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  11. TCR's Review Response Thread

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    Come Hell or High Water: Chapter Two

     

    From CloverReef:

     

    Chapter two brings even more excitement. Though the beta cap doesn't want to come off and I wish I had betaed this for you during a few moments, you actually do well flying solo. Some little flow slips aside, this story is easily my favourite out of everything of yours I've read. The characters are amazing right from the start, and in this chapter we get to know Alan, a professional, tactful man who seems unshakeable, yet I suspect, judging from a few brief glimpses, that he's way more 'holy-fuck-what-the-hell-ahhhhhhhhh-we're-all-gonna-dieeee' than he lets on.

     

    Excellent update.

     

    That beta cap certainly likes to stay on, doesn’t it?  The few moments are probably the same ones I doubted myself over, so I fully understand that idea.  “Easily my favourite out of everything”?  Really?  That’s actually a little surprising, considering my prolific nature, but at the same time, thanks.  I will admit that I think those you have betaed and, what I’ve betaed of yours, has helped in that regard, too.

     

    As for characters…  Well, I was hoping that the few, subtleties and brief points showed the multilayered personality of Lieutenant Alan Carver.  And you caught them good enough.  While he is quite professional, there’s no amount of training, I personally, believe to prepare anyone for what would be experienced in combat; they merely have to fall back on what training and what’s been drilled into them.  So I’m glad to hear that :).

     

  14. TCR's Review Response Thread

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    Come Hell or High Water:

    Chapter One:

    From CloverReef:

    Bloody fiddles of Nero, that was exciting! 

    LOL sorry, I just had to say that.

    I see you loved that line.  I’m glad to hear that, wasn’t so sure of it and had a bit a time trying to come up with something that wasn’t cursing (to fit with Kyla’s personality and characterization).

    Your combat sequence was well done. The pacing was good and, of course, you're very skilled at the chaotic violence of disasters. The deaths were so quick, I felt like if I blinked, I'd miss them, and I imagine that's what it was like for her too. There was almost a beauty to it. 

    I’m sure while you were reading, your beta cap was on ;).  I’m glad to see that the deaths were snap-snap-snap, as they were supposed to be and as I hoped they would be.  I thought my own attempts at editing might have disrupted the rapid deaths, perhaps even slowed them down, so I’m quite happy knowing it didn’t :).

    We get a good look at the kinda person Kyla is here in chapter one. Her character really shines, especially in the listening to her intuition in the approach to battle, and the catastrophe that follows. Well done. 

    Thank you.  I’m glad you like it.

  15. Come Hell or High Water

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    Author: tcr

    Title: Come Hell or High Water

    Summary: Upon returning to Earth, the loyal crew of the Relentless are betrayed by the government they served. But why? Left for dead, damaged, and hunted by their compatriots, Captain J. Kyla Cole and her crew are desperate. But how far are they willing to go? How much will they abandon? And what will they sacrifice for vengeance?

    Feedback: Always appreciated.  Constructive criticism is definitely welcome :)

    Fandom: Original Science Fiction

    Warnings: F/F, Angst, MiCD, Violence

    Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered

    URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108509

    Review Reply thread:

     
    A bit of a self challenge.  I have not used my beta, CloverReef, and, instead, have gone through on my own.  It’s a result of some writer’s block issues on my two others.  However, I thank you all for reading it and appreciate any feedback you are willing to give.  I look forward to hearing from all of you and any questions you may have, please, feel free to ask and I will answer them

  16. TCR's Review Response Thread

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    Reviews for Come Hell or High Water
    Chapter One:
     
    From Tahn:
     
    I'm on the edge of my seat here. What happens next??
     
    From KoKoa_B:
     
    Yes, yes; what happens next?!
    I usually don't enjoy true sci-fi like this but this chapter was really good. Lots of detail and I liked the explanations of the terms (which made me get comfortable with this story). This is good and I can't wait to read more.
     
    Glad to hear you both enjoyed the first chapter.  I wasn’t sure if I had the right hook involved at the beginning with the slightly less action-y bits. :)
     
    I personally like a lot of detail in what I’m reading and, in turn, what I’m writing.  It allows me to visualize it (like a movie in my mind), but sometimes I go overboard with it, too.  Finding that balance was a little harder here, but that was part of the self challenge. 
     
    I find that the Sci-Fi genre lends itself to explanation and exposition without much trouble.  And, since everyone reads and writes Sci-Fi different, sometimes it helps keep the reader involved and (as you said, KoKoa) comfortable with the tale.  Sometimes, I over indulge in explanation (...CR’s definitely slapped me upside the head a few times to cut stuff...  lol).
     
    But, enough of my rambling.  I’m glad you enjoyed Chapter I and hopefully I don’t disappoint with following chapters.

  19. Reviews and Helping Advance Your Writing

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    14 minutes ago, CL Mustafic said:

    Interestingly enough, if I hadn’t come here to AFF I’d have never found the courage to submit to a publisher so you’re on the right track. ;)

    YAY!  Although, I do have CR to thank A LOT for that, too.  It was a lot of CR’s suggestion to come here as a step towards that end goal.  :).  I guess it’s just more the daunting idea of trying to get everything set and ready and not knowing and all that singular jazz as well as the apprehension of utter, continual failure that’s stopping me more at this point…  :(.

    17 minutes ago, CL Mustafic said:

    And yeah, I sort of forgot about that, think I almost passed out the first time and I know I cried then too. Mustn’t forget the good. :D

    No, can’t forget the good.  Otherwise you do become a hermit in the middle of nowhere staring at the candle, speaking to it, caressing it, telling it you love it forever and ever.  I mean…  No, that wasn’t from personal experience...

  20. Reviews and Helping Advance Your Writing

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    8 minutes ago, BronxWench said:

    No, no, because when you don’t get that rejection, when they say, “Yes!”… it’s like nothing else in the world. :hug:

    Now, if only I could muster up the courage to even try to send mine in…  :( .  It’s kind of one reason why I joined, too.  Figured if I could get myself posting here for others to see and review, assist in it, I could go back over the one I want to get published and set forth in doing that…

  21. Reviews and Helping Advance Your Writing

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    2 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:

    Yep, I had that same lack of confidence, still do, to a degree.  I was very shaky with that first chapter I had posted, very shaky on the nerves.  While I’m better, still am.

    I had a severe apprehension of joining.  You can ask CR, she'll tell you...  Lol.  It took a good year of suggestions before I considered and another before I went ahead.  Even then it was a 'do it now or you're not going to!'  Then six months to post on the archive...  That first time, I must have deleted and backed out a dozen times...  Second chapter, while not as much, still had the hesitation...  Now it's a good half hour of staring at it, with worried looks, before hitting the post button…

    The forums are almost as bad for me...  I often rethink and delete everything to rewrite essentially the same thing.  (Weird, I know.)  It's a struggle with the demons and half the time that bloody angel's sleeping! 

  22. How do you name the characters of your stories?

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    I'm kind of strange in this regard.  Some just come to me like that (...I guess snapping fingers is a little pointless to show...) while others have taken a while.

    When I can't just come up with one right off the bat, I often form up a list of random names.  Everything I can think of potentially working with regards to the world I am creating.  A three column sheet that has given, middle, and surnames.  Then I take a look through.

    It depends a lot on the character as well as the story and consequent plans.  Usually I have a bit of an idea of what personality and whereabouts their character arch is going, so this helps a bit.  But...  A fantasy world is not likely to have Bob for an Elf (okay, someone's throwing tomatoes...), although I would love to hear a tale about Bob the Elf...  Depending on the character, too, does the name suit them?  At least with me, it becomes a challenge to find a name that I feel fits a character.

    There a many times, too, that I'll take an existing name that may fit, but doesn't 'look' right for the character and twist it.  (For example: Erica - Arika, Zachary -Zakari, Xavier - Zavier.)  People are quite creative with names, so I wouldn't be afraid to experiment.

    And finally, at the end of development, the epic question (well... To me at least): Does it sound like something someone would have?  In my case, as mine is not fantasy, I cannot speak much there,but I'm guessing there might be similar veins as naming conventions help make a race...   But, I will leave that to other, more experienced, people.  Anyway...  What I mean is, I have found that most people I know, myself included, have names that roll off the tongue...  Most do not have a name like Rhodel Adriana Benedict.  Many have something like Thomas Christopher Anderman.  It may not roll off the tongue well, but it's not as much a tongue twister as the first...  (Okay, the audience is throwing the beer bottles; I'm off.)

  23. Reviews and Helping Advance Your Writing

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    11 hours ago, pippychick said:

    When I stop to think about it, I enjoy the process of writing so much and so often that reviews reassure me I’m not being merely self-indulgent. Even though, truth be told, I’d be quite happy to be self-indulgent. But when someone wants to know what happens next, or discusses the story with others, it’s a great feeling.

    I’m agreeing wholeheartedly with your entire post as I stare at my own self-indulgent worlds of creation.  I don’t even try to convince myself otherwise, I just keep devouring the words.  At least this isn’t a whole world of chocolate… 

  25. Reviews and Helping Advance Your Writing

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    11 minutes ago, BronxWench said:

    Some people don’t review because they don’t know what to say, but honestly, even a quick, “Loved this chapter!” or “Oh, he did NOT do that! I can’t wait to see what happens now!” can just light up an author’s day.

    I know that I always hesitate to leave a review, always worried about how someone is going to take that, and kind of worried that it’s going to be taken the wrong way.  (That’s probably the introvert and questionable side of me rearing its darker side...)…  But, definitely, just a simple statement like those brightens the day drastically. 

     

    3 minutes ago, Desiderius Price said:

    While I’d be floored with one with constructive help, and a full book report, a simple “Hey, I like this”, is chicken soup for the muse.

    lol.  A book report works quite well too.

     

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