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Re: "There's a New Seraph in Town"

Creating a review reply thread before the story has gotten any reviews: blind optimism or shameful arrogance? Yes.

In any case, if any of you lovely folks reviews "There's a New Seraph in Town," I will joyfully reply here.

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Re: "There's a New Seraph in Town"

Gabriel:
I tend to hold little expectations while surfing this site. Y'know, for obvious and saturated reasons. But I never expected this. This is wonderful! Your little comment about things not heating up until the third chapter got me there in the first place, 'curious', to put it lightly. But the more I read, the more I realised that I had to go back to the beginning and give this story what it deserves. And now I'm giving you what you deserve, for being the author of such a delightful, heartwarming, twisty-turned story that inspires the best in all of us, even in the little things we do (or are wont to do).
This is wonderful. Thank you.
Thank you very, very much. Everything you said about the story is exactly what I was trying to achieve.
I really appreciate the props, especially from Gabriel himself! :)
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Responses to reviews of my original story, "Firelight." (A cow visits a stud service to get bred and finds that the experience exceeds her expectations. (M/F, furry, big boobs, big cock, impregnation, Southern accents) Anthro, COMPLETE, M/F, Oneshot, Oral, Preg)


Jomahawk2694 2013-12-22 id # 3000214750
Very very good. I am a furry myself, so this story was made all the better by the animal aspect. I for one would love to see more of this story, please ;)
JMAHWK
Glad you liked it! I have no plans to continue this particular story, but I will definitely post more furry stories here.
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Re: "Wild Side"

Joan-Reverie 2014-01-03 id # 3000214991
You ever heard the term "guilty pleasure"? Well I feel pretty damn guilty about this, haha.
Well, this story IS pretty much straight-up porn (although I tried to put a twist or two on it), so I think "guilty pleasure" is a highly appropriate assessment.
But then again. I'm such a sucker for dirty talk.
One thing I learned while writing this story is that dialogue can sometimes be hotter than action. I kept finding myself, um, rereading the part where Daddy tells Angie what he's going to do when they go back home.
Thanks for reviewing!
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Re: "Leilaya's Evening"

Jomahawk2694 2014-01-20 id # 3000215551
Very nice man. I really enjoyed this one, and im happy to see the furry gener get as much respect from you as everything else you do.
JMAHWK
Thank you! As I note in the disclaimer, I wrote this story for a contest winner on Inkbunny, so he got to choose the main character and the fetishes that the story would involve. Even though I'm not all that into, for example, dragons and footjobs, I found myself enjoying finding ways to write about them that would do them justice and would be as exciting to me as to the contest winner and other readers.
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Re: "The Last Toy"

axo 2014-01-28 id # 3000215785
Awww. That was pretty out of the norm, but it was well written and very cute. I can dig the fluff it it is written like this. More please! Is Sallybear going to develop human like emotions and feelings? I'm sure her AI is very advanced!
Cheers
No worries, there are two more chapters coming very shortly! I'm glad you're enjoying it.
As for Sallybear...no spoilers. :)
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Re: "The Last Toy"

Mona Thompson 2014-01-31 id # 3000215858
Holy hell!!! I did not see that coming! I knew it was leading somewhere but that...that was fucking awesome!!! Kudos to you dear author! That could totally be made into a Tales from the Dark Side or a Twilight Zone!!! Creepy and amazing all in 1!!!
Thank you! The ending was the first thing that came to me, and then I built the rest of the story around it.
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Re: "The Interview"

Mona Thompson 2014-02-03 id # 3000215972
More please!!!! I absolutely love where this is going. I feel sad for Daisy but I'm hoping it's going to get better for her now. Bring on the BULLS!!!!
Glad you're liking it, and thanks for the review. Daisy's life is definitely undergoing a major shift. You'll have to wait a couple of chapters for the bulls, though. Hopefully, that won't take long.
I will confess that I actually have the next 2 chapters already written. I'm not posting them all at once because (a) it takes a little doing to reformat them for AFF (they were originally posted at Hentai Foundry) and (b) I'm hoping that posting them at this pace will spur me to finish the fourth and final chapter.
I will be posting chapter 2 very shortly.
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Re: "The Interview"

Kate 2014-02-03 id # 3000215988
I'd just like to point out that breast size has no bearing on milk production. My mother, who was a B cup at best, made enough to feed an army whereas my aunt, who eventually needed a breast reduction due to her DDD's, was barely able to pump an ounce and had to formula feed all her children. And I know it hasn't come up yet but pregnant women do not start lactating until 'after' giving birth. There might be some drops here and there after intense attention is paid to the nipples but beyond that you're dry as a bone until the big day, no matter what hormones you take. I should know, I'm a mother of a 2 year old who's currently 7 months pregnant. I'm not downing your work, these are just a few pet peeves of mine I see all the time in lactation fiction. Have a good day and keep writing!
I'm usually a bit of a stickler about scientific accuracy, or at least plausibility. In this case, however, I decided to throw scientific accuracy completely out the window--right after beating it with a garden mallet and setting it on fire--because I really wanted this story to be a pure erotic fantasy.
Thanks for the information about breast size and milk production. I actually spent 2 or 3 minutes earnestly Googling that subject before giving up and deciding to go the whole mallet/fire/open-window route.
In any case, you have inspired me to put a disclaimer in the first chapter about the inaccuracies. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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Re: "Cruel Nature"

daqueenbee1 2014-02-09 id # 3000216147
I love/hate, mostly love your story.
I think I'd worry a bit about anyone who didn't dislike some aspect of this story. But thank you!
Xyla still is weak, making excuses. I'm thinking she deserves whatever happens to her.
She definitely has a serious backbone deficiency. I've always had a pretty high baseline level of anxiety myself, and I've often struggled to avoid making the easy decision instead of the best one. Xyla is kind of a worst-case-scenario version of that.
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Re: "Cruel Nature"

Ty's 2014-02-09 id # 3000216162
I want to slap Xa abortion is nowhere near as vile as the damn spawn she's having.
I suppose Xyla didn't consider that there might be a good reason why the termination of Feral-induced pregnancies is mandatory.
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Re: "Cruel Nature"

Mona Thompson 2014-02-10 id # 3000216171
Oh man!!! Another amazing story from you Mr. Glass❤️ I don't know where you come up with these tales you have floating around in your head but I absolutely love them!
Thank you!
I couldn't believe that for a split second I actually felt sorry for those children of hers...I love how you explain your characters so I can actually get their background and get why they ARE the bad guy

I envisioned Yori and Zeryn as being a little like Frankenstein's monster--they ARE monsters, but they were also brought by force into a world in which they have no place. So there's nothing strange about simultaneously hating and pitying them.

...please keep them coming!
Being somewhat literal-minded, I never used to post my original stories on AFF--just fanfiction. Now I'm realizing that AFF offers a larger audience than the other places I post (Hentai Foundry and Inkbunny), and a lot of the readers here like original stories just fine, so I'm in the process of posting a bunch of my already-written stories here. Plenty more to come!
Thank you again for taking time out of your days to entertain me with these amazing stories❤️
You're most welcome. Thank you for reading and especially for commenting!
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Re: "Cruel Nature"

GlenGirl 2014-02-19 id # 3000216371
Interesting story, and I really liked the twist at the end. I hope you continue.
Thank you! I'm not planning to continue this story, but I'm sure I'll be writing other stories in a similar vein.
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Because I have a lot of original stories, and because these stories don't tend to get as many reviews per story as my fanfics, I have decided to totally rip off BronxWench's idea and respond to all reviews of my original stories in a single thread. This should make things easier, both for me and for any of you lovely folks who have reviewed one of my original stories and would like to find and read my response to your review.

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Re: "Some Days, You Get the Bear"

Jomahawk2694 2014-03-15 id # 3000217025
Wow. Congrats on the second place man, and I checked out the drawing. Awesome! Hopefully this will inspire you to write even better stuff! Can't wait!
Joma
Thanks! I honestly haven't felt too much inspiration to write since I had my hip operation last month (everything I've posted on AFF since then has been stories I've already written and posted on Hentai Foundry and/or Inkbunny), but when I saw a post about the contest and that the limit was 500 words, I figured I could surely write something decent of THAT length, at least. And it was exciting to have someone do a picture based on something I wrote; that was a first for me. I'm feeling a bit more inspired now.
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Re: "Daddy's Rules"

JemGirl77 2014-03-17 id # 3000217054
Oddly I liked it.
Thank you. It's a pretty rough story, so I understand the "oddly" bit--I feel that way about it myself sometimes.
I think making them bears made it ok for me to like them I think.
It definitely puts a little distance between the characters and the reader (with apologies to any literate bears out there).

I kinda wish that there were a few more chapters. Like that night with the other girl, perhaps in the morning and then the older's girl day at school. Them maybe one more showing how it normally went when he got home and things were like how he expected them to be.
But on it's own, it's pretty good.
I see where you're coming from, and I'm pleased that you'd like to see more, but the brevity of this story is deliberate. I wanted to do a short piece that wasn't bogged down by extensive plot and character development (like all the stories I had written before then) but that instead showed you a moment in the lives of this extremely dysfunctional family and let you extrapolate as much more as you cared to.
In any case, I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing.
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Re: "Daddy's Rules"

LP 2014-03-21 id # 3000217152
Loved this! I devoured the first chapter and I was so disappointed when there wasn't a second chapter! Please continue :)
I'm very glad you liked it. As I mentioned to the previous reviewer, the story was deliberately written to be a short, one-chapter piece. Perhaps you would enjoy some of my other stories? :)
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Re: "Wish List"

RavedThrad 2014-04-10 id # 3000217691
(Typing up this review again. Between the recaptcha and whatever internet black hole my reviews pass through, it's like I have to keep plugging away at it for a bit before they'll get submitted properly)
Yeah, I've taken to typing these things up in Notepad and then pasting them into the text box once I'm finished, just in case something goes wrong.
This was a nice, sexy short story, and I enjoyed it a lot.
Thanks!
Good grammar and spelling, and if there's anything glaring there then I was too much into the story to really notice.
Thank you. I'm very big on editing.
I felt that certain parts could have used some expansion, a little more show, a little less tell. The parts that stay in mind are the part where he's musing about how her scent reminds him of his wife (good opportunity for back story / character development there) and the part where, post-"rape," he says, "You know I love you, right?" -- this right here is a very good place to expand on their relationship and lay the groundwork for developing it.
Because this story is a one-shot, I didn't want to slow it down with too much backstory or character development so close to the end. If this were the first of several chapters, I think I would have done something like what you suggest.
I felt the ending would have been a lot sexier if she'd responded with "Yes, Daddy," instead of just "Okay." Since he's already clearly the dominant partner here, I felt a little overt, if perhaps unintentional, submissiveness on her part would have heightened the kink meter.
I see what you're saying, but I actually deliberately avoided using the word "Daddy" for a couple of reasons:
--Mariel is an older teen, somewhere between 17 and 19, and she's pretty mature despite her shyness. Thus, I didn't want her to sound too childlike.
--I had previously written two stories, "Wild Side" and "Everything She Needs," about a father and daughter who definitely DO have a dom/sub relationship (including the daughter calling her father "Daddy"). I wanted the relationship between Mariel and her father to be at least a little bit different from that one.
Overall, this was a very nice sexy short story. I enjoyed it, will certainly come back to enjoy it again, and hope that you will someday revisit these characters
Thanks very much. I'm not all that big on sequels ("Everything She Needs" being a rare exception), but I will write them if I feel like I have a good enough idea for one.
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Re: "Backward Glance"

Josh Lynch id # 3000218509
Finally, you are back! I thought you had given up writing, or gotten badly hurt or something!
Sorry to worry you--I had orthopedic surgery back in February, which took me out of action for a little while (mainly because of the pain meds), and between my recovery, a flood of work, a lot of professional activities, and suddenly becoming president of my neighborhood association (I was vice president, and then our president resigned unexpectedly), I've just been pretty preoccupied. But I really wanted to finish "Backward Glance" in time to enter it in the Spring Fling contest on Hentai Foundry, and I think that has gotten me at least partially back into the writing groove.
Anyway, this story was trippy as hell man. The last chapter made my brain want to ooze out of my ears.

I'll add add a warning to the beginning and advise readers to wear earplugs. :)

Also, I couldn't help but notice the similarities between Gina and her machine, and Elizabeth and her tears in Bioshock: Infinite. Am I correct to assume there was some kind of inspiration drawn from that game?

Not in the least; not only have I never played Bioshock, I don't know I thing about the plot. Now, though, I may have to check it out.

Regardless of where you got the idea, the story was great (even if there wasn't as much lemony goodness as I would have liked ;).

Thanks! The contest had a word limit, so there was only so much room for citrus fruit. :)

I hope this story signals a true comeback from you, man, instead of a one hit wonder. I had Ll but given up on seeing another one of your masterpieces.

Your loyal fan (in this world and every other),

Jomahawk

No worries--I've definitely got some things in the pipeline (including that Suzy Johnson story), so stay tuned. And thank you for all your support.

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