Mamacita

possible minor: astheblackrosewilts http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/authors.php?no=18150 says she "is a teenager" but not how old; also writes on FFN but no indication of her age there or on her yahoo site, so i'm not sure

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A Plea http://buffy/adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544195709

Glorysurrender http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=15340 • utterly and cotelytely. • bringing hemomemoment’s • slayer’s in t she she admitted • their itivitive flesh • harsrninrning light • It wasand and Glory

sorry, should have put this in the troll forum. i started out thinking "flamer" and then decided on "troll" and then forgot there was a board for those! mamacita

http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/review.ph...ad&no=15340 • the 2nd review, by thurston moore—think he’s a troll. i have to say goolecap seems to get off on being flamed, as in the reviews for some of his/her other stories. but still it's just a big ol' mutual flamefest. geez.

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Two Slayers and a Half http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php...9&chapter=3 • not sure about this one but it sounds like the writer is very young/immature; can't tell for sure

Buffy Taboo http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37365 this is just basically an advertisement for a Buffy Yahoo group

Midnight Train http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37273 (misc. vampire, not a Buffy)

Mine: Here, There, Anywhere http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37277 (chs 1-15, ever' dang one!) ^-----fixed No One Like You http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37276 To Believe Again http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37279 (chs 1,5,8,10-14) Saving Me, Saving You http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37282 (chs 2,3) Midnight Train http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=37273 • Although as noted under Misplaced Stories, this does not appear to be a Buffy but a misc. vampire story (OFC/OMC) Obsessions http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=36686 (chs 1,3,4,5) Tantric http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=36948 (ch2) Starburst Challenge http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=36413 Karma Can Be Such a Bitch! http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=36342 Feathers and Firelight http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=36213 A Hand Offered http://buffy.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=32896

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