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Hi all, I thought I'd make a general thread for feedback and responses to all my stories that aren't runaway successes (e.g. The Wolf's Snare).

If you leave any reviews or feedback here, please specify which fic you are talking about. My thanks to everyone past, present and future who reads and enjoys my work - especially if you take the time to give feedback.

Haven't read any of my stuff? Here are some of my latest and greatest (in my opinion):

All Shapes and Sizes [Fire Emblem Awakening] A night time reprieve for the Shepherds at a town inn leads to stories, alcohol and several rendezvous... more chapters, couples and tags may follow. Gregor/Nowi, Lucina/Owain, M/F, Loli, Oral, Inc/Incest, Rom/Romance, WIP, AFFO (one more chapter tying in to FE Fates coming soon!)

Samus' Heavenly Bounty Samus seduces a certain angel boy... Samus/Pit (Metroid/Kid Icarus crossover) M/F,AFFO,Femdom,Dom,HJ,BJ,deepthroat,Oral,Spank,Ageplay,RP,Minor2,Shouta/Shota,Complete

Fast Love "He admired any female into speed, he just never thought that she, a human female, would ever be an option for him." Smut-fic turned to short but sweet love story. Sonic/Danica Patrick AFFO,Anthro,Interspecies,Interracial, Beast (I guess), BJ,HJ,M/F

The Alleys of Lumiose City [Pokemon X/Y] What happens in the back streets, stays in the back streets. A series of short one-shots. Tags will be updated with each story. OC/Serena,Beauty/OC,M/F,Minor2,D/s,Dom,HJ,Humil,Oral,Oneshot,AFFO,WIP

Mitsuru's in Heat [Persona 3] The flame-haired vixen finds herself attracted to the unlikeliest of her fellow SEES members... Beast, M/F,Solo, Complete

One of my original stories that beast fans may like:

Knotty Mary The story of the Internet's leading canine bestiality porn actress. More chapters and tags may follow. B-mod, knotting, 3Plus, Anal, Beast, Bond, Dom, DP, Exhib, M/F, OC, Oral, PWP, Solo, Voy, WIP

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So I'm back with another Lara/dog fic: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817

This is a new story with no continuity with The Wolf's Snare. I picture this as the original Tomb Raider continuity but it's meant to be ambiguous. This will be a simple series of one-shots with no real story, made up of ideas I've had since TWS. As such, it probably won't drag on as long as that last story or be any where near as complicated, so it'll hopefully just be a lot of smut.

Thank you to Fox_JJ, SailorNemesis and WotanAnubis for the reviews, and for nearly 2000 view already :)

I don't have a solid title for this story yet so any suggestions on that would be appreciated.

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I actually really liked the bit of action you had near the end of the wolf's snare. Having Lara gain a sort of command over canine wildlife would be pretty cool here. You could even include dynamics like power struggles, alpha/beta relationships. Or you could give individual dogs/wolves distinct preferences. One might really like lara's taste while another likes to dominate her even outside of sex (nipping or herding her around) things like that in the wolf's snare were the highlights for me.

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I actually really liked the bit of action you had near the end of the wolf's snare. Having Lara gain a sort of command over canine wildlife would be pretty cool here. You could even include dynamics like power struggles, alpha/beta relationships. Or you could give individual dogs/wolves distinct preferences. One might really like lara's taste while another likes to dominate her even outside of sex (nipping or herding her around) things like that in the wolf's snare were the highlights for me.

Thanks. There will be a lot of little touches like that. Thanks for the extra suggestions though. Since I'm not limited to that island like in Wolf's Snare there is potential for more variety here.

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Kordde:

This was rather nice. Wouldn't mind seeing Lara getting to know other canines or other members of the animal kingdom. Magically or scientifically induced pregnancies would also be welcome.
Phil: Love stories about her with animals. Would like to see longer, more graphic stories with her and apes, pre historic animals & mythical creatures.

Thanks for reading and feeding back guys, but this story is only going to feature dogs. There are plenty of other fics out there if you're looking for something else. I read a good Minotaur fic on AFF not too long ago.

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Sorry for the lack of a swift update after chapter one. I actually have a later chapter finished but I'm having trouble with the bridging chapter(s). Already getting too ambitious for my own good on this one!

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Story of my life, lol⤴⤴⤴

The waiting for me part or being too ambitious for your own good part?

Either way, I'm really trying to get the next chapter done by the end of today. If not today then very soon, I just need to go over it one more time to see if it lives up to my imagining of it.

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Being too ambitious, imagining a gigantic multichapter arc, then finding I don't have the time or energy to deliver.

Sometimes you just have to rein things in or else you'll exhaust yourself or get bored.

So I probably won't get the next chapter up today. I need to do the last checks on it another time with fresh eyes. Stay tuned though.

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Yo, the next chapter is here. http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817&chapter=2

I'm also calling for any and all feedback regarding a better story title and any ideas involving Henry while he's still in the story. Have at it.

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Little more controlling of Lara this way around. I like the dynamic. if you're looking for ideas for the german shepherd, well, not much of a sex idea, but have you thought of making Lara sleep with him (as in, in the same bed.) Something involving the pool, or different rooms in the house. Also have you considered one chapter being Lara having sex with a female dog?

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Little more controlling of Lara this way around. I like the dynamic. if you're looking for ideas for the german shepherd, well, not much of a sex idea, but have you thought of making Lara sleep with him (as in, in the same bed.) Something involving the pool, or different rooms in the house. Also have you considered one chapter being Lara having sex with a female dog?

Thanks for the feedback. There will definitely be more action in the house in the next chapter. As for the latter suggestion, sorry, that's not really my bag when it comes to smut.

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Guest Cannon

Haven't checked this site in a while and just read your story, really love it, its very detailed on how it would happen in real life. Am looking forward to any addition chapters you write.

As for title suggestions ..

- Lara Croft - Back to Nature? (being two 'animals' doing what comes naturally and sort of similar to all the titles of the games)

As for thoughts of possibly additions...

- What about a chance of Winston come back and almost catching Lara in the act with Henry or a different dog. Just to increase the thrill or even as suggested above, while Winston is away she gets more daring about where she does it with Henry, e.g. first out the back of the mansion, then front, then pool.

- Other animals detecting animal scents on her, e.g. being Henry's bitch and this could lead to some side adventures perhaps.

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Oh and just had another through, what about Lara being more daring with the animals too, e.g. give the dog a blowjob or handjob or even kissing the animals?

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@Cannon Thanks for the suggestions. Some of these things are already planned. I'm thinking of skipping through some of the Henry stuff now just so we can get to the more one-shot stuff as in chapter one. Stay tuned, I guess.

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Will Lara be doing butt stuff with henry?

Maybe.

Sorry for the delay in this next chapter guys. There's a lot written but I'm not happy with it. As mentioned before this fic was just meant to be a series of one-shots so I'm having trouble amalgamating it within this format. It may just become more of an overview chapter. (Hopefully that can still be hot..?).

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I like the stories/chapters being linked but a series of one shots with the same theme is intriguing too. You're talented enough to get either format to work.

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Sorry for the wait, smut hounds; chapter three is finally here: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817&chapter=3

A few things; I'm not exactly a fan of this chapter but it kind of felt necessary. So, don't be too hard on me if it's not up there with my best stuff; I realise this.

You'll be glad to know, however, that better content is on the way and I've got a lot of it written already. So, yay for that.

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Chapter Four is up: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817&chapter=4

gawic 2016-03-28 id # 3000052410 Fantastic story, please continue.
And make her always ready to get fucked by her dogs, she should get kennel for it. Report Review snake1980 2016-04-11 id # 3000052457 great job on the new chapter. I cant wait to see what lara does next? maybe u could have her take the dog for a walk and she does it out in public? have to wait and see.

Thanks for Gawic and Snake for the reviews. There's plenty more varied things to come, so stay tuned.

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Chapter Five is up now: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817&chapter=5

Just out of interest, did anyone notice the sneaky cameo from one of my other stories back in chapter two?

FYI, I've got two other chapters in the works, one as a standalone story, one as an addition to one of my past stories. Stay tuned for those.

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So I've started a Lara human gangbang story, part 2 or 3 is up now: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089945&chapter=1

If you're waiting on my other stuff, don't worry, I'll be getting back to those stories soon.

Loth-Cat 2016-05-30 id # 3000052606 Great start. Lets see how this all goes for lara and the monks. Maybe she makes friends with those men.

Thanks! It means a lot when people read/appreciate my lengthy context-building sections. That's not sarcasm, I actually put a lot of thought into all aspects of these stories.

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finny94 2016-06-04 id # 3000052626 A terrific story! Very well written with good descriptions and good general flow. Not an unusual setting for a TR story, but very well executed so it's not boring.

Can't wait for part 3! Thank you and good luck.

Thanks so much for the kind words! Hopefully part 3 will live up to your expectations!

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