LucienLene

Keep it, its adds the elitist effect for being able to access the uber secret forum of awesome. Personally I think the Key needs to be more then 100pts, but that's just me. Then again had someone (Not saying to protect the innocent/ you know who you are and you have my gratitude) not helped me out I would not have been in here for another month, since when I usually get on I hit the procrastination station and that's about it.

I'm here as well, Wonder what this place is?

Fandom: Jak and Daxter Name of character: Xel (Said Zel) Race of character: Human (With elf's ears If some one knows the actual answer to what race Jak is since Xel is of the same I would greatly appreciate knowing) Age of character: 17 -18 Height of character: 5' 7' Weight of character: 178 Brief background of character: Son of Mar (Jak) unknown to every one of where he came from. As far as every one is concerned he was born into servitude as an arena fighter in Spargus. Even at a young age he was able to handle his own in combat against the bigger groups of arena thugs. At the age of 17 he was finally able to buy his way from the arena but it was his way of life so now he competes as a free lance. Character's position or job: Gladiator Strengths/Skills: Eco (Energy) Control, Can call upon his elements to make him stronger, transform himself and more things that I have yet to think about. Are these skills typical of the fandom? If not, why?: Not really the thoughts of controlling energy go waaay back. However Eco is the energy of what's around you so being able to whip up his own sand storm in a desert is a good thing being able to walk thought it because of the level of control he has is better. Weaknesses/Bad habits: He is a guy...Perv...nothing really other then the usual vices. Distinctive features, if any: The Green Yellow hair that he shares with his father Are these features unique in the fandom? If so, why?: Yes Jak is known for his ears and his hair color. Connections to canon characters (if any): He is the Son of Mar... How does your character get on with those around him/her?: Fairly well because he has learned respect from the arena What does the other characters think of your character when they met her/him?:He is just another kid on the street...till they get to know him. Well comments, ideas...share please

Pen Name: Lucien Lene Story Link: Son of Mar Type of Fic: FlashFic Rating: Adult Fandom: Jak and Daxter Pairing: N/A Warnings: No Sex, OC, WIP, Challenge Fic

Title says it all, I'm looking for some one who wants to read it over see what they think how it can be improved, give pointers and all that hoopla. More or less a friend. Reply here or on my inbox Thanks, -Lucien

All things considered I think this is turning out to be rather well for a "New" writer around here. The story is not really all that complex its the story of two lovers who in age are 25 years apart. The female being a teacher and the male being a student. They are both of consensual age so its not illegal just frowned upon.Likely a story told billions of times now, but its what came to mind when I started. I only have the first chapter done so far and any one willing to Beta for me please PM me here. Reviews comments data requests can go here or to my inbox. I look forward to hearing from you Here is the link to Chapter one (Work in progress as it is): 25 years of Separation: Chapter 1 Thanks for your time, -Lucien