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Hey everyone! Looks like several of you have taken the time to chime in on the poll, and offer up your overwhelmingly positive opinions on the latest chapter. I’m very glad everyone seemed to like the chapter. I really hoped everyone would enjoy Alex’s triumphant return. In news, I started working on Chapter 20, but haven’t gotten too far yet. I kind of wanted to take it slow after pushing out two chapters in such short time. Though I do plan to do a good bit of writing on Monday, since I have the day off. I can’t say for sure when I’ll have it done, but as I said earlier, I hope I can have it done my mid June. Although I haven’t quite yet decided what I’m going to do with Toy/Chloe, but I may end up not exploring it too much in Chapter 20… I plan on letting the writing take me where it does, and go from there, since even if I do decide to “fix” Toy, that transition will likely take place over the course of a few different chapters. Ok, on to you guys:

Guest: Thanks for recording your vote. I had a pretty good idea that was what you meant, that you wanted someone who was loyal, but ruthless like him. I guess what I meant, is that I’m not sure Alex would ever allow, even a loyal person to have as much authority as him. He would see such a person as a potential threat, but more importantly, a major potential security risk. I mean lets just say that the potential Harley Quinn was actually just pretending. The second he gave her the opportunity, she could escape, and blow the lid off Alex’s entire operation. I’m not saying that Alex won’t entrust some authority in one of the ladies, that is essentially what the level 5 position is all about, and that that person couldn’t be crazy and loyal to Alex, just like Harley. I’m just saying that Alex would never give equal power to one of the ladies in his harem. It’s just too big of a risk. I like your ideas about using the “Toy” collar as punishment. I may end up using it, if I decide to “fix” Toy. As to Emma, I haven’t yet decided what I’m going to do with her, but I doubt she’ll endure much more punishment, unless the writing of this chapter takes me in a different direction than I imagine. 

Sazbi: Thanks for voting, I really appreciate it. If I do decide to keep Toy as a toy, I don’t know how easy it would be to do POV’s from her perceptive. I’m not saying that someone who would choose to be a full-time Sub wouldn’t be interesting. But as a Sub, they are entirely reliant on someone else to tell them what to do, and as such they’re inherently not very interesting… As to your comment about whether or not the girl’s would respect the level 5 after Alex’s show of authority, I’d have to say yes. I mean the girls don’t really get a say in who is the level 5, and they know there is punishment in store for whoever disobeys the Master’s will, so the girl’s really don’t have a choice but to accept and at least put on a show of respect for whomever he puts in charge. I’m glad you like my choice to include Felicity, I hope you enjoy what I have in store for her.

Juan: I love your idea for Emma and anal, I wish I’d thought of it while I was writing. I may end up using it in the future, we’ll just have to see where the story goes. As I said, I’m not sure how much more punishment Emma will have to endure for now. For one thing, I don’t want to focus on her to the extent that the other characters get ignored…  I’m really glad that you caught the hint I dropped in the iPad message. When I wrote that line about London, and picking up a few things, I was most certainly referring to Felicity. I wondered how many people would catch that when she finally came in. I like your rational for “fixing” Toy. I know that if I go that route, it won’t be an easy fix, and she won’t revert back to directly how she was beforehand. For one thing reverting like that would be very unrealistic, and I try to have realism at least as character arcs are concerned. However, I don’t know that the “only” way to bring her back would be to turn Emma into a toy. It will be a long process, probably taking several chapters to finish. I can honestly say, that I’m excited to see where it goes. I have a few ideas, that will guide my writing, but at this point I don’t have any concrete plans for Emma or Chloe.

Grim: Thanks for the vote, bud. I really appreciate it. As I said above, I doubt very much that if Toy gets “fixed” that she’ll be the same person she was beforehand. I would imagine that she will be much more subdued for many chapters afterwards. I think seeing Taylor rise to the level 5 is an interesting idea, and I would imagine how she is now, she would be crazy loyal to Alex. It would certainly be exciting to see what that would look like. As I said above, at this point even I am not exactly sure where the story is going in this next chapter. So I can’t say for sure if your theory will pan out. I know if Taylor does rise up, it would require at least two other pieces to fall first :). Finally, I like your edging idea for punishment, I used that some already with Toy, though I didn’t play it up like I probably should have. I may end up using it again in the future in a more extreme way. We’ll just have to see. 

Hypnotizer18: Hey, nice to see a new face here, welcome! Thanks so much for the kind words, man. As an artist, it is always appreciated to hear that someone enjoys your work. I put a lot of time and effort into this story, and every time someone tells me they enjoyed it, I feel like that work is worth it. I’m glad you like the inclusions of Cara Delevingne, and Felicity Jones, I am excited myself about some fresh voices in the story. As to the inclusion of Peyton and Ariel, I think they are both pretty hot, but unfortunately, you just missed a long running poll for the fan selected addition to the harem. All the other additions will be decided by me, and I really don’t have either of those ladies on my radar for inclusion. Either way, it will probably be several chapters before I bring in anymore new blood. Anyway, thanks again for adding your voice to the thread. Please feel free to chime in with comments or questions whenever, I’m always interested in hearing what my readers have to say.

Well: Thanks for the vote, it seems for now, most people are interested in Chloe’s return. We’ll just have to see what happens… I’m really glad to hear how much you loved the chapter. I’m curious why you think it’s my best? What part of the chapter was your favorite?

OK everyone, I mostly sat down to respond to all the awesome comments and questions since my last post. Thanks again everyone for participating, it means a lot to me to hear from you guys.

I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

 

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Guest Well

I love it when Emma, Taylor and Bella was fucking. And what Alex did too Emma at the end. She need that a lot” When are you going too give them the gifts? I.e. What they ask for.

Who does they washing?

Become they could put them on the wrong wash so it would be harder for them too put on they clothes. Or they could destroy they're underwear. 

 

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I'll be real interested to see Emma’s and Alex’s conversation after he publicly shamed her like that. Also, does Alex intend to keep her in charge? In the last few chapters you sort of planted the seeds that Bella and Taylor were not satisfied with her leadership and obviously Margot doesn't like it. If not, I would love to see some sort of sex-based open competition with a promotion on the line. 

Also, as the harem grows, have you thought about making teams or permanent alliances, either officially by Alex's policy or just by natural cliques? I know it won't happen in your story, but I just wanted to throw out the fun idea of having team competitions (and exclusive rewards for the winners) as a motivator for the girls to be increasingly sexually adventurous. Given that Alex has already made the levels system and the basic requirements for each level, it'd be right in line with his sort of sociopathic behavior. 

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Hey everyone, I’m just popping on for a quick update. Since my last update 10 days or so ago, real life, and the real world in general have been kicking my ass. I won’t go into excessive detail but I lost my job, and things just sort of degraded from there. Its actually been a really rough few days for me. But, don’t get down, I’m getting by, and every day things are getting better for me. As to the story, well up until about four days ago, I only had a single page of chapter 20 written. Again, I’d urge you to not get down. Over the last 3 days, I’ve written about six / six and a half pages. So, I’m still confidant I can get the chapter ready by mid June. I’m looking at hopefully releasing the chapter on the 15th. Obviously, this is all subject to whether or not the chapter is ready on that date, its not that far away, and the chapter is only half way done. But I think its an achievable goal, as long as nothing else in my life goes wrong… Well, that’s my plan, now on to you guys!

Well: Again, bud, I’m glad you enjoyed the chapter. The gifts they asked for will be doled out over time, probably over the course of many chapters. The main reason for this is because I want them to be something special for each character, and for that I’ll want the chapter they receive them to revolve mostly around that character. Alex did more than just buy them the gift the asked for though. He also bought them gifts that he wanted them to have. Many of these are smaller, and may be given out in chapters that don’t focus as much on the character in question. I’d look for some of the girls to start receiving gifts as early as chapter 20, and for gifts to be given for a while into the story. Many of the chores of the harem are assigned. But in the case of laundry, I always imaged the girls doing their own. The one case where this may not end up being the case is with the level 5. She will have enough responsibilities and power that she will certainly be able to get someone else to do it for her. That said though, I don’t really have plans for anyone getting their clothes sabotaged, or for their undies to be damaged or stolen. There will be plenty of sexual adventures without the need for shrunken clothes or missing panties :).  

Juan: I have almost all of Emma and Alex’s talk written. Its currently taking up about seven pages in word lol! I can say that its pretty interesting stuff in my opinion. I hope you all agree when you get to read it. I won’t give away the story as to who is in charge, but I will say that while the seeds you mention were most certainly planted, by the time of Alex’s return, the only one of the ladies who are mad or upset with Emma is Margot… That said, if there was a change in leadership, I don’t know that a sex competition would be how Alex would look to fill the role. The person in charge needs to have a lot more than sexual freedoms to run things down there :). As the harem grows, and in some ways even how things sit now, cliques will form. Not only will they form, but they will fall apart, expand, and change as things happen. I do think that this will lead to rivalries with the girls, but I doubt Alex will be encouraging open competition between them. I would say this is mostly because he wants everyone to be happy, and despite his flaws, he doesn’t want to leave anyone out, or make them feel less apart of his “family” than anyone else. I think Alex encourages being sexually adventurous through the ranking system, and his one on one time with each girl.

layzninjas: Hey man, welcome to the thread. Are you the same lazyninja who writes the waking up series? I haven’t read them all, but I love Waking Up Taylor Swift! If you’re one in the same, good work, bud, keep it up! I’m glad you’re enjoying my story, and thanks for the kind words. As to Cara and Ariana. Cara will be in soon, depending on how many chapters it takes to get Alex settled back in from his long absence. If I were guessing though, I would say in three, maybe four chapters, will see the arrival of another sexy Brit to Alex’s harem. Ariana however, is a more difficult question. With the attack in Manchester, I want to wait a while before I bring her in. I feel like its a little disrespectful to do so without at least a little time in between. But, just as big a factor in her entrance is dealing with the two new arrivals, specifically Felicity and Cara. I can say with certainty that no one new will arrive until they are settled in and I’ve dealt at least somewhat with the ups and downs of two new faces in the harem. That in and of itself could take seven, eight, maybe ten chapters to work through. I feel that by then, I will be ready to bring Ariana in. I know that’s sad news for many of you, after the hype of the fan selected poll, but it is simply what it is… 

Ok everyone, thanks again for reading along. The comments and questions you leave, again brighten my day each and every time I see something new pop up here. Please keep it up! You guys mean the world to me, I mean it!

I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

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Guest Steel

I have two questions.

  1. Is Cara there yet? It wasn’t mentioned in the latest chapter so I figured I would ask.
  2. Exactly how bi is this underground compound, because simply by allowing more people into the harem, it implies that he built the place for more than just the five he first planned for. So really, how many bedrooms are in the slave quarters?
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Steel,

In one of the earlier chapters (1 or 2) he describes their being 10 individual rooms for the girls plus the main area (tv and seating with a kitchen dinner area) this then leads t a hallway with alex’s room the elevator and the punishment room. also attached to the main area are several storage areas,(these include a wide variety of things already discussed such as duct tape and the collar toy wears. then there is the fitness  room that is likely quite substantial in size as the girls have been able to work out together. then there is the shower and toilet facilities as well as a wash room for the girls clothes.

so taking all that into account the complex is likely to be quite a decent size 

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I think they should all watch a porn film  and see if they can make one better. If they can they get gift if they can't they would have to spend one day in the punishment room. 

What do you think?

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Well I’m back everyone! I finished chapter 20 tonight, and just now posted it. I must say that this chapter was more of a fight than almost any other. There was so much negative stuff going on in my life, with losing my job and all the shit that I’ve been dealing with since, I’m amazed I finished this mostly on time. I was in quite a funk there for a few days, but things are slowly looking up for me. I have a few prospects out there, and more importantly I don’t feel, emotionally, as bad as I have been. Chapter 20 may not be my longest or most complex chapter, but in a lot of ways with all this crap going on in my life it was one of the most difficult I’ve worked on. I really hope you all enjoy it. Chapter 20 picks up right were we left of in 19. In it, Alex and Emma work to resolve the events which occurred in 19, and Bella explores a relationship with a new friend. I hope that isn’t giving to much away lol. 

I hope to begin working on chapter 21 asap, but my first priority must be finding a new job. If I could support myself by writing this story, trust me when I say I would, but the reality is I need a new job. Now obviously looking for a job won’t consume all my day, and I do hope to work at chapter 21 as much as possible. I should, at least until I do find a job, be able to put even more time into writing than usual, and we’l just have to see how long it takes me to get it done. Right now though, there is no way I can offer up an estimate as to when I can release it. I can say that 21 will likely pick up right where chapter 20 left off, but it should also finally see the end of day 25 lol. From there, I’ll have to access the situation to see if moving time forward till the arrival of Cara is appropriate, or if there is anything else that needs exploring before I can fast forward time. Anyway, that’s my plan, and my current situation, on to the important thing, you guys!

Well: Thanks for your sympathy bud, I really appreciate it. As I’ve said on more than one occasion, I enjoy the responses and support you all give me as much if not more than writing the story itself. I can honestly say if it wasn’t for you guys I’d have probably given up on this a long time ago. I do this as much for you, as for me. That said, I hope your right, I have a few feelers out there now, and a couple of applications out, and I have high hopes that one of those will lead to something new and better for me… I haven’t really delved into punishment for not doing chores, as such I haven’t given it much thought, but its a great question. Off the top of my head, I’d say the punishment room would be too extreme for a first time offense. But, I could see that repeat offenders might end up spending some time in there. I would say it might be a three strike system, first a warning, then the loss of privileges, like TV time, then the punishment room. The porno idea is an interesting one, and maybe I’ll do something with filming or taking pictures or something like that, but I don’t think Alex would send girls to the punishment room for not making a good film… The punishment room is really for serious rule infraction, and is kind of a big deal… Thanks again for your questions and comments man, I do appreciate it. Also, I wanted to add, bud that this chapter fulfills a request you made of me a long while back, so I really hope you enjoy the scene in this chapter. It was your idea, but I hope everyone can enjoy it.

Steel: As always, its nice to see a new face here in the thread. Please always feel free to chime in with all your questions and comments. I love talking with you guys about my story. Here are your answers. 1) Cara hasn’t yet arrived. As we learned in chapter 17 Cara was kidnapped, just as planned. She is currently in a shipping container on a boat in the Atlantic Ocean. She is due to arrive in the compound on day 30 or so. 2) The underground complex, as I’m Batman has stated is big. Alex spent a billion dollars on the mansion above and the compound below. Both are new and top of the line structures. It has 10 bedrooms, but we’ve only currently seen 5. The main dorm area and its bedrooms are just one part of the compound. As we will learn in chapter 20, there is a whole other wing. The VIP wing is for ladies of level 4 or higher. It contains 5 luxury suites and a smaller, but more lavish living area, in addition to some other goodies that I’ll be revealing at a later time. This brings me to a question. I’ve been toying with the idea of creating a rough drawing, a map if you will of the complex. If you guys are interested in seeing me post such a map let me know, I may work up the motivation to draw it if you guys want to see it. Anyway, thanks Steel for the questions, I really hope you continue to contribute to the thread!

I’m Batman: Thanks for answering Steel’s question in my absence. Your information is more or less correct. Though I think the description of the compound mostly comes in chapter 3. At this point though I’ve been trying to include information about the compound in each chapter, just to give you guys a better vision of what it looks like. As I said above, I’ve been considering posting a rough map of it, if you’re interested let me know and I’ll try to work on it.

Ok guys, its been a killer long day for me, and I need some sleep. So here is chapter 20, enjoy!

I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

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Thank you for the reply Mal. I am the same LazyNinjas and thank you for the kind words on Waking Up. It really helps me get going on the next chapter when I know people are ready for the next one so thank you very much for the kind words and welcome. also sorry to hear about the job loss and i understand the Ariana situation. In fact she was one of my 1st choices for waking up 5 but now I am also going to not write about her for a while out of respect to that situation. hope everything looks up soon for you man. Loving this story and appreciate the hard work u put in 

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Good luck on getting a new job asap Mal.  

Sucks that Toy will be turned back, but will be interesting how different Chloe will be when she “recovers.”  Maybe she will still need to be dominated by someone else, or dom one of the new girls?  The Taylor tease is pushing her possibly as the next threat to Emma, would be funny if none of the others get a sense of the new Taylor and only Bella can tell.  Margot seems to be in limbo on what to do with her until Cara’s arrival.  Can’t wait for the next one.     

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Hey everyone, just popped in for a quick update. Chapter 21 is well on its way. I’m a little more than half way through the writing. At this point, I hope I can have it up by the first week in July. The chapter picks up immediately where we left off in chapter 20. It will start off with Margot, where I have something very interesting in store for you all. Then we’ll see what’s in store for the newest member of the harem, and I hope to end with a nice hook for the next chapter, which I plan, yes, to take place on day 26, lol. I have to say so far, this might be one of the darkest chapters I’ve yet written. I can’t say for sure yet just how dark it will be, but if things go according to my plan, those of you who enjoy the rough darker things, should be in for a treat. I hope that isn’t giving to much away, but I’m really excited about this chapter, and its my hope that you guys will be too. Anyway, on to you guys:

Lazyninjas: Hey man, I’m happy to offer words of encouragement to a fellow writer. I know, and I agree with you, sometimes a few nice words are all you need to keep going. I hope your work on the next Waking Up is proceeding nicely, and that you’ve picked another great celeb to focus on. Thanks for the well wishes with the job hunt, that isn’t proceeding as well as my next chapter, but it is coming along. Anyway, I wanted to say thanks for the encouragement, and hoped to offer you some of my own.

Well: You’re welcome, in regards to Taylor and Bella. In truth, I’m glad I could fulfill the request you made. Its not easy to fit such things in, which is why it took so long to do. I can’t promise I’d be able to fulfill such requests in the future, but I do love to hear them. Requests, at the least, give me ideas on what you guys like and want to see, and sometimes directions on where to take the plot. Question, when you’re asking about Alex’s mates, do you mean the guards? As to the porno set… I can’t say I’ll be doing something like that. I might at some point do something with filming or pictures as I said before, but I don’t think it’ll be anything like a porno.

Sazbi: As always, bud, thanks for the comments, and thanks for the well wishes on me finding a job. I know that you’re disappointed that Toy will be returning to Chloe, but I really do think she’ll be more interesting as a recovering toy, than as a sub dependent on Emma for everything. As to Taylor, I do have a few things in mind for her, some of which you’ll be getting a glimpse of in the next chapter. I hope you like it :). And, with Margot, as I mentioned, she’ll be starting off Chapter 21, and will certainly not be in limbo. I really think you all will enjoy everything that’ll be going on in the next several chapters. 

Ok everyone, just wanted to give you guys a quick update. Chapter 21 should be up in early July, and I already have several ideas for what’s going to happen in chapter 22 so hopefully I can get it up and going quickly there after. 

Alright, I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

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Mal, sorry to hear about your job woes and the real world being a bitch to you. Have been there before and it sucks pretty hard. Best of luck to you in your job hunt. 

I would love to see a map of the complex and hopefully one of the vip area whenever you feel like releasing it. It would really add to the experience for all of us I think. 

Story-wise, do you plan on telling the story from Chloes perspective or will she need to be “fixed” first? Also I hope that things don't get too dark for Margot…

Thanks for writing this awesome story for all of us fans. And, again, good luck on the job hunt. 

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I know I said the first week of July, but I decided I’d make it the first day of July instead. Ok, as I stated earlier. Chapter 21 picks up right where 20 left off, Immediately following Margot. There is an unforeseen consequence of her actions while Alex was away, and then we finally get to see Felicity in action in the punishment room. After that, I set up a dark hook for the next chapter. I hope that isn’t giving too much away, but I’m really excited about this chapter. I think its one of the best I’ve done, since maybe 16. Also, this chapter, in my opinion, is pretty dark, there is a pretty rough sex scene. I hope you all like it. I don’t know when I’ll start work on chapter 22, but this chapter has gotten me very excited to begin working on it, so probably soon, and since I still have extra free time it is my current hope to get it done quickly. Yes, that means I haven’t yet found a new job, but the search is progressing, and I’m hoping to find something soon. Anyway, I don’t really want to talk about that, I’d rather talk about you guys.

Juan: Thanks for the sympathy bud, it means a lot to me. The map is done, I’m hoping it will be at the bottom of this post. Assuming the file meets the size requirements, and it isn’t turned around all upside down or something. If I can’t get it to work in the forum, I’d be happy to send it to anyone who sends me an email request. As to Chloe, I’d say a bit of both. I don’t think a chapter from her POV would work until she gains enough freedom to think for herself. But in all likelihood, I will do a POV of her struggling to break free of the mental conditioning. I can’t tell you just what’s in store for Margot, all I can say is that it won’t be very nice, but I hope you all will like it anyway :) . Thanks again for your contributions, it really helps me to know that you and the other frequent commenters are there supporting me and reading my work, I don’t know if I could keep it up without you guys.

Well: I really don’t see a scenario where the guards build a set and film a porno. For one thing, there wouldn’t be anyone to see it. Also, I don’t think the celebs would ‘like’ to act in something like that, especially if they thought it was something other people might see. I would more likely use filming or picture taking as a way to humiliate or potentially blackmail/force a celeb to behave. As I’ve said, I might do something like that in the future, I just don’t see it resembling a porno… Thanks again for the comments and questions, keep it up.

Ok guys, I’m going to see if I can post this map of the complex here. If it doesn’t show up here, it was either too big to load, or I’ve deleted it because I couldn’t get it to orientate in a way that makes sense. If it isn’t here, and you’re interested in seeing it, please please please drop me an email. I spent 5-6 hours drawing this thing :) and I really want you guys to see it. Here goes:

I’m not sure if that worked, lol I guess we’ll see.

Ok, I hope you guys enjoy the chapter, and I look forward to reading any comments you guys have on it.

I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

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<<Ok, it’s pretty clear this link to the map doesn’t work. That said, I’m going to leave the link here to alert readers that a hand drawn map of the complex exists. But, THE LINK DOES NOT WORK. If you want a copy of the map, please drop me an email. You can get my address by clicking on my avatar next to this, or any of my posts, and I’ll pass it along to you straight away.>>

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Awesome series! Only figured out it existed here and not just on C-S-S-A (where I originally found out about it).

You’re doing a great job executing on a fantasy I’ve had for a long time, picking great girls, and fleshing out great relationships between characters. (My personal fantasy revolved more around the same kind of perverse games, but arranged around some kind of “league” where all girls get points for doing certain things, earning the right to fuck their master, buy skimpy clothes, or to dominated girls with lower scores).

I loved the introduction of Cara with girls fighting over her. Would love to see something similar for future additions (e.g. some girl asking for girls from Taylor’s “squad” to be added to the harem, against Taylor’s will, e.g. her “protege” Hailee Steinfeld, whom she would want to protect and sacrifice for, only to be rebuked by her master). 

But I’m sure you’ve already cooked up some great stuff for the upcoming chapters! 

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Hey been a while since i posted here, just caught up to the latest chapter and WOW what a chapter :P. I must say i do enjoy it most when the girls get punished and reading the rough stuff that went on in this chapter was riveting. Could imagine Felicity’s pretty face as she was being broken in and the further torment she’ll endure with Thando and Zeru. Loved that twist at the end to with Emma being so vindictive on Margot and Emma’s relationship with Alex is really getting going now huh with the bonding this chapter :). I’m not sure if you’re still wanting celeb suggestions but in case you still do my votes go to Kylie Jenner, Scarlett Johansson, Miley Cyrus and Sophie Turner.

Sorry to hear bout your job situation Mal, wish you well and hope you bounce back quickly. Keep up the good work.

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Dude Emma needs some serious punishment, all she’s been doing for the past couple of chapters is just undermine and break Alex’s rules left and right and he keeps rewarding her for it like an idiot just because she was his childhood crush or something. Like she broke Chloe without consulting him first, she took away margot’ choice again without consulting him and he lets her walk all over him and gives her power that basically rivals his own in the harem, he should put her in the toy collar for a few days, see how she likes that, or at the very least you should have Cara or one of the other girls seriously rival her authority in the harem, maybe have them form some sort of coalition against her, try to sabotage her by pushing her further and further making her punish them for the slightest mistakes until finally Alex demotes her or something like that for abusing her power. 

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I'm starting to fear for Alex. Emma is becoming something scary, fuck. Loved the chapter though. Great work. 

Wonder, idk if it's been said already. Probably but whatever saying it again. Would a threat of releasing explicit footage to the world be enough to incite good behavior? I think that would be fun to see play out. 

 

Good luck on the Job Search. Hell, with how well you write I bet a patreon would be successful.

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Hey guys, just popped on to address some of the posts, and to give a quick update. First, I’ve gotten emails from several of you about the map. It looks like many of you have tried accessing it from the forum with no luck. If you want to see it, please please please email me. I’m more than happy to send it to anyone who wants it. You can get my email address by clicking on my avatar next to this or any of my posts.

Second, I started working on the next chapter last night! I haven’t gotten too far yet, but I can say that the page or so I did write is full of good stuff that I can’t wait for you guys to see. Very interesting things will be happening in the upcoming chapters :). Speaking of which, I know many of you are anxiously awaiting the arrival of Ms. Delevingne, So, I’m seriously considering a fast-forward after this chapter to day 30 when she’ll arrive. It will mostly depend on whether or not I feel like anything else needs to be addressed, but very likely that is what I’ll do.

Let’s see, the job hunt progresses, I have several promising applications out there and I’ve got my fingers crossed that at least one of them will lead to an interview here very soon. But in the mean time, I plan to continue putting a lot of work into BDH. As to BDH, I thought I’d do another quick poll. This one will have to do with Ms. Watson, whom many of you in your recent posts have had strong opinions about. Again, this will be pretty informal, and the results won’t be binding. But I am curious what you guys think, and the results could end up influencing upcoming chapters. So, here’s the question:

Emma’s power within the harem has been growing stronger and stronger since Alex left her in charge while he was gone. Many of you think she is too powerful, too willful, some of you even think she is being defiant of Alex. I’m surprised that no one has mentioned it, but her actions could also be viewed as almost psychotically loyal. Sure, I think no matter how you look at it, she sees herself as more of Alex’s equal than she did in the beginning, but I think that comes with the territory of being put in charge. Given all that, what do you all think of her actions? Has she gone too far, or is she just behaving how she might think Alex would want? Should Alex put her in her place? Remember that as of now, he really has no one to step up and run the day to day without her. If he does punish her, how strict should he be? And lastly, if you think punishment is in order what would you like to see that punishment be?

Ok, I’m really interested to see what you guys think. No matter what, this poll won’t influence the next chapter, as I’ve already got several things in mind and set in motion for what’s going to happen with her. But it could certainly influence events in 23 and beyond. Now, on to you guys:

JohnS: It’s nice as always to see a new face here. I’m glad you were able to find my stories here. I started posting them here because of the forum actually. C-S-S-A’s forum is pretty dead, and its very hard to get added so that you can post there. Also they have strict rules about what you can and can’t say. For instance, I would have made an announcement that my stories were going to here on AFF, but they won’t let you mention other websites in your posts. Also, it takes forever to get a story added. You have to submit them by email, and the moderator only updates like every month or so. Here, I completely control when my story goes up. I can edit it if I need to change something, or take it down if for some reason I didn’t want it to be available anymore. Bottom line is, AFF’s forum is much more active so I can talk with my readers, and their site is much more author friendly and that’s why my stories will always be here before I post them to C-S-S-A or anywhere else. Also, thank you so much for the kind words. As I’ve so often mentioned in my posts I love feedback, (and not just positive comments). I feel like anytime a reader gets involved its because they are passionate about what they’re reading, and want it to be better. That’s why I even like so called “negative” comments. I too feel like the chemistry between the girls is creating great relationships, and that is ultimately why people read it, well that and all the kinky smut floating around :). I don’t know about earning the right to buy slutty clothes, or fuck the master. You would think the master would want them to do that, or make them do it. I feel like if they had to earn that right, most of them wouldn’t do it at all. You’re not the first person here to mention leagues, or clicks of girls banding together, and I think, especially as the harem gets more ladies, that will happen. But competition to have sex with someone who has imprisoned them seems just a tad unrealistic for me, at least for now. Maybe a few of the more indoctrinated girls would participate in something like that, but I just can’t see someone who has been kidnapped going out of their way to fuck the guy who captured them. I will say though in regards to that whole idea, that as more time passes, and the ladies fall further victim to Stockholm Syndrome that maybe something like that could happen. But in a setting where at least half the ladies in the harem would still happily leave if given the chance, and the other half might be in love with the master, but are still at a point where given a few days of freedom would probably rather leave than stay, I don’t think sex competitions to earn the right to fuck a guy who has kidnapped you would work. I do like the idea of being able to dominate a girl with a lower score or level though. I don’t know if it works here though, Alex prefers the ladies to make their own choices about when and where to have sex, at least outside the punishment room. As to the idea about fighting over a girl, to “earn” the right to mentor a newbie or request someone be brought in. That might happen again. I certainly see Alex offering incentives to ladies mentor new girls and maybe they would even fight over who gets that right. As to Hailee Steinfeld though, while she’s certainly hot, she isn’t really on my radar of girls to be added. I’ve already decided on the next two ladies I’m going to add, one of which is the winner of the fan poll, Ariana Grande. After that, I only plan to add two more, and I’ve got a short list in my head of about 5 ladies I’m considering. But as adding the first two is a good ten chapters or so away, I’m no where near a place where I’d have to make a choice on the last two :). Wow, I didn’t mean to go on and on like that :). Welcome to the thread, bud. Please feel free to continue adding your voice here. 

RawDog88: Nice to hear from you again man, I’m glad you’ve been enjoying all the chapters. Thank you so much for the kind words, as always its nice to be appreciated. I wasn’t sure how I was going to introduce Felicity after I decided to include her. My initial thought was something much softer, possibly not including a visit to the punishment room at all… But, after thinking about it. I thought, you know she is so fucking cute. Wouldn’t it be really hot to just do nasty horrible things to her for an introduction. So, that’s what I did :). I’m sure you’re going to love what I have in store in the next chapter, in addition to furthering Felicity’s torment, there will obviously be Margot, but I also have another pretty cool twist / plot point / whatever you want to call it in store too. As I’ve said above, I’m not really taking celeb suggestions for this story, but I do always like to hear who people are into. If I ever get around to doing another one shot the names people give me are often places I look to for inspiration. Thanks again for the kind words. I too hope I bounce back quick and find a new job, though its already been close to a month :(. But anyway, I’m trying to stay focused on the positive: I have more time to work on BDH! Take it easy, and don’t wait so long to chime in next time. Its always nice to hear from you and everyone.

Guest: Your post made me literally lol. Please take a look at the poll and chime in with your opinion. As to Cara or someone else becoming a rival of Emma, I can see it. As she starts and continues pushing people around, I think the number of friends she’ll have will seriously dwindle, and the others will start to turn on her. Its only a matter of time. The only question is, who’s going to have the backbone to stand up, and what form will their rebellion take? I for one can’t wait to see how it plays out.

Grim: Thanks for the kind words about the job search, your support, and the support I’ve gotten from everyone here has really helped me deal with all this crap. As to Patreon, the biggest problem is that since what I write is primarily celebrity fan fiction, if I charge money for it, I can be held liable in a law suit. Which means that anything I write, I have to, at least at some point give away. I’m just not sure who would pay $$$ for a story or a chapter that they know in a month or so they’ll be able to get for free. Also, on Patreon if what you produce is adult content, the creator isn’t added to their search engine, meaning that people have to search for you specifically. I might have some of a following to get a few people there, but certainly not enough to support myself… I love the idea, trust me I would love to be able to support myself with this story. I just don’t know how viable it is. I think it’s hilarious that you said your afraid for Alex. Emma’s power is growing, personally I find it interesting how she’s evolved. You know, I just took one thing about her, and built on it. She’s a very outspoken feminist. An agenda, coincidentally that I agree with. But I started thinking about how being a feminist, and a champion of women's rights would be effected by being imprisoned in a harem and forced to fuck the guy who kidnapped you. That is what led to her passion about making the rapes stop and making people follow the rules… She just sort of devolved from there in to a bit of a psycho lol. I’m very interested to see where she goes :). As to the idea of using video footage to enforce good behavior, I did a bit of that in Chapter 6 with Taylor. Its an idea that I planned to go back to and use again, I just haven't’ gotten there yet. I do know that next time I use it, its going to be much more explicit as a method of blackmail. Thanks again man for participating in the thread, I look forward to hearing what you say in the poll.

Well: Hey bud, I sent the map to you. Its all good that you put the wrong name lol, we all do stupid shit when drunk :). I would have sent it without the clarification. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed it, and I look forward to your next post.

Ok gang, I didn’t mean for this post to turn into a freaking Game of Thrones novel lol. So I’m going to cut this short. Please chime in on the poll. I look forward to hearing what you all have to say. 

Till next time,

I’m Back to the Black,

Mal

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