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coldfang66: This was a really fun read, you get a 9.5/10 :)

I really like that you got creative with this, instead of having a string of generic sex scenes. Way to go the extra mile. I just can't believe how well you kept everyone in character without ruining the story. :)

In the end, I almost felt that the story wasn't pornographic ENOUGH--that the comedy interrupted the sex too much. But keeping the characters genuine is always my first priority.
In any case, thank you!
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I already replied to FairySlayer's review via PM, but for the sake of completeness, I thought I'd post the reply here--plus a few extra comments.

Fairy-Slayer: That was a terrific romp, and so much in-character for the kids to get a random idea from their father (even if very much unintentional) to go through so much work. And the fun they had while doing it was fantastic.

Thanks for the detailed review! I just loved the idea of the kids pursuing the idea of making a porno movie with the same innocent enthusiasm they apply to everything else they do.

Nice use of the clichés and all of the little in-jokes you added. Excellent use of Buford (and his quirk) and Ferb (with his amazing acting skills).

Thank you! I didn't intend to have nearly so much Buford in the story, but I just kept finding more things for him to do.

Nice touch for Phineas and Isabella to finally get together in such a beautiful and loving way, even if the confession had to happen very quickly before she went all the way.

I feel like Isabella has more than paid her dues on the show; she deserves some serious Phineas-love.

Oh, and using the patch-misunderstanding was very much Isabella – not clearly explaining things or making herself heard. (In the show, for someone so charismatic and determined she's got a bit of a problem expressing herself.)

She has the twin disadvantages of being lovesick and of Phineas being about as socially perceptive as a pack of gum. Ever since seeing his reaction to Isabella's kiss in ACROSS THE 2ND DIMENSION, though, I've liked to think that Phineas IS attracted to Isabella, just not on a conscious level.

Too bad you couldn't do full B (Perry) and C (Candace ;)) stories as well, but at least you dealt with them and it was a believable change of character with their fuses popping. For making a light fun story though it was probably better to push that stuff off to the side.

Yeah, I didn't want to drag the story out too much; I felt like it was already pretty long. I also just love making Candace freak out. :)
Thanks again!
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Jomahawk2694:

Well. You did it. You wrote the perfect X rated P&F story. It was honestly like I was watching the show if Disney suddenly became a lemon infested porno set. You sir, are quite possibly the best author on this site. Please keep up the amazing work!

P.S., anf for the love of lemons, please PLEASE do a story about Vanessa and Ferb. That is a couple that has not been explored enough and hasn't been done well a all by anyone. But if there is someone out there who could do it the justice its due, it would be you.

JMAHWK

Thank you, thank you, and thank you! IMO, writing stories that are true to the characters but that take them in new directions is what fanfiction (especially "adult" fanfiction) is all about.
Vanessa and Ferb, eh? Let me toss that idea in the hopper and see if anything comes out. Vanessa IS the hottest character on the show, so it would be a shame to underuse her. :)
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foobar137

Incredibly well-done. You've got an excellent grasp on the characters and setting, tremendous skill with grammar, and a knack for storytelling that combine to make something that could be an episode of the series if the mere thought of it didn't give Disney execs heart attacks. Please keep up the good work!

Thank you! The idea for this story actually came to me a couple of years ago when I thought, "What would happen if Phineas and Ferb somehow saw a porno movie and decided to make their own?" At first, it was just a joke; only later did I decide to actually write it up. It was mainly mean to be porn, but there were so many opportunities for comedy, and for making it more like a real episode of the show, that I couldn't resist them, and it eventually ended up being much more like an '80s sex comedy than straight-up erotica--hence the title.

Thank you again!

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