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  1. I neglected to give replies to most of my reviews while writing this, even though there are a few times I commented in my Author notes. I can only say in my defence, that it was my first story and I didn’t know any better. Now, I’m inclined to reply, hoping it’s not too late. I’ve received a few more reviews since I finished this fic and thought I’d make a cozy space to respond to those new readers. First, I’ll post the original reviews “as I wrote” and add extra comments. satterb wrote on 2012-10-11: This was really good. Nice try for a first time. It's a perfect place to stop if you're not going to finish. Go any further and your readers might be upset if you let the story drop. Using an outline for your story is a big help in planning how you want it to roll. I think you have some talent. Good luck in the future. A/N in chapter 5: Thanks to satterb’s reviews, I made an outline and there are three more chapters. Added today: Thanks for being my first reviewer. You gave good concrit. and flattering praise. satterb wrote on 2012-10-12: Renji is so cute in this story. I look forward to more. I'm glad you found your muse. Thanks for all your hard work. Added today: Your so welcome. Your interest is very motivational.
  2. Furry Rodent Evades Anime Kink Yesterday A D J U S T M E N T
  3. I know this was a long time ago, but I just had to comment. This thread is in a Bleach forum, so your post doesn't really fit here. Perhaps there is a thread in the fandom you're referring to? If not, you could start one? I'm not a fan of this type of thread. It's seems like an excuse to bash and even though I know people have preferences, some posts lack respect for other's differing opinions. I mean, the negativity could charge a car battery. I do think the concept is okay, but I'd prefer to post to a thread entitled "Most loved pairing". I'm not inclined to start one, though, so I'll just add my thoughts here. I'm not biased for or against any pairing as long the story can make it believable. It doesn't have to stay within canon, just make sense from a human experience. Well worn pairings can be refreshed if written with originality; same goes for crack pairings. I'm wary of limiting my criteria as I'm not keen on missing a really good read. I've come to like unlikeable characters and open my mind to cliched pairings. That's about as specific as I'll get. Not going to mention my preferences as I don't let them hinder my choices and they evolve as I read more great stories.
  4. Chapter 4. Instinct Reset: Primera & Sexta & Octava, Oh My! I've included a link for the song set referenced in this chapter to my Youtube playlist if you want to listen. On 2013-3-14 FicticiousDelicious wrote: Of course the author can do whatever she wants with a character, but if it's doesn't seem appropriate, then it ruins the experience. Mmmn. With Grimm, I was thinking that because he's got such a macho exterior, that perhaps he's hiding a needy, and sometimes insecure facet. In the first instance, his whimper reflects his needing to fulfill his lust. Later, it's given in submission to his Alpha, and at the end, it's involuntary after his stupendous orgasm. It's one of those embarrassing, uncontrollable quirks a person has but tries to hide unless something (like an aphrodisiac hiding in the drug or fear from someone stronger) reveals it accidentally. I'm sure you can think of something you'd not want the public to see, but might sneak out if you're not vigilant. Mine is rocking. With no rocking chair! I do it when I'm alone (doin' right now!), but sometimes I'm at work, having my break alone and rocking while listening to music or something. Then, someone walks in and I instantly stop. I don't think anyone knows. Heh, heh. Yeah, he's not been a fully developed character in canon, because he's sleeps a lot and behaves so apathetically. However, I believe that once I explain the reason for his apparent lethargy, and remove it, I'll have a blank canvas to make him whatever I think he should be, given the backstory I'm crafting. Since the drug he was given is directly related to lifting the "curse of somnolency", you've witnessed what I think is underneath. We'll see if I'm consistent in future chapters. If not, poke me. *big grin* I just love how you question everything. Got me backed into a corner. No wait, I come out swinging, and ... yes! A right hook to the jaw. Okay, so Grimm was not under the influence of the drug when mouthing off to Tosen, but it wouldn't have mattered because when I (later) describe what the drug actually did, you'll see that who he defers to is important. His desire to overpower Starrk is not crushed by his acquiescence; he's just put in his place for now, but he still desires to be Top Dog. The drug is influencing him now, though, and well, I can't give away future details, but it's part of the "solid reason". Yes, I believe Grimmjow is thoughtful enough to consider leadership qualities. Have you seen what his options were so far? Delusional Aizen and/or his minions, ancient Baraggan, sleepy Starrk, and an androphobic Harribel. The new and improved Starrk is far and away the best choice for a leader. LOL! I think of Szayel as very flexible. Even though it hurts at first, he's very into the sensations and is able to turn it into pleasure. I just watched a guy (ahem -- research) that I thought embodied Szayel. Slender with long blond hair (I subbed in pink), big eyes and pouty lips. He had a feminine quality about him but was not a shemale and had a voracious appetite for c0ck, both orally and anally. I mean, no theatrics in pretending to like it, he enjoyed himself and you could tell by his stiff reaction, moaning and the colour in his cheeks. He was with two men, double stuffed, and was quite happy about it. And talented! Deep throat with no gagging. Mmmmn. Great inspiration derived from reality. Oooops! Did I share too much? Heh, heh. I can see that you're trying to point out a problem with the (technical?) sexual aspects of this encounter. It is my first (literary) threesome, so I wouldn't claim to be proficient, however, I'd like more specific critique. Email me with your thoughts, k? I'm not certain how to improve based on this response. TicLic, I just want to thank you for your thoughtful reviews, you always give me reasons to think and defend my position; that's very helpful in fleshing out my story. Also, thanks for defending this chapter's inclusion of music, demonstrating not only your courage in speaking your mind, but your compassion in aiding a friend. Mucho appreciation.
  5. Muttering Imp Dances Naked Into Giant Holy Triangle B E A T I F I C
  6. Regarding injecting her cat with insulin, my sister mispronounced subcutaneous as "sub-cuteness". I thought it fitting as one has to get past or "beneath" the cuteness to give a needle to a cat.

  7. Thanks for posting this. I don't keep up with current events because they're often so negative, so it's nice to get some positive news for a change. Keep posting the good news, people. Being "informed" is not only about learning of the tragedies of life, but about seeing people overcome them. My way to cope is to get a daily dose of optimism along with some sunshine. Send the Peace vibes out, Feel the Love rush in.
  8. Oh, Frack! No wonder she's "super", repairing TV's inside NY is tough enough, but "Unbelievable" ones is incredible. And being a cop on the side? She's frickin' amazing! Family Acrobats Buy Rodent Infested Carnival P L A I D
  9. Chapter 3. Somnolence & Delinquency: A Novel Cure On 2013-3-11 FicticiousDelicious wrote: Yeah, I wrote very little about it, so I'm amazed that you took so much from it. Shit, you crack me up. I was grinnin' through your whole review. You just went off on a loop. If I didn't know better, I'd think you were high. Thanks for the Gin speech kudos. I was thinkin' it was too much, but if you like it, that's good enough for me. Erm, the relationship 'tween Aizen and Gin is not what it seem. (pathetic rhyming) Your comment gives me food for thought, too. Decisions, decisions. Aye Carumba! BookMaggot says too technical, now you say I spare you the details. I feel like The Three Bears. Who's gonna say, "this one is just right." I'm teasin', k? Sometimes, I have a hard time following your metaphors. I get the 100m dash, but Grimmy's a kite? *shakes head and giggles* You're just too cute. Ah! I can respond to this. I meant to show that Aizen was contemplating Grimm, and subsequently Starrk, immediately after the arm lopping incident. That is when he runs into Gin in the halls. Everything happens quickly after that so Szayel doesn't have a chance to find out about Grimm or his brother. Aizen dickwad doesn't inform him when he speaks to him. Something about it not being relevant, I don't know. Aizen doesn't tell me anything either. You have a talent for wondering about things I haven't even had an iota of thought about. But now I do ... because of you. Except, I'm in funny mode, so I'm imagining some hand scrawl on the Espada poster, "Grand Fisher, we miss you!" No. He was Arrancar, but not Espada, so I'm not sure who. Except, Szayel is NOT a cruel fuck like Mayuri, so - the Espada was already dead. That I am sure of. I must keep this in my brain cuz I don't think I've addressed these issues yet. Check 1) stethoscope - heart listening 2) Grimmjow - comprehending hearts. Thanks for the reminder. What a joy it is to read your reviews. I may not always follow what you're saying but I guess you could say the same about my story. Overall, it's worth the work writing it to have you read it.
  10. Chapter 4. Instinct Reset: Primera & Sexta & Octava, Oh My! I've included a link for the song set referenced in this chapter to my Youtube playlist if you want to listen. Anon wrote: None taken. It's an art thing. Mixing music and story isn't new, but I wanted to show how the choices and specific parts had impact on the story. It's not everyone's cup of tea, and I knew that going in. Thanks for reading.
  11. Thanks. I have a review reply thread for this story, so I can put them at the beginning of my post for this chapter and refer to it in my chapter A/N where I've noted the reply thread.
  12. I read the FAQ on citing lyrics and still have a question. My story specifically states that there is a song set being played and includes the Title and Song Artist when I mention the song in a paragraph. The few words from the song that I quote are referenced in the paragraph as being from the song that I had cited with Title and Artist. Do I really need footnotes at this point? Or more than Title and Artist? Album? I do have a screen capture of this, so can I show the playlist as a table in A/N for easy reference for readers? This doesn't need a disclaimer, too, does it? Can I add an offsite link, to say Youtube, of the playlist set in the A/N or on my profile? I'm expecting a "no" but thought I'd ask. Here's an excerpt of how I cited: Just as Grimmjow was reeling from the shock and thrill of being taken violently, “Psycho Circus” by KISS blared into their ears. He laughed maniacally, indulging in the perversity and pain. It was exactly his kinda kink. Gin had snuck into the lab, undiscovered by the scientist’s surveillance system, concealed himself in a nook, and played audience to the rest of the performance. Hey, the song said, “Welcome to the show!”
  13. I'm in agreement. You're specifically speaking about phobias, and I think that "irrational fear" is at the heart of the matter. Fear may be necessary for the survival of any species, but I'm thinkin' humans are the only species with the "irrational" type, since rationality is peculiar to our evolved brains. So, following this response to Remetan's post: Keith Inc. says I don't agree with the logic, here. First, using the word "phobia" as if it means the same as "fear" is minimizing its true nature. If this were really a case of irrationality, proudly stating that you want to keep your phobia is, in itself, irrational (at least as far the rational thinker goes). Perhaps you do have homophobia, in which case, read on. Additionally, implying that overcoming one's fears means they must engage in the object of the fear is ludicrous, as long as the fear is correctly labelled. Take, for example, the fear of flying or heights. It is really a fear of falling and injury/dying but when we label the activity which might lead to that undesirable outcome as a fear, we believe it is the activity, itself, that we fear. One does not overcome the fear of falling or dying by engaging in unsafe falling or actually dying. We know that we will fall from the air or a great height unless there is some mitigating factor, like aerodynamics of a plane or parachutes or even railings on a steep ledge plus our own impulse control to not jump. People constantly engage in activities that could lead to the feared result, but a rational being incorporates safety precautions to alleviate the natural fear. Stating it as just a fear of falling/dying is not really an accurate phrase for the people with phobias because the majority of humanity has it as a survival instinct but can still board a plane or look out over the Grand Canyon. When it is a phobia, it becomes irrational because the person can't accept any safety measure, and therefore cannot engage in any activity that might lead to the dreaded outcome. When they are educated and exposed to the activity that is labelled as fear inducing, then one can actually overcome the phobia of the activity, while still retaining the instinctual fear of the outcome, were it to happen. I hope this is clear because I'm attempting to apply this to homophobia. What is at the heart of homophobia? Irrational fear of what? I think the correct labelling must be defined as it's not about what others are doing, but how it affects oneself. Fear is personal, even a parental fear for your child is fear of species extinction at its core. So, it must be fear of an action upon yourself that would lead to undesirable outcome. First, we'll drop the "irrational" and just deal with the fear. Is it having a cock shoved up your ass? That's not a fear if you want it to happen. Perhaps it's nonconsensual anal sex? That would be rape, and I would say that is an instinctual fear held by all humans. (Mmm. aside from rape kinks) I wouldn't go into the history of why rape, in general, is feared except that reproduction (for vaginal rape) and control (for anal rape) is most likely the basic reason for both men and women, but that's just my opinion. Pain, injury, and ultimately, death from complications, are probable outcomes from any type of rape. Definitely, justified fear there. Now, how does a natural fear of anal rape become irrational? That comes when you feel certain activities would lead to your rape, even though the majority of humans can engage in them without getting raped. Things like: watching gay sex in a movie and feeling like you endorse it by doing so, being in the vicinity of gay men, whether as a friend or someone at a public event, and especially, accepting that it willingly occurs for others. None of these things will lead to your anal rape, hence, irrational. So, aside from rape, what about consensual anal sex? If it is truly consensual, where does the fear stem from for those who wouldn't engage, (because they have a choice)? Yeah, the thought of it makes one squirm because there still may be pain, and other undesirable outcomes like STD's and -- just what about the poop, man? Now we enter the territory of safety precautions. What are those precautions? Ah, well, you'd have to be educated in the subject matter to know, wouldn't you? How can anyone enjoy that? Again, exposure through art or film might educate you. If you have the knowledge, you can overcome the irrational feeling that somehow it can hurt you. Doesn't mean you should engage in the activity to desensitize yourself, even though, you might be astounded in your response were you to try that avenue. Ahhh, there is another fear. Fear of "becoming gay" if exposed to it. Pretty much irrational from the get go. No natural fear there, unless it's the fear of species extinction again. If you're curious but afraid, education can help, and yes, maybe you might engage when the fear is overcome, but it's still a choice. If you're adamant that you choose not to want gay sex, or not want to want it, then it is irrational to believe that exposure could change that. What you need to overcome is that belief, that somehow, no matter how you feel on the subject, you'll go against your better judgement and do it anyway. Talk about lack of self control. That has nothing to do with this particular phobia and you should check yourself for all other phobias related to impulse control. I'm saying that learning is not wanting or doing, but understanding and accepting. Whatever the reason for the fear of gay (anal) sex, it's pretty irrational to think you would be subjected to it under any circumstances other than consensual (which isn't an option for those people) or rape, which is out of everyone's control. All other fears relating to anal sex can be dealt with by getting educated, which is not within the purview of this post.
  14. Ah, my oh my. So happy for you. Mmm. I'm not predicting quads, here.
  15. Raymy

    Lack of reviews.

    I totally get that. Your written creation is like a "mini-me" and I get tickled at reading my own stuff when I feel I've done it just right. Then, I really want to share it but, damn, that means someone other than me is going to read it! What if they don't feel the same as I do? It's a shitty dilemma. To share or not to share, not just the story, but the feelings. I want others to know my joy and feel their own, but there's no frickin' guarantee so you just have to plug your nose and jump. Scary and thrilling, sometimes disappointing, maybe even crushing. Meh, I just move on to the next chapter, and start all over again.
  16. Did you know you reread all your SB posts? Of course, without context, it's pretty weird and hilarious at times. I'm not sure what the value is if you can't access the original conversation.

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    2. Raymy

      Raymy

      Doh! not "can't" but "can"!

    3. Raymy

      Raymy

      *sigh* I could just delete and restart.

    4. Cuzosu

      Cuzosu

      Lol, I'd keep it as a reminder, but I can understand the embarrassment.

  17. Chapter 3. Somnolence & Delinquency: A Novel Cure On 2013-2-10 Cuzosu wrote: Happy to tickle your funny bone, although, I feel like "WTF?", cuz I'm pretty sure I wasn't aiming for hilarious. *waves hands in defence* I'm not offended, you take it any way you like. If you enjoy, then that's the point, right? You might need to add "Spoiler alert" to your reviews. Are you giving away trade secrets? Well, knowing ahead has its pitfalls. 1) no surprises when I post. 2) surprise! I changed it. Mwaaahahahah, now I know something you don't know. It just came to me earlier. And I think I'll hold this close to the vest, because I really want to surprise you. Nooo. *choke* not hormone supplements! Yeesh! You want they grow breasts or something? And to be precise, not enzymes either. Coenzymes - a fancy medical way of saying, "a substance needed for an enzyme to function". The coenzymes in the injection are not what is making them high, they are for the procedure to work. Szayel did say, "Opiates", that's for comfort during the DNA transition, makes your pain disappear, relaxes you, or in large doses, produces euphoria and pink elephants may appear. You know, from Opium, like Sherlock Holmes smokes. Natural derivatives: Morphine, Heroin, Codeine - take your pick. (Opioids - synthetic derivatives of Opium = Demerol, Methadone) I wasn't being too specific on which opiate, but I think Szayel would choose Morphine. I just chose the generic word because my lab tests for any drug that falls under the category "opiates" and it's the word I'm used to, but now that I think about it, I should have been specific with a word more recognizable. You think I should change it? Oh, and Roofies, aka, Rohypnol, (similar to Valium) definitely would cause sedation and is a "benzodiazepine", which we also test for. Now, when Szayel suggests a sedative for Grimmjow, it could have been this drug. One more thing, the "sensual side effect" isn't from the opiates, Szayel added a few extra ingredients, heh, heh. Important to the plot, no less. Did you include PM on fanfiction.net? That would make four, by my count. Oh, my beautiful assistant (I assume you're beautiful, work with me, here; or I could just be referring to your nature), I so greatly appreciate your help. I'm torn between benefitting from your wisdom and desiring to amaze you with unforeseen content. No. Really. Like I said, I do want to surprise you, and it's almost disappointing that you already know what's going on. But, I still want to pick your brain, so I guess I'll just suck it up, buttercup. On 2013-3-07 BookMaggot wrote: Thanks for the review. Starrk as a funny guy? Is that the way I write him or is that the way you see him in the anime? Anyway, it gave me inspiration for my next chapter, to give him a one-liner. Um, Starrk/Grimm pairing is of course on the menu, but as for it being "their story", I'm not that far enough ahead to know what's in store for them. Zowie! What compliments! Thanks a bunch. Yes, the technical crap is not for the faint of heart. I only do it to show that Szayel is like that (me, too), but also to convey some information. Don't worry about spacing out, that's an appropriate reaction. There will be more technical trials ahead, but just know that if you space out again, you didn't miss much. I will explain things eventually in a more reader friendly fashion, but I'll keep in mind when I write technical stuff that it will need to be clear if I really want my readers to understand.
  18. Chapter 2. Selection: The Unsuspecting Volunteers On 2013-2-08 BookMaggot wrote: Thank you so much. I'm a fan of your stories, too. I hope you like some of the ideas I have coming as I think they're right up your alley. On 2013-2-08 FicticiousDelicious wrote: Well, again, spoilers, but I don't think they think of it as a date. The timing is somewhat significant. I'm not saying that it's strictly business, either, given what they're going to talk about. It may be just his definition of 'workaholic', but he thinks that if you enjoy what you're doing, it's more like being a 'playaholic.' Oh yes, he'll get what's coming to him, erm ... I mean, he'll get more than he bargained for. To put it another way, he'll get less than what he hoped. Great! I'm happy that I got my meaning across. Comments like these are very helpful and again, you're an awesome reviewer. It's such a joy to read them.
  19. Chapter 1. Subterfuge: Mislead the Fools, Conceive the Plan Thank you for your reviews. Your comments give me inspiration and motivation. On 2013-2-02 amazonblues wrote: I'm glad you're excited, so am I. Yes, I am having loads of fun writing this. I can't get my mind off of it. I hope you continue to enjoy. On 2013-2-05 Cuzosu wrote: I couldn't help posting it. I just get squirmy and need to share. Mmmn. The word "dark" makes me want to live up to that. Thanks. Yes, you're a great source of Bleach info, that's why I count on your feedback. You're important to me. On 2013-2-07 FicticiousDelicious wrote: Mmm hmm. Definitely vain. If I can't have him as a perfectionist, then at least he has a very high opinion of himself. Chap 2 goes into more detail of how he views himself. At least that is how they appear. Remember that Shunsui whispered to Jushiro when he arrived. He knew in advance that he would need Jushiro's support. I so love that! It reminds me of the funny typo thread where Naruto's fox became Naruto's fax. I wrote: I wouldn't buy a bleach action figure, but I'd daydream about a little Grimmjow jumping out of my cereal box, giving me the finger, and then *poof* he'd disappear. That's got a kind of "Harry Potter" magic about it. I thought that in this instance, penis was more fitting. (no, not due to its size) Generally, I'm a cock girl. (no not futanari) She found his 'penis' rather painful to swallow, also. Heh, heh. Well, that would be a spoiler, but, I doubt people like him (excessively selfish), have much room for growth. However, I wouldn't discount the possibility. This is fiction. TicLIc, thanks so much for all the effort you put into your reviews. I love reading how you react to the story and many of your responses make me rethink or add new info.
  20. Yesterday was a beautiful sunny day. But its back to rain, today. Well, at least it's not snow. *sorry for the dig*

    1. Cuzosu

      Cuzosu

      Had some fun snow this winter. Unfortunately, it's all been melting this last week, so it's almost gone now.

      Snow, snow, wherefore art thou, snow?

    2. botticelliangel

      botticelliangel

      cuzosu you can have all of my snow! 3ft where I live.

    3. Cuzosu

      Cuzosu

      I'd take it, but how would I get it here?

  21. Aaaaaaahhhhh! Damn it! I didn't do my research! I wish I would have remembered this before posting my first chapter. Not once, but twice, I have Mayuri reference perfection as something desirable. Damn. Damn. Damn. (as my mother used to say which was the worst she could allow to come out of her mouth) How bad is it to edit your previously posted chapters? I don't think it's too bad, as long as I let readers know in A/N, right?
  22. I'm pretty sure it's from one of the HitchHiker's Guide to the Galaxy books. I remember thinking about this a lot because I used to have many flying dreams when I was younger, but it never happened this way for me.
  23. Poll: is there an point where you draw the lion as an writer? Well, I'm not very good at drawing, so I doubt I'd ever reach an point where I would draw an lion. Is that the point where you just want an carnivore to rip your writing to shreds because it totally sucks? Okay, maybe I'd draw it then. But I warn you, it would be an really bad drawing! Now, in regards to the topic being discussed: Drawing a line, saying, "This content shall not pass!" Writing. No. If it suits my purposes, I'll write anything. I don't care if people want to equate my writing with who I am. They'll never truly know me. So, pah! Whatever. Reading. I've pushed myself to read stuff that was a major squick but I took the time to evaluate why I felt that way and still came up with a review that, I felt, was not flamey. I feel I learned from the experience and realize that my personal boundaries need challenging. I won't restrict myself on the grounds that I may want to write controversial stuff in the future, if not currently, and learning about another's view is a stepping stone to expand my existence. Did that make sense? Eck. I think I got lost along the way. Shoulds and shouldn'ts. Debates are also eye-opening for some, just like exposure to non-conforming fiction. Others, however, just want to dictate their beliefs without consideration. A common saying I use, "shoulda, coulda, woulda", means that if I should have, and I could have, then I would have. But I say it with a shrug, because it doesn't mean that much to me to conform. Others may have a different take on the saying. I think my brain is fried cuz I can't follow my own thoughts. I just read through this thread from the beginning and I think I have a legitimate excuse for being off kilter. Plus I drank too much Dr. Pepper.
  24. Groping Inmate Grabs Ass Before Yanking Tantalizing Erection S C R U T I N Y
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