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Re: “Guidelines”

From Lady Freelove on March 11, 2021

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Okay, this was dark yet still hot.

Pretty much what I was aiming for.

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I like the idea of a mother having her son's baby but this is more like slavery than mutual sexual attraction.

It’s kind of both, but yes, more on the slavery side. 

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I'm not really sure what I hink of this story.

I understand. 

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Re: “Wishful”

From Fairy-Slayer on March 12, 2021

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Heh, I can't blame Jace's family for being a bit shocked by the appearance of his "special servants" in the house, and I have to wonder if that helped use up their adrenalin and numb them at least to the mindfuck of it all – in turn letting them fully enjoy the actualfuck after actualfuck. It's lovely to see that the pets are eager to care for all of Jace's loved ones just as much, and the bit about Angela getting to indulge in her canine side a bit more worked out beautifully. The various activities around the room were easy to keep track of too, every one great erotic fun.

When I got started writing this chapter, I was intimidated by the prospect of writing an orgy scene involving 8 characters. (While I'd written bigger orgy scenes in "Hot Yoga" and "The More, the Merrier," those scenes had a defined structure that made them a bit easier to write.) But then I realized that because Jace is the only POV character in the story, I really only needed to focus on what Jace was doing at any given time, with occasional glances at the others. That made it easier to write the chapter.

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As for Duane's Wishful experience… I'm actually glad you left that an open mystery, both for some fun thoughts to linger and also to keep with Valerius' respect for all of the owners' innermost fantasies. 

I like imagining Valerius in the different roles he's taken on during his millennia in the Wishful. 

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Again, it's fun to wonder what he would see as my greatest unspoken wish. (Probably not what anyone I know would guess, and perhaps not even something I'd expect.)

Do any of us really know?

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Let's just hope the final reward isn't too powerful, as it would be hard to explain why Traffic Copter 5 landed in his backyard two or three times a week. (“Oh, she's just here to see my new baby. …sister! Baby sister!” Oh boy, then he'd really need some pointers from Lincoln Loud.) 

I LOLed the traffic copter thing. Yes, one wonders whether Jace will ever get together with Dominique IRL.

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Thank you for such a fun & intriguing tale of erotic fantasy.

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

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2 hours ago, JayDee said:

Just wanted to say again I enjoyed the first parts of Wishful I checked out and the author notes showing more of the effort going into it are super interesting! Quality writing as ever Mr Glass.

Thank you! I appreciate your taking the time to review this story (multiple times) despite your not being comfortable with all parts of it.

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Re: “Wishful”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 14, 2021

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Skitty Chapter 2 review

Wow!! So he WASN'T going crazy!! I guess the W token is like...some kind of genie lamp?  He thinks "I wish..." and BOOM!  At his castle.  

Yup, very much like a genie lamp. You’ll find out how much so later on.

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Very interesting that the castle seems to be inhabited soley by people Jace knows.  Maybe Valerius (sorry if I butchered the spelling) 

Nope, you got it right.

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is Jace's dad? Grandpa? Third Grade gym teacher?

Is he all three? Eh, maybe not.

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Now, the talk about Rosemary being a hoity toity bitch in the real world getting translated to the castle world makes me think that Jace "fixing the problem" in his castle will "fix the problem" in the real world.  Although I also can't help but think that with lines like "the Jace of this world knew how to please Aliss", our Real world Jace is actually taking over the body of an ACTUAL king in an ACTUAL world where everyone just so happens to look like people our Jace knows.  

You'll find out more about that as you go.

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Kinda reminds me of that one Gravity Falls story you did, where Dipper took over the bodies of other Dippers in the Multi-verse.

You read "Multiversity"? I'm flattered.

FYI, I recently started outlining a new Gravity Falls story, titled "Depravity Falls."

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As for the sex itself, MMMMM-MMMM!!!  

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It's a personal fetish of mine, watchin (or in this case reading) a high and mighty BITCH get BROUGHT DOWN and reminded of her place.  Stories of Jaune Arc taming Cinder Fall and Weiss Schnee are my go-tos for that kind of itch, although this chapter will now be joining my mainstays :-3

Wow, you and Joma are really in sync with your fetishes.

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Having Aliss demind the haughty Dutchess put to words what her body was feeling as the King took her to the moon was unexpectedly hot.  As was (and I'm assuming will be) the juxtaposition of this mideval/fantasy/DnD style world, but all the women wearing seemingly modern day undergarments/lingerie.  I love it

Yeah, Joma was pretty specific about the lingerie. Even if he hadn't been, authentic medieval underwear probably wouldn't have made for a fun read. :)

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As for the other thing I liked...Is Coin of the Realm a real game?  You saying it's a resource based game makes me think of Catan, obviously, but is it an actual product?  Or is it another well thought out product that doesn't actually exist, but totally should?  Like the "Nuke Em!" commercial from the original Robocop.

Coin of the Realm is not a real game, but it is indeed inspired by Catan. 

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The last thing I will say about this chapter is, if THIS is the quality of only the SECOND chapter, I can only shudder in pure joy and need as I imagine whats coming up next.  

I hope you'll like it just as much!

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Re: “Wishful”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 15, 2021

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Skitty Review Chapter 3

So, our first taste of Angleica in the Wishful world.  That does sound better than "castle world" lol.  

Joma came up with the name "Wishful." 

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The bunnies reminded me of Lola Bunny from the ORIGINAL Space Jam, becasue we furrys don't talk about the new one.  

Mmmm, Classic Lola is hot. 

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It's really cool how well you can mesh funny and sexy, because I liked the public performance just as much as the private one! 

Thanks! When Joma said that the rabbits would be twins who finish each other's sentences, it made me think of the Dee Dees (Harley Quinn's granddaughters) from Batman Beyond, and that gave me the idea to make them circus-type performers. 

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Well, not "as much".  There is no beating two sexy rabbit girls giving their king his due respect.  And that Cottontail special was STRAIGHT out of my deeper furry fantasies ;-)

Did I mention how in sync you and Joma are with your fetishes? :)

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And it looks like I was right.  Jace gets to "fix the problem" in the Wishful, and that also starts to "fix the problem" in the real world.  He plows the haughty Dutchess Rose in his castle, suddenly Rosemary is intrested in going out with him.  It's pure porn logic, and I LOVE IT!!

Porn logic is best logic.

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Hopefully the other pets get their turn along with Lady Angel soon.

Hmmm, yes, hopefully. :)

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I'm loving this so much!!

Thank you, and thanks for the reviews!

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Re: “Wishful”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 15, 2021

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Skitty Chapter 4 

Well, two lemons!  I wasn't expecting that!  

Chapter 4 is where things start ramping up. 

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I know you said Joma and I are in sync when it comes to fetishes, but this chapter is a fork in the road.  He is a dog person, I am for SURE of the feline persuasion.  So, going off the fact that the rabbits and now Snowdrift have had their turn, I can only hope that Athena gets it on with the King soon. 

No spoilers. But I'm a cat person, too. :)

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That's not to say I hated the Neva lemon.  Body worship is a very underutilized kink, and it totally makes sense that Joma would want a girl like Neva to be more than just another set of holes.  Her 'worship' worship of Jace was also very well done, as would be expected from a being like Snowdrift who would be able to sense she was in trouble and Jace saved her.

Joma specifically requested that particular fetish for Snowdrift’s alter ego. I hope I did it justice.

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But then we get to the Alice lemon....WOW.  Just...that went from saucy date talk to straight up sister fucking FAST.  

Alice has wanted Jace, and vice versa, since long before the magic token came into the picture. But the influence of the Wishful brought Alice's desires to the fore.

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Not that I'm complaining.  Now all that needs to happen is Jace needs to "recruit" Angelica, and then the three siblings team up on Laura.  

Again, no spoilers. :)

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Can't wait to see whats next!

I can't wait for you to see it.

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Re: “Monsters”

From JayDee on March 19, 2021

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I was thinking it might go for a humorous take but this here was one hard brutal assault on that tentacle fellow. I think the details of how much it hurts to have his sensitive tentacles squeezed really drove that home, and also the fears over his being able to just get home.

Making it a comedy seemed too predictable; I’m sure someone (or many someones) have done a tentacle-monster-gets-raped comedy already. I thought it would be more interesting to go the other way with it.

BTW, if you want to see my attempt at a rape comedy, check out “A Little Goes a Long Way.”

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I was sort of hoping the spider-libarian would happen by after work and help out.

I’m not sure she ever leaves the library; her web is probably on the ceiling. Makes for a short commute.

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I liked the obvious peer pressure amongst the girls, too, with one being reluctantly nudged into taking part. Felt more realistic than just the faceless rapist trope.

Thanks! I was trying to make them believable mean-teens.

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Hard not to see him in human terms even though he's clearly a distinctly non-human blobby monster, and not a jerky one like the late Rush Limbaurg.

Some blobby monsters are capable of empathy, others not so much.

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Talented writing as ever!

Thank you, and thanks for the review!

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Re: “Monsters”

From JayDee on March 19, 2021

Making it a comedy seemed too predictable; I’m sure someone (or many someones) have done a tentacle-monster-gets-raped comedy already. I thought it would be more interesting to go the other way with it.

BTW, if you want to see my attempt at a rape comedy, check out “A Little Goes a Long Way.”

Definitely an interesting way to go about it -I hope it didn’t seem like my thoughts were negative/critical on the theme – I’ve written gangrape stuff myself after all!– but a testament to your writing skills in making the tentacle monster really sympathetic! I’ll have a look at the other one at some point, possibly not today :)

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I’m not sure she ever leaves the library; her web is probably on the ceiling. Makes for a short commute.

“Do you have any books on the supremacy of the aryan race?”

“...step into my parlour.” *puts lunch break sign out*

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Thank you, and thanks for the review!

No probs!

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6 hours ago, JayDee said:

Definitely an interesting way to go about it -I hope it didn’t seem like my thoughts were negative/critical on the theme –

No, I didn’t perceive them that way at all. 

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I’ve written gangrape stuff myself after all!– but a testament to your writing skills in making the tentacle monster really sympathetic!

Thanks! As the title implies, monstrousness is more about behavior than how many limbs you have. :)

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“Do you have any books on the supremacy of the aryan race?”

“...step into my parlour.” *puts lunch break sign out*

 

:)

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Re: “Monsters”

From Fairy-Slayer on March 20, 2021

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This was both hilarious and sad – a real ride. You subverted the tentacle "monster" and schoolgirl dynamic beautifully, and I really felt bad for Takito.

Thanks!

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(Though I mean, he is doing big a study project on monsters and then takes a foolish risk in the habitat of the worst kind of all – teenagers!)

They don’t teach monster kids about teenagers until at least 10th grade. Too graphic.

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Also, kudos for pointing out how they all look, uhm, similar, except for the hair, and using the standard manga clique dynamic. their assorted rape styles covered the range nicely too. Miseri rounding out the Japanese noncon dynamic was a cute touch, though not as cute as how Takito talks.

Yeah, I definitely went with the anime-hair thing. I also get the impression that dyeing one’s hair is a major act of rebellion for a Japanese teenager, so it seems like something a bunch of real baddos like these gals might do.

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Thanks for the fun yet bittersweet tale. (If only tentacle monsters could wear rubbers in rough climates.)

:)

Oh, and a couple of author’s notes about this story:

  • According to my internet research, all of the girls’ names in this story are authentic Japanese names. Tora means "tigress," and Rin indicates a person who is cold, severe, and dignified. The other four names were chosen for their resemblance to English words: Miseri for misery, Sada for sadism, Nagi because it resembles "naga" (a mythical snake creature) and "Nagini" (Voldemort's huge snake in Harry Potter), and Saeko because it is pronounced like "psycho."
  • To my knowledge, Takito is not a real name -- which was a deliberate choice because I didn't want the monster character to have a human name. It's based on "tako," the Japanese word for octopus.
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Re: “A Little Goes a Long Way”

From JayDee on March 23, 2021

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Seeing it being told in dialogue was kind of a shock. I had flashbacks to old scriptfics, but fuck it does really work here. No trouble keeping apart who is who either, since she stays in character throughout.

Thanks! This was a big experiment for me, as I had never written a dialogue-only story before. But with only two characters, it seemed doable; I think it would have been much harder with even one more. 

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I don't tend to go for ageplay stuff, but the humour side really helped.

I’m actually not big on ageplay myself. But when I learned about littles, I saw a lot of potential for comedy in a grown woman wanting to act like a little girl.

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It really was funny! His bafflement at all of it really sold everything, and clearly she does have the strong will he noticed since she's playing submissive but totally getting her own way. That line about how he's a serial rapist, or will be when he finds someone else, was dark as heck but hilarious. Also the shortbus mention.

Thank you! I had so much fun writing this one. And I definitely made use of the “the submissive is the one in control” trope.

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Great ending too, especially that discussion about why he picked her and what he aimed for - guess it worked out without working out how he wanted.

One of those “getting what you need instead of what you want” situations.

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Nice one!

Thanks again, and thanks for the review!

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Re: “Wedding Night”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 27, 2021

Okay, first of all, not only is this the cutest review I've ever seen in my life, but you wrote it about a story that I would not have expected either of you to read, let alone like. You two are full of surprises.

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/Well...that was twisted.  Hot, yes...but very twisted.

"Hot but twisted" is among my more favorite subgenres. :)

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I agree.  Kind of a reverse situaion of "Flesh."  Bringing that up, I can't help but think that Eden will use her unlimited resources to do some kind of plastic surgery on Flora.  "Sex her up" if you will.

Right now, Flora is a young, fresh flower. Eden wouldn't want to mess with that.

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/I think Eden will do something like that, only the opposite.  She will keep Flora young, tiny, flat chested and "pure" like that as long as she possibly can.  Hell, she might get a surgeon to remake Flora's hymen, just so High Lady Eden can have the pleasure of breaking it again.

It's entirely possible that Eden will want Flora "restored" at some point, maybe after Flora has pumped out her first five or six kiddies for Eden.

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...and you call the story twisted, Skitty.  

LOL! I'm with Joma on this one. :) 

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/What can I say?  You have rubbed off on me, Joma ;-3

Did I mention that this is the cutest review ever?

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....moving on before this turns into an RP.  I do like the world here.  Feels very "Cyberpunk-y"  Specifically the new game Cyberpunk 2077.

The game that came out broken? Not sure I like that comparison. (I kid you. :))

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/Yeah, feels very much a future Utopia of haves and have nots. Or like Veruca Salt and Charlie.

Ooooh, that'a a rather good comparison.

The backstory I have in my head is that at some point, aliens came to Earth (or some version of Earth) round about the 16th century. Rather than colonizing the planet, they used genetic engineering to mix their DNA with that of humans, which produced the first Ladies. The aliens gave them immense wealth and technology, and once the Ladies were established as Earth's permanent overclass, the aliens moved on to repeat the process on other worlds.

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I do wonder if Eden will grow...bored of Flora as she gains more wives.  And how involved in the lives of her many children she will be.

The way I conceive of this world, that will depend on the children. Only about 1 in 5 will be born a Lady; the rest will be girls. (Males are only found in the working classes.) The Ladies will be given the best possible education and an inheritance, while the girls will be trained to serve them. 

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/Maybe if she ends up siring some particularly beautiful daughters?  And I know if she has a daughter with a cock or a very well endowed son, she will train them to be as predatory as she is.

I could totally see that.  

/ ;-3

No sons (see above), but yes, Eden will most certainly train her futa-daughters to be ruthless -- sexually and otherwise.

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Is there possibly going to be any more to this story?

I hadn't thought of continuing Flora and Eden's story in particular, but I might very well write other stories set in their world. 

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/Or possibly... would you be open to another author adding to this? ;-3

Oh, most certainly. I'd be intrigued to see what you come up with.

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Skitty and Joma

Thanks for the review! It made my day.

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Re: “Wishful”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 27, 2021
 

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Skitty Chapter 5 

Ohhhh!! You're clearly a cat owner.

Oh yeah. That bit about Athena putting herself directly between Jace’s face and his tablet screen is what one of my cats used to do to my wife all the time.

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I could FEEL that feline defiance through everyone or of Pallas' actions. But once again seeing a high and mighty bitch be brought to heel on the massive cock of King Jace was JUST what I wanted to see.

Have I mentioned how fetish-compatible you and Joma are? :)

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Quick question, just HOW substantial were those kitty titties?  A rough estimate of cup size?  

She’s probably a G-cup. It’s hard to say for sure, though, because the Benata use an ideographic language instead of an alphabet. :)

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(Purposefully ignoring the cliffhanger with someone spying from outside the window because I refuse to acknowledge that something bad might happen).

*whistles casually*

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And then Laura being a bigger slut for Jace's (newly, magically enchanted) massive cock than Alice was? God I want to see what her day at work was like with a gallon of her sons sperm sloshing around inside her.

Oh, my. That thought puts a smile on my face. 

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I loved this chapter so much.  

Thank you!

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Hopefully it won't take me forever to read the next one lol. 
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No worries, feel free to pace yourself. :) Thanks for the review!

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Re: “Wishful”

From IttyBittySkitty on March 29, 2021

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Skitty Chapter 6

*skitty.exe has stopped working. Please reboot*

Aw, crud, I crashed Skitty. Who do I call for tech support?

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HOLY SHIT. YOU ACTUALLY DID IT!! You managed to work in King Jace fucking some of his chambermaids!!! 

I almost forgot that the request for chambermaid shenanigans came from you. Glad you enjoyed. 

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And holy hot damn, this chapter was more like "Lemons lemons and more lemons!!!" 

When life hands you lemons, make porn. Or however that saying goes.

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I mean COME ON!! I don't blame Min for getting so flustered! The King has obviously been blessed by whatever Diety is responsible for sex in the Wishful!!

That would be me. *head overinflates and explodes*

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PLEASE tell me those girls seek out Jace in the real world. If fucking Queen Mother Lara can make Laura Lyman have dreams that lead to her fucking her son, then an hour and a half foursome (that reminded me of the Aphrodite scene in God of War 3) should have those girls and that news caster DESPERATE to find Nace

That could happen, yes. Although, as Fairy Slayer pointed out, it might be a touch awkward if a traffic copter lands in the back yard. :)

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And that Bombshell ending!  OMG I love this story so much!!!  

Thank you! And I hope you like where that ending leads in the next chapter. 

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*skitty.exe has stopped working...again.*

Joma, try turning her off and back on again. Anything?

Thanks for the review!

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Re: “There’s a New Seraph in Town”

From Rick_Andrew on April 03, 2021

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New Seraph In Town is pretty awesome, George Glass' story makes me smile. 

The year I wrote this, I wanted to go the opposite direction from the usual horror stories and write a feel-good Halloween story instead. If it made you feel good, then I’m glad to have succeeded.

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Re: “Firelight”

From Maxsteele1986 on April 06, 2021

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This was amazing. It will be awesome to read more sessions between Miss Elsie and Mister Jeffrey. 

It’s wonderful to see a review of one of the first original stories I ever posted on AFF. I can scarcely believe that it’s been almost 8 years since then.

I never wrote any more about those characters; the story pretty much ended where I wanted it to end. But I’ve got plenty of other furry stories on this site that you might like.

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Re: “The Interview”

From Maxsteele1986 on April 11, 2021

Max, I’m going to respond to the various parts of your three reviews out of order, because some of them kind of go together.

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I am enjoying reading this story and all of your stories I have read so far. 

 

Thank you!

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1. In two places in this chapter (chapter 3) is has Daisy's name as Lola. 

This chapter was great too. The only thing is the the bull handler's name being Pablo came out of nowhere near the end of the chapter. 

 

Wow -- this story has been posted for 7 years, and you're the first person ever to mention those errors to me. I've gone in and fixed them. Thanks!

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Also do the female and male handlers have sex with each other while watching their cow and bull mating? It would have been great to read that side too.

Honestly, I never thought about it. I tend to think of the dairy's employees as professionals who wouldn't be getting freaky at work. (Maybe at home after a long day of watching cows get bred, though...)

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2. Is this supposed to be a retelling of the story "Firelight" but with humans instead of animals?

No. This story was inspired by some "hucow" drawings I saw on Hentai Foundry. Also, this story started out as a oneshot (I changed my mind soon after posting it), which is why it’s titled “The Interview” – because the interview scene was the whole story.

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3. Will there ever be a sequel for "Firelight"?

I don't have plans for one, no. 

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This was amazing. Could we get a sequel where Daisy and Clarabella have their calves and we get to see what happens next in both the lives of all the cow on the farm and how their calves lifes turn out?

I'm not planning a sequel to this story. I generally only write sequels if I have what I think is a good idea for an interesting new direction to go with the characters. 

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P.S. I noticed while trying to do a review for this story that the site keeps logging me out by itself even though I never told it to, resulting in the site thinking I am trying to do an anonymous review and making me have to writing the same review about 8 times now. Is there a problem with the site?

I haven’t seen any forum posts about problems with posting reviews. You might want to report that in the General Staff Questions forum.

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Re: “Satisfaction”

From Maxsteele1986 on April 11, 2021

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This whole story left a warm feeling in my heart and gave me lot of orgasm fuel.

I’m glad. This was basically meant as a feel-good porn story.

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It's a pity the brother and sister next door didn't feel the same way. Will you do a story where we see their love story and if everything works out?

Another author actually did write a spinoff story about those two characters, but it’s only posted on Lolicit. 

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They should get Lucy and Sara to join in the fun, or if not see if they have fun with their own families too.

Max, I really appreciate your enjoying my stories and taking the time to review them, but would you mind not asking me for sequels anymore? If I am planning a sequel for a given story (or if there already is one—see below), I’ll let you know in my review reply. 

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Re: “Keene’s Really Good Week”

From Maxsteele1986 on April 11, 2021

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Maybe we can get an chapter set in the future so we can see how Keene is when he is older, wiser and can make children. 

There is actually a sequel to this story, titled “Keene’s College Weekend.” And at some point, I’m planning to write a third and final Keene story.

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Re: “Darla’s Dad”

From Maxsteele1986 on April 14, 2021

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At the end of this 2nd part, it was looking like Darla was going to have a horrible life like her mother, but luckily everything turns out okay in the 3rd and final part.

Yes, Risa’s concluding chapter is nice.

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