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Uncontrolled desire 544194501 IN REVIEWS • FLAME (?): Xena, 2035366955 • FLAME: McFlamepants, 2035367048 • FLAME: wiccangirl314, 2035372053 —at which point i’m wondering if the author is a troll and will check that out as soon as i finish checking the reviews —this author’s purported homepage does not exist, and the name of it (BTVS_sperm_coveredfakes) makes me wonder about the troll thing, but i suppose really he’s just a super-crap writer who isn’t a good enough english speaker to write in it on top of everything else.

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.6 Even Dirtier Girls 35087 (this is the one i checked for glitches) Ch 1 — • Christ’ke...”ke...” • You’veten ten • Steadyinrselrself • herivarival • finafinally • subvertedffy ffy • in pleasand and • sidn’idn’t • thme tme thing Ch 2 — just an AN, not a chapter apologizing for the AFF glitches. Delete? Triptych 544171766 —not sure where to put this notice so i’m putting it here. there’s no warning of a character death, should possibly be added; a reviewer complained that she was not warned and would like to have been and it IS on the list of warnings they can pick from Aftermath of an encounter with an undead legend 35299 • in in the first The london sonnets 31785 Ch 2 — • could the the lure Ch 3 — • t irt irony? • His [para] His voice became • won’t kil.” [para] .” Ch 4 — • the the air • slick ick into Ch 7 — • you are the who who • pul him him Menu 8 — • ”If [para] “If Rupert can —starting with ch.8, the chapters are misnumbered in the pull-down menu and the story text. 8 is numbered as 9 but SHOULD BE 8, and so on thru the end Menu 9 — • dng, ng, but • rt’srt’s • feelingsld fld favor • She ld atd at him • urazirazing Menu 10 — • Go nd tnd try Menu 11 — • etteette Menu 13 — • woulwouldn’t • was was another • thr the them • attentionhat hat was • aga Rup Rupert • wasresiresisting? • jey. ey. • incrity.ity. • take car you you • along Ets nes neck • sharp off off • noyingying • whathat?hat?” • to wap. [para] p. [para] “Women • clouded . “Y, “Yes, • admi out out loud Three's cumpany: fun in the sun 32185 • brieflym thm the • theirfriefriends • mom movo Ito Italy • dingding and • hummgaingainst • heir oir over • befrealrealizing Three's cumpany 31924 • haz hazel eyes • vto pto pull

Even Dirtier Girls 35088 —duplicate of story 35087 —possibly the reviews could be merged so none are lost? don't know what you do about that

Even Dirtier Girls 35087 (this is the one i checked for glitches) IN REVIEWS • Tonya 276692: was a bongeonger

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.7 19 chapters to this one so i’m doing these glitches in their own post Snowbound 23642 Ch 1 — • notipsiipsing Ch 2 — • aurtsurtsied • the the three Ch 3 — • cld wad water Ch 5 — • proteste [para] “A [para] “Aye, you do • hindulndulged • uur pur punishment • Weslehipships • bruised by ing.ing. • Hise ree returned • in bumomemoment Ch 6 — • hollowore ore the • beset by t.” t.” • nonethel” [nonetheless, drops off] “ [para] “How did you • Younk Ink I • Angel a, he, he • Thor oor opened Ch 7 — • one he dea dear. • impoa dia distant • hospi, wh, where • As cles mis milk Ch 8 — • felt ain,ain, • “ets,ets,” • sproverover • muchmuch • to r fer feet Ch 9 — • by hide,ide Ch 10 — • Weslaghaaghast • that mor more • ght,ght, • his has Sas Spike • muchcesscess • bodut hut he • tomourmour • dras res release • neeneeener [and neener neener to you!] Ch 11 — • musg yog your • do do not seek • oeetheeth • ley ley shrugged • thaacheached • I dg yog your Ch 12 — • closedind ind them • Wy’s y’s • I k I k I will • andes oes • Forgie; Ie; I did • thenthen took • wng, ng, • We kne knelt • vic victor • harnedrned • mGileGiles Ch 13 — • the litilltill • axtraxtravagant • y His His voice • hisle wle • for Iy noy none • theays;ays; • angardgarding • and mor morning Ch 14 — • SomeSome • wiurmuurmured • to whe when • s sas said • met e’s e’s dark ... squarely.am nam not • ridbesibeside • I wowagewager • they toou wou with • “Y. “You don’t • had hadozenozen • yove wve wasted • hid sid striving • “Sh” Ra” Rayne Ch 15 — • voice fuf mef meaning • but openopening • cal sel selfish • lastht, ht, Giles • Giligheighed Ch 16 — • disapped. ed. • dark hairt cut curled • bhumahuman • tre tremor • yeel eel ready • intens’d w’d Ch 17 — • warthinthin • lRaynRayne • ans sos soft • Spike ned.ned. • Giles out out Ch 18 — • sawh a h a clearer • Etho Gio Giles • “Th [para] “That’s far from • feare wou would • Ethan frd, ld, looking • hgan gan to • mihavehave • my lover, my nd –nd [that’s an en-dash] • ofn han had • asld nld • agto ito it Ch 19 — • yskedsked • a little ansly.sly. • sortsorts,” • I too too • in a hu, po, • niWeslWesley • finpartparty

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.7 Episodes 30834 Ch 1 • man’saffsaffectedness • in of of scotch • yont tnt Ch 3 • lostthouthought • sacrerthrrthright • to si one one of Chaos theories 30349 Ch 1 • [in AN, Notes] placter ter the • galleroperoper • Job’s expe” H” He • wholdy edy expand • crtabrtable • rosruptruptly Ch 3 • ast tst the • hesk. sk. She • morningd snd she School's out 30506 • grd hod hold • dow down here • have youred!red!” • bace tee tears • botnds,nds, • suggested bru brunette • held her tig. Sh. She • yce yce explained • galler tor to do • crounround • woingoing • SAP! AP! • just in tim see see the • and d Snd Snyder Caught in the act 30181 • [in AN] unintenal [para] al • Buthinkhink • hisst. st. ... wee fre friends • petok fok forward • the the fact • wasoffeoffended Interruption 30058 • aent ent to • hatightightly • embarrassm Not Not • get a c loo look • her e She She was • bwas was Wild on the side 29843 Ch 1 • said sim “I “I thought • moved thh thh the • [in song lyrics] Asconsconscience • Wi’s j’s jaw Ch 2 • instantly,ief ief • lonendeender • she ful fully • pusto hto her • counterpoio hio his • dow down to Mother's day 29878 • thromprompted • headn shn she • purred,lingling • squeeas ias if • faceface • butthouthought • over y” ch” chipped • salivat wat was Hushed 29603 Ch 1 • ie eme embrace • themilimiling • Otep tep • might have ca [drops off] • last t but but a • owerower • Ethanded ded • huld uld • mon pan patrol • Jolooklooked Ch 2 • ht hht his Ch 3 • [in AN] donant ant to • butre wre was • rollrollrolled • aregoingoing • inthe the rest Sunblind 28725 —story summary on index page: the winterll fll fresh Ch 1 • stea sha shamelessly • ended the [drops off] • G [para] Giles might have • secoouthouth • doingthanthan Ch 2 • anllinlling • tastemen men • Etharhytrhythm Artistic license 29245 Ch 2 • statee obe obvious • pullack ack • I man man of • m the then Ch 3 • ift pet person • l kel keep • hepplepples • registereyce yce • different.ere ere • memomemory Menage or three for the road 28877 • Gilhe dhe devoted • joban aan • show o Gil Giles • tio poo position • Feg reg • etoldtold • the sis tis true Snowbound 23642 19 chapters to this one so i’ll do the glitches in a separate post. i’m sure it will be a long one. The sitter 19694 Ch 2 • Stt, bt, boys • hiad. ad. • arohershers • two two months • backvealvealing • hid fid faintly • anwn. wn. • impressiveitalitalia • pumped.ke mke • theiripmeipment • can’lievlieve Ch 3 • suses ses out • totractract • bulldid did • neckneck from • he he won’t • rooo weo we • and and do the • isn’tsn’t • adion ion • spanspanking • take th. th. • fingmassmassaging Ch 4 • thp atp • r har hand • William shy shy • physicantacntact • insiduffyuffy • exotanceancer • acly tly trying • hto lto look • a o fio film ... wobe tbe the • few mes les longer • cor corrupt • ca to to her • hearheard • despery - y • broprropriety • firsfirst • anck, ck, • tongthenthen • of iilliilliam • llialliam’s eyes • lookconfconfused • At tirstirst • “Spik” W” William —at Menu 5, which is suddenly called Chapter 6 (both on pull-down menu and in story text), we jump ahead and seem to skip either the text of or the number of Ch.5 and go right from 4 to 6. Context-wise it doesn’t seem like anything is missing. I think the chapters just need to be renumbered. But it’s not a glitch per se, so i don’t know if you want to fix it or leave it. If you fix it, from menu 5 on the pull-down menu and story text chapter numbers should match. Menu 5 • Spike.’re ‘re • the st spe speakers • doin’ imi imitation • brain so muddl [drops off] • stunning . Wi. William • for iam iam • frie He He’d • ctedcted Menu 6 • arouIn tIn the • theires ies if • for mke,ke, • the the phone • fly rly ran • he he have to • try an the the • rabbitss cos cock Menu 7 • aglatelater • ther her hand • you t tht think • anleasleasing her • from ‘ sta status’ • feour our pain • this. Is. It • chagaiagainst • sajokijokingly • continuto kto • wop frp from • nosenose then • waou tou • we’reetheether Menu 8 • midof tof the bsmilsmiling • a tho those • som some company • chuc at at the • needcum.cum • feeling Spis was warm Menu 9 • on his to tto the • somet fro from • notlingling • explain myself [para] F [para] Faith looked • thappiappily Menu 10 • afteis! is! • cum!s vos voice • nd tnd the • Do swe sweat • bless.”s.” • oher her hip • ka lia little • pillpillow Menu 11 • theld tld the • small e ofe of the • arounround • gushorthorth Menu 12 • weretop top of • startingsingsing • sortanda nda • cleanladylady • canvincvince • you?uffyuffy • slbuilbuilding • ly tly tromped • wouive.ive • ki his his • he an an aggravated • Willilowllowly Menu 13 • had all all to say • sniff}fLe”Let’s • up thte ate and • par see see all • yoink ink is • cone yoe you that • hands togr. r. • eacher,her, • shif her her —there is a huge chunk of repeated text. from the wordord just above this, search for • T of her neck and face. —i don’t know where the rest of the text is for that glitch. from the sentence immediately following, beginning with the words <Their hands slid up and down> and counting that as paragraph one, DELETE THE NEXT 17 PARAGRAPHS AND FIRST 2 SENTENCES OF THE NEXT ONE, ENDING WITH THE TEXT <she groaned, almost in disbelief.> —this same chunk (starting with the <of her face and neck> partial sentence) repeats starting here, in its entirety. • personalitappeappealed • body ar, dr, dragging • Buff swe sweet • up to fo her her • helped lBuffBuffy • Hea Buf Buffy • sug lig lightly Menu 14 (s/b chapter 14) • to t twt twin • liShe She • imly, ly, • in of of her • Yelooklook • fntryntry • dpacepace • woman tearsears • tender ece oce of Filthy girls 4476 • [in AN, Posts] please and and we • tloorloor • herselfith ith • jealjealous • contd tod to • lettiaithaith’s • emaremark • be but but if • himsoverover • thi this was • shved ved almost

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.8 Control 27958 Ch 4 • waven ven ... the istsists • Willand and • andshe she • wyouryour Ch 5 • tnishnish • down the the • Mas Master • bac back and • howuch uch • pu on on it • firhinghing • Buffye upe up • hieeleeeled • horsey’ssy osy • as a sy’ sy’ and Ch 6 • ster ter grin 26 26771 • dst”st” he Buffy conquers 26770 • himtly tly Those chosen two...plus one 21645 —in story index page the title is glitched: Thosehosen Two Ch 1 • threthree • in f of of her • for ing ing her • do tdo this • third ird part Ch 2 • gettgetting • loofferfferent • lo at at me • reflexesas ras right Ch 3 • shs nos now • newyer yer Ch 4 • F rai raised • had neveed, ed, • Jamherehere • and fw hew her • fy tfy threw Ch 5 • whilr far face • wat watcher? • en? Mo? More • the gir girl • hearfew few • Iure ure you • guar ang angel • in front front Ch 6 • therther that • tds hds her • youn’tn’t worry • likeke ake • e whe when • clothe” Fo” For her • raineained • sm and and she A new dawn 25442 • shuld uld Awakenings 24904 Ch 1 • simpli, an, and • mara sex sex • pri tim time • to to her legs • sparatchatch • ringring her • the the shaft • YOU kingking • realas Das Dawn • it”th tth that • late.e foe for • reachedund und • wissomesomeone • firsfirst • sug thg the • anen Ien I • caown own Ch 2 • nea wea what • eac each other • eed eed you too • tasteeet eet • hshirshirt • Hsed sed • wousavesave • sthatthat • pag heg her • over-stimed, ed, • hick eck • thit oit out • watachtached • tuch uch • comerealrealize • Dainkeinked • as her her own • woslapslap Ch 3 • sensitivom tom the • pointin at at her • impntlyntly • oine ine • waill ill juiced • Buffhe she • reaminerseerself • went othe the Three come blondes part deux 21698 • in ral ral years • across the the lawn • her bry siy sighs • and tha that • but he dn’dn’t • successf pul pulled • Willitammtammered • Spikispeispered • her brs, rs, rising • perfectt int inside • wasdrafdrafty • plupinkpink • rplerplexed • on hirlsirls Just like old times 19445 Ch 1 • [at top of chapter] Just Like Old Ti [drops off] • D [para] Disclaimer ... lof swf sweaty • [in AN] and e ise is no • u Ang Angelus • whe sha shagged • don’tng ang • wDru Dru dropped • pretty fun fun Ch 2 • wer were staying Ch 3 • seightight • in clu club • came togethend and • iike’ike’s arms • Bun’t n’t kill Teachers pet 20887 • ve yve you • will havetaketake • a le lle low • ta her her by • Whhe jhe janitor • She didnay aay • just didnnow now • and and pulled • backthe the • pinnt wnt was • up im, im, • maste She She • She’d plaat nat next • wt dit die • as only snew new • bit bit in • relarelationship Three come blondes 20460 • about about the • fished the the • dro dropped • upon theid Vid Victorian • see to, thn, then • betweee lie lips Odd troubles, weirder help 19955 • Ifounfound Dags 19954 • the stus whs who • payticuticular • Not ly. ly. • threat is gis guy-ness • hugginl thl the • playilittlittle • you you must • and rels his himself

School's out 30506 IN REVIEWS • DUPLICATE by Skip Ward, 243951 and 243955 The sitter 19694 IN REVIEWS —in flames, responses to flames, and author response, i’m not flagging wordord as i suspect you will be deleting these. there is wordord in several because they’re quite long, but i haven’t marked it. let me know if you’re keeping these non-reviews and i should mark for wordord and i’ll go back. Page 1 • by LadyLiz, 137832: the . An. And yeah • FLAME by ILoveSpike, 137920 • RESPONSE TO FLAME (not a review), sluggie, 137965 Page 2 • AUTHOR’S RESPONSE (not a review), PaganBaby, 138009 • Nicky, 138021: you’veer der disappointed • RESPONSE TO FLAME (not a review), Nicky, 138038 • RESPONSE TO FLAME (not a review), LadyLiz, 138050 • GOOD GOD, RESPONSE BY FLAMER, ILoveSpike, 138095 • AUTHOR RESPONSE, PaganBaby 138123 —we can wipe out a good many of her reviews if we just get rid of this flame-and-response crap • RESPONSE TO FLAME, Tiana 138124 • RESPONSE TO FLAME, Emma 138132 Page 3 —if “review” is a flame or response or author response, i’m just going to put the reviewer name and # here. if it contains things that need fixing i’ll note that. if it’s mixed between actual review and slamming the flamer i guess i’ll leave it. • Lauren 138199, Anon 138367, Charlene 138664, PaganBaby 138705, Audrina56 138823, Page 4 • Stormybreeze 139285: yottlettle tease • Des 139387 (she just couldn’t resist) Page 5 • Unbridled_Brunette 139847: that lso lso well ... an excelleniteriter • Azrielle 141020: Nice sloild ild up • Caroline 141531: very ot , veryghtyghy ... so blaly wly with ... look for to to the Page 6 • Emma 142481: and tof USfUST! • Stormybreeze 144861: williad spd spike ... inaprpreat • nat 146255: (um) story,ean.ean. • Suzy 146340: like a ing ing puddle Page 7 • samy 148046: islly lly cool • Cookie 149124: I am ng tng this Page 8 • AUTHOR RESPONSE, PaganBaby 150168 • Black Dahlia 150601: Sy isy is it Page 9 • flameywicca 155001: grinsamilamily Page 12 • gattaca 166606: next chr. Tr. This Page 13 • lolita 175689: you arbrilbrilliant • kendal 178343: up agi agian Page 14 • RESPONSE TO FLAMER Cordelia Chase 197824 • NOT A REVIEW Cordelia Chase 197828 Page 15 • NOT A REVIEW Cordelia Chase 201480 • Brat 221785: there at the enis tis there Page 16 • Lisa 225292: are su gre great —reviewer mentions there is no chapter 5, skips from 4 to 6 Filthy girls 4476 IN REVIEWS • by Thurston Moore, 245771: I k I k I liked it

Those chosen two...plus one 21645 IN REVIEWS • by Dylan, 158082: worried wnew new A new dawn 25442 IN REVIEWS • by Samolly, 195114: endingill ill Awakenings 24904 IN REVIEWS • by regent, 194984: ndednded should Those left behind 25253 IN REVIEWS • FLAME - Thurston Moore, 193319 • FANNING THE FLAME - goolecap, 194632

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.9 Dawn gets dirty 19067 • leahe dhe door • prof yof your • sriedried • or or girls • tooDawnDawn • emptieforefore • morght ght • orryorry”, said • showeffy ffy Roomies 18990 Ch 2 • Gilexy ixy Deadscoobies 17918 • goooughough • wil wai waiting • slashedhtinhting • YouYou’d • WyndPricPrice Harem 17390 • hat hat has • enteher her • Thill ill Keeping secrets 7872 Ch 1 • [in AN, Summary] alwaer ger gift Ch 2 • takea hoa home Ch 3 • God’ke dke • totalaughaught • toya!”ya!” • justn men me Ch 4 • havemonemoney • saw saw her Ch 7 • Bufrderrdered • molar lar level • shinghing • happ yet yet Ch 8 • heeasteasts he Ch 9 • herds bds brushne • [in ending AN] and s wis wildly Ch 10 • [in AN, Notes] seasseason • [in AN, Thanks] iwas was Naughty slayer 14809 • Xr str staying • fr His His The power of three 14784 • sookeooked • alSo wSo when • Taro.o hio his • feltfelt • she she needed Brandy Alexanders 14218 • som something else • lwhilwhile • dar darted • making l’s l’s hips You are mine 12994 • noe wae was The smell 12007 • Yo You look • ill ill this • six pacnd pnd put • hog upg up a • her spr spread

IN REVIEWS • by Skip Ward, 114857: alanalander Keeping secrets 7872 PARTIALLY IN SCRIPT FORMAT IN REVIEWS • by coolestchick..., 40766: Spans fus fun You are mine 12994 IN REVIEWS • by MsSpikester, 82717: love the ylinyline

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.10 The slayer mansion 10415 • h”Th”Thanks The pet 10199 • in de, bu, burn The sleepover 9515 Ch 2 • h’t s’t spent • bui building Changing dawn 9413 • thea, ea, • she’d s in in • she ked overover • was way way • sli slightly • s cas caressing Best laid plans 8738 Ch 1 • differsporsports • peoplth tth Ch 2 • heThatThat • say say, but • just “ Wi” Willow • mee cae can • hapss ass and Ch 3 • takiontrontrol • her her tits • her her tongue • waso geo getting • ons vibons.ons • sof tof time Ch 5 —not a chapter, just a very long AN and issuing a challenge. there is wordord in it, but i’m assuming you’ll be deleting it since it’s not a chapter so i haven’t done a search Fun with the initiative 7242 • and was was Kindness, love, and acceptance 5499 Ch 1 • Afterlisilising Ch 2 • was m and and • anl pll plan • ouldould • feel g so so • Just use use Ch 3 • name?””Of”Of • there, S.” .” Spike Ch 4 • ducknto nto Extra ingredient 6037 • Gileanleaned • he red fod for • was a ss, ss, Everybody wants you 5128 Menu 1 • [in AN] didn’e, Ie, • ski skin itched • Buffy’s diptiiption • tbehibehind • twerewere • sensitivea. Ha. His Menu 2 • dai daily • pikepike • headb and and • ran as as as he Menu 3 —says Chapter 4 in text and pull-down menu but should be 3 (menu 4 should say ch.4, menu 5 ch.5, etc.) • pul pulling • ht, ht, I’m Menu 4 —s/b ch.4, not 5 • her wher her • Shckedcked • hend wnd • d ind incredulously Menu 5 —s/b ch.5, not 6 • banaaiquaiquiries • Theybeenbeen • little gl. Sp. Spike • hiad aad and • iendiending • thinkinout out • woult evt even • honguongue • frs ars and • greailesiles • goat eat each • straddles was waist • S clo closed • [in ending AN] ae foe Breaking bread 5029 • ho smo smile • eren isn is • of ife ife here Buffy’s night off 4894 • impati kep kept • loo looking • for for certain • unexed, ed, Are you satisfied? 1907 Ch 1 • her,o hio his Ch 8 • wits pls plan • screamhe’dhe’d Ch 9 • aalkealked

The sleepover 9515 IN REVIEWS —reviewer Deirdre (47304, 47731) accuses author of plagiarism. author leaves his responses in the Reviews. link cited by reviewer no longer works. ^ ^---left the above for mods to review, and posted. Best laid plans 8738 IN REVIEWS • by Zathraas, 124525: was atty tty good Kindness, love, and acceptance 5499 IN REVIEWS Page 1 • by Dust, 16747: er aer and • by Sparky, 17166: xander/connspecspect Fun with the initiative 7242 IN REVIEWS • by Lady Goddess Sephiroth, 276605: butike ike Everybody wants you 5128 IN REVIEWS • by Lisbeth, 49531: flledlled my • by Spyke014, 169768: it waallyally

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT — p.11 Making change 4158 • in in on us • no lno longer • whhe she saw An unquiet season 4136 • ap. p. Maybe • raceraced the line • didn’t m wai waiting • rightre..re [right there...] • head,ead, • ame pme point BtVS the version you never saw 3925 • still s fos for • longfor for • “H tak take • takiurnsurns Cookies never tasted so good, part two 3478 • andkingking • lic licking Right time, right place 2899 • tryingcompcompose • fantasi abo about • Ri” Riley said • faleanleaning • kiddinRileRiley The challenge 756 Ch 1 • Shnallnally • n let letting • in pantpants • hav have • andderder’s • ced oed out • flen frn front • ie lee least • seriousoubtoubted • sha shagging’s Ch 2 —used manual line breaks, not returns, so chapter is all one big paragraph • [in AN] Maybet stt story • hind. nd. • ast hst his • eyesked ked • excg ang and • deliciouislyl. l. She • oed, ed, • Hinkeinked • dng ing it in • head.uot;uot;Like • throatffy ffy • led.led. • meanmean • thel oel Ch 3 • onm on the • tel telling • rooen hen he • wor words • brunetten’t n’t • Bufas tas the • gi her her • mhavehave • tampiampire • desiher her • suckedder der • Willospelspell • tha that night • of the vre dre deep • contcontrol • oe, be, but • tirstirst person • makhim him • herhe whe was • filled.compcomplete Tryout 2404 • [in AN] Female S. Lo. Lots • the er ser still • broks sis silence • Fai Faith • reachabletanctance • the’s e’s e’s • Angelliedlied • thesibisibility A demon’s curse 1866 • an hav have • jyou you here • his.his. • wante, wi, • top och och • diame ame Three is good, but five is even better, part one 1873 • fy wfy wanted • snuckk tok to

Making change 4158 IN REVIEWS • by faithful_chickie, 10808: kno know how much An unquiet season 4136 IN REVIEWS • by FaithB, 8707: the roc rocked Cookies never tasted so good, part two 3478 IN REVIEWS • by pussylicker [good god], 6144: never re NC- NC-17 The challenge 756 IN REVIEWS Page 1 • by alycia, 1178: the vivid deptiiptions Page 2 • by Mandylynn, 2444: if you dod lod love to know wyou you • by Cin, 5472: you are hee hell

BUFFY / THREESOMES / ROOT p.12 And dawn makes three 1872 —In p.12 story summary: back in Buffy’fe afe and • licking gir girls • Faith’s aeganegan • tossed thn thn the • peroungoung • caressinem oem • and slhem hem • naand and The jacket 1295 IN STORY —something is wrong with the apostrophes, they all print as lowercase L’s • so mtroutrouble • Buffy ind.” [para] d.” • es tes turned Vacancy 1247 • orriorrible • mattmatter • don’t Wh What • lefmplempletely empty Watch out slayer! 1188 Ch 2 • [in top line of start-up AN] Fatchatch Out ... should be Watch Out • lon hon hers My boy 546 • bit E on on the Sated 119 —REVIEWERS mention that all chapters cut off abruptly, and it appears author has never fixed them as they all break off in the middle of words. not sure if this is glitch-related or if something else happened Ch 1 • that was end end • mus tos to • seemed t on on and on • apart, th, the • get get the best • omfoomfortable • herst. st. • yock Fck Faith • exquisiiss.iss. • He h she she • and and she • a secoJustJust • juove ove • ra tha than the • the fof tof the • “Yyou you are • All problcancan’t • monyou you • di dow down • erpenipenis • oveandeander • mitalktalk • effeeffect • Eveing ing • her h tak taking • theyld hld have • ag the they • jurisdictiorresrresting • and re-asmentment Ch 2 • [in AN2] NC-1cs, cs • poutedle sle smiling • the the first • handningning • Get oto hto here • stu stupid • ano guy guy • upsingsing • face a of of • soft and innoc [cuts off] Ch 3 • tensSpikSpike • gave me. ‘s a’s all he • atedated • t som something • tor to make • rhythsurgsurge • Thenguengue-wrestled Ch 4 • [in starting AN, Spoilers] • Xanand and Buffy • take ssagssage • earone one colors [earthtone colors] • offroomroom • eyeidiniding • diHe dHe didn’t • With my sou [para] “ [para] “That’s good • hisy moy mouth • breathwingwing • rol roles • witnessa tra train • kneadthemthem • softeoftened • to w she she • makes sos so good • FaitFaith’s • eyesw onw only Ch 5 —i think she put in manual line endings as the lines are all fairly short and don’t change width with the browser being widened • nap her her neck • vampireile ile • at at her • you aour our • knoy. “y. “Thanks • slomachmachine • are rigged.re are are Improvised 10 IN STORY • thoke oke

The jacket 1295 IN REVIEWS • by [Quoadioadicea] think this should be Queen Boadicea (ID 1497) Improvised 10 IN REVIEWS • by Mandylynn, 7334: nohugehuge

Dirty talk 3 17186 • thrng, ng • youlls lls on my Dirty talk 2 17130 • cybecybersex? • Master: t: telling you [should be MasterVamp: telling you] • fucking selfself like mad • Spike.ck, ck, Adventures in house-sitting 17037 • gla glanced • this uuot;uot; he hissed • the the offending knob • fists cled and and • continueduot;uot;Making • pikepike sighed • and ed aed an • andked ked to the • into a sig pog • weredered • between legslegs. Fading the bruises 17078 • right h and and • eachath ath caught • inevitablyser,ser • reflons ons of • impri its itself • thhe whe whipping The apocryphal revelation 16993 • [in AN2] essene andmionmionesviolin ... and craconsconisstency • whe hae had • flippedr onr onto • were ep iep in your • rfighfight • grandsiwho who • thuch.uch. • thrustrusting • thfeelfeeling Dirty talk 16969 • slidinu inu in and • hard? [para] “B [para] “Been hard since • my my cock This year's solstice 16992 • [in beta acknw’t] isexusexual • wasnuch uch a • knew t Spt Spike • ook ook it in • came tat... at... [came to that] • is mys my idea • werssedssed out • deftgersgers • tiny lat and and lifted • “W,w,well • rgasrgasms • sticstick • ookeooked • Feeo goo good • crasd bud burn • lthatthat Slashed sonnet sequence 16429 —Menu 1 is an AN, not a chapter Menu 2 • coins? [para] Wh [para] When he tries Menu 4 • a few bars LoveLove Song Menu 5 • hears movemensideside • for ush.”h.” Menu 6 • DownDown in • painful fz, wz, which • height fois –is – and takes ... ale hle hips • onen frn from Menu 7 • wheninsiinsisted • at the r lir lip • tired yetitedited • ley ley smiled • shalver ver regret Menu 8 • doesn’t seem tnd. [para] nd. [para] Therein lies • splasheshis his • Het wat wants • to bee ote other Menu 9 • feels soy loy lonely Menu 10 • butder der takes it • breez”Gon”Gonna rain • fit youre.”e.” • dilat”Yo”You • possessiveler Menu 11 • squeezing ju lit little • hipe fle flush • orsavesave Menu 12 • an eticaatical • Li coi coiled • Angnfornforms • into bac back of • Want? [para] “N [para] “Nothing! • Xandearedared • Ang Angel’s mind • happensin. in. He! What? Angel? 16731 —in summary on index page: Sla The The boys’ • Spik tor torso Face the front 16730 • wantishe’she’d • hangingn ann and We band of beloved 16389 • Be str Li Live • picp anp and uncaps • they cou counted • flesh aly hay half-hard • and and of beloved A guy's christmas 16269 • cou had had • toungoung • like the le Mle Matchgirl • OLD OLD YOU IT WAS COOL • blisterilesiles’ • arrangementdrewdrew • Giles s sud suddenly • WhatWhat’s • revedeved • most code dte demon • an one one will • Ctmastmas • butes hes had • severalondsonds • Giles ki him him • pinned ben him him • Giles felt soing ing stabbing • ve dve days? Jitters, assumptions and boogie nights 16270 • thvie vie began • mouth softsoft and • The soin hin his • yorriorried • slowl and and down • not not *that* big Spiked and stunned 16271 • che chewed it • tas of of caramel • tilis his head • finished zig thg the fly • tlingling • definitone one of Sensual goodbyes 16169 Ch 1 • thinthink we should • laid the ma her her own Ch 2 • all all strung up Ch 3 • frlacelaces • strides u the the door • thewer wer alone • tofy dfy during • with hece. ce. • his ballith ith a shout Ch 4 • is wis watch • Bufeplieplied • stutstuttering • man reekf a f a lovely • thouthought • things cd ced cell

Fading the bruises 17078 • by Anon, 111706: I wasn’tprisprised Face the front 16730 • by Queen Boadicea, 108531: are raininwn. wn. You Spiked and stunned 16271 • by Anon, 189083: diversion fromhinghing

Just spike and his puppy 16022 • previouslen cen • brioranorange • in hisir air • Angel smi [drops off[ Bootstraps 15453 • weepwounwound • humaneckeck • under hnd pnd Spike's evil christmas fun 15317 Ch 1 • you you can’t even • u the the golden Ch 2 • his his shoulder • and his reer, er, Angel • bastbastard • Sppeekpeeked out • he hateat Sat Spike • kishilehile • Angel’s fon ton the • shudderiody.ody • overder’der’s • oved thd thrust • been exing ing • a pictof aof Ch 3 • os cos coat • houseike ike got Ch 4 • y ary are you • eyesw opw open • stroke hisk, lk, leaning • l gol got up and • weuld uld make him • smilin Xan Xander The attack of the vampire candy canes 15318 • any of of me • can’u geu get it • same ampirmpires How you remind me 5808 Ch 1 • thiboutbout him • bitgaingain Ch 2 • start towardm, sm, tomach • desperatd ned needy • rstarstand • gripsenssens • thatwillwill • Tonguenglengle ... possessionnds,nds • ing ing down my Waiting for ripper 15154 • deeper Rr.”r.” • love youan,an, Xander's coming home 15118 • he he couldn’t • wearinatheather • shit!”lushlush No! but? bollocks 12182 Menu 1 —Ch 1 in pull-down menu inside story has wordord: Buolloollocks • blood t? t? Menu 2 —mistakenly labeled in text as Ch 3, should be Ch 2; all the following chapters are labeled as if 2 never existed. don’t know if the author forgot to insert Ch2 or if the numbering is just wrong • B kno know • tried moremore Menu 3 —labeled as ch.4 • one co Dor Dor • tiltins hes head • you think [para] “I [para] “I think Drac • might allyally know • whhoulhould • as los pos possible • thoobioobies • time witu. u. And • comecome with us • on thn the Menu 4 —labeled as ch.5 • and to to love him • the reawhy why • Thatheythey’re • mentink ink that Dark kisses 14989 • whhey hey might • help,idesides • didnven ven notice • would hate for for • d Nd. Now • cocko hio his • watil til later • until he a to to life • into hiuth.uth. • rng ong on his • game face. [para] “Yo [para] “You remember • goio ruo run • tabltable once more • sa tha that he • girls inis his home • thae coe couldn’t • and ing ing that • The plas sis simple • patrpatrolled • arefareful • we twe treated • A pe, re, redheaded • knewt tht the • anulgeulgent • he w hur hurt me • Becau wa. wa • kill “ Gi” Giles protested —last line of chapter drops off Mischief MayhMayhem 14985 —wordord in story title, on index page [Mischief and Mayhem] Ch 1 • fthatthat • stimetime • waswellwell • gottal yal ya Ch 2 • thir twr two • Heogniognised • little tunand and then • startinllegllege • vis, St, Strife • wortriftrife • thellowllow cuts • wonderust ust Ch 3 • Strife,xandxander • throuhe che crowd • everyoee tee that Ch 4 • ball of gy agy at the • wasn’t tnicenice • alohe lhe lithe Ch 5 • woulve tve to move • cruel s on on his • Fin he he • Xandecidecided • powepower • andeander • oach ach pair Ch 6 • thnecknecks • that yoll bll be • are the of of the Caught 12797 Ch 1 • Xander [para] ow [para] own cock would • slit,lrealready • od, od, yes • donythnything Ch 2 • wto tto take the • e dee demanded Snow? what? where? 14593 • to fihat hat Spike • wheikeike’s cool

Dark kisses 14989 • FLAME by Anon, 2035325978

Tricked into treating 14565 • lem.lem.” • flatteurseurself • nhis his soon • sire. “ [para] “ [para] “Apart • for onc once • kneeknees • smase ime image • were al Eth Ethan’s • becauf yof you Voyeur 14046 • make rua run • amazement, k hak hard • The vae hie hissed • reacdowndown Lost in the dark, cleansed in the flame 10555 Ch 1 • [in AN] alswarnwarning • abl sta stand • ps hps he’d • handhand and • penirougrough • of clu club • whe he he wanted • swhis his Ch 2 • comforting.e woe worst • mng. ng. “Do you • Maybhe’she’s • functioning.at wat • blivblivion Ch 3 • pon pon waking • Xand He He • mene oue out • midsecti [para] B [para] Behind • Theck fck feel • donreadready • luctluctantly • fiscenscent Ch 4 • they’eeding mng me • laime.ime Ch 5 • the nrs ars allowed • ted, ed, intent • fy ify insisted • triedgrabgrab • thelinglings • deepry gry growling • He mum to to • was eam eam figment • alreaakedaked • ap grp groan • st hst his • hisgue.gue • being ed ced completely • and scr Wi Within • both Xand nip nipples • wrapped sly [para] ly [para] around Ch 6 • themeeineeing • tu to to the Ch 7 • going to bt. [para] t. [para] Angel checked Ch 8 • bat tht the ... soldier ly hyl had Ch 9 • didn’therther • thn-ann-answers [the non-answers] • Spiks sos soul Ch 10 • Xa ask asked Ch 11 • thsearsearch Ch 12 • ike ike had • iet tet the • fallto hto his • liv living room • sturstured • Spikehighhighs ... the whe was • hacheached • Instee gre groaned • lipslips forward Ch 13 • exprexpression • contcontinued • te vae vampiress Ch 14 • Or wasre sre • watcwatch • Gil Giles’ books • He d ted tell Ch 15 • bri bright glow • in he he saw • fuckioke oke down • outgrabgrab Ch 16 • vampreacreached • precludm ofm of • er’ser’s still form • recteected • to kat tat the • despe toe to feel • teeth a [para] hel [para] held on • ing ing to Bound to my heart 13725 • coc cocked his head Dream versus reality 12521 • cottoverovered • oncdonedone • tight, l” H” He • squeezedt [para] t [para] wanting Xander • is his time, Xanderced ced his Shifting like sand 11597 • let the lie lie The gift that keeps on giving 11589 • arme ple placed • scalp?e Wae Watcher • drift tre pre pressing • bell mhis his heart • vampi hun hungrily • tried his to to • smoothhilehile • him st ust • you’t w’t work • witndernder • aike ike tucked Reality 11033 • entiree ane and • and the e wae was • Andreganegan • eas ias if unable Make believe 9684 • off of hinds nds and • the cake finefine • undeny Any Andew • of prec fri friction —there’s a line of code or something at the end right before the words “the end” How? Why? bloody hell, yes 10495 Threesoem? Menu 1 • [in Summary, inside Ch1] just a flufic fic • [in Disclaimer, ditto] n’tn’t own • his v he he pushed • hw etw etched • know.andeander • was was reeling • ow row rest Menu 2 • muchlovelove • I h [para] yo [para] you do • excld atd at • on thher her hand • ve yve you • ?!” ?!” The word was squeaked out Menu 3 • hyes.yes • werout out to do • ood ood hard • the man ry [para] ry [para] out and arch • Hisk wak was Menu 4 • him. H [para] who [para] whole being • cominf hif him • peakeout out • dressioom oom Menu 5 —for some reason inside the chapter this is called chapter 6 but it should be 5 • ancogncognize • nd and and pulled • now [para] Whe [para] Where was Spike? • get goi Rem Remind • storedre, re ... I pu dow down • stoodthe the lighlight • Andcoulcould • sco up up the boy • Spi Spike’s neck • redrredressed Menu 6 —skipped another chapter number here; inside chapter it’s called #8 but should be 6 • fuo buo bursting • onothnother • Spi Spike once again • Spi Spike had • his hud. [para] d. [para] “Thank you • etchedtheitheir Menu 7 —called #9 but should be 7 • bt tht the • onothnother • thpikepike • tie Xan’s [para] ‘s [para] ankles to the • “No Xan Xander • toucu alu all • juightight • ke’ke’s arm • yontednted?” Where? when? gah 10475 Ch 1 • reng bng back • ponatonate • Hntednted • beihe ohe • to at l lis listen • andeander • thihat hat I • tw [para] ab [para] about the risks Ch 2 • whip thr through • “ X” Xander saw • hned?ned?” • thouul cul concern Ch 3 • Spflinflinch • ry wry washed • brean. n. An honest • returne the their • enunciatlowllowly • er cer could Ch 4 • from ide ide his own • as hlt wlt warm • his eyes [para] t [para] throw his • aver ver his • wae was wearing • afraf yof your • I’m su [para] you [para] you’ve never • good cy acy Ch 5 • bod ald allowed • their ti [para] tog [para] together? • in in the day • up ais pis penis was • do n How How • and embarrent ent made • eyebrose ose in • gas a s a chance • Iss yss you felt • by his namename Ch 6 • looas ias if • exp Wil Will’s • you t tht think • the throg wag was • grab er her • Juslax.lax Ch 7 • as sas soon • the the minutes • he as mes me • could thatthat Ch 8 • enteree she shop • severiffeifferent • shspokspoke • Willetoretorted • foles’les’ • all o Gl Glory had • more fu tha than • er ler looked • whe phe potion Ch 9 • brow in comf [drops off] • brontilntil • thme ime is • heplasplastic Ch 10 • vabefobefore • withous los lover’s • boyn ifn if he • mowithwith • tuestuesting • everin ain and Ch 11 • smackin his his ear • himself.SpikSpike • down he ghe ground • minito sto stay • collapsnto nto Who? what? huh? 10410 —as mentioned in several reviews, Ch 1 is at the end. per LadyFlame’s count: Menu1=Ch2, 2=3, 3=4, 4=5, 5=6, [here they lost count and accidentally numbered the next ch.8 instead of 7 which it should be] 6=8, 7=9, 8=10, 9=1. i think they misnumbered the chapter in the text of menu 6 as Ch 8 when it should be 7, which got skipped; this makes a total of 9 chapters, but yes—ch.1 comes first and should be moved to the beginning along with its title in the pull-down menu (that it shows for the title of menu 9). YEESH! Menu 1 (really ch.2) • what he ed ted • ilesiles was • heere ere they • have ant ant it • Yo not not bruising • overk hik him Menu 2 (really ch. 3) • while toy soy slept • Tok fak fangless • able to gt dut during Menu 3 (really ch. 4) • waitiaiting • knew hae had • Xanadmoadmonished • have the the fun Menu 4 (really ch. 5) • paddour our arms • Spikem tom to Menu 5 (really ch. 6) • mostlked ked body • licked all tr of of the • aro around to • out a l crl cry of • anxiety ak. [para] k. [para] “Shhh luv • couroterotest • incredib It It was • toust ust in Menu 6 (should be labeled ch. 7) • swiXandXander • finaloundound • dict tct the • r itr its mate • aulleulled • rougay way was • like tSpikSpike? Menu 7 (should be labeled ch. 8) • pectpect • and com whm whatever • wast ant an • untimorrmorrow • sur sure that he • for a mi, ru, rubbing • pulbackback • untis sps spasms • Xander’s f “M “Maybe Menu 8 (should be labeled ch. 9) • forgotthe the • hanme dme down • thiep aep ache • fle Xan Xander • he fhe feel of • expect anyt fro from you • the firs rec recover Menu 9 (this is ch.1 and should be moved up, if possible. everything in this one is labeled right, it’s just in the wrong order) • bri [para] bring sustenance • as of la In In the • stalkenacinacingly • turno hio his Bordello 9862 Ch 1 • farmhouhat • and a l, yl, yet • wou wouldn’t be • squintedit iit • hav have to wear • eah,eah, Giles • tiogetogether • oe toe toaster • or Fa” [para] “ [para] “You can’t ask • eientient • streorneorner • chedched • tryinr a r a sort • nothing,der.der. Ch 2 • gu to to seduce • danyoanyone • staringoughough • waobabobably • kise moe most • his m mor more • pullt ovt over • anmostmost • an eych, ch • ministratioAndAndrew • Sweas sts standing • devily, “y, “—but not if you • moun of of meaning • atd at him • of Wa for for • Andworkworked • mee wae was aware • chec wit with me • she she like a Waiting 9852 • of thr throat • whi whines • half-finishNo. No. • idrewdrew • amusind hnd he • wep wept in front • smilarityweenween • gocrazcrazy • spricpicious • sli slim fingers • is aled,led • then leg smg small • touch io beo be • in Spi hea head • deligake ake • of hiper per arm • Spike’t w’t worried • with han hand • the welcg hag hand • were apirepire • destiontion • knee sionsions • abo about Call of the wild 9767 • and e the there • lipt unt until • invainvading • wasominoming • from ple pleasure

Who? what? huh? 10410 • DUPLICATE REVIEW by LadyFlame, 2035095124,5 Bordello 9862 • by DittoSpikette, 48710: I lovt. :t. Call of the wild 9767 • he has packpack • to the pack and t. Na.

Backgrounds 9580 Ch 1 • joi the the Council • y man man • musnd mnd magic Ch 2 • of hise the that • agohad had • tonight,’re’re • He He gave Ch 3 • youyou’re • mes ees early • the r twr two men • and and the power A peaceful afternoon with william 9213 • in thr eyes • Giles s ans and • get get that • sear for for the Quiet, please 8667 • ingrainense nse • seaspecspeculation • cood lid light • fol Oz Oz • sed,sed, feels • flesh.ng tng • itk, pk, pinning • comingser.ser A hero's prize 8153 • bes beautiful • do do I get Some secrets shatter 8045 • Shme tme to me Skanky 6769 • buttocken aen again Good to the last drop 6639 • wobe abe a bit • hrip rip and Sweet temptation 5933 • [in AN] out of pract Man Many • tood ood A wank to remember 5801 • He a b a beer • maknoisnoises Willpower 5552 • [in AN] • looking over my Ripspeaspeak • seemse mie milliseconds • hiood ood • posionsion • men men who are • like a to. Bl. Bloody • Puver,ver • narrhis his ... onle ofe of you A little less conversation 5473 • to eme [drops off] [emerge?] • thay aay about • “Why”Why • for for now • didnxplaxplain • onnornnor’s jeans • Connorn onn onto • ga, fe, feeling • thingsings The surprise 4906 • so lovy pry prepared

A hero's prize 8153 • by Coolestchick8000, 37034: of the lof lof love Daddy 6171 • by Adunaphel, 24199: AN, not a review Willpower 5552 • by Kiristeen, 17076: at the Th That A little less conversation 5473 • DUPLICATE REVIEW, by TouchoftheWind, 3000021704,05