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  1. What you said makes sense. Characters are people, and people are not the same. I know a couple who started off as a one night stand, and have been together for twenty years. I know another couple that held off for years, and then broke up after having sex. My cousin and his wife rarely argue over anything, and all my neighbors do is argue. I need to think in terms of what is right for the characters, and not worry about what anyone else has to say. Thank you.
    3 points
  2. Glad you liked it! I’m glad you asked, because you’ll find out in chapter 6.
    2 points
  3. Inshadowsidream

    Need advice

    Oh the imagery this brought to mind. I scared my puppy when I read about granny not making it. I could just see a teen shouting "Yes!" and doing a fist pump when his laptop won the saving throw, and then telling his stricken grandmother, "Sorry, but you should have listened when I told you that leather can't beat chain mail. Maybe if you had put more points in intelligence, instead of pouring it all into charisma, you would have known that with mom being a phone operator, that jerk of an orc was going to come after us. I don't care if you do have have 18 in charisma, you're 80, very wrinkly, smell like Bengay, and have a shitty armor class, of course you were going down! I will come back and bury you after I fry his ugly self with the laser app on my laptop."
    2 points
  4. InvidiaRed

    Need advice

    Absolutely true. But there is an element of horror as well. It would mean at the basic level an antagonist would target the switchboard operator analog first. The headquarters would have to be heavily defended.( Adventurers heroically holding off the orc army while the operators do their best to call for reinforcements. ) And not to mention now the antagonist now has the means to go after not just you. But your family, your loved ones and your friends. And while your PC can shrug off DC 15 saving throw(such as suggestion.) granny ain’t making it. Especially from something like power word kill through the phone analog. I.G. (modern threats confronted in a fantasy medium can help people deal with said new threats.)
    2 points
  5. “Hi, we’re a coach full of horny models who don’t believe in birth control. Would you like to come and ride with us?” ~Mia: Cum and Cum ‘er edition...
    2 points
  6. Chapter 5 of Mia is posted. Be warned, it’s pretty brutal. Big thanks to JayDee for his beta!
    2 points
  7. InvidiaRed

    Need advice

    <3 see you thought of it and that what is important. As society gets more comfortable long-range comm will make it into fantasy as well. Think like the start of a new age type thing.
    2 points
  8. Well said! It’s tragic you were discouraged before, but it’s good to see you’re powering through and coming back to your art. It’s great to write for yourself, but don’t be too hard on yourself for keeping your audience in mind too. Of course you can’t please everybody: some people out there will never be pleased no matter what. But you can get to know your particular audience, and what appeals to them so you can have fun playing with their emotions. But for the sake of staying on topic… Of course I agree with the people who said it depends on the characters and the situation. I personally don’t mind having chars jump into bed immediately, as long as there’s a damn good reason and it makes sense to the plot. Personally if I have a promiscuous main, I’ll have sex from the start, sometimes even with the main love interest, but if you do that, you need to balance it with a heap of conflict between them to make that initial roll in the proverbial sack interesting. Good luck with your story, and don’t hesitate to ask more questions!
    2 points
  9. Mike Rapes A Dyke is in a lot of ways the least defensible thing I’ve ever written in terms of themes and content. On the other hand, it gave us Declan who gets a nice minor role in Twinpregnation so maybe it’s not all bad. Thank you for this review! It’s always cool getting reviews for the old stuff/ Michael is one of the biggest pieces of shit I ever wrote. I always intended to do more stories with him, but never got around it. There isn’t really anybody related to him who isn’t a piece of shit either, except for his poor brother and sister in law. At least with decent parents the baby might grow up ok. If the girlfriend hadn’t cheated on her she might never have got in that situation. Bad business all round. Lily appeared in a part of a later story having made a deal with a demon to use her inventiveness to punish more minor demons so she’s definitely lacking in some innocence… She definitely didn’t deserve it tho really. I totally get where you’re coming from tho! Haha! Guy’s boasting about his junk there Nah, they’re just Declan’s Irish Mafia associates. Sure they’ll make you an offer ye can’t refuse. It’ll be grand. Thanks for the review! I appreciate it. I’ll re-read Mia’s new part later and post a review for that S’a quality story that one.
    1 point
  10. Inshadowsidream

    Need advice

    There really isn't going to be much of a "calvary" to call in, and if you think about how even now, there are blank spots where you can't get a signal, especially with cheap phones, you have that tension, to a point, already. Throw in that I plan to use lightning beetles to provide the energy to charge phones, and those stations are the only place where a phone or computer can be charged, people will find themselves unable to make calls at times. Characters facing challenges, and not always being able to get around them, is an mandatory element as far as I am concerned. It gets boring if every obstacle is easy to solve.
    1 point
  11. Maybe the blankness was like writing “...” Like they read the story and were like “Well, this...I...you...I just...what?”
    1 point
  12. Sazbi

    Billion Dollar Harem

    Liked the variety between the women who participated, and definitely can’t wait for chapter 43 for the finale of her Taylor’s punishment. Wonder if after this, Taylor will be forever changed cause how she approached Dove seemed slightly scary haha. Sexy, yet scary. Interested in the new development for Cara, and how it would affect Emma and their budding relationship. Surprised that Ariana would be napping through the punishment, would think she would still be scared of the guards.
    1 point
  13. Pregnant in Alabama Thanks for the review! I hope your writing is going well and you’re getting some kickass stuff down. Or fuckass if it’s porn I guess. Male pregnancies aren’t really my thing either (and since it’s a male pregnancy that didn’t involve two male characters, or lots of angst it isn’t most of the usual Mpreg fans’ thing either ) Sometimes I just have an idea and find it rights out pretty easily and maybe is funny or sick or whatever enough to be worth the while. Like this one! I’m still not gonna write an ABDL story though. ...crap, both muses just started laughing.
    1 point
  14. Thank you all so much. Your responses made me realize that I had been thinking more in terms of readers, when I should have been thinking solely on what was right for the characters. That was what had been causing my confusion. The bad thing is, I broke a promise I made to myself without realizing it. I gave up writing years ago because of reviews. I promised myself that this time, I was writing for me, and wasn't going to worry about pleasing readers. It is impossible to please them all, no matter what you write, or how how good you are.
    1 point
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