Guest sneaky666 Posted April 16, 2015 Report Share Posted April 16, 2015 Thanks Sneaky666, I have read the chapter which you put out and I loved it. It has some issues but those are with the usage of pronouns (you have a tendency to switch the gender ones sometimes) and sometimes a little of the sentence structure. Even with those problems it was still great and you are only likely to get better at English as time goes by. Thanks TheWarlockofChaos, these are the things I'm trying to improve. Otherwise to answer your review. collar, leashes, and petplay will make their appearances. If not for Natsuki, I have a doubt. Shy and innocent girl (13 years) or a whore who fucked all the guys in the academy. I saw some pictures not bad that you had posted but impossible to have access to that of hentaimate. I ask myself where the action should proceed to the next chapter (which I will not write right away), bar, swimming pool ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted April 16, 2015 Report Share Posted April 16, 2015 @sneaky666 I haven't read the story yet but I have to ask, is Naruto still Kushina's son in the story? And how old is he? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest RedFox Posted April 16, 2015 Report Share Posted April 16, 2015 Full female transformation with Naruto using jutsu to turn into Naruko and have sex with Guro? Kushina and Natsumi being in tuning her son/brother into just another slut for Guro? With Guro have sex with Naruko and Kushina and Natsumi? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Sneacky666 Posted April 16, 2015 Report Share Posted April 16, 2015 @sneaky666 I haven't read the story yet but I have to ask, is Naruto still Kushina's son in the story? And how old is he? Naruto is sill Kushina's son and he is 16 years old. Full female transformation with Naruto using jutsu to turn into Naruko and have sex with Guro? Kushina and Natsumi being in tuning her son/brother into just another slut for Guro? With Guro have sex with Naruko and Kushina and Natsumi? Yes, yes and yes. it's provided for future chapters. Second, brings up Natsumi, third, Naruto will be trapped by his mother and sister then drugged with aphrodisiac. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 16, 2015 Report Share Posted April 16, 2015 Thanks TheWarlockofChaos, these are the things I'm trying to improve. Otherwise to answer your review. collar, leashes, and petplay will make their appearances. If not for Natsuki, I have a doubt. Shy and innocent girl (13 years) or a whore who fucked all the guys in the academy. I saw some pictures not bad that you had posted but impossible to have access to that of hentaimate. I ask myself where the action should proceed to the next chapter (which I will not write right away), bar, swimming pool ... Sweet , I was hoping for that. Also about the hentaimate pics, the site seems to be having issues for some reason lately hopefully they will be fixed soon . As for where the story should go next I don't really know since I am not you and I don't want to hurt any scenes already in your head but aren't they at a hotel? Most U.S. hotels have their own swimming pools so that could work out or a bar being built into the hotel or even a casino it is all up to you Sneaky666. P.S. If hadn't noticed I have finally been adding smilies to brighten my posts up a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted April 17, 2015 Report Share Posted April 17, 2015 will guro be possive with kushina and natsumi. not letting anyone else touch them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted April 23, 2015 Report Share Posted April 23, 2015 What do yall think of these ideas? http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/59688-loving-nympho-kushina/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 23, 2015 Report Share Posted April 23, 2015 It isn't that bad I would read and enjoy a story like this. On the other hand it isn't my favorite kinks (I prefer full-on NTR or actual Loving Relationships (Yes, know that they are opposites but I enjoy both sides of the spectrum) but those aren't the only things I enjoy either so yes I see that challenge as a good one Guest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted April 23, 2015 Report Share Posted April 23, 2015 If you like NTR read Sanbun Kyoden bro. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JordoZ Posted April 23, 2015 Report Share Posted April 23, 2015 Anybody know if there's any lemons for Minamoto-kun Monogatari? That manga is full of ripe lemon potential. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 24, 2015 Report Share Posted April 24, 2015 Thanks TheWarlockofChaos, these are the things I'm trying to improve. Otherwise to answer your review. collar, leashes, and petplay will make their appearances. If not for Natsuki, I have a doubt. Shy and innocent girl (13 years) or a whore who fucked all the guys in the academy. I saw some pictures not bad that you had posted but impossible to have access to that of hentaimate. I ask myself where the action should proceed to the next chapter (which I will not write right away), bar, swimming pool ... Hey Sneaky666 the pics on Hentaimate should be back up again now since the site seems to okay again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted April 29, 2015 Report Share Posted April 29, 2015 Are you planning to finish those Kushina stories JordoZ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Guest Posted May 5, 2015 Report Share Posted May 5, 2015 Has anyone read Package Meat? Its a Queen's Blade hentai doujinshi starring Cattleya and in it she has sex with little kids the same age as her son. I imagine that would be some good inspiration for a Kushina fanfic getting banged by kids her sons age. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 Younger men, even young teens. Big cocks to fuck her silly. infiltrate a strip club, lose a bet against her student or even playfully flirt with a few young teens who flirt with her when she's outside the village after completing a mission and have things get out of hand before she knows it. Could you elaborate on some of these situations? I'd be happy to do a fic but I'd like to have more details since I'm not very good at creating scenarios. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 If you want inspiration check out the posts on the first two pages on this thread it will all be there trust me on this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 If you want inspiration check out the posts on the first two pages on this thread it will all be there trust me on this. I wanted info on those scenarios in particular, as they interested me the most. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 I wanted info on those scenarios in particular, as they interested me the most. I am sorry that I cannot really help you on that question beyond what is written on this thread then because I didn't write those snippets (as you most likely knew already). I guess that first question of yours' was directed to the creator of this challenge thread and writer of the snippets in question? If you can tell me which of the ideas in this section that I wrote that you like the best I can expand upon said scenario for you if you want: Now to get back to Jordo's challenge he wants Kushina to be a slut. My thought is that Kushina could get an escort mission (you know where you are supposed to guard your client from threats as they travel) to protect a rich spoiled arrogant young noble who is really horny when he sees Kushina and manages to get her to have sex with him whereupon he breaks her mind, mouth, pussy, and ass with his huge cock and then leashes and collars her for his personal enjoyment for the rest of the mission. Another is that she gets hit upon by a young man in a hot spring and is seduced by him and then roughly fucked silly. She could also be walking home after a mission and is flirts with a bunch of guys and is convinced to have sex with them. She could be seduced by a member of her genin team as well just like "MILF Sensei Vs. Perverted Student" did. Finally she could take a mission to infiltrate a criminal place (like a casino or a slave ring) and tries to seduce the criminal and it backfires with her being the one getting seduced. Example of the casino one, she could make herself be one of the woman who hang upon the arms of those guys as they gamble and afterwords she gets absolutely dominated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 Now to get back to Jordo's challenge he wants Kushina to be a slut. My thought is that Kushina could get an escort mission (you know where you are supposed to guard your client from threats as they travel) to protect a rich spoiled arrogant young noble who is really horny when he sees Kushina and manages to get her to have sex with him whereupon he breaks her mind, mouth, pussy, and ass with his huge cock and then leashes and collars her for his personal enjoyment for the rest of the mission. Another is that she gets hit upon by a young man in a hot spring and is seduced by him and then roughly fucked silly. She could also be walking home after a mission and is flirts with a bunch of guys and is convinced to have sex with them. She could be seduced by a member of her genin team as well just like "MILF Sensei Vs. Perverted Student" did. Finally she could take a mission to infiltrate a criminal place (like a casino or a slave ring) and tries to seduce the criminal and it backfires with her being the one getting seduced. Example of the casino one, she could make herself be one of the woman who hang upon the arms of those guys as they gamble and afterwords she gets absolutely dominated. I like all of the bolded, the casino one doesn't interest me as much but the others do. Could you expand on them please, if you paint the picture for me I think I can get a better feel of what to write. I generally consider myself to be a fairly competent writer, but I'm not to good at creating scenarios. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JordoZ Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 They could be simple enough. It isn't a far stretch from canon to say Kushina was a prankster and really competitive.So she could find it amusing to tease teens that are practically drooling over her. Or hell, with a Genin team she could lose a bet which leads to fucking. The noble one, basically if they're high up enough in the government Kushin would be forced to obey them. (Mind you, in real serious fanfiction that would be completely wrong because the daimyo really do have little power in the villages, not to mention they're easy targets for assassination.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 8, 2015 Report Share Posted May 8, 2015 @JordoZ I have some more questions to help paint the picture for the fic. Would you want the women in general to be slutty (for example mentioning that the kid(s) that Kushina fucks has also fucked other women) or would it be exclusive to Kushina? If its going to be a multi-chapter fic would you want it to go down an NTR route or simply be a cheating fic where shes slutty but doesn't leave her husband/family? Would Kushina be known in Konoha as a slut or would it be something kept secret? Would you want Naruto or Naruko in this fic? If so how old would they be? Are there any other things in particular that you'd like to see? I'd like to get as much info as possible before I start. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JordoZ Posted May 9, 2015 Report Share Posted May 9, 2015 I'd generally go the route where Kushina is repressed, due to her husband being too soft with her in bed and only average sized. Not really slutty in the sense that she'd blow anyone who wanted her, but enough that she has no qualms about teasing teenagers practically drooling over her. I like to see build up before the sex starts, some examples can be found on page 2 of this thread where I posted some un-finished lemons of my own. It would be best kept secret since her husband is the hokage and would probably butcher whoever was banging her. A cheating fic because again Minato would murder whoever was banging his wife. You can add Naruko if you want, if not just mention them in passing to clear up that she is a milf. Sexy-outfits are a must, is all that really comes to mind fully. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 9, 2015 Report Share Posted May 9, 2015 Another thing I'd like to ask is what type of personality do you think Kushina should have? Someone who's not embarassed and openly flirts when she is flirted with? I guess I can't imagine Kushina just hoping into bed with a kid instantly lol, there would need to be build up for it to be believable imo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 9, 2015 Report Share Posted May 9, 2015 Obviously Naruto/Naruko would have to be mentioned at least once to clarify that shes a milf, also I wonder what would be going through Kushina's mind as shes about to fuck kids the same age or younger than her own son. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest A Posted May 9, 2015 Report Share Posted May 9, 2015 Also if anyone has any ideas for this fic they'd be appreciated. http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/59800-milf-hinata-gets-banged-by-her-sons-friends/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JordoZ Posted May 9, 2015 Report Share Posted May 9, 2015 Well, I see it more along the lines of Kushina's prankster attitude maturing a bit as she grew up. As a Kunoichi, she has no problems flashing a bit of skin to distract enemies for a kill, and she also finds it amusing that the teens she teases would most likely be going home to beat off to the thought of screwing her silly. Also, for instance because of this attitude if her student gropes her or a teen leers at her she promotes it because she finds it amusing. Well that, and she'd take a certain bit of pride in her student becoming a man among men, not realizing that soon she'd be getting a taste of it. Generally, I'd give the teen/student quite a bit of previous experience despite their age and that they have a real talent for the sexual arts. Hung like a horse, incredibly skilled at bringing pleasure to women and with shinobi training to give more stamina and strength for like say a standing up position while lifting Kushina. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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