dena.gray Posted June 19, 2012 Report Share Posted June 19, 2012 (edited) Snape is deliciously nasty in this one, he is not some tormented soul that seeks redemption. Hermione is not some little milkish miss that lets him do whatever he wants, either. I've got some raggedy edges that I like, and some that I don't. I like how this fic just kind of runs rough-shod over morality without being another BDSM/torture-smut venture. I need someone to do a quick read over and give me some good honest feed back on what feels lacking or what might be rushed. You can get into mechanics, but I can easily take care of that in a print out. When I first wrote this, it was over two weeks and I was in and out of the hospital with a respiratory problem, so I know there are mechanical flaws, but I also know there are pacing flaws and I'd like to focus on the pacing flaws. I'm working on learning to handle my pace, switching POV, scene usage, etc, so that's the kind of crit I need for this. I really don't care if you're a listed or published beta, but I do care if you know what you're talking about. Prove that to me any which way you can. Thank you for taking the time to read! Dena Edited November 2, 2012 by dena.gray Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dena.gray Posted November 2, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2012 yeah...so, I've updated the info above to more accurately reflect what I'm looking for... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LayLaychka Posted November 4, 2012 Report Share Posted November 4, 2012 I'm not sure if I can do it for you, but I'm happy to try. If you are interested, please PM me. Lay Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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