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Well it’s very good to see you still reply to this thread. First off, I’d like to thank you with the power of a billion people for this story. It’s so excellently written that, no pun intended, I can’t put it into words. I’d come across this story probably over a year ago but only read part of the first chapter and then forgot about it. Oh how stupid I was. I finally got around to reading it, expecting to only find mindless sex. But the way you manage to weave this story into what could, in a horrible alternate world, be a factual story is so beyond my own writing comprehension (I have a story of my own in the Fallout category named The Lone Wandering Couple if you’d like to check out what I’ve got so far) that I can barely understand how you managed to write it. The way Alex has planned for every eventuality is incredible. From the infallible (save for Zeru, that lazy dumbass) African guards to the code locked doors that can sealed from a central CIC to the knockout gas to the end of the line neurotoxin hall. The way Alex is able to play with his girls buttons like a master accordionist playing Säkkijärven Polkka and was able to turn Emma from a feminist, women’s rights, UN ambassador to the lover and supporter of a man who’s kidnapped her and 8 other celebrities and holds them in a doom fortress in the middle of the Yukon wilderness and who, when presented with the choice (rigged choice of course) of being able to call for help or continuing the life she and the others live, she chooses the latter. Everything is so perfect that I’m practically giggling just writing this. On a side note, I just thought. Is it possible to hike/climb up to Alex’s mansion? I mean, if people can climb Everest and return alive, then surely someone could stumble upon the mansion. If they could, how would Alex handle it? Also, do you think it’d be interesting for one of the new captures, Ari or Dove whichever, to get some alone time with Emma and have a conversation explaining how she could’ve fallen so hard so fast? The idea of having someone who knew Emma as a women’s rights feminist find out that she assists Alex in breaking new girls and keeping the rest in line is so juicy, my mouth is practically watering. Just some random, curious thoughts. Now if I tried writing out everything I loved, this post could be a story in and of its own lol so I’ll just sign off with letting you know that I have officially named Alexander Whitley my honorary brother. This is a title that no other character in any mode of media, from TV shows to Movies to Anime to other fanfiction, adult or otherwise, can boast. Please keep up the writing. I can’t get enough.

I’ve created this topic so I could discuss and converse with any reviewers of my first fanfiction. I feel this would be the best possible choice as I’d like to be able to actively discuss my story with any who deemed it worthy of a review. For those who find this topic before my story, it’s name is The Lone Wandering Couple and it’s a fanfiction for Fallout 3. The fic details the story and travels of Natalia Miller (which would be the Lone Wanderer in the actual game) and Amata Almodovar as they turn from innocent teenage lovers in Vault 101 to two of the meanest, deadliest, sexiest, and most effective mercenaries in the entire Capital Wasteland. I’m planning for it to be a very long story, just like the game can be. Their transformation will happen over a long period, starting out like normal civil people but eventually going rotten to the core. How long it’ll take I’m not entirely sure but I atleast want the game’s main story to be played out BEFORE they turn completely (insert Mermaid Man shouting evil). Then I’ll be able to play and write my own ideas into the Fallout 3 world. I do have a way to shorten the main story thought up and it allows me to insert more sexy times so I think it’ll be good plus I’m inserting a more supernatural style element that I hope will be liked. So I do have a good idea of how everything will play out in the big picture but I honestly have no idea how long it will go on for. But I hope that instead of its length being a negative, it’ll allow everything to be filled out in great detail. A word of warning though. My fic is rated A++ and that’s for a reason. I won’t list them all but some of my fic’s tags are abuse, rape, preg, minor1, slave, and tort. Those are some of the more extreme tags. Some might not see use till much later in the story but every tag I included in the summary will see use. I can assure you of that. Now then, with that out of the way, here is a link to my story in the archive. http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600090588