Terrany

The content of this story is pretty standard from the sexual point of view: Some bondage, submission, Underaged (Main Char is 16 at the point I need help), bloodplay the rest of the content is anything typical of a homosexual couple engaging in intercourse. I'm not sure if I missed anything that might not be agreeable to another reader, though I guess you can tell me if you run into something. From a violence point of view there is char death, I'm hoping to put something a bit more graphic and bloody as the plot pogresses. What I want froma beta is actually a balance cordinator of sorts. The plot line of this story has been very straight forward up until this point, but now I'm running into the problem of "Am I adding too much for the reader to understand?" "Is the story too dialog heavy?" "Am I boring the reader with too much detail?" If you feel the need to go through the story and fix up grammar and spelling mistakes I will not stop you. I tend to fix homonyms in my head, so I don't notice them or I'll post it and accidentally delete a word and on occassion I put in a "The" instead of "they". The spell checker catches most of my stupid mistakes. I don't require an "application" but if you have betaed for someone else or written your own story you can point me that way. If this is your first time something like this has caught your interest give me a poke, this isn't a standard "Oh here's my story fix up my words." I will require some back and forth about how I'm progressing my plot line, I need feedback on if the backstory is making sense and how to present this fictional world to my reader. Thanks for reading! Oh - and I use skype. If you insist on aim I can use aim express, but I do prefer skype. Respond here or I think there is a way to message me on the forum thingamajig. <3