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From DaBomb on February 18, 2017

Tease! But in a good way. Has me hard and dripping in anticipation.

As I always say, there’s no higher praise than an involuntary physiological response. :)

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Can't wait to see Jenny worship some fat cock and balls. I'd imagine she'd have to do some "convincing" of the official observer

Oh, I wouldn’t worry; Melanie’s going to be rather busy...

Thanks for the comment!

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From discord_the_lunatic on April 03, 2017

Re: chapter 2

Very good, especially the shifting perspectives, but what a stopping point.-_-

Glad you liked the shifting perspectives: I wrote about two thirds of the chapter before I realized that it really needed more sensory detail, and it couldn’t have that without different POVs, so I went back and rewrote it to make that happen.

As for the stopping point, I can never resist a cliffhanger. :)

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Another job well done.

Given your taste in reading material, I assume you've read this story http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600093704. Of course, if you haven't, now you can and I think you'll enjoy. Anyway, I wonder if you ever considered writing a story for Johnny Test. It would seem to feature characters you'd like and a premise you could use much like Phineas and Ferb.

 

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Just now, GeorgeGlass said:

Glad you enjoyed “Hot Yoga.”

I’ve never watched Johnny Test. It’s not still on the air, is it?

I don't believe so. It was on air some years ago, but I honestly stopped playing attention until I started reading the story I sent you.

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A few author’s notes about “Hot Yoga”:

 

I deliberately wrote it to be different from my previous Phineas and Ferb fanfics in a couple of ways:

  • It is light on plot and very heavy on porn.

  • It features only B-list characters. (Stacy is the only arguable A-lister in the bunch, but I consider her an A-minus-lister at most because she doesn't appear in every episode of P&F.)

 

Even though I wrote about a dozen Phineas and Ferb fics before this one, some of the characters in “Hot Yoga” don't appear in any of my previous stories (Dr. Hirano, Monty Monogram, Balthazar Horowitz, Melanie), and others make only brief appearances (Jenny, Coltrane).

 

This is the first time I've ever written a full-on orgy. Although I've written stories involving threesomes, or multiple couples having sex at the same time, I had never before written about a group of people who all have sex with one another in various ways and combinations. Making this work required a huge amount of outlining -- not only to keep track of who was doing what with whom, but also to time events such that characters would be ready to switch partners at the right moment.

 

Dr. Hirano has no first name in canon. I considered giving her one for the sake of this story, but given how many characters are involved, I didn't want to give readers one more thing to keep track of throughout the story. So the character is simply referred to as “Dr. Hirano” throughout.

 

I kept the ratio of male to female characters low because, given that the incense seems to induce bisexuality along with horniness, I didn't want to have to do a lot of plot-gymnastics to avoid having any guy-on-guy action. Not that I never write that sort of thing, but for whatever reason, I'm generally only comfortable writing it for furry characters. Also, judging from the people who comment on my P&F stories, the readership seems to be entirely male and mostly straight, so I don't think many people were reading “Hot Yoga” in the hope of seeing some Monty-Coltrane action, anyway.

 

That said, there was a time or two when I was writing this story when I wanted a female character to take on two or three guys at once, and I found myself muttering, “Damn it, there's not enough dicks to go around.”

 

Overall, though, I'm pretty happy with the results. I hope y'all were, too.

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Great story, why did you put the coltrane/dr hirano part in the story, because that is one of the most good things about this story, and also I have another question,  could you please, and I mean please make a sequel to this story, and just a little advice, maybe you should have more of the coltrane/dr hirano pairing than the last story, anyway, love your stories and if you can, please make a sequel to this story and keep up the good work

 

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On 11/15/2017 at 11:39 PM, Guest Star wars player 1 said:

Great story,

Thanks!

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why did you put the coltrane/dr hirano part in the story, because that is one of the most good things about this story

I wanted the story to focus on B-list characters who don’t get a lot of screen time on the show, and Dr. Hirano and Coltrane both fall into that category. Also, I kind of have a fetish for moms acting as sexual mentors for their children (some call that the “mother’s duty” fetish), and in this case, that extended to her child’s boyfriend, too. Plus, horny MILF + horny teenage boy is a good match.

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and also I have another question,  could you please, and I mean please make a sequel to this story, and just a little advice, maybe you should have more of the coltrane/dr hirano pairing than the last story, anyway, love your stories and if you can, please make a sequel to this story and keep up the good work

I have no immediate plans to write a sequel, but it’s always possible that I’ll be struck by an exciting idea for one and write it. In any case, glad you liked it.

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Okay, thanks for the reply, if you do make a sequel to hot yoga, I'm sure it will another great story for you to write, so thanks for replying and good luck with your stories.p.s if you can, keep my advice about the coltrane/dr.hirano pairing,anyway bye and keep up the good work!

 

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On 11/20/2017 at 4:09 PM, Guest Star wars player 1 said:

Okay, thanks for the reply, if you do make a sequel to hot yoga, I'm sure it will another great story for you to write, so thanks for replying and good luck with your stories.p.s if you can, keep my advice about the coltrane/dr.hirano pairing,anyway bye and keep up the good work!

 

Hi, it's me, I just wanted to say hi again and to wish you a happy thanksgiving and have a nice black friday, by the way , if you get ideas for a story from comments or reviews, then here is a suggestion for a sequel to hot yoga,  1.have the story take place probably during the next saturday jenny metioned,  or during some othet time, or maybe have it take place during Christmas, if you want, anyway have a very good thanksgiving.!

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On 11/21/2017 at 3:25 PM, Guest Star wars player 1 said:

Hi, it's me, I just wanted to say hi again and to wish you a happy thanksgiving and have a nice black friday, by the way , if you get ideas for a story from comments or reviews, then here is a suggestion for a sequel to hot yoga,  1.have the story take place probably during the next saturday jenny metioned,  or during some othet time, or maybe have it take place during Christmas, if you want, anyway have a very good thanksgiving.!

Oh, I forgot to mention this, but when you reply when you have the time, let me know whatbyou think of my ideas, if you can, anyway, I'll leave another comment probably after thanksgiving day and black friday or I may just leave a comment on black friday if your busy thanksgiving, right now I have a turkey to prepare, bye and happy Thanksgiving. 

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Hello, sorry that I forgot to send this comment yesterday, I was busy black friday shopping, so how have you been doing ? any black friday shopping deals you found ? I found some really good deals at best buy. So I just wanted to say hi and when you have time to leave a reply to this comment, could you please tell me what you think of my "Hot yoga sequel" ideas ? If you still haven't fully thought of what you think of my ideas, don't worry,  just take your time. Anyway, hopefully I'll be hearing from you again soon (p.s I think that if you would like to have a conversation on something,  I think this is the best way since I don't have twitter) so, bye and keep in touch and keep up the good work with your stories. 

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Hey there. I’ve been doing National Novel Writing Month and haven’t had much time to visit this forum. I hope to come by a bit more regularly when November is over.

I think your idea is a bit interesting. Maybe Jenny and the gang get up to some sexy shenanigans while the main characters are doing their Christmas in July special. Can’t promise I’ll do anything with that, though; as always, I’ve got a lot of other stories in the works.

Thanks for the notes! Hope you had a good Black Friday.

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Okay, the idea for jenny and the others while the main characters have the christmas in july special sounds like a perfect idea for the sequel, since your busy with other stories right now, I won't leave a comment anytime soon, I will probably leave another comment when it's very close to christmas, but if you do have time to comment more than that would be nice, anyway I think you should definitely use that ""christmas in july special" idea for the sequel, maybe if your not too busy during early december or during late december which is december 14 or 20 I think, then that's when you should start writing the story, anyway good luck with your national novel writing month thing and hope to be hearing from you again soon, bye and I hope you had a great black friday.

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On 11/28/2017 at 6:01 PM, Guest Star wars player 1 said:

Okay, the idea for jenny and the others while the main characters have the christmas in july special sounds like a perfect idea for the sequel, since your busy with other stories right now, I won't leave a comment anytime soon, I will probably leave another comment when it's very close to christmas, but if you do have time to comment more than that would be nice, anyway I think you should definitely use that ""christmas in july special" idea for the sequel, maybe if your not too busy during early december or during late december which is december 14 or 20 I think, then that's when you should start writing the story, anyway good luck with your national novel writing month thing and hope to be hearing from you again soon, bye and I hope you had a great black friday.

 

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On 12/5/2017 at 6:05 PM, Guest Star wars player 1 said:

 

Hi, I just wanted to say a quick hi and see if you were done with your National Novel writing month thing. I know I said that I would not leave another comment until when it was very close to christmas,  but then I thought you might be a little busy during the first week of christmas vacation, so I thought I would just leave a comment right now, so how have you been doing ? Oh, also one other question, do you think you might enough time to start writing the 'Hot Yoga sequel' during this month, I know you said that you were busy with other stories, but if you could find some time to start on the story, then that would be great. But, if your too busy to do the story this month I'll understand. So I hope to hear from you gain soon and hope your doing well, and one more thing, if you do have time to start writing the story, I think that would be great, since the story will take place during the 'Christmas in july special' fits perfectly for this month, so if you do have to just even start writing the first chapter of the sory, then that would be great, but like I said before, if your too busy at the moment, I'll understand. So hope to hear from you again and also another thing, when you have time to reply to this comment, let me know what you think of my question, anyway keep up the good work and hope you have a nice holiday.

 

 

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Hey there. Yes, I am done with NaNoWriMo. It was intense, but I managed to complete the 50,000 words on time.

Regarding a “Hot Yoga” sequel, I think you may have misunderstood what I wrote. As I said, I thought your idea was kind of interesting, but I did not promise to actually write it up. For one thing, as I mentioned, I have a lot of other stories in the works right now. Also, I would want to give some more thought to the idea and see how well it fleshes itself out in my head before I committed to writing it. (This is pretty much how I decide which ideas to go forward with and which ones to leave alone.)

In any case, thanks for the note, and I hope all is well with you. Have a great holiday.

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Okay, sorry that I misunderstood you, I realize now that I was going a little too fast into asking you to write the story, I should have been more patient and leave you to think it over instead of telling you to start writing when you are just only thinking about how you're going to do the story, I am so sorry for my rushing of you, please accept my apologies. And if you do decide to do the story, then do what you think you should do, think it over, plan it, take notes, and come up with a plot. Anyway, sorry for rushing things, and if you do decide to do the story, then leave me a comment and I'll reply, hope you have a good holiday and hope to be hearing from you again.  

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