Summary: Sequel to “Enter the Sandboy.” All summer, Lincoln Loud has been having regular sex with all ten sisters and his mom, on just one condition: no sex outside the Loud house. But now that a new school year is beginning, will Lincoln be able to resist temptation? Spoiler alert: No.

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i hope theres pinecest!

Shhh, no spoilers…

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From ConanEdogawa on January 21, 2018

Will Lincoln have sex with Lola?

No, not in this fic. Although I’m a big fan of incest and have written other Loud House stories that involve it (“Whoops” and “The Loud House After Dark”), I’m not including any incest action in this one. Lincoln and Lola will be getting it on with someone, though; stay tuned to find out who.

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First time I see a craig of the creek smut fic 

First time I’ve written one, so we’re in the same boat.

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Hope you make more in the future especially ones with Kelsey maybe her with a older guy or her dad 

Part 2 of this story will be “The Dream of Kelsey.” Stay tuned.

Jomahawk2694 2015-02-07 id # 3000070176

Very nice. I was a little apprehensive at the BDSM tag, especially after Little Blonde Monster, but that's what's so amazing about you and your writing. You know how to craft the perfect tenor for each of your stories, and you make each idea work within its context. In LBM, Suzy's concept of domination is obviously very different from Phineas' and Isabella's, and you show those differences perfectly.

Responding to reviews for The Vengeance of Hämsterviel – http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600096485

WARNING: This thread contains spoilers for the story (because the reviews do). If you haven't yet read "Little Blonde Monster" and you think you might want to, I strongly recommend clicking the link above and going for it before looking at the rest of this thread.

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Definitely a strong start. A tad odd, due to the nature of the pairing, but sweet and fun.

 

Well, not exactly a pairing, but I just hope it gets across as the character is the reader like my Spending Mother’s Day story

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It was really well written, obviously you put some care and effort into polishing it. I hope the wait isn't long for the next chapter.

Yeah, gave it my best. I let it sit for a bit and gave it another revision before I put it up. 

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I'm very intrigued where you will go with this and am excited for more. Has a bit of a HER vibe, but with human/fairy naughty-play possibilities.

Have a very specific goal in mind, but we’ll see where it goes.

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Good luck writing!

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From ANON - Edward on September 30, 2020

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I am loving this!

 

I like seeing someone actually tapping into the potencial of human/toy interaction.

 

Feels like somebody should have done it? I’m sure it has. Just hopefully not in the way I’m doing it.

From SailorNemesis on October 01, 2020
 

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Cute start.  Curious to see where it leads.  The Toys bodies do have some ability to move in ways not apparent when they are inanimate.  I wonder what kind of sex they can have...

Yeah, I’m gonna see how much I can mix it up and make it interesting per chapter.

From pronker on October 02, 2020
 

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What a fine beginning and atmosphere - it's obviously going to be an excellent story to follow. Thanks for writing it!

Thanks for the compliments. I’m really surprised at the response, when I’d think my Helen Parr story would be much more reviewed at this point.

Most of the heavy stuff was planned to happen later, when the main character finally accepts what's going on, which doesn't take that long... I've several stories half-written on my hard-drive right now, but their Fandoms are somewhat abused lately... so I went first for a Simpsons short story, and now decided to go for a Fandom that's rarely touched here or anywhere else.

Thanks for the review, In a few hours I'm going to update the second chapter which would set the beginning of the sex on the story. Hope to keep you at least interested on what's going on to keep reading until I reach the end.

Aysha 2013-07-05 id # 3000068408

This was really good and I hope you write another chapter!

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Enjyoing the story so far. I REALLY hope you include anal in a future chapter if that's ok.

While I am not fully interested in anal, it does not appall me either and I find it funny in some situations, so I’ll certainly include it in the future. I was thinking it would be either Pacifica just due to how strongly against it she was, or Mabel because of how expensive contraceptives can be, and I always pictured the twins not very wealthy.

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Fairy-Slayer 

It was terrific to see Wendy get in on the action, especially with Pacifica getting to call the shots because of Wendy's mistake. Along with the sexy action, I love the way you revealed the little blonde's ulterior motive... and how it backfired on her a bit as she tried to "take it all" (figuratively).

Unfortunately though, I felt that Dipper went somewhat out-of-character when she went too far and that kind of killed the mood for me (as well as it should have for all of them, IMO); Wendy's plan didn't seem natural to me, as it was kind of cruel towards Dipper in its own way; and while it worked out fine in the end, that stretch felt awkward. Maybe if there had been a way for Pacifica to show her contrition (even if she refuses to apologize) probably would have let me feel better about the end.

Still, I'm happy that they all got to spend some sexy time together, especially after Wendy's little confession and how it affected Pacifica so nicely. More so, I still love the way you are focusing on Pacifica's needs, fears, defense mechanisms, etc. as a main driver of the story. Anyway, good to know that there are more play-dates in store. Thanks for more fun with the cute couple and friends.

I imagine that, despite her young age, Pacifica’s parents are already educating her to be a shark in the business world, and to take advantage of every situation that she can, so she reacted almost instinctively to the opportunity presented to her. Wendy simply had no chance. This will be even funnier after something about the broken vase is revealed in the next chapter when Dipper has a second of privacy with Pacifica.

I’m really sorry a scene ruined the mood for you; that is the opposite of what I try to achieve when writing the scenes. If it’s the scene where Pacifica forbids Dipper from having sex with Wendy and Dipper gets furious, I had planned that to be the spot where part 2 ended and part 3 started, but ultimately I put everything in a single part, so that scene and the one after that indeed wrecks the pacing because up until that part everything is meant to be one sex scene, and after that part, another separate sex scene. I feel, however, that Dipper reacted in-character because Pacifica had been pushing him more and more throughout the day, and he was bound to snap at some point.

I like focusing on Pacifica’s behavior because I feel she changed a lot through the series, and I like giving depth to that. I imagined that she grew up in a cold and superficial environment, and she enjoyed that because she was at the top of the food chain. She was the queen. However, when Dipper arrived, she discovered someone disinterestedly caring and affective for the first time, and much to her surprise, she actually liked that. This was a problem for her because nobody in her social circle could provide her with that newly discovered interest; her parents were cold and wanted only achievements out of her, and her friends were all bullies like her. Pacifica was so young and impressionable, that Dipper suddenly became like a superhero to her, and he climbed to the top of her priority list. For this reason, she wanted to keep him at any cost, and she was very insecure about anything he paid more attention to than her.

As for the future of the fic, I have two ideas after Interloper is wrapped: one about adding Mabel to the mix, and one about some serious exhibitionism with maybe cross-dressing for Dipper to play with the whole thing of Mabel and Dipper being twins, because I feel it is less suspicious to see two girls entering a changing room than a boy and a girl. The issue that I’m having now, however, is that I have too much material to wrap Interloper in one more part, and too little to make two, so I guess I’ll have to do another extra long one or discard scenes.

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Frankly I was looking forward more to this being about Pacifica and Dipper that Wendy or other girls. I just really prefer Pacifica better, both in design and personality, over the other female characters of GF. Well, I like Mabel too, but this story is a little more grounded on logic rather that your usual smut where characters just go at it for no rhyme or reason. So I wouldn't see a reason for Dipper to suddlenly want to be interesed in his sister like that when this isn't that sort of smut. But even so, I still would prefer Pacifica over Mabel, but anyhow, it's your story so I can't tell you how to go about it. But, I do really enjoy this regardless so, thanks for putting such hard work into writing all of this for our enjoyement. Looking forward to next chapter!

 

I like the Dipper/Pacifica pairing the most, mainly because I have a very easy time coming up with scenarios for them, but I already had 105k words of that between the “There is a First Time for Everything” and the “A Camping Trip with Mabel” stories, so I wanted to try something different. I wanted to write something about Wendy and explore that size and age difference she has with Dipper, but without leaving Pacifica out, so I made the short story of “Disclosure” where they are in their original ages (unlike in the other two stories mentioned) to act as a setting for “Interloper”. Therefore, the story was never meant to be a Dipper/Pacifica exclusive story, but more of a Dipper/Other-girls where Pacifica gets a say.

As for Dipper being suddenly interested in Mabel, I plan to add Mabel, but it can’t be possible with that approach. In the way I see regular behavior, people tend to their needs before they tend to their desires. Someone that is hungry will make a priority to get food, but once the hunger is satiated, getting food stops being a priority unless a desire such a gluttony makes it so. In this instance, Dipper’s sexual urges are being kept in check by both Wendy and Pacifica, who drain his testosterone regularly, so it would never cross his mind that he could add a third girl into that routine, let alone Mabel. Furthermore, it would probably scare him rather than appeal to him the idea of having a third girl competing for milking his seed on a regular basis. So Mabel will join, but the idea will not come from Dipper; it will come from Mabel. I’m not 100% decided on this because I only have a rough draft of that arc, but I was thinking something along the lines of Mabel getting seriously jealous of Dipper getting to punch his v-card before she did, even though she had been trying really hard that summer and Dipper hadn’t really, so she wants to solve that situation by joining them.

• First of all, while I wish people would leave a review on the fic itself first, please feel free to post any other comments, opinions and random thoughts relevant to the fic here. I explicitly encourage replies to my review replies to go on this thread.
• If you have typos, plot holes, errors or confusing parts of the fic to report and do so here, I shall be forever in your debt
• Plot suggestions and speculation are welcome, but I currently have plans up to at least chapter 5 of the fic and ideas for the overarching plot and themes beyond that.

Some teaser facts about the fic:

• I am currently aiming to have it be compatible with the continuity of SvtFoE up to S02E20. Then I have to decide whether to split the timeline into an AU, have Star spend a chapter banging Ruberiot or Oskar on the rebound, or simply stop updating until season 3 comes out.  This, however, should not be a problem until chapter 5 or 6.
• There is only one proper character left to introduce after the first two chapters and until chapter 5 or 6.
• Other than the continuity thingy, your reviews fuel the speed at which a write. It is not even blackmail, that’s just how my motivation works

Thanks again for that--as you can see, your suggestion was very helpful to me.

I'm loving the start of this, from the wingman fistbump to Star constantly bringing up her parent's sex life.

The parents'-sex-life thing grew out of a comment that Fairy Slayer (who is kindly beta-ing this story for me) made about Star seeming oddly comfortable talking about sex in the initial draft. I agreed, and decided to make it a little more uncomfortable for her.

I really enjoy how casual and comfortable they are around each other, even as things got awkward.

This is the chief aspect of the show that makes me want to write fanfic about it. I love the relationship between Star and Marco and how easy they are around each other, as though they've been friends all their lives.

As always you capture the aspects of the show that make it great just perfectly. I look forward to more.

Thank you, and thanks for the review!

SailorNemesis 2015-01-20 id # 3000070122

Clever work with Elsa's powers. Just wanted to say that.

You are not the first person to tell me that. But I'm hoping that the story itself will be strong enough to keep readers interested, even if it doesn't feature their favorite 'ship.

Anyhoo, below are my responses to reviews of this story.

Thanks! I'm not that big on sequels, but I do sort of have an idea for one. I'll need to let it cook for a bit longer before I decide whether it's edible.