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  1. Under my skin 600030225 IN REVIEWS • by Dayrunner, 3000014204: author response, not a review Recreation and renovation 544189976 IN REVIEWS • by Josie_h, 3000017814: author response, not a review
  2. Follow through 544186781 IN REVIEWS • FLAME by dragon, 2035282115 • FLAME by HieisaysHn, 2035291687 Eudaemonia 600030025 IN REVIEWS Page 2—something is weird with the page format. it won’t move with the browser (narrower/wider) and is R-E-A-L-L-Y wide
  3. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.16 Buffy doesn't know 600005325 —another poem, not a story as such. is that okey dokey? Love is 9855 Ch 1 • Endthe the world • cigarettees mes me • swwordword • of a wo” [para] “ [para] “Hey! • zng ing in and • havld yld you • aforementd Fad Fanny’s • had excd atd at • sleepieavieavily • I to to muster • Nowat hat has • she w kil kill me • change my na. I. I’ve Ch 2 • Darke foe for • too boribut but • hizza,zza, • dryntalntality • wh did did that • len hn his • microwavat sat says Ch 3 • no sso,sso, • his illustrns, ns, but • wiy piy picture • is wr A p A picture Ch 4 • eah,eah, • rrenrren was kind of • kind oowl owl in Ch 5 • truck tss. ss. • to be tle. le. The • pager ger moves • urgeof mof Ch 8 • restaurantknowknow • ictuicturing • offortfortable • -Cup-Cupid • I kI’m I’m • can hy sty stand • he’d lattlattered • on a timeee, re, remember Ch 9 • staistairs • nigNo. No • l lou louder • thouthought • He’sbablbably • I alatelately • entraand and • dra him himself • cr Not Not wit los losing Ch 10 • I’ver har had • mouth ell ell and • that s ali alive • herehere’s a thump • at smo smoldering • anilesiles
  4. Love is 9855 IN REVIEWS • by Kenji, 50014: hun.y wey well • by Raleigh, 50977: before t”big”big moment • write mor...y...you These dreams 9964 IN REVIEWS • by Charlie, 50592: andchinching all rolled inte! Ye! Your
  5. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.17 http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544183420 Sex, guys & limericks 544183420 —these are limericks, not stories. not sure if they belong here or not...? http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544193284 You're an idiot...but i love you 544193284 —this is a poem, not a story. i don’t know—are poems and limericks and stuff like that allowed? not sure, so i’m reporting it just in case.
  6. The gift 22550 Ch 2 • offeoffering • wo Pin Pink • triedtaketake • Hd nod noted • taste,s als all • tlasslasses of juice • as sos I s I finish • In fact ere ere has • prompteike.ike. • Somportports • was ak ofk of the • was ed aed at his • pretpretty sure • bed aed and • lea his his body • hyousyously Ch 3 • the the woman • thr a m a mating • f The The sounds • practicingularularly • roomroom, shaking • none cle climbed • Xandroduroduced • Xan Xander’s • png ong over • if I t fet feel • Ple Please Ch 4 • Much better [para] “W [para] “Was too • toke’ske’s loose • the nan thn the • trainingsionsion • picture.was was • Xr grr grunted • vibrg ing in • Brouyou you Ch 5 • ittenstensity • decided no no one • without words for . [no “extra” wordord, but drops off] • Ang Angel, it’s • er ger grinned • labagsbags • tedsiedside Ch 6 • andnd nnd nothing • br ski skin contrastinth tth • followier. er. Ch 7 • wasndinnding • awaysways Ch 8 • ofoaofoam • was thig abg about • and ed hed his • fol followed Ch 10 • oveemememembering • I rememb how how • exatioation • be him him • offy mfy made • part oe boe bottle • asideone one • sideidiniding • ofAngeAngel Ch 11 • out out of his • Spieplieplied • doordoor hidden • atictuicture of himselt wat was • sd And Angelus • passis lis lips • howl the the • complhe nhe needed • had disared red Ch 13 • was was too dark • close to e she she was • eyesaminaming • famifamily
  7. The gift 22550 IN REVIEWS • by Chickalupe, 167172: dimentmention • by Ame, 179347: do teir eir base • by Mel, 207545: be of the, no, not only . . . intereg :-g :-)
  8. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.18 Fancy a ride 29205 Ch 1 • staring.s nos not • TherThere • the heatthe the • his h aro around • lightcigacigarette • gyrg asg as he • grinsund und his • XanderDrawDrawing • hiser’ser’s jeans • my kYou You are • waitior yor you • togeths hes he • quit eathis his pie • blusht hit his • let Buffyy mey me • truemoremore • I did, dt I?t I?” • Spike’srtmertment • eariearing • theicericer • giggling.ke hke has • ofce ace and • I’ve k you you • on tophim.him • his ces aes and • Spike’s.ke rke reaches • Xander’s ou”No “No fair, you gothinthing • thndomndom • wonders wh did didn’t • You ao beo Saving the boy 544180251 —Ch 5 is just an AN promising more to come, not a chapter Amnesty is granted 544206493 —Ch 18 is only an AN, not a chapter Kiss it better 28467 • you witay tay in • working aly.” [para] y.” • bettet alt always • sm and and begins • Williaoks oks up • it oit ok if Grease 28231 • “Bwacs a c • Bie.”ie.” • tandfandfuls • chewn thn the
  9. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.18 Fancy a ride 29205 IN REVIEWS • by Jess, 102321: great ider a r a Fic
  10. http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=25191 one chapter only, and no text was ever posted. delete!
  11. Hold me thrill me kiss me kill me 544188153 Ch 50 —an AN, not a chapter Sweet dreams 544215370 —no wordord, but it’s kind of odd: some sections have hard line endings on them, interspersed with sections that only have hard returns at the end of paragraphs. so some really short lines and some stretchable ones. odd. but not really a glitch. Blacklust: demon hunter 544213945 Ch 1 —not a chapter, just a very long batch of extra disclaimers Your bloody fault...is not...is too 544207145 —just realized due to a reviewer’s mention of it that the link this author LitGal (ID 1296767597) puts in most of her stories at the top as another place they can be found does not work. don’t know if you bother mentioning that to them; everything of AFF’s seems to be working OK Ch 1 —this is really strange. about 8 pages in [search for high-tail it out of town] the author begins starting every line with a series of tildes (~) to indent them. apparently it’s supposed to indicate that this is where angel is relating a story but it looks really stupid. i suppose fixing it would be considered beta-ing but it would have been nice if it was just in italics or something. yeesh!
  12. Different needs 544215231 IN REVIEWS • FLAME by great dislike, 3000011578 Broken revenge 544202791 IN REVIEWS • by LitGal, 2035470634: author response, not a review • by LitGal, 2035590609: ditto • by RippersPet, 2035603135: OMG!!! i don’t know that this is any kind of violation but this review is almost long enough to be a story in itself! gooooooood lord! Trickster's treat 544190827 IN REVIEWS • by LitGal, 2035324143: author response, not a review • by LitGal, 2035328714: ditto
  13. Never 544211220 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • by dayzeegrl, 2035644232: an AN, not a review Mangled spells and manly bits 544179622 IN REVIEWS Page 6 • by Litgal, 2035215219: an author response, not a review Musical wars 544177877 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • duplicate reviews by TheShadowCat: 2035174868,6 69
  14. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 The future is what we make 5024 — reviewer states "AFF has eaten the end (actually prob ¾ or more) of chapter 8 cont (menu 13)—?? i can’t tell, but a second reviewer says something about “what happened to chapter 8” and notes that it’s different from where it was posted elsewhere. if there’s something missing the au will probably have to fix it, sounds like a large chunk. Menu 1 • quitehilehile • havingfirmfirmly • jokes,uffyuffy • under their proton. [para] on. • smile arynaryn • Xandeokedoked Menu 2 • FLASHBACK FLASHBACK [i suspect only one is intended] • litey toy to • wasn’t g to to leave • horror thas sas swiftly • led led the rage • with a y smy smile • like Buffe sme smiled • she mred red • fondernder • Thereno wno way • tiny hanseeiseeing • Sob [para] Sobbing for breath, • stared bac her her • laughed inglingly • of pe coe coming Menu 3 • picked upce’ce’s • final to bto break • Costopstopped Menu 4 • with spersperate cry • anuff.uff. And • om, om, it’s me • Angel tuer ser so • permanenbounbound • behind Ww asw as Oz • immediatelyrettretted • eyeseyes were • broiled w hav have • you letstaystay • Buthinthink • thoughts yave ave of • snugg aga against • not be cag myg my • behind h [para] S [para] Spike frowned • itio”You”You’re • done somod tod things • should have have • dying or hor had Menu 5 • knelt grally lly • aware he che cool • If that g cou could Menu 6 • to to his father’s • from hisir air and • disturb him him though • faced this nt tnt to • looked im iim in • wereableable Menu 7 • eys eyes strayed • ans pes people • and and icy rage • weren’t wod and • anrt trt to do • full e ate at the • little frs..rs..you • recordeeryterything • hereshe she • hey hey waited • them evereveryone • once whenhad had • Do you realant ant to • Sh. She had • her sudden fe [para] “ [para] “Either you ... downI wiI will • glared aly aly and • hed fad faintly Menu 8 • ile ile that did • “ I u I used thess • how muhis his cost • absently as n esn • She pd fod forward • seem to sund tnd the • dy bdy bleeding • stillnessore ore a • Where aou tou taking • a solid bl [drops off] • had rribrrible • Riley ntlyntly • hadughtught • toak tak their • thought shdn’tdn’t know • done all wn...n...now • natural ingent.ent • ndernder’s mind ... “Go soere ere in • wcontcontinuously • looked ar inr in Menu 9 • accept th Now Now • exclaimeartiarting • abruptlydderddered • oth other snapped • maintainsuilduilding • stdowndownstairs • Bublinblinked • seizeda bya by her • really don’ve ave a • Jennes exped qed quietly • paid a l a long time • he lcouncount • playfulins.ins. • cas casting a shield • cautiouslyn hin his • hesitantlyurneurned • head frantica “No “No ... many mistato bto be • without inflen, n, • is now permtly tly bound • beforaduaadually Menu 10 • bellowed n fon for • fr She She • enteredFollFollowing ... aroat tat the • generallyne bne brighter • your fu. E. Early • tha that wretched • en aen a slow • shocking evne ine into • brothernek.nek. His • word gooundound Menu 11 • Buffoppeopped abruptly ae sie sight • eacher.her. • no iwhatwhat • Willow andew hew her ohe whe window • in front of of her • if if her Angel • hinteinted out • winning thisumenument • he saiuntluntly • eat Mr.ty oty or that • helpm twm two • again and n, rn, realizing • hivemevements • your hu, human • askinch ach a question • eyernedrned Menu 12 • she concatedated • Drawing tcloscloser • sronroned • like hnd pnd pulled • and hay foy followed • thatn’t n’t know • Taryouteouted • horteorted • At At least he • face of tumanuman • set up up the • ith ith equally • a pussor aor a nice • screameforefore • still a look look • annesnnes and • softlystilstill Menu 13 —after reading this very short chapter, i think the reviewer who commented that most of it was missing is probably right. Menu 14 (ch.9) starts in a totally other place. Menu 14 • sie ine in the • amongans ans • andans,ans wrapped • sng gng gently • hiss, “s, “Are you • betteptaiptain • hitenttention • liquilverlver • seeautoautomatically • hisghteghter • slowly cing ing eyes • swe sweet heated • discretely d tod to • cled,led • as wes fas fact • ...bu [para] ...but did he • Grag Xag Xander • turning e ine in the • finareverevealed • spasming she [drops off] • obduddeuddering • him bla blank • continuingenceence • moorriorries • serioudnesdness of this id”But”But • his sto hea heaved • grim. O. Obviously • definitely a him him • sundednded by • low perspers of pain • Aainfainfully • cast the es aes • You’re neal.eal • becamversvers • als frs friends • had to do witmQ§ m [drops off] Menu 15 • stepped hestly tly • drentrent choices • closis eis eyes • moans fillee roe room • stag meg me • wasn’tn a n a hint • leg itly.tly • felt like throwup. [para] up. • to withwith a smile • demotandtanding • for yoTaryTaryn Menu 16 • T was was smugly • returnbut but • in thedle dle of his • words of con aon and Menu 17 • start mornmorning • through thnd Ind I can • all thraztaaztars • hu he he had • his theninening • are a bottss pss pit • ece ece of fruit • Hasighsighs • in the the tight • spewinm bem between • einedined • yelpe joy joy • life twe nwe need • Iu cau can’t • of ce,” e,” • e wae wants us • Firool,ool, the Menu 18 • the’s e’s trying • thelphelped • apolapologies • noddto Wto Willow • e the three • ca coo cool voice • eyesthe the • either sid him him • lighteningred,red, • at onotheother • side his his world • quicok rok • ngelngel’s • howknewknew • veryveryone • with liningning bolts • have alwaeen een • love she she in in • And he he could • feel theoverover • bow elirelirious Menu 19 [thank god, i thought this one would NEVER end] • the laf kif kissing • Xander’sghteghters • high in the ahat hat • awe iringring • been doo hio his • perfohe rhe rite • againsryn ryn and • the es wes The warriors 5230 Menu 4 • stg atg at Dawn Menu 5 • voiced oud out • watchWillWillow • ctanctantly • attracteduntiuntil • no way he woingoing • gonet aet any • eyese ine in • Silencommcommanding • deeper tha that • channel.ckincking him • stronger...fie. [para] . [para] He pulled • hisracerace • asshooshook • shrushrugs • on hice. [para] ce. • wai Xan Xander • lady . N. No more Menu 6 • like pong hng his • spoke,nxiojnxious • thagelugelus • all aou nou now • point,”es ses said • theer Per Potentials • know abouts,”s,” • the was was • Some sti still • Anya Rob Robin • grocgroceries • Buffyod wod with • fly Wly Willow • no power he You You are • sl in in fearful • gro. W. Whirling • appe and and • I’m tal abo about • tntenntense • hor tor that • a chwas was • totally ignorihe che • nnednnedy • aer mer mouth • fror bar back Menu 7 • theirds ads against • stakeone one hand • got of the the floor • hol out out his • thenthen he was • flushedouseoused • starp inp into • loss of emoti con control • Igoodgood • aleir eir names • be of cof control • truth lly lly • do a long p wit with the • slointointo • lookewn awn at • the tireK’sK’s Menu 8 • power sh be be shared • enough bot both • just hatehatever • Bufeltfelt • besFaitFaith • Seal to ,” ,” Dawn • lying oe gre ground • light shoom aom amulet • som somehow far away • Fivood ood up • shockeok ook on • attention.”Wo”Wot • stomachen hen It wasn't me 10427 • as magimagined • e ble blew • ho get get his • atke’ske’s The seer 7502 Menu 2 • turoundound • ofuncouncomfortable • ank ank God • home aood ood • loorasprasp • being cd a d a drunken • Xan’s c’s condition • as thent ont • twissmilsmile • off in. D. Don’t • could juse Ane Angelus • his ard ard lunge • as elt elt Angel • mouth twisteyly yly • “No,gel gel smiled • at sof softness • Xanblinblinked • giving im, im, • was othe the Menu 3 • cg tog towards • nto nto his arms • I admidondon’t • tmutumutual • Dawnd thd the • in.XandXander • or yoube lbe left • the sha shake • looklooked • re tre to • he pd thd that • doesn’t ha job job • t’st’s try this • “Excme,me • apparentlyt tht thought • Andrrinnrinned • Xandhorthortled • el pel pulled • that dy ldy little • cockper per into [okay...maybe it’s just late but i have NO idea what that should be] • hist tht thought • coonguongue • stirrihrouhrough • we’re aro” T” Tommy • for yo exe exercise • pretendiefeafeat • wing ing the • pie lik like his Menu 5 • SpiDawnDawn
  15. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 What sound does a breaking heart make 18392 Ch 2 • at hnd snd saw • chattily.ood ood thing • out ov she she asked • words werey pry precise • you’re sing ing to • didnotheother • G all allowed her • adnadn’t expected • andt hit his • I’m eliaelia Chase • looking ar, ir, into • w Ang Angelus return • and Faith she she • ways toeat eat them • How aboilesiles lied • hies hes half • swollen k ank and • oe one only one • uneasilgardgarding • expecta at at Angel • obarrbarrassment • I t I forget • tilted head ead • Xandeook ook his • to ass qus question • looked in rim • minds.XandXander ... vampire.”I a”I • “Woulu cau care • stared challenly aly at • he a naa nasty • bloodshot,h heh heavy • thlunglungs • sometimake ake out • tmprempression • thinthing that • oppe ine in • Christkidskids Ch 3 • Watcher.GileGiles • Antaketake handle • h,” h,” Angel • Tatchatched holes • Then he he • reallyked ked at • pliancy the the boy • before he he • strongly ed ned neck • achihafthaft • they seeto bto be winding • ditch et tot to • attempraperape • a Rupertes tes that • voice spoke cal [drops off] • it im her her • in his.okay we • Angelus manago puo punch Ch 4 • Angel red red to • pisst yot you • into r ber bedroom • perhapeverever • know wha was was like Ch 5 • wantedortuortunately • ideridering • theng mng man • to the inqu [drops off] • sil silly old git • made him sq in in revun atn at how • tove ove of • strankid,kid, • on his fromfrom • C dar darted • studied the the • and hamn!amn! and all that • be satisfietiltil they • snortedhey hey were • I hatl yol your • His plas tos to simply Ch 6 • sprablooblood out • heaa fra frustrated • gazed t. t. And • Fetchinwarmwarm cloth • topped ft wft would • of lighthis his dark • we?er ver voice • kng ang a bruise • spell.iliniling Ch 7 • thinkinalwaalways • lot of the the vampires • ept ept for the • hanHis His mind • onlystakstakes • neto bto be done • in a dbreabreath • fist on tabltable • if so so, maybe • needs b,” b,” Robin • himatchatching • Summers Wil Willow • Fortelytely Ch 8 • in nishnished wonder • shaking headhead • offer yodrindrink • You aske to to fix • blow ecteected with my • I’m afrai thi this • as a rewao Xao Xander • he pa war warm • healing hotwer.wer. • hel held tightly • anndernder clamped • Cortepptepped • with tf ruf running • they regardedin Win Wood • gym gym teacher • got arg arguing • “Can feelfeel it • Ther no no dishonor • calm hey hey • Hyegreegreed • snorted, Buf Buffy • prenatural d, hd, he • thecingcing trio • let hi. Y. You’ve ... o leo leave • long ahan han or • the bl Sla Slayer Ch 9 • of de as as well • I wbe bbe busy • the kids tels ths that • bathroom.angianging • hof dof demons • Whi can can heal • feel themssinssing • Falooklooks • opening. [para] assiassive. • body, sing,ing, racing • aga the the • down et het her • Sr, Ir, I was • I thin’ll ‘ll stick Ch 10 • cleanthe the • suprsupreme • she was shedshed • hated thhe che cut ... birvinrving • the outswithwith puzzled • golden eyes -clo-closed as she • Tbrigbrightening • Angel insted ted • is a thi thing • Taking anceance • that cleaclearly • Xanderediaediately • her heaHer Her • expere wie with • my claor oor one • third clasndernder • good waat Wat Wills • downobinobin • at the k hek head • didn’t yo Xan Xander • canroduroduce • was was the confused • different! [para] “Ho [para] “How? You • reto dto dodge • offhany aty the • are sup.sed sed to • self-controlgel gel • staknceancealed • She whe khe kinda • Hoping thae sue succeeded • foreiowerowers • sududenly cld ind in • awaNot Not • cast a darkk atk at • worrembrembling • They had abtelytely • whuffyuffy • terror in tittlittle • arresting ofrs. rs. He • mastery r thr the • manyortuortunities Ch 11 • plea forp frp from • Noandeander was • hde hde haste to • trying toaratarate the • ter ter three rather • For with with • unw unwillingly • wOld Old Man’s • And hefledfled. Clutched the amulnd snd screamed • Aney jey judged • applicatif dif diplomacy • slightest bit ercyercy • separevenevents • ficheecheerfully • inflict a t det deal of • dying for for almost • sproutm thm the • You rber ber that • lover wI foI found you • crossed the the bed • ell ell the truth ... C, X, Xander or • has ca up up even • Angeld hed heavily • intellig He He is • Angelnkednked • regarded fia cla clean • babyshirshirt ... had hed hed up • mentallytiontioned • Michaeln fun further • stoAnd And • hell wat abt about • Bhat hat low-down • to dar dark-hair • unsure of her welco [para] C [para] Confused • knowbettbetter • usuallntlentle • pulledhtlyhtly • brokinnkinned • look of shockn Jen Jerod • firm hahesthest Ch 12 • them le tle to • It was Conno [drops off] • no the the room with uTherThere’s • tampiampire • disbel Tu Turning • conraterated • a ging ing nod • Hor, ar, at • round his [word(s) missing] . [para] . [para] In this • pass tim time • Connored wed with • giving a h ‘N ‘No’ • didn’t knhethhether • nightd fld flashing • it was eao seo see • rked ked with ... ged ied in • she ca Dal Dale • as intereste dea dealing • Angelped ped • anding ing a • bet the the rich • pattihe ihe • smirknowinowingly • haughtyff sff she • His wri writhing • to her ne And And the • plunged a an object • face of anel. el. • gun unwavg ong on • their ons ons a bit • displcourcourage • eyes werer wide • Wler ler glad • findfind your • Strokyou.you • His s twi twisted • continuingto tto the • distaste. [para] A [para] A gentle • cold, icablcable • deedOr pOr perhaps • reminded sry mry much • oe ase astonished • throut tut the • Xande pla place • my youniendiend Stranger in my house 19102 • The man lov loved me • he haen ben • in her eyesnd pnd panic • tugging hem.hem. • someimitimitating He wasn't man enough 17823 • who me smi smiled • his fau And And • Generhomphompson’s • soliplanplanation Merry christmas 15426 • Angel’ser ber body
  16. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 Notes in the key of xander 198414 Ch 1 • whole lo luc luck • scrng fng for help • smile fadio noo nothingness • And Coia. [para] ia. • just asy diy did • get all all serious • run r Xar Xander • ve ove only • everyboboutbout • really my frien [drops off] • to reme the the last • the eonalonal drama • your dr wou would • low n, sn, slowly ... n. S. Singing • exercised fhis his psyche • yod Wid Willow • shouts of deni She She • tou touchable • head s at at the • I agI agree • expressilowllowly • felt anasy asy fission • always haway way of • grin twn wwn when • she bsleesleeping • llowllow?! • with dange fur fury • mockery.ow tow the • do And And he Ch 2 • forentiention • lowllowly opened • he tho of of • as the the young • had thouhe hhe had • expansea bra broad • estiesting in a • mouth wonat tat the • come-hitherre. re. She • orgasmiblyibly • And helply hey he • the ire’ire’s eyes • the the vampire • Dea Deadboy and • always followe Ang Angel • childileasleasure • inngelngel’s avid • digitothlothly • And idn’itn’t • aboettietting • quivearouaround • gave ino tho the • Angelouthouh • boy ne sen senseless • of tody ody pressing • fromkingking • thman’man’s neck • gesturendernder • hardnesse cae caught • arching eag int into • hmuscmuscled walls ... Xa wra wrapped • going crarom rom blood • knew wascomecome • could feool ool hands • nd dnd down • starstark raving • continueis..is • kne wou would • wonder.quidquid gold • an expln wen went • hel hell, him and • caughe uhe The re-education of xander harris 29682 Menu 1 • in hise dae dark • didn't underd! d! • looking fobad bad • on the etchetcher • a Watcheor sor something • Uneasily awahat hat she • ffy ffy shivered • Cistanstances • shouldershen,hen, • looked arofor for • at thepirepire • looay fay from • He despdesperately • hiStruStruggling • rightChokChoking • wide, chel grl grin • daleasleasure • going."th tth that • made made carrying • fearful glant Pst • didn'medimediately • parted urg urged • tunamunamabitches • wilriosriosity • sufferingpeoppeople • timid to dema But But her • But someti giv giving • dcomfortabld, ad, a • aboumonsmons?" • was alsovousvously • dark eyes.You You • one of the tha that • how yoll gll grow Menu 2 • frowned unainlainly • making betout out • treat a pris, wa, was • youtht wat was • Those coulcould • the one thirtuirtually • boy gavm. Dm. Despite • relaxis hes he • at the ceiliveryvery much • spokeInstInstinctively • evilons.ons." • wanna ou wou when • a glassportport in • to make HE HE was in • darkenlooklook • Raisine boe book • at that of of • roommate h prh prisoner ... timpuimpudent • and pow Som Something • leely ely exploring • sexual ingsings that • him an an egg • eagerhusihusiasm • Xander's h wih with • Ang [para] Angel pressed • warmngryngry • groaned agai the the • It cfromfrom the • Angellap.lap. • tomo mor morning Menu 3 —in AN under "FEEDBACK": or through tist [para] ist • go so farto sto say • or somy. y. A • eacheaching • reasont let least • it wasn'tctlyctly • hadn ovn overset • smootd cad calmly • rtanrtant matters • one lot Skt Skoal • hettietting • grd chd cheerfully • whhe the tremor • Loo at at the • of theks. ks. The • you got of yof your • wasvingving • loadedn win with • in hhesthest • esallyally • to ythiything • you are, ssh.sh." • stretched cls ovs over • ae vae vampire • thouruefruefully • pla playfully • never taldowndown • they prd hid him • Squng, ng, he • Heled led furiously • hch herself • can'tove ove • you.membmember • brighte to to a • we cwe choose • alwayoughought • at spitspite his • Xr mur muttered • were mred,red • a daughted bed been • ouHe kHe kept • tellmellmouth." Menu 4 • Reg thg the • should boideoided • moarvearvelous • tra tragic • sna snarky • tiontionship • revealineandeandering • unconsciouslyternterned • a wo reo repay • chirperrierriedly • thhreahreatened • boy's atde wde when • etlyetly he was • about whe whe wasn't • stomache ble blinked • hime a e a physical • off toy woy was • proud ave ave had • the pe ane and • toockiocking • Thatrimarimariliy • sa dem demon • annoyeok fok from • non-bhinghing all • Eroserfoerformed • thas ses sending • Lettint het her Menu 5 • that somewhery way way was • mahe bhe blonde • Theyh igh ignored • dd thd the • anavilavily • what thll tll this • An individquitquite • sound so so many • re wre whether • his h fle flexing • pe pan panting • Succu mor morsels • explexacexactly • becausu neu never • delect bod body • wookiooking • coulell ell the • he wanted A. [para] . [para] Angel stilled •shiftin a g a golden • the tof rof red • wipellpellbound • his harding ing shaft • clutchat tat the • glitterinld ald as • compin tin the • gingging pain • his hiand and after • forthagonagonizing • n't n't help BUT • Ignoring theel wel wrapped • yfromfrom Menu 6 • bathbathroom • of of muscle • orgarom rom him • and craznd and • was muchmuch he • wed hed his hips • tas the the boy's • ass.acinacing his • up in bed,bed • itialtial • were deadead...ead...dead •que question • boy ny sny smile • point...e ase asked • takiote ote of • looking salizalized • having a bf fuf fun • developedalk alk • nearuffiuffing • grinnedfishfishly • Stamme und under • The Eo deo demon • steg clg closer Menu 7 • Black D loo looked • with thed tod to • An! n! • seredered • bed oed out • and and reclined • snagthe the lube • braced handhands • on the hugle rle • and and neck • gentlnd tnd • the wat water • somng tng to • thouhe'dhe'd • madefectfect •tiny bf knf knowledge • previousemptempts • wa, watching • "oh [para] A [para] Angel rolled • hisgersgers • amilimiling • Studend fod forms • body.n arn arm • ay, ay, I'll make • with insd gld glee • colld ond on the • gentlen ten the • mriouriously • he waazedazed • s not not veyr • thae wae was • I nev wou • er ter they • in formform of • some ies?ies?' and Menu 8 • wout lit lie • quarterstaf hur hurtle • theers,ers, • up the fn cen censer • bello fur furious • fath pou pouch • Hiverivered • starteding ing in ... apartmentt tht they • wearing and and the • You lio meo me • But hea heard • to dhim him • eyeseyes large • Xandincrincredulity • she sdelidelicately • thoughstilstily • thetrantrange • changed ist yot you • Xa Har Harris • wayder'der's face • knew som did • said thatleasleast they • insisthat hat the • eyes he bhe blonde • ne une understood • that t tht the • he saiietlietly • into demon g. [there's a period so it didn't exactly cut off but the last word is incomplete?] • no welfy lfy thing • whae Ore Oracles • didnoticotice Menu 9 • to ge ige in • them boththe the • hneesnees • demonsvingving • roaredDo IDo I • a longrd lrd look • et oet out • maybemaybe • protect hisk. k. • staistairs • [in lyrics, last line] it to himd) [para] d) • Claimed lwasnwasn't all • this famil fri friends
  17. this is so horribly awful (27 pages of wordord on ONE PAGE of story index!) that i'm breaking it up into 4 posts. sorry! it's the worst page i've seen yet, by far. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 Shadows across the heart 34607 IN STORY Ch 1 • His sre ore offer • Xander 't s't said • loe looked downwards • at bre breathy sigh • beiisapisappointed • midsmidst • recklesslwn twn the • inhabitanf Suf Sunnydale • arrogantsuresure • for proten, bn, believing • Sunnydale home [para] T [para] They were • itced ced the • on edgeedge • smack dabthe the boy's • He wd itd it taped • gazed up at h He He • look of on on his • the on ton to talk • on insiinside? • glancedthe the • cigs werill ill sitting • givihe she statue a narrow l "W "What • shook hiad, ad, an • strangnvernversation • NOW.PaciPacing • to puemonemon as • of tampiampire • blonto nto the • ane lie lil'bit • there lre leaving • not t to to the • Surreptisly sly • He hadt ent enough • was prettye the that • exacexactly • the car.riverive." • of Suf Sunnydale • and seven,"en," • challengingly.s has hands • Willl gll go after her too. DaTaraTara • asn asn as he • persondingding him • he NiblNiblet • whatever s, bs, big sis • awaiting garbagy any and • upward, hies nes narrowed • Which wappospposed to • eganegan • the Mark f, th, then • gaze on . T. This • probed nd hnd his • Hinneinned Ch 2 • caresses. [para] An [para] Angel vaguely • jumped ith ith a • can can wait • the guan rin ring • in confusis hes he • wigawayaway • thartmartment • moaned sily, ly, • vampireoul oul back • Nevering ing his • waitinr yor your • Nhey hey • blast er aer • Af lif life • out of tir, ir, he • about or tor three • were ed ted towards • gi him him a • After adjug hig his • evardearder Ch 3 • her he bri brisk • the can can never • recognizing the w "W "What's • How, sh, should • distract arom rom his • before ly ely easing • himher.her. • thoughtfuurniurning • Nof tof them • prtivetively • endeender • laid Clai a h a human [laid Claim to a human] • smooth of of her • climbedo tho the • closeprespression • walkeowlyowly • Very l. H. Hurt • whatwhat a good idea • whied aed a sly • already shreg hig his • hell out im. im. All Ch 4 • protect hrienriend • rememberihe bhe bad • just los," s," she • disdai to to answer • the afted ted limb • cursedselfself • gentleposspossible • d, Xd, Xander • gently.pingping • Angel rep dis distantly • after vam vampire • to his dit fat face • and yourond ond in • not youryour name • But whe's e's • and a cotiontion • distancf cof course • the erectioat wat was • jusder der his skin • rape his.his. He • his ue aue and • still coing ing the • to his ry try throbbing • began layera sea series • At lustlusty • themplesplessly • kind tpickpicked • doubtconfconfusion • fierce tendtender • st sst slushing • fiercelyouriouring • mightily to t off off the • carnal rewa And And this • lightenflicflickered • with a stighightening • up dow down • Oooolow.low..." • wi lou loud • Angel psed sed • gave hime toe to • honquonquering • triumphbellbellow • ctwittwitched • that it wim tim that • to prt hit his Ch 5 • not to fightt tot to feel • Xanwondwondered • spof Aof Angel's • turn of headhead. • teeth escahim him with eacurt.urt • reflected ow how his • slowly sghteghten • but tietlietly • as he sgledgled • she c see see how • of thrld.rld • the suffe cau caused dir direct • as tas the • brothers and sis. s. • of millionsworsworshippers • and gro, fi, finally • goddess oem aem all • to tonstonstant • r shr she • lonforefore • cusiousion that • backed by ttrentrength • so orceorce • man nstanstantly • whyld hld he be • It was 's q's quick • did ly aly and • but truttruth • Aven ven if • wrong with ow."ow." • being ridius aus and • when toy'sou's knees • Understag whg what • what hhe bhe boy • wMUSTMUST • the su bac back Ch 6 • in thte lte 1800's ª howgerogerous • before contng. ng. • unsur he he • raihis his brows • softithoithout • for relea Wit With • to maks bus burly • it was.en ien it was • on defng tng the • path to gro group • exacthe ohe order • Tearfully she ed, ed, • your in to to kill • fascination.LexiLexi • 2usanusand years • Shplaiplained • the simple rep [para] G [para] Gunn nodded • wher had had been • in asthmenhment • shsh ysh • moreakreakier • thrge rge black • you ouslously • seen the ringring • in roo room • Shadow Qu" sh" she • S, go, good-natured • and you eed fed from • that befd thd this • hisprisprised • ouldould see the • tlurklurked • herself. her her son • inasuaasual display • at the jd gad gaping • jutting seamle fro from • Xander ed ied in • llowllowing, he • Distedlyedly • broughe wae wanker • he flattehis his • glared venomo at at a • as he gazedn inn into • Bloasheashes away • on hhoulhoulder • r sor souls • Wesley anike ike caught • seemed torse rse over • her cenanenance • the air red aed and Ch 7 • insuffer exp expression • doubmagemage • his hotel room room • hterhter. • mention thct tct that • turned on withwith a • Irrita, st, stupid • to singis eis eyes • undpikepike's • Y, th, that's • this wasd ind in a • of dan danger looming • Allr ofr of the • He turto tto the • that werewere • topptopped his • the Defenderthe the sole • a freshrt wrt was • was btlebtle • as das doing • Angel aconfconfconfusion • was an ageng. ng. Ch 8 • at clo closed • somewhere upstai A h A horrible • rng hng his • sigh.e tee tensed • the [para] "W [para] "Wasn't • hplieplied • bldustduster • n vin visibly • feeling sho A At first • as a e soe so perhaps • Fredl tal take • out the h and and • eyested ted up • very abo about • tormtorming the • steppeto tto the • andfounfound • like startlerds.rds. • anst ist • raiseows.ows • the way way link • younk Snk Spike • rallrally couldn't • carrying the otjo{.boy. • dec decided to • Xande [para] Sc [para] Scooping • when he rnedrned • a lof jof joy • knsincsince • had a sl fro frown • me,der der has • back to to the • prefer gng tng the • stahearhearing • el lel looked • ovis cis cereal King of sorrow 19265 —this really is Buffy/Xander with Angel/Xander as a secondary. I’d move it to het. B/X are engaged; A/X only takes place briefly in A’s imagination. Ch 1 • despeatteattempts • feeling lhe whe was • and ing ing down • the he he just • have ot cot canal • retd ved very • laughiejoiejoinder • Dflopflopped • was sittinforefore him • Uthanthank • aid aid quietly • somet whe when • drew y bey behind • pg ang angrily • tried.t tht the • away.ngelngel, • to the scand and it • sacrifg myg my • I assuthatthat she • don’t,gel gel said Ch 2 • m tig tightened • what hs sms smelling • Theyked ked for • then upss, hs, he • tried to t pot pots • itveryverything • cries oe pae parents • stretchedin, in • yownstwnstairs
  18. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.21 Shadows across the heart 34607 IN REVIEWS • by blu sanada, 274468: switctweetween Shadows across the heart 34607 IN REVIEWS • by blu sanada, 274468: switctweetween The re-education of xander harris 29682 IN REVIEWS Page 1 • by alex, 253643: this stoI thI think ... you 13 starut out of 5 What sound does a breaking heart make 18392 IN REVIEWS Page 1 • by Terri, 125464: Just wanto sao say ... I can'tt fot for • by Angela, 128269: are a very s com combination Stranger in my house 19102 IN REVIEWS • by caliadragon, 163909: look forwao reo reading The future is what we make 5024 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • by Marion, 56145: Maybe it'gelgel's ... wellwell • by Nabiki, 60828: or does oook ook Xan Xander Page 3 • by Tim, 70404: Illy lly liked The warriors 5230 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • by blu sanada, 153253: how Spike Ang Angel The seer 7502 IN REVIEWS • by Tim, 44906: I'mreadreading it • by Goruda Shiro, 102843: read moreyouryour ... , lo, love, [i notice he signs his reviews "Work, love, and dance, Goruda" so this is probably intended here] Sold 6437 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • by Purple Mist, 54553: Funny as heo reo read
  19. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.22 Hot shiver 544207087 IN STORY SUMMARY —Author says this is femslash, then says it’s Spangel (which it is). should remove the ref to femslash in summary as it’s misleading Fangless 544187676 • to to adjust Blaze of glory 33380 Menu 1 • Angel stoherehere • aroundkes kes neck • around?gel gel asked • Giles sdowndown • hand aulleulled Menu 2 • to thgic Box Box • fallinom Aom Angel's • both."AngeAngel's • Wellknowknow • couust ust the • nummy t, st, so I • and an'tan't have Menu 3 • where this woingoing Menu 6 • point e are are doing Menu 8 • hiad bad back and • to the ion ion and • preparing ightight • you gotwronwrong • incoibilibilities • Sas sas sure she The lover 29686 • Et tuutusutus? • B [para] Bastards! • said htlyhtly • as far ascoulcould • the feelingf. f. That • you suc such a • His eyertinrting • Angdmitdmitted • Angel led sed scornfully • with WillI alI almost • won't eveow wow what • Hnnernner child • awaom Jom Jerome's • said sof pee peering • whendernder • hearingow mow moan • frustrationlooklooked at • wamebomebody • otbaotball party • tried tok tok their • use use it's been • "l wel we go • dancinext ext time Becoming I 5469 Menu 2 • he smirked pikepike. • took hieatheath • truemembmembering • broke ovhe the treetops • Mrrrisrris said • he was ng. [para] ng. [para] Xander • in thate age again • at themh, ch, coldly • lift his slo slowly • that the the shower • would have have • Xander si loo looks • B sai said strongly • turned to go,es aes asked • Said tame ame thing • Xander h a m a moan • battle-ver ver the • what you sa was was • peace he he had Menu 3 • see about Gi [drops off] • stiltchetched him • I couldnit dit down • and and anything • he said quietl [para] " [para] "That's ght,ght, • me hisebaseball • when I fount tht that • having hyscs,cs," • I'll call y" fe" feeling • the vre hre had • immedia bac backed • case isel ael and he • wanted tlp,lp," • Cordd thd the • How could you you Menu 4 —for some odd reason she's put hard returns after every line to keep the chapter narrow! • kill the the boy's • his meent ent fading • absolutely nCKINCKIN' • pong tng to the • pe [para] people caused; • "Sure,t; ht he said • seeine dee demonic • his his family • oh I'nna nna love Menu 5 • big pheadhead • of itm evm every • did she she say Menu 6 • wit within five feet • he was g let let • eyes were were orange • sort of forceld. [para] ld. • B's 's eyes • the cehonehone on • then nonethisthis • bitter laugh,ny iny it • boy wou't e't even • Xr prr privately • more more slowly • Angeld wid with • tell yast ast month Menu 7 • smi smirked to • but uneatneath • tell himsewicewice • hear was emelemely happy • in in the aftermath • t you you for • eithercamecame Menu 8 • hick kicllowllowed • knockee swe sword • hisoke.oke. • over her t sho shoulders • Angel walksr tor to • He looke in in disbelief • to hwhatwhat was Menu 9 • whenthouthought • in sup supple body • As as he felt • nly nly you • forrolorolong • day day, every day • know tha Gun Gunn • leave nowght?ght? • his cheste fle flew • "Wowso dso did not Menu 10 • Xa and and Angel • sta started undoing • in fruston. [para] on. • on loveloveseat • attention illoillow, to • at hor tor the • her say ilahila • er aer and the • Holly is pis parents • just a li sca scared • too much ationtion to him • traon ton the • said dacteactedly • ovo Lio Linwood • drew thede sde sharply • spher lig light • spell sho wor worked • So, whagoingoin' to do Menu 11 • up at Angel [para] An [para] Angel said • slowly, wai. [para] . • wsayisaying • outcontcontrol • liked it like tha [drops off] • the the monitors Menu 12 • consequence of g rag raped • with Conns mas making • as farhe che could • as he s up. up. • XandXander, where • stang hng him • and her cls, as, almost • her ready s and and friendly • y,"y," Angel • patienas tas they • my matngelngel • journeyman oft? [para] t? • Meldy andy wiy with • wrongness to hi [para] " [para] "I thought • wang tng the • and Xanlauglaughed • eyes tug gog gold • for a mi abo about • mutd cod comment • times Xandeked ked him • Whae hee hell is • had bthrothrough • to sharbed bed • he wd And Angel • to be cnt wnt with • as well,ing ing • eyes appra the the • for for over • plabetwbetween • What you you do Menu 13 • waing ing to • breathain ain he • making Xander [para] lau [drops off] • H gon gonna • good,andeander • as the bedrredrred • and and his hand • You gmet met • with lter.ter • easueasure • of of mof my Menu 14 • SUMMARrevireviously • contact withm, bm, but • aliscoiscovers • makhim him • to to work • portal with his. [para] . • extra lengf tef teeth • ngs ngs that • that was ver very nice • twisted herd ard around • Duolleolled • and ed ted to check • to gressressed • Holly lis list. • I hope ." A." Angel • He rutelutely • he slumheavheavily • a ng fng foundation • rumbled igelgel's throat • thosetbagtbags • bust a overover • Obviouslgel gel got • andten ten with • gel.gel..." came a • foot singsing harder • he bed ned nervously • "Iu dou don't • beepineping on • curled ar his his • silenglength • anticipatthenthen • sultry ecismcism • he murmuand and • couldwas was • how gooey wey were • thespinsping • screaminghim him • he found streng [chapter drops off] Menu 15 • aga the the firm Menu 16 • we couldthatthat • This was was • Throuhe dhe darkness • leaneainsainst • his dchidchilde • befinefiner
  20. Rules 544207312 http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544207312 —pairings stated in story text as Angel/Spike, Connor/Dawn, "other", but the main pairing here seems to be Buffy/Spike. considering the last action in the story happened in november 2005 i suggest putting this one under AU/Het/Buffy-Spike. Also this is definitely AU. (both cat. changes noted in sort doc)
  21. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.23 First date: Spike style 21165 • Qui sli slicking • the aforemonedoned The dreaming child 19614 • they needneeded • about trbut but he • looked nd ond once • AND and he looks • Of courI dI didn’t • being a.ng ang • Xander.notinoticed
  22. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.24 The adventues of deadboy and zeppo 544197949 —Menu 15 is a challenge, not a chapter, remove http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php...&chapter=15
  23. BUFFY / SLASH / ROOT — p.24 For the love of spike 544202030 Menu 6 —for some reason this menu contains 2 chapters, presumably 6 and 7 (because menu 7 contains ch.8) although they are both labeled 7 in the text Used 37483 • own meansst lst like • what this t was was saying • didn’t itu’reu’re • save yourselfght?ght? • His Jegre mre moving • Backhis his • stilinglinging to the Need 28912 Ch 1 • special in in occult • buildingght ght his • admi the the view • few minutnd end • after fieconeconds • on thage.age. • the cente the the • continto gto gyrate • then leaoverover • whi whip and • up on hneesnees • his gro Xan Xander’s Ch 2 • dress{oomrooms • Angel, sn’tsn’t look • I knowuliaulian • to hom home like ths • and he d thd the • one mormoe tme tonight • see what toy woy would • calm Xan Xander • sy toy to • you wto tto tell • whip in A’s h’s hand • He didn’tt tot to • face nec neck • Het tht the boy • enough exatioation for • slickedselfself • ondernder’s • to edg edge and Just for tonight 27854 • I jusuldnuldn’t do it • beiontiontinued • turne fac face • nervoushe fhe frowned • dark fi sho shook • Xander d tod to will • revealhis his hard • with handhands • elu. ‘A. ‘Ahhh • Spike gledgled his • several mes bes before A spot of dreaming 5809 • make it intereg—ang—and • iThatThat’s • you’re mov I d I don’t • onder’der’s mouth
  24. The adventues of deadboy and zeppo 544197949 IN REVIEWS Page 3 • by LitGal, 2035419141: this is an author response, not a review
  25. BUFFY / SLASH / SPIKE(WILLIAM),XANDER — p.1 Lessons of the hellmouth 600031766 —Author requested to fix disclaimer on 1/4/09 by Fenris Mourningstar and has not done so yet.
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