desktop. I have this nice ergonomic chair but it's not ergonomic unless you're looking at a screen at a reasonable height. Laptops are by definition not ergonomic, as you have to look down (back strain from slumping) or get wrist pain from wrists in a too-high position (if you've raised the stupid machine so as to minimize slumping and back strain.

I thought, hey, it's worth the $$ so my back won't hurt so much from prolonged typing and internet research (we're not talking about porn here, which although can be educational in terms of sex itself, doesn't lend itself towards preventing procrastination).

Now I have this nice keyboard, a decent laptop with the most recent version of Word for Mac, and a nice ergonomic wireless mouse. But that doesn't matter since I have F***N writer's block. I sit down here and try to write ch 11 and nothing but gibberish comes out. What bugs the bejesus out of me is that all my ideas lately seem to come just as I'm falling asleep and it's not exactly conducive to a well-rested state.

You may be thinking, hey magic, why don't you write this useless crap on your blog? Well, dear reader, I don't have a blog, mostly because I'm too lazy to update 500 different things which mostly say the same thing. I've even stopped using FB, I'm so lazy.

So the long and short of it is that I can't for the life of me work on this chapter w/o freaking out. I wish I had someone to bounce ideas off of. But all I have is you, and you mostly don't care as long as the juicy bits keep coming (no pun intended). I do appreciate the reviews immensely as I am the queen of procrastinators and need a good old fashioned kick in the butt to keep going. But that still doesn't give me the creativity I am currently lacking.

Sometimes caffeine helps. Sometimes it just makes me even more crazy than usual.

I took a break from writing The Invasion of Ian because I had the exact same problem. This next chapter can be pivotal in terms of plot and I'm afraid I'm going to let you all down by not writing the precisely perfect words to describe the important scene I have in mind. What if you don't like it? What if it's like a wet, limp rag that flaps in your face and makes you go, "ugh that was terrible and now I want to go wash my face off"?????

I'm scared. I'm scared my writing will be shitty. And you guys will tell me it's shitty, and I'll be like, "Yeah, I know, right? It's so shitty. Now I shall go hide and eat chocolate ice cream".

I want to scream but that won't help. Chocolate won't help. Maybe I'll try to get some sleep.

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Oh c'mon hon'!You know it's never gonna be that bad!And maybe it'd actually help if you wrote a chapter,posted it and heard our reviews!That way,you might actually get some ideas and if you were still not content with your chapter,you can maybe use our ideas and write a new one!How's that?

Oh wow...You're lucky you have an ergonomic chair...it might've helped me with my problem now...See,we just got a kinect and we were so exited and we might've over stepped a little...Now my whole body hurts and I can't for the life of me find a comfortable position to read...:-q

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Beh...I came here to do something but now look at me...

I was reading your replay up there and thought I should butt in!You may wanna check out Bad Reputation by sauropod and Loser by SweetSurrender!They're pretty fantastic high school fics!imo anyway!

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Thanks FD :), I appreciate your words of encouragement. I've been reading a ton just to relax my mind a bit and take the pressure off. Today I've started working on Ch 11; I had a few pages before my hiatus and now I'm picking it back up. I gotta get back on the horse, right?

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Lisa 2013-07-10 id # 3000209254 Hey Magic...just wanted to check to see if you're ok...you haven't updated in awhile, and believe me, I know. I've been checking a few times a day. In fact, I think my refresh key is broken. ;)

But seriously, I hope everything's ok with you, Magic, and you're just really busy or on vacation somewhere terrific. If not, think of this as a little, hint, hint, poke, poke. lol :)

@Lisa: Hi sweetheart, yeah I suck don't I? I guess things kind of suck balls right now. I've been really depressed. And every time I think about writing OTW, I get stuck on this idea that it won't turn out right. I mean, wtf? This has happened before, I'm a really avoidant person. At least that's what one of my therapists told me. Anyways....I feel bad for letting you guys down. I even got a pm from a reader saying basically the same thing, except she's willing to help me out with ideas. Man, I feel so lame. I'm glad you poked me. I need a kick in the pants sometimes when I get stuck in a thinking rut. I'm also moving closer to my sister and that's taking some time and energy, but not enough that I don't have time at night to write. Instead, I've been reading (devouring more like) a book a day. Plus Rolling Stone. I mean, I can't go without RS for more than a day w/o feeling a little empty. I've also started spending more time at the gym b/c I have a tendency towards emotional eating...ergh. I worked out too hard last night I think because although I'm not sore today, I am sooooo tired. I bet tomorrow I'll be mega sore. I used to lift 40 to 50 lbs on most machines and now I'm down to 25-30. How lame is that? I was being really sedentary while I wrote a lot the past few months. If you want to know what I've been reading, I starred them on goodreads.com and even left one or two reviews. Most aren't worth a review, honestly, they're so trite and cliched it's pretty sad. Like I told TRUgrit, I can't believe some of this shit actually gets published. I mean, M/M romance books are sooooooooo predictable sometimes!! It's irritating enough that I want to continue writing if only to provide someone like myself the opportunity to read something not quite run-of-the-mill.

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Man I'm such a pity party sometimes. WTF, self? :angry:

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Update for the impatient types (you know who you are :D):

I'm really, truly working on Ch 11 now with help from the great and glorious TRUgrit. All hail TRUgrit!

This chapter is a culmination for all the jealousy that's been brewing in the previous chapter. Some elements of violence, just as a warning. I'm actually working on Ch 12 at the same time - it's the beginning of Ch 11 that's been irritating me all this time. It's like we're in a staring contest. The screen is staring at me, taunting me with its emptiness.

I hope to finish this chapter by Saturday, July 20. My sister and her four children are visiting this week, though, so that date might have to be moved :(. Just when I'm picking up steam! Well, I hardly ever get to see the little tykes so I need to spend some quality time with them. I get most of my writing and research done late at night, though, so my visitors shouldn't inhibit my progress too much.

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Lisa 2013-07-26 id # 3000209854 Hey Magic - just checking up on ya again. Don't want you to forget your muito bueno (did I spell that right?), hella awesome story!

So, hopefully it's just writer's block and not something more serious...hope everything is ok, Magic. =) Report Review Lisa 2013-08-12 id # 3000210630 For the love of God, Magic, come back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ok, this is my bi-monthly (?) nagging. Unfortunately for you, I probably won't stop. I've had a really shitty weekend and I think the only thing that will cheer me up is reading about your boy, Fico. So whadda say, Magic?

If you're not going to continue with the story (if that is the case, I will be so, so, so sad), then could you write a little author's note and put it in the form of a chapter and post it so I won't keep bugging you? Thanks.

But if you aren't abandoning your hella awesome story, then for the love of God, Magic, come back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

@Lisa: Poor dear, I feel so bad that I've been letting you down. I think at this point it's progressed from writer's block into pure avoidance of something difficult. Sure, I've been exhausted from packing, moving, and driving 3.5 hours to/from my new home, but I could spend some nights working on OTW like I used to. Before, I devoted every moment of my spare time to crafting OTW, whether it was research, writing, or editing. Now, it's spent at the gym, reading purely for pleasure, or watching stupid summer reality TV shows. Anyone see Breaking Pointe on the CW? I can't believe how easy it is for me to get caught up in watching this TV merde/mierda/shit/shite. I mean...I gotta get a grip on myself. I easily become obsessed with something and then leave it half-finished, and I want to actually finish something for once. I mean, I do that with books as well. I get bored halfway through and say, fuck it, it's not really that interesting, is it? The problem with OTW is that I've had ideas since then that I think are more interesting...but haven't bothered to write them down either. TRUgrit had a good idea to record my thoughts on mp3...but I absolutely hate the sound of my voice. It's really high pitched and SO ANNOYING I can't believe people actually listen to me without covering their ears. It's why I think people think I'm 19 instead of 29.

Also: I'm exhausted physically from trying but failing miserably to lose weight. I've been strength training and I have to sleep at least 8 hr to get that muscle rebuilt so I can boost my metabolism so I can lose weight (that's the theoretical idea, but in reality it just makes me hungry and I eat stupid stuff like cookies). It comes down to whether I'm more concerned about my weight or about my writing, and if anyone else with an eating disorder will tell you, concern with weight is always highest on my list. That's why I don't have a relationship with anything besides my dog and food. ;)

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Also, it's not kosher at AFF to post a chapter w/o any actual chapter in it, as a placeholder. The mods would yell at me again and I'm already on their blacklist. Which, of course, is my fault! I'm trying to stay under the radar and be a very very good girl.

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Just wanted to say that I feel guilty enough for continuing to disappoint you guys for the glacial pace of my OTW updates that today I will restart my OTW stuff. I am currently at my old home with all my notebooks in my new home, but I have my handy dandy laptop here and that will have to do. I have a nagging feeling that I wrote some notes about Ch 11 in my big OTW notebook (I have little ones I carry around in purses and my gym bag too. I always get ideas at the gym for some reason.) So that will bother me until I'm back in my new home.

If anyone is interested, which I rather doubt that you are, I really like my new home. I go to Anytime Fitness and the new location is SO MUCH nicer than the old one. It has this massive ceiling fan about 12' in diameter that reminds me of whirling helicopter blades except much slower. And the TV monitors attached to the cardio machines have 4 options - workout view, TV view, internet and iPod view. So you can scroll through your song list on the big screen rather than one your iPod, or use the internet on it. That is super astounding to me. I feel like a little town girl in a big city again. AND....the best part, there's a big screen projector in a separate room which is hooked up to a digital kiosk in which you can pick out aerobic DVD workouts.

I think its rather sad that my life has devolved (again!) to the point at which the gym is the highlight of my day. If you live in a rainy city, it's either the pub, the club or the gym, right? Having once again eschewed my RL friends in favor of my hermitage (this having more to do with mental illness than dislike of my long suffering friends), the gym is my favorite place since it's prepaid and Starbucks is so effing expensive. The gym is about $1/day and Starbucks would be more like $4/day. That's a savings of $3/day x 365 days/year = $1095/year. Not to mention the caloric savings. Please God save me from calorie counting! Now if only I could like hide in the personal trainer's office or an overhead heating duct and sleep there at night so I could get on the spinning bike without the trouble of driving there.

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Sorry about my lateness in these responses!

Reena 2013-08-29 id # 3000211415

All your characters have such distinct personality and really fun to read,I don't have any "constructive criticism" but I just wany you to know I love your writing and hope to read more from you,ciao:)

@Reena: I am so glad you're enjoying the story. I hope if you notice something off you feel free to note it in your reviews.

Tahylor 2013-09-02 id # 3000211593

Hi I hope everything is going okay! I just wanted to say that I really hope you don't abandon this story because it's really good and I want to know want happens with Fico, Luke, and Joaco! Please continue!!!!

@Tahylor: Man I keep typing your name wrong. *Headdesk* Yeah things are okay, I was just going through a kind of depressed phase where I was eating instead of writing. Ack. But I wrote a third of this latest chapter just today so I think I'm back in the groove. Please bear with me!

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Lisa 2013-10-02 id # 3000212525

Oh Magic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am so fucking glad you are back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I was heartbroken thinking that the story would never be finished. It's too great a story not to be finished!

Thank you so much for oontinuing! I just did a happy dance. lol

Unfortunately, I was checking this before I shut the computer down, so I'll have to read it in the morning. =)

Thank you, thank you, thank you, Magic! You just made my fucking year! :)

@Lisa: Wow you're fast little lady. I was hoping you'd still be hitting the refresh button :D and you never fail me. Hope you like the chapter when you get a chance to read it.

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wolfluv 2013-10-03 id # 3000212530

TOTALLY WORTH THE WAIT!!! Life happens and we as readers should understand this! I really enjoyed this chapter it was amazing and funny and DAMN! I can't wait to read what happens next! I'm a fan and I'll wait as long as I have to for the next chapter! I hope life gets better for you and yours! read ya laters!

@wolfluv: Glad you think so :). I feel really bad for making everyone wait so long. I thought about cutting the chapter up, because I had the first part done for a while, but I hate short chapters, even if the update would have been sooner. Anyway, I really hope from now on I can get a new chapter in every two weeks or so. Or at the bare minimum, once a month because the hiatus I had was ridiculous!

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Fire_Demon 2013-10-03 id # 3000212531

Heh!I'm glad you're back!

Gooood!What's with Fico's insistent persistence that Luke is straight?I get that he doesn't want to get his hopes up but this is just ridiculous!"yeah,this is Luke.Yes he blushes like a damsel if someone gives even the slightest inkling that they're talking about cock or him being gay.And yes he does oggle me whenever he thinks I'm not looking and gives off strong vibes that he's into me.But NO!He's as straight as an arrow!I'm sure of it no doubt!He's like Hugh Hefner!"

Wow!What a night!!And everyone's so chill about it!'Well yeah someone slipped viagra in my drink and tried to sexually assault me.He's actually a famous celebrity and reads my blog,then I ran into my crush seconds away from fucking this hot female celebrity.Oh!And the I walked in on my boyfriend who was face eating with the guy who drugged me so now I'm practically homeless,then I was charged with public indecency and had to fuck the officer to get away from it and yes,my crush walked in on me fucking this guy,and I might be overdosing!Yup no biggie!'

Can't wait to see what happens next!

@FD: Yay good to see you reading and reviewing me again! I was afraid all my old readers had gotten tired of the wait and vowed to never read it again...Yeah I debated whether Luke and Fico should kiss in this chapter but it didn't work out. I'm thinking one of Fico's friends might sit down with him and be like, dude, Luke is gay or at least bi.

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