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It’s done! 50,000 words. Whew. NaNoWriMo is over. Let PornoWriMo begin!

Wow, this site’s been around for how long and nobody’s ever used this tab before? That’s almost impressive. Anyway, this thread is for anyone wanting to leave thoughts or comments concerning the story I’m starting to put up on here now, Mortuus Orbis, a work I cowrote with my good friend InBrightestDay. I hope there will be some.

Sorry to hear that, hopefully you will back on track soon. Fun thought...but no the dwarves are very rare. The common knowledge is that dwarves are extinct except very small clusters of survivors that is dwindling in numbers due to low numbers. Eventually the main group of dwarves are set to return...but that is another story than the current one. It is mostly Cymari being very cocky about her bow ability. Outperforming elven rangers can do such things to people...the Hydra was placed by Azbezil to prevent people finding out about the prophecy. Yep, there is some serious ground to cover before all parts of the prophecy had been completed. In this revised version I actually added a few details to the prophecy hat was not included in the original version of the story. Hindsight make it much more easy to fitthe prophecy with the upcoming chapters. The best kind of jump scare when you don’t expect it coming. You can imagine my grin when you made the comment on the forum... I thought it nice to have this scene so that the readers get a reference when they see Madel using his sword later in the chapter. I was looking forward to hear your thoughts about it, it is clearly a JayDee compatible scene. The king’s seer will not make a appearance until the next chapter. As for the question I can see where you are coming from with your guess about her as vampire, but she is in fact a minor demon. You know vampires being nocturnal and so on. His spells protect him, but not his gear since his magic is mentalism based. I am actually quite fond of the Helian...not her fault that ended up like the she did with far too much of the-end-justify-the-means for her own good. My favorite part is when they scream for shields instead of doing another suicide charge and she just observe they have put the whole camp within range of her longbow and she continues to slaughter them. Eventually she would have had to become creative when she ran out of arrows, but is what you have siblings for.

It is a very good joke...I have actually seen it reused on a LARP when a character died and report read suicide by six crossbow bolts. I think it might be all the looking-for-foreshadowing that is the reason...

Chapter 2 is up!

skin of teeth: 50,337 words. not bad as I lost several days to toothache and attempted dentist run. (and missing health aides for family at least half the month) I will say i don’t like that the competitive widgets on the Nano pages are gone as that helps motivation. Forums really don’t help with wordcount any more than physical write-ins. They pull me out of the stories I wanted to tell. Last year’s story collection became a new one which may result in nearly 20 stories. I’d hoped to do more originals, but originals require more energy and focus than I had spoons for. I’ll be revising after my hospital stay starting tomorrow… (uggh cubed)

Chapter 15 of Blood and Lace is up. The entire story is looking like it’s going to be 20 Chapters.

Whoohoo! I hope you do post it. Even though some folks are quiet as little mice with feedback, it’s still a good story and will hopefully be read. I wouldn’t read too much into that – The forum is set out with subforums that kind of match the breakdowns of the archive sub-domains, but wih the odd exception most folks seem to try and get away with sticking under general. For me, I just have review reply topics that are sub-domain specific rather than individual story specific. If I did it by story I’d probably have more topics under threesomes or what have you.

Not to worry, this one is the original. Figured I might as well go for the full version on here. Porn and splatter remain. Though when you mention cunnilngus I think you must be thinking of the second story, which I doubt will end up on here for donkey's years, assuming I think it's worth posting here at all. Which would be a shame if so, as I think part two is much better. By all means, though as I said this is the same version as IBD already showed you. The Director's Cut is just this but with some stuff taken out here and there. Would like other people to review also, yeah, but given how I'm literally the very first person to use this particular tab on the forum I won't hold out much hope. As for Spyro... Well, looking at this story, I don't think I should judge.

...donuts, mostly. Come to think of it, I don’t think I did sent the donut tangents. Possibly I decided to use it if I ever finished my Deathstalker homage. Awww! I liked the pornographic bits! There’s one cunnilngus bit I saw that was amazing, but I I enjoyed all the sexual stuff! As long as the great fight scenes are still in there – I fucking loved seeing Chun Li’s game moves show up! My short fom review is that the two arcs I read were great, you two oughta be pretty darn proud of your work on it. I’ll get around to longer re-reviewing the updated chapters properly at some point, for sure. Hopefully other folks’ll look it over and review too, although it’s kinda odd on this site – some stuff you’d think would do great for reviews gets none, some gets reviews that makes you think “Wait, what the fuck? Who likes Spyro the dragon snuff?”

Er yeah, I think they just passed along the main part of it, cause this is the first I’ve heard about a donut store. What’s that about? Yeah, though the events of the first chapter may put them off if they’re a big enough fan of her. I actually produced a sort of “director’s cut” version of this story not long after it was finished, to both make it less overtly pornographic, and to remove some of the parts I found didn’t fit so well going forward. Such as the end of this first chapter. It being the first thing written meant that when the story was finished, some three years later, what I was interested in focusing on in it had shifted a great deal. You’ll probably see what I mean as it goes on.

Great to see it showing up here! @InBrightestDay sent me through the chapters previously and I sent ‘em some feedback, which I think they passed on. Possibly not the tangents about how there could be a fresh donut store. For anybody else looking at this I highly recommend the story! It has Best Girl, Chun Li. I’ll get around to re-writing the feedback I sent IBD as reviews at some point.