KZ-01 Posted July 9, 2009 Report Share Posted July 9, 2009 (edited) Hello, So the other day, I was at a pool party/BBQ hosted by a youth pastor at my church. Everything was chill until the youth pastor's wife came out in her suit. Even though it was pretty modest (a one-piece), I could not believe how stunning her body was. She wears baggier clothing for the most part, so I hadn't noticed before. My story request: sometimes I do help around the youth pastor's house. One hot summer day, I come to clean up the aftermath of a youth event as a favor to the couple. When I start cleaning, the door opens and I'm greeted with the sight of the youth pastor's wife as never seen before. What happens next, I want to be slow, with much build-up, centering on sexual tension, the wife finding unexpected excitement at the prospect of dipping her toe in sexual liberation (though I want the POV to be from me, and it would be shown through her actions/words). After much build-up, I'd like to take her from behind at the shallow end of the pool. I want the build-up to be slow, and "reasonably realistic." I'm one for details, so try not to skimp on that. I want her alias to be Allison, and mine Ben. Keep the suit a one-piece, as it's part of the magic. Edited September 24, 2009 by KZ-01 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 13, 2009 Report Share Posted July 13, 2009 Hello,So the other day, I was at a pool party/BBQ hosted by a youth pastor at my church. Everything was chill until the youth pastor's wife came out in her suit. Even though it was pretty modest (a one-piece), I could not believe how stunning her body was. She wears baggier clothing for the most part, so I hadn't noticed before. My story request: sometimes I do help around the youth pastor's house. One hot summer day, when the husband's not around, I convince her to come take a dip in the pool with me, and talk. Then I seduce her somehow, and take her from behind right in the shallow end of the pool. I'll give you more details if you're interested in writing this...and possibly a series on it. Any preferred names? Ages? I assume you are male? Is the youth pastor not around because he's out of the state? Or is it possible he could walk in on you? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted July 13, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 13, 2009 (edited) I'd like my pseudonym to be "Ben" and the wife's psuedo to be "Allison" Age 19 and 29, respectively. And he's out of town once in a while, since he helps out with other groups from time to time. So he's away away. If you're talking physically, she's brunette, hair resting on her shoulders, C-sized, and actually, quite a nice little behind. Actually, I'd like it to be less of a seduction than "Get in the pool with her and one thing luckily leads to another." Any other questions? Edited July 13, 2009 by KZ-01 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 13, 2009 Report Share Posted July 13, 2009 I'd like my pseudonym to be "Ben" and the wife's psuedo to be "Allison" Age 19 and 29, respectively. And he's out of town once in a while, since he helps out with other groups from time to time. So he's away away. If you're talking physically, she's brunette, hair resting on her shoulders, C-sized, and actually, quite a nice little behind. Actually, I'd like it to be less of a seduction than "Get in the pool with her and one thing luckily leads to another." Any other questions? I dunno. I'll think about it for a bit, but it's not my usual thing. Still, I'm going to be out of my gourd bored for the next couple of weeks, who knows. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 14, 2009 Report Share Posted July 14, 2009 I've got a start: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100334 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 Hello? Worth continuing? Not what you wanted? Anything...? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SereneLies Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 I thought it was good The wife was VERY forward Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 Thanx. That's kinda what i thought he was asking for. It's not done, but i wanna know if it's going the right way before putting anything more into it... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted July 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 19, 2009 Forward, yes....a bit TOO forward....I was looking for more subtle buildup, but it's the fic YOU'RE writing, so..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted July 19, 2009 Report Share Posted July 19, 2009 Hmmm. Usually i get criticized for too much buildup... Ah, well. I tried. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted July 20, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2009 Indeed you did. Thanks for trying. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted August 18, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 Edited in more details---I wish to see if anyone else is wiling to write this one up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 You might try offering to post a review of the story provided. Some sort of feedback for anyone putting an effort in. Maybe a quality review, more than three words? Just a thought. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 (edited) Apologies, maybe I should have. In a way, the additional details I edited in are an extension of what I could have written: The whole story went too fast for me, and the wife was a bit too outgoing about it, and I'm a detail-freak when it comes to the emotions and physica; senses. Then again, you are not at fault for that, since I failed to give such small details like that in my request. As for actually writing out another review....well, the story's been taken down, so. Edited August 19, 2009 by KZ-01 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keith Inc. Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Apologies, maybe I should have. In a way, the additional details I edited in are an extension of what I could have written: The whole story went too fast for me, and the wife was a bit too outgoing about it, and I'm a detail-freak when it comes to the emotions and physica; senses. Then again, you are not at fault for that, since I failed to give such small details like that in my request.As for actually writing out another review....well, the story's been taken down, so. Oh, i wasn't talking about me. Just suggesting, before you burn yet another writer's interest in your requests... Just a thought, as i said. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted September 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 24, 2009 Oh, i wasn't talking about me. Just suggesting, before you burn yet another writer's interest in your requests... Just a thought, as i said. Suggestion taken. For the record, I'm still looking for someone to do this. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted October 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 6, 2009 Suggestion taken.For the record, I'm still looking for someone to do this. I've taken the plunge and taken up writing part of this out. However, I've written all build-up, but no sex. I'm looking for someone to collaborate on the story: I build-up, you sex it up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Red Ink Posted February 20, 2011 Report Share Posted February 20, 2011 I've taken the plunge and taken up writing part of this out. However, I've written all build-up, but no sex. I'm looking for someone to collaborate on the story: I build-up, you sex it up. I might be taking a shot at this. I've got a lot of big ideas on the table and wanted something else to ease back into writing that was less intense. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KZ-01 Posted February 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 21, 2011 I might be taking a shot at this. I've got a lot of big ideas on the table and wanted something else to ease back into writing that was less intense. Red Ink, is there a way I can contact you so we can collaborate on this? Email? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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